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[manikmittalme07]

The Inner Love
Writer - mohit98075 ​

Kahani- - ek alhad si ladki apni jawani mein kadam rakhte hi pritam naam ke ladke se pyar kar baithi.. dono ke bich nazdikiya aur gahri huyi lekin pritam flirty type ka ladka tha, jise ek hi ladki se jude rahne se ya wafa karne se aitraz tha.. kamvasna ke chalte kayi ladkiyon ke sath sambandh bhi banane ki koshish ki... is bich kisi ladki sang aapattijanak avastha mein usko dekh liya tha naina ne bhi... tab to usne kuch na boli.. lekin shayad us baat leke jo gussa tha usko mann hi mann dabake baithi thi... lekin ek aisa bhi waqt aaya jab pritam aur naina jab chumban mein lipt the to naina ko wo baat yaad aa gayi jab us ladki ke sath pritam ko apattijanak avastha mein dekh li thi.. ab gussa to futna hi tha isliye pritam dhakka de diya.. pritam gambhir roop se jakhmi bhi hua.. . uske baad unke rishte mein jaise ek karwahat si aa gayi ho... haalaki naina ne apni taraf se pur jor koshish ki is riste ko bachane ke liye... khud aage aake maafi bhi maangi... par pritam tas se mas na hua aur ek dukhad ant ke sath dono alag ho gaye..
kahani ne karwat badli ab naina wo wali naina nahi rahi shayad... shayad wo bhi jawani ki aag mein jalne lagi.. iske chalte ushne ek raah chun li.. gigolo ke jariye jism mein uth rahi aag sant karne ke liye..
par afsos jisko paise deke bhare mein jishm ki aag bujhane bulaya wo pritam nikla.... jism ki aag to bujh gayi par uske baad ushe lagne laga ki pritam hi wajah uski is haalat ke liye.. ushi ne usko ganda kiya ... wohi dusri taraf ushe yeh bhi lage ki nahi actually jo chaah thi uski ugra sambhog ko leke wohi ichha puri ki hai pritam ne.. mann aur jameer ki jung mein mann ki jeet huyi aur naina ne berahami se bade hi khaufnaak tarike se pritam ko maar diya... aur ant mein shareer aur aatma ko usake sath aatm-samarpan ke liye, svayam ke liye, hamesha ke liye aatmasamarpan kar liya...

ab aate hai sameeksha par - - galti kiski thi.. ye tay kar pana thodi muskil hai par.. meri nazar mein galti dono ki hi thi... Agar pritam pyaar wafadar rahta to uske sath ant mein jo hua us baat ki nauvat hi nahi aati... wohi dusri taraf naina... thik hai school time par pritam ne galti ki, mana ki bina pehchaan bataye uske sath ugro sambhog mein lipt hua... lekin iske badle bina uchit soch vichar ke hi jaan se hi maar dena ye to sarasar nainsafi huyi... kyunki is point pe agar readers ke point of view se dekhe to naina ne khood bhara deke ek gigolo ko bulati hai aur khwahish bhi jatati hai ki ushe ugra sambhog chahiye..yahin pe usne galti kar di.. jiske sath us karya mein lipt hone jaa rahi thi, kam se kam ye to jaan leti ki wo koun hai.. uski pehchaan kya hai . pritam shayad bas uske mann ki ichha puri Karne ke liye ushi tarah se sambhog mein lipt hua... jiske liye ushe paise mile.... yahan pe do baatein chupi reh gayi... ek kya pritam badla lene ke chakkar mein ye sab kiya ya sachme sirf paise ke liye ye kaam karta tha..... ant mein yahi kahu ki jo bhi hua bahot dukhad raha... haan daant fatkad ya jalil karke ghar se nikal deti ya phir dusre tarike badla bhi le sakti thi.. lekin agar aise galti mein khud bhi lipt ho to..ekdum se jaan se hi maar dena.. is baat thodi atpati si hai.. ... ..
Jaise koi thos wajah ya aatmsuraksha ki baat na aaye to.... waise dusre options bhi the pritam ke hath per baandh ke puch leti ki akhir bina pehchaan mein aaye ye kyun kiya... kis wajah se usne naina sang ye sab kya... maana ki us samay uski manshik stithi thik na thi par itna to malum hona chahiye ki pritam koi ajnabee nahi tha ... ab kya kare mask nikalane ke baad apni hosh-o-hawas kho baithi aur parinam bhayanakar... dono ke liye hi...

aapki pasandida kirdaar koun aur kyun?

of course naina... isme do ray nahi... bas agar apni kamvasna se zyada sathik sujh bujh ke sath vichar karke se kabam badhati to uske sath aisi ghatana kabhi na ghat ti...

kya kirdaar aapko vastavik lage..?

