★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2020 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Chutiyadr]

Story - Rahasyamai Highway (BE WARNED !)



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...test-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1481240



Writer- Rbcl.007



About story-

Rajiv bhaiya ke chutiyape ne le duboya

Achchi story likhi hai , short me hi complete kar diya

Story ke bare me jyda kahne ke liye kuch nahi hai thriller wali story ke bare me kuchh bol do to wo spoiler ho jata hai …

Thoda detail hota to aur bhi achcha hota ,lekin writer ka ye achcha prayas tha ..

Note for writer –

Rbcl bro ek achchi story likhi hai aapne , achcha thriller tha …

narration thoda aur detail rakhna tha, 6k word ki limit hai wo apne aap me hi bahut hoti hai , kuchh scenes ko achche se dikha sakte the ..

Koi nahi aapne ek achcha prayas kiya hai , aur ek achchi story bhi ban kar taiyar hui hai …

Best of luck for contest ?

 

[Rbcl.007]

Story - Rahasyamai Highway (BE WARNED !)



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1481240



Writer- Rbcl.007



About story-

Rajiv bhaiya ke chutiyape ne le duboya

Achchi story likhi hai , short me hi complete kar diya

Story ke bare me jyda kahne ke liye kuch nahi hai thriller wali story ke bare me kuchh bol do to wo spoiler ho jata hai …

Thoda detail hota to aur bhi achcha hota ,lekin writer ka ye achcha prayas tha ..

Note for writer –

Rbcl bro ek achchi story likhi hai aapne , achcha thriller tha …

narration thoda aur detail rakhna tha, 6k word ki limit hai wo apne aap me hi bahut hoti hai , kuchh scenes ko achche se dikha sakte the ..

Koi nahi aapne ek achcha prayas kiya hai , aur ek achchi story bhi ban kar taiyar hui hai …

Best of luck for contest ?

Dhanyabaad dr sahab

 

[Chutiyadr]

Story - प्यार-झगड़ा (एक सिक्के के दो पहलू)



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...test-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1482043



Writer- Akki ❸❸❸



About story-

Wah bhai wah

Short and sweet story likhi hai ?

Aur dekha jaye to bahut hi gahri bat bhi hai , himansi ke papa ne sahi kaha , chhote chhote bato par hua jhagda kabhi kabhi logo ke jivan ko barbad kar deta hai aur sab bas jhuthe ego ke chalte ..

Isliye pati patni ke liye jaruri hai , ki pati patni ko achche se pele

Ohhh main track se bhatak gaya

Pati patni dono milkar ek dusare ki bate sune aur samjhe (ye bolne wala tha )

Aise sex bhi jaruri hota hai

Note for writer –

Akki 3 bar 3 bhai aapki story bahut hi achchi lagi mujhe , bahut hi short and sweet type ki story thi lekin sach kahu to jivan me adhikter rishto ka yahi hal hai , sale samjhte kuchh nahi aur apne ego ke chalte rishta tod dete hai ya fir rishto me khatas aa jati hai ..

Bahut badiya

Best of luck for contest ?

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

प्यार-झगड़ा
(एक सिक्के के दो पहलू)
by - Akki ❸❸❸

Story choti thi par bhut achi thi. Gusse mein uthaye gaye kadam jeevan bhar ki pareshani khade kar sakte hai. Patni pe hath uthana bhut galat hai aur jaldibazi mein liya gaya ghar chodna ka faisla bhi. Par pita ki samjhdaari aur seekh ne shayad ek rishte ko bacha liya. Family ke elders bhut important part hote hai family ka....
Alag tarah ki story hai bhut vese akki bhai agar aap complete word limit ka use karte aur thode bhut twists dalte to aur acha hota like fight thodi jyada detail mein hoti ya phir wife ghar chod ke chali jati and father husband ko vaha bulake dono ko smjhate to acha hota. But still a great attempt

thanks bhai

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

प्यार-झगड़ा (एक सिक्के के दो पहलू)
First of all I want to thank you for writing a new story and participating in the competition.
Your story is very well written and simple. The story is of a married couple. The thread of the relationship is very delicate and has to be handled, which is very well told in this story.
Himanshi's father played an important role in this story. It is the duty of parents to help their children in every difficulty and to teach right. We must take a thoughtful decision.
Man's life is also like two sides of the coin, darkness-light, happiness-sorrow.
Your story was short and sweet. I sincerely hope you win this competition. I didn't get bored reading the story, the title of the story is perfect for the story.
Thank You...
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thanks bhai ji

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

Isliye pati patni ke liye jaruri hai , ki pati patni ko achche se pele

Ohhh main track se bhatak gaya

Pati patni dono milkar ek dusare ki bate sune aur samjhe (ye bolne wala tha )

Aise sex bhi jaruri hota hai

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

Story - प्यार-झगड़ा (एक सिक्के के दो पहलू)



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1482043



Writer- Akki ❸❸❸



About story-

Wah bhai wah

Short and sweet story likhi hai ?

Aur dekha jaye to bahut hi gahri bat bhi hai , himansi ke papa ne sahi kaha , chhote chhote bato par hua jhagda kabhi kabhi logo ke jivan ko barbad kar deta hai aur sab bas jhuthe ego ke chalte ..

Isliye pati patni ke liye jaruri hai , ki pati patni ko achche se pele

Ohhh main track se bhatak gaya

Pati patni dono milkar ek dusare ki bate sune aur samjhe (ye bolne wala tha )

Aise sex bhi jaruri hota hai

Note for writer –

Akki 3 bar 3 bhai aapki story bahut hi achchi lagi mujhe , bahut hi short and sweet type ki story thi lekin sach kahu to jivan me adhikter rishto ka yahi hal hai , sale samjhte kuchh nahi aur apne ego ke chalte rishta tod dete hai ya fir rishto me khatas aa jati hai ..

Bahut badiya

Best of luck for contest ?

Thanks bhai ji

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

Gand ka showroom
writer Chutiyadr

 

[Akki ❸❸❸]

Rahasyamai Highway (BE WARNED !)
Writer-- Rbcl.007

Brilliant story with awesome writing skills

 

[Rbcl.007]

Story-Gand ka showroom
Writer- Chutiyadr
Dr sahab ye kya tha.. ?????? aise kahani sirf aap hi likh sakte hai.. Pata nahini itni hasi wali story padhte time bhi maine emotional ho gaya... Aap ke likhne ka andaaj hi aisa hota hai...