Haan kuch mamlo mein... bas yeh ant ki kuch baatein atpati si lagi...

kahani ko leke koi anuman ya koi sandesh hai kahani mein pathakon ke liye..?
Koi bhi faisla karne pehle ek baari soch vichar kar lijiye.... aur koi chij ya insaan dekh parakh ke hi vishvas kijiye... kyunki janab ye kalyug hai...
Kuch vishesh prakar ke drisya - udaharan ke liye dukhad drisya, tanav purn drisya...?
sabse dukhad aur tanav purn drishya jo ant mein naina ne shareer aur aatma ko usake sath aatm-samarpan ke liye, svayam ke liye, hamesha ke liye aatmasamarpan kar liya...
... actually pehle hi pehchaan ho jaati to is baat ki nauvat nahi aati... par afsos honi ko koun taal sakta hai...

Kahani ka koi pasandida bhag.. romance, suspense, thrill ect aur kyun?

bura na maaniyo jhuth na balu par naina ne jab apne purv premik ko jaan se hi maar diya... actually mohit98075 ji.. is drishya ko aur vistar roop ek explanation ke sath dikhate to maza hi kuch aur hota
Actually mujhe brutality se bharpur thriller, suspense aur murder mystery wali stories zyada pasand hai... waise jis tarike se suruwat mein romance se leke phir kahani ki madhya mein bichhadne ki tragedy phir ant jo thodi bahot revenge wali murder situation , thrill aur suspense paida kiya kahani mein writer sahab ne wo kabile tarif hai.. bas ant mein jo bhi hua wo thoda aur vistar likhte to.. Khair koi na...

Kya aapko ye kahani hanshaya ya rulaya..?

sidhi si baat hai kahani aur kahani mein chupi sandesh sampurn roop se manoranjan ke sath sath ek acchi sikh bhi de gayi hai....

kya kahani ne ant tak jure rahne ke liye majboor kiya?

Ji bilkul.... naye readers se yahi request hai ki is kahani ko jarur padhe... kahani aapko suruwat se leke ant tak boring hone nahi degi...

Kuch mann ki baatein kahani ko leke - waise pyar wafa bewafa badle ko lekar bahot si story read ki hai par ye story thodi hat ke hai.... khas kar galti wali drisya ko leke... galti dono ki thi lekin kahani ki dusri pehlu pe jo anjane mein bina pehchaan kiye hi galti ho gayi... us situation ko pesh karne ka andaz kuch hatke tha writer sahab ka..

ant mein writer sahab ke liye kuch shabd.... mohit98075 saheb ki kahani matlab meri nazar mein writing jagat mein master stroke... jo facts kahani mein hone chahiye jo agle pichle pehlu se connected ho, un sabhi ko mohit saheb ullekh karte hai... . na kam, na zyada, bilkul perfect tarike se...
usse bhi badi baat, readers ka manoranjan ho is baat ko leke kash khayal rakhte hai.... aur unki har ek kahani aisi ki jaise subhah ki khilti dhoop ho... barish ki pehli bunde ho...
ek reader ko isse zyada kya chahiye..
aur mohit ji Aapne kahani ke jariye hi kahani ke naam ko sarthak kar diya hai...
jis udasya se kahani ko humare samaks pesh kiye as a reader main yahi bolu ki aap us udasya ko leke kamyab rahe..

Brilliant story line with awesome writing skills mohit98075 sahab

aap sach mein bahut achha review deti ho.....asal mein review aisa hi hona chahiye...mujhe intzaar hai ke shayad aapko meri kahani, The Revenge:Badla bhi review ke kabil lage...

 

[Moon Light]

Bachat...

By _ABHAY_Smarty_
Lockdown ke kaaran sabkaa yahi haal thaa....
Wese Jyada tar isme Madhyam aur nimn vargiy pariwaro ko hi dikkato ka samna karna pada...
Daily ka rojgar pane wale logo ka to sabse buraa haal tha...

Kahani Me bachat ki value ka sajeev udaharan diya... jo sabke samne hai...
Thought full story...
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[Moon Light]

अपहरण

By HalfbludPrince

कम शब्दों में भी इतनी बढ़िया थ्रिलर कहानी...
ऐसे ही नही आपका नाम अच्छे लेखकों की श्रेणी में आता है...

धोखा क्राइम सस्पेन्स सबका मिला जुला रूप देखने को मिला इस कहानी में,

आज की दुनिया मे कौन किसके साथ है कौन किसको धोखा दे रहा कुछ भी समझ नही आता....!!!

यंहा भी शालू थी तो रवि की बीवी पर साथ दे रही शिव का जो कि पूर्व में उसका प्रेमी था ये कहानी के अंत मे पता लगा... और जो शिव की बीवी थी मेघा वो साथ दे रही रवि का जो कि शिव की वाइफ थी...

राहुल को मोहरा बनाकर सब गेम खेला गया, पर अंत मे शिव और शालू को कामयाबी नही मिल पाई और वो पकड़े गए...

मास्टरपीस ​

 

[Moon Light]

यादे अब भी है......

By Adirshi

यादों की एक दर्द भरी कहानी
शीतल जो कि एक अनाथ लड़की थी.... नौकरी के लिए विशाल ने उसे बुलाया पर उस पहाड़ी इलाके में उसकी जगह अमित ने काम सम्भाला जिसके कारण थोड़ी निराश हुई शीतल....

इसी निराशा के कारण ही उसे सोने के लिए नींद की गोलियों का प्रयोग करना पड़ता...

धीरे धीरे अमित के साथ उसके रहने से समय परिवर्तन हुआ.. अब शीतल थोड़ा खुश रहने लगी...उसका मजदूरों के लिए प्रेम अमित को अच्छा लगा... शायद अमित के हृदय में भी उसके लिए प्रेम पनप रहा था...

एक दिन अमित को वँहा से जाना पड़ा पीछे छोड़ गया वो सब कुछ...
कुछ दिन बाद खबर मिली उस गांव में कोई जिंदा नही रहा शीतल भी
मिला तो सिर्फ उसका खत... जिससे उसे सब सच का आभाष हुआ... वक़्त तो बीत गया... पर यादें अभी बाकीं हैं...

काश शीतल से एक बार बात की होती अमित ने..
कहानी बढ़िया थी, शीतल के साथ क्या हुआ वो थोड़ा और डिटेल में पता लगता तो बढ़िया होता....!!!

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[Mahi Maurya]

कहानी- बदला
रचनाकार- मानिक सर

शीनू गरीब घर की लड़की है जो अपनी माँ कुसुम के साथ रहती है और नौकरी के लिए पिछले 6-7 महीने से दर दर की ठोकर खा रही है, लेकिन अभी तक नौकरी नहीं मिली। रिश्तेदार में सिर्फ एक मामा ही हैं जो दूर के हैं, लेकिन मामी के रूखे व्यवहार के कारण कभी दोनों रात नहीं रुके उनके यहां।

बात तो सही है इतना आसान नहीं है आज के जमाने में नौकरी पाना। सामने वाले कि शर्त पूरी करने के बाद भी नौकरी मिल जाएगी इसकी कोई गारंटी नही है।

बैंक में उसे नौकरी मिल गई, लेकिन तब तक उसने अपने मन का गुबार निकल दिया था अपने शब्दों के द्वारा। वैसे शीनू ने सही कहा कि एक लड़की के लिए नौकरी पाना इतना आसान नही है। विवेक ने फिलहाल अभी तो उसकी प्रतिभा देखकर उसे नौकरी दे दी। जिसके कारण वो खुसी के मारे रोने लगी।

शीनू को 5 व्यक्ति प्रतिमाह का लक्ष्य दिया गया इंश्योरेंस करने के लिए। लेकिन शीनू के लिए ये इतना आसान भी नहीं था, सभी उसके जिस्म के प्यासे थे, इसीलिए महीने भर में मात्र दो ही इंश्योरेंस कर पाई वो जिसके कारण उसे चेतावनी भी मिली उच्च अधिकारियों द्वारा।

दहेज रूपी दानव समाज से कभी नहीं जाने वाला। सोच ही ऐसी हो गई है लोगों की। कुसुम के साथ भी ऐसा ही हुआ।जिसके कारण दीपक उसे प्रताड़ित करता। तंग आकर उसने उसे छोड़ दिया और ट्यूशन देकर अपनी और शीनू की परवरिश करती रही।

विवेक और शीनू एक दूसरे से प्यार करने लगे जिससे उनके घरवालों को कोई परेशानी नहीं थी, लेकिन शीनू के अंदर बदले भी भावना कम नहीं हुई। विवेक के समझाने के बाद भी वो नहीं मानी। अंत मे विवेक ने उसकी मदद करने की हामी भर दी जिसमे उन दोनों का साथ दिया शीनू की बचपन की सहेली रुचि ने।

तीनों ने मिलकर बहुत अच्छे से फसाया दीपक को। अगर वो इस डील को खुद देखता तो शायद तीनों का मंसूबा कभी कामयाब नहीं होता लेकिन वो ठहरा अय्यास तो सब कुछ मैनेजर के भरोसे छोड़ दिया और मैनेजर अपने कमीशन के चक्कर मे 40 करोड़ बाजार से उठा लिए।

फिर शुरू हुआ जाली पेपर और माल खरीदने बेचने और बनवाने का जाली और गलत काम। वैसे दीपक होशियार आदमी था और उसका शक बिल्कुल सही था, लेकिन इसबार उसका पाला एक बैंकर से पड़ा था। विवेक इस काम मे बड़ा माहिर था। उसने तनिक भी शक नहीं होने दिया दीपक को। और आखिरकार दीपक की कंपनी दीवालिया घोषित हो गई।

रुचि, विवेक और शीनू तीनों बिना डरे प्रतिदिन की तरह एकदम सामान्य व्यवहार करते रहे। कुसुम को भी भनक नहीं लगने दी।

शानदार कहानी है आपकी।
मज़ा आ गया।

 

[manikmittalme07]

DOCOMO I LOVE YOU

Spoiler

Bachhe ki kilkari sunte hi mishra ji khushi se daude hue andar aate hai...
"Bhaiya konsa dudh laye..."
"Chacha babu ka naam kya rkhege..."
"Amul...."mishara je ke muh se nikla

"Yeh...babu ka naam amul..."wo bachhi bhagi hui andar jaati hai..

"Are...mai dudh ka naam bta rha tha..."
Is trh anjane me namkaran hua hmare hero ka...
Mr. amul...dhire dhire bde hone lge....

Jb 14 saal ke the...to khelte time unhe ek kutte ne kaat liya.....

Ufff...14injection lge...or jb jb injection lge tb tb unke muh se sharap nikla...us kutte ke lie......
Usdin ke bad...amul ji ke sbe bda dushman kuttna bn gya.....kutto ko jaha bhi dekhte...uska maatha ghum jaata ....


Amul ji ko ek ldki se pyar hua......or family se baat krke...shadi pkki ho gyi...
Ab yha inke sath...kismat ne bda ganda mjak kiya..dahej me furniture ke sath...ek kutta bhi aaya...
Kutta...kutta kon deta hai dahej me...
....man maskodkr bethe rhe..


Surahgraat...
Inki wife...snagita....ghunghat kie hue bethi hui thi... pas me table pr rkha tha dudh ka bhra hua glass...
Jaise hi amul ji kamre me aate hai...unki wife sharmane lgti hai...
Or dudh ka glas aage kr deti hai...

Amul-dudh....nhi....pedigree...pedigree kaha hai...
Sangita hairani se-kyaa....pedigree...
Amul-mere lie dudh ..or us tumhare dusre pti ke lie kya...
Sagita-kya bol rhe ho ....

Amul-wo kutta...
Sangita gusse me -excuse me...his name is docomo....and plss he is myy brother...

Amul -whatt....tumne btaya kyu nhi tha ki....tumhara chhota bhai insan nhi kutta hai.....mene ek baar baat ki thi...tb to insan ki trh bolta tha...
Sangita-amul...i mean he is like my brother....wo chhota tha tbse wo mere sath hai.....
Amul-pahle kyu nhi btaya?


Sangeeta-its not that big matter...
Amul-comon yar...1sal se hm relationship me the...tumne btaya nhi ki tumhare ghar me kutta bhi hai...
Sangita-have u got mad....ab isme btane wala kya h?

Amul- I Hate dogs...i really hate...i cant tollarate dogs...
Sangeeta-to tumne kyu nhi btaya ki you hate dogs...
Amul-matlb mai tumse ye sb btata...isme btane wala kya hai..
Sangeeta-exectly......

Amul-agr btata to?
Sangeeta-what...mai tumhe sb kuch btatai ki mai isko lekar aaungi...
Amul-or agr mai agry nhi hota to?

Sangeeta-than...mai tumhe bhul jaati...
Ye baat amul ke dil pr lg gyi...or amul bina kuch kahe apna tkiya uthake soffe pr let jaata hai...



Next day...
Amul sangeeta ke room me aata hai...
Amul-hey...m soryy for what i did last night...i thoungt whole night...ki mai tumse kitna pyar krta tha...kitne khush the hm ki hmari shadi ke lie ghar wale man gye or ab....soryy yr...

Sangeta-no ,i m soryy..mujhe esa nhi bolna chahie tha...i realised...prr mai kya kru...wo chhota sa tha...jb mujhe sadak prr ghayal mila...mai use ghar layi...marham patti ki...he is very closed to me...khana bhi mai khilaaati hu use....to mai kaise use chhod skti hu..

Amul -yes...its alright...dont wory...and i love you..

Sangeeta-i love you too....m soryy i spoiled last night...
Amul sangeeta ko hug krta hua-its okk baby...suhagraat to ab roj hogi...hehehe...
Dono hasne lgte hai...

Ye compromise amul ke lie asan nhi tha...lekin wo sangeeta se bepanah pyar krta tha...uski ankho me ek bhi tapka aasu ka nhi dekh skta tha...bs islie use ye sb accept krna pda..

sangeeta anjane me hi sahi...amul ke andar ki aag ko or jaada bhdka rhi thi...

Wo sbse pahle khana docomo ko deti thi
Amul betha bs jalta rahta tha...mahange manhange shampoo se nahalaati...uske lie achha chhota bed bnaya gya tha....jispr wo araam se sota tha....

Docmo ke lie sangeeta ka pyar amul ko achha nhi lgta tha lekin sangeeta ko khush dekhkar use achha lgta lgta tha...

Ek din amul office se aaya to dekha sangeeta gali ke kutto ko khana khila rhi hai...
Amul-sangeeta...ab gali ke kutte bhi..?
Sangeeta-amul...so what yrr....hai wo bhi bechare jeev hi na..
Amul-yrr docomo hai na...usi ko khilao...aise sb kutto ko khilaogi to...ese kese chalega....we are middle class family dear....
Sangeeta-bacha hua khialay hai...kyu itna overreact krte ho...
Amul-kya tumne kabhi 14injection lgawaye hai...

Sangeeta bairani se-nahi to....
Amul-lgwa leti...aaj tum bhi react krti...or tumhe wo react over nhi lgta..or ha...mere papa ki maut bhi pagal kutte ke kaatne se hui thi..amul bolkr andar chala jaata hai....

10mhine bad...amul ki wife ki delivery hone wali thi...sb bahut khush the....


Doc-mr amul....bahut jada complications aarhe hai...i think baby is not safe ..
Amul or family ko tension ho jaati hai...
Doc or bhi doctors ke sath andar jaate hai....
Karib 1ghante bad...
Doc-soryy...we cant save her...
Amul ki life me ekdm ,ek hi pal me andhera sa chhal gya tha...
Doc-baby or mom dono hi....


Amul ki ankhe me aansu nhi the...kyuki use ummid nhi thi...ki uski wife use ese chhod jayegi...
Amul andar jaate hai...or sangeeta ko pakadkr bahut rota hai...



Doc rote hue amul ko ek kagaj deta hai .
"Ye inki bed ke paas tha..inhone likha tha.."

Amul us kagaj ko padhta hai...
"Amul...plss take care of docomo..."
Amul ko ajeeb lgta hai...jaha amul ka nam hona chahiye tha...wha kutta ka nam...
Antim sanskar ke samay
Docomo bhi wahi betha tha...shaayd uski ankho me aansu the...pr ek bejuban ka drd kon smjh skta hai....

Dhire dhre amul ki life normal hone lge ..lekin wo roj sone se pahle...snageeta ko yaad krta tha ...

Sangeeta ki kahi hui baat bhi usko yaad thi...wo docomo ka khyal rkhta tha...jese khana dena...etc...lekin...insano ki ek fitrat hoti hai...vaado ko...kuch time bad bhul jaate hai...yhi amul ke sath hua.....

Amul ne shahar jaakr rhne ka decide kiya...or whi ek dursi job dekhli.....docomo ko bhi sath le gya....
Lekin ab docomo ki life bahut change ho gyi thi...use sone ke lie koi bed nhi milta tha...bs ese hi...kisi bhi kone me so jaata .....amul khana deta to kha leta...wrna ese hi betha rahta.....

Amul kabhi kabhi office late hota to kai bar docomo ko khana dena bhul jaata tha...fr sham me hi docomo khana khata tha...amul roj use flat me band krke jaata tha...ki kahi sadak pr na chala jaye or kisi gaadi ke niche na aa jaye...


Amul apne office me sbse jaada replspected employee the...wo apna har kaam prfection ke sath krte the...islie unke upr responsibility bhi jaada thi...jimmedari jaada to pressure jaada...islie boss ki daant bhi pdti rahti thi...

Ek din amul office se ghar jaa rha tha...
Highway na lekar usne short cut liya...
Shahar ke chhote road pr chale jaa rha tha...achank same ek tent dikha diya lga hua...
Shayad kisi jaagran ki taiyari chal rhi thi...

Sbhi side se nikalkr jaa rhe the...
Amul ne bhi bike ko side se nikalne ki sochi...lekin jab us tent ka last hua...achank samne ek kutta aagya...
Ab nikalne ka rasta tha nhi itna jaada...

Amul-bhai sahab..kahe to mai pichhe hat jau....nhi...mtlb ap to ek bdi shaksiyat hai...ap pichhe hatenge to apka apman ho jayega......

Kutta udhar udhr dekhe jaa rha tha...
Amul-hello bhaisahab apse baat kr rha hu...kya idhar udhar dekhe jaa rhe hai...hmari kuch ijjt hai ki nhi...hm baat kr rhe hai...hmse bat kijiye na...apko pta hai...apka ek bhai...shayd kumbh ke mele me kho gya hoga...mere pas hai...uska nam hai...docomo....are kya puchhege jnab...unke thaath hi alg hai...ye alm hai bhaisaba ka...ki laterine bhi kare to saaf mujhe krni pdti hai.....khair chhodiye use...ap btaite kya haal chaal hai,mr. gali ke kute...?

Amul ko hasne ki awaj aati hai...
Amul-kis typ ke kutte ho yar...haste bhi ho..
Fir se amul ko awaj ati hai...
Amul samjh jaata hai ki pichhe side me koi hai...amul dekhta hai to 2ldkiya khadi thi...

Ladki-bhaiya bade ghut ghutkr baat kr rhe ho bhaisahab se...
Amul-ji bhabhi ji....
Ldki gusse me-whatt...ye kya btmeeji hai...
Amul-plss ap bura mt maniye...mai thik kah rha hu....dharti pr sbse jada lucky kutta hi hai...jindagi sawarni hai to shadi krlo usse ...

Amul bolkr gaadi start krta hai...or wha se nikal jaata hai....

Amul ghar pahuchta hai-jaise hi gate kholta hai...docomo use dkehkar bhokne lgta hai..
Amul-sale...jis thaali me khata hai use chhed krta hai...maalik hu teta...mujhpr bhokega ...beshrm nalayak.....
Amul bolkr andar chala jaata hai...bag rkhta hai...kapde change krta hai...
Kutta samne hi betha tha...

Amul-ohho...prabhu...
Amul farsh pr letkar uske samne hath jod leta hai...
Amul-prabhu...jaise hi gate kholta hu...apke darshan......meri jindagi ban jaati hai..

Amul khada hota hai...or guse me-sale notanki...ab mere sr pr kyu betha hai...bhag yha se...
Docomo amul ki dant sunkr bhaag jaata hai.....

Amul ka ek dost...amit....uske paas aata hai...
Amit-hey amul...aaja pite hai aaj...
Amul-really...chal...
Amul or amit upr chhat pr chale jaate hai.....
Or ek ek bag bna lete hai....
"Cheers..."dono ke glass apas me takrate hai.....
Or dono ek lambi si ghut bharte hai..

Amul-ye kis khushi me...
Amit-biwi mayke gyi hai yr...yhi to mauka hai...
Amul-ye glt baat hai yrr...jo biwi ko psnd nhi...wo biwi ke pichhe bhi nhi krna chahiye...this is cheating..

Amit-or jo biwi ko pasand ho...
Amul-wo hmesha krna chahiye...chahe biwi sath ho ya na...i m missing my wife yrr...

Amit-hey amul...ye tera kutta kaise upr aagya...

Amul-..kash bnane wale ne mujhe kutta bnaya hota...arz kiya hai...
"Wah wah....waha wah.."amit daad deta hua bolta hai...

Amul-kash bnane wale ne mujhe kutta bnaya hota...ek ldki ke pichhe nhi bhaagta...10kutiyao ko ptaya hota...
"Hahahahaah..."amit hasne lgta hai...

Amit-yrr...mene hmesha dekha hai....tu kutto se itna jalta hu kyu hai.....lekin fir bhi tune kutta pala hai..
Amul nashe me-abe...ye ek dard bhari daastsn hai...tu sunega ...to ro pdega...
Amit-Achha btaa...
Amul kuch jaada nshe me ho chuka tha...
Amul-ek salim tha...ek anarkali thi....anarkali ko mene paal liya...salim sadko pr pda mila...

Amit hairani se-salim araarkali...kya bol rha hai bhai...
Amul-ohh soryy...wo thoda emotional hokr...itihaas ki aur chal nikla...m really soryyy...

Amul docomo ki taraf hath jodta hua-mujhe maaf kijiye jaillelaahi shanhanshah jallaluddin akhabar...
Amit-are..yr...tujhe jaada chadh gyi...tu bta kya rha tha...orr

Amul-ohh...haa yaad aaya...wo hua yu ki...meri biwi...sangeeta...bahut pyar krta tha usse...wo dahej me kutta le aayi yr...or mrte mrte iska dhyan rkhne ko kah gyi....

Amit-achha...or kutto se nfrt...
Amul-beta 14injection lgwaiyo kbhi...smjh jayega....
Amit-ye galt hai yr...
Amul-achha ktwau docomo se...docomo ushh...


Amit drta hua-nhi nhi...wo mai to...
Amit-bhai sahab...jb se ye kutta aaya hai na...meri life ekdm bkwas ho gyi hai.....sala mujhse compition krta hai.....
Amit-ye behjuban hai yr....kitne to pyare hote hai ye ...
Amul-ja le ja...rakhnle apne ghr me...

In office
"Amul....Sun tv me interview ke lie jaana tha...hmari company ki bdhti growth ,ab log interview ke lie to aayenge hi....to mai chahta hu...as a company representative...tum wha jao..."

Amul-sir...mai...lekin mai to...
"Why not...you deserve it...hmari company ki growth me tumhare unique ideas ka bahut bda yogdan hai...so you go there......"..

Amul-okk sir...as you wish...kab jaana hai...
"Aaj 2bje...but remember...dont tell them about our sucess mantra...ujha dena kuch or baato me..."
Amul-okay sir...sure...i'll go....


2.15pm

"Hello guys....i am sonali...welcome you to the our superhit interview show....jisme hm desh ke neta,abhineta ya kisi bhi icon ka interview lete hai...aj hmare guest hai mr Amul...jaane maani company unisec ke best emoloyee...mr amul ke unique ideas...or unki mehnat se hi unki company aaj bahut bde mukaam pr hai....."...


Sonali-your most welcome mr Amul...sir...shuru krte hai...apke nam se ...apka naam bda unique hai....
Amul-mere dog ka mujhse bhi unique hai..

"Hahahaha...hm jante hai mr amul,ap bahut hi khushmijaj or hajirjavabi insan hai...wese kya naam hai apke dog ka..
Amul-docomo...
"Wowww intesting...anyway...apke naam ke piche koi logic..."

"logic nhi...maharbani...amul company ki...agr wo apni kampany ka nam amul na rkhkr docomo rkhte ..to shayad mere nam docomo hota...mera dog ka nhi.. "

"wo kasie..."
Amul apne nam rkhne ki dastan vistar se sunata h

"Hahaha...bahur khub...very inreesting...so...apki family ke bare me..."
"meri family gao me rahti hai...meri biwi last yr....she is expired...docomo usi ka hai..."

"Ohh m so sroryy.."
"its all right..."

"so...ap btayege...apki compnay ne itni teji se growth kese kr liya."

"well...staff member ki mehnt .."

"hmne suna hai ki...apke unique ideas ki vjh se....apki company high level pr hai aj..."

"no mam...ye baat...sb bolte hai but...itna bda kaam koi bhi akela admi nhi kr skta...its all about teamwork.....but normally jo company nhi krti...wo hmne kiya..."

"Esa kya kiya sir..."
"marksism...........bs wohi apnaya...."

"Marksism.....prr wo to hmesha chhote workrs ke paskh me rhte the...to..i mean plss highlight it..."

"apne sahi smjha....labor...actually yhi hmari company ke pillers hote hai...kahne ko chahe koi kuch bhi kahe...books me kuch bhi likha hai..lekin...ye mera manna hai...ki hm workekrs ko khush rkhege...to wo khushi se kaam krege...junoon se imadari se...or kaam jada krege...production jaada...to profit jaada ."

"woow...mjduro ko apne kaise smjha...i mena kya kiya unke lie..."

"ek din comonay ki growth ko lekar swal hua to mene bs itna kaha...ki company ki growth chahte hai to chhote worrker ko happy rkho...wo khushi se kaam nhi krte......khush hokar kaam krege to achhe se kam krege....unse bate kre,koi bhedbhav na kre.."

"fir..."

"fir kya...chhote worker se hm sb pyar se pesh aane lge...safai krne wale ko har roj jo bhi milta wo unhe thanks kahta....ho ske to gale se lgate...achhe se unse baate krne lge...isse company me mahol bhi achha rahne lga ...company ke chhote workers se bde log interect hone lge.....jo log chhote workes se achhe se bate nhi krte...use fine bhrna pdta....pr mai chahta tha ki log mjburi me nhi...khushi se chhote workers se bat kare..."

"sounds nice...to isse ka fark pda..."


"company ke kuch chhot workers chori bhi krte the...ab chori to krege hi jb wo milne wali salerry se satisfy nhi...lekin jb sb ek dusre se pyar se bate krne lge...to wha chori honi bhi band ho gyi...company ko fund ki jrurt thi...mass production ke lie...tb hmare chhote workers hi samne aaye...sbne contribute kiya...or ek mahine ki sellery bhi chhod di....copmany ko 5times jaada profit hua....un worrkes ne company ka jo last time me sath diya...uski vjh se hmari company top pr hai...bs uske bad se...hmari company uchaiya chhuuti gyi... "

"wowww...really sunne me ajib lga. ...prr achha lga...anyway.... Mr amul kya ap apne bare me kuch btayegnge...apki family education...."

"mere family gao me rahti hai..."
"okay...or yha apke sath koi nhi rhta...right..."

"rahta hai na...my dog docomo ...
Sonali-so mr amul..apne streanth and weakness kya hai. ..."

"strainght hai...meri positive thinking...and weakness my docomo..."

"okk....so ap ab shadi kyu nhi kr lete ....i mean ap itne sucess hai..."

"mera docomo hai na...meri wife ka akhhri spna tha uska khyal rkhnaa...docomo ke mrne ke bad shadi krunga.."


"haha...ap bahut funny ha..ap itne handsome ho...koi bhi ldki kuu mil jati.."

"is matter me na docomo ki kismt achhi hai...jb dekho samne se ek shanti use roj dekhti rahti hai..."

"shanti kon...."
"pados me ek lady dog..."

"sir...mene bahut bar notice kiya...ap dogs pr kuch jaada focus daal rhe hai...apka docomo...dogs ...esa ku"

"because meri life ki sbse bdi problm dogs hai..."


"kaise sir btayege..."
"sure....hm bhains ko palte hai...wo hme dudh deti hai...kutta kon sa dudh deta hai..."

"pr wo hmari rkahwali krte h..."
"jo khud ki rakhwali nhi kr skte ...wo hamri kaise krege...kya unke pas guns hoti hai...kya wo martialartist hote h...kese krege hmari rakhwali..."


Sonal haste hue-okay...so you want ki..
"i want ki...kutto ki dunia alg honi chahiye...hm insan ki alg...ap sochiye...kutto ke katne se 14injection lgte hai...agr kutte nhi honge.. to wo jnjection bnane nhi pdege...kitni bachat hogi..."

"butt..."
"or ek gali bhi km hogi...sala kutta...kutta kameena..sochiye...in sbse kutta hat jayega...to kmskm gaali ka asr to km hoga na..."

"but ..this earth is not only for us...ye pure jeev ki hi..chahe jaanvr ho ya vanaspati.."

"uff..kutto ne konsi building bnai hai abtk..konse office jaate hai wo...konse pese kmaate hai...kya wo teacher hote hai..scientist hote hai...doctor hote hai...fir hme kyu jrurt hai janvro ki...faeda kya hai inka..."

"sir...janvr bht useful hote hai hmare lie...unse dudh,resham,shahad,wool milte hai.."

"mam...kya ap apke mobile ke bina 5din rah skti ho...kya electricity ke bina rah skti ho...nhi na...lekin hm mobile ke bina...eletricity ke bina...pahle rahte the...lekin ab hmne use apni adat bna liya....islie hme esa lgta h ki hm unke bina nhi rah skte.. resham....wool..are hm log inke bina bhi rah chuke hai...."

"sir...ye to mai jaanti hu ki apse jeetna bht mushkil hota hai...apki debate power bht achhi hai...pr apka subject galat h...."

"really...apko pta h..hm me se sbse jada khushnseeb kon hai."

"kon"

"kutte....unhe kmaane ki jrurt nhi hoti...wo kabhi boss ki dant nhi sunte ..ghr me rhte h...kmakr hm laate hai...or khate wo hai...sale namard...

"namard"?

"or nhi to kya...sale ghr me pde rhte hai.....agr mrd hote to bahar jaate na....kmane k lie..mai to soch rha hu apne docomo ke lie chuudiyaa laadu...orto ki trh pahankr betha rhega ..."

"hahahaa...sir ap kutte ko chhudi pahnaoge ...not bad ...."

"m serius......"

"okkay...pr kutte to bahar bhi rahte hai sir...ghr me to bahut km rahte hai..."

"baahr rahkr konsa office me jaate hai...kabhi apne bahar rahne wale kutto ke hath me briefcase dekha hai...unhe suit pent me dekha hai...unhe college ka bag ltakaye hue dekha hai.....kya apne aajtk kutte ko driving krte dekha hai...unke sr pr helmet dekha hai...nhi na...so konsa teer marte hai...are lofargrdi krte hai...kutiyao ko chhedte hai."

"Hahahaha....lofargrdi...or kutte...how"

"dekhiye...kya apko kisi kutta ne bhonka hai..."
"yes...mamy times..."

"apko smjh me aaya...wo apse kya kah rha tha..."

"no..."
"actualyy...unki awaaj me wo seeti bjaate hai... gande gande coments pass krte hai...lekin apko lgta hai ki wo bs bhok rhe hai...."

"Ek min sir" uthkr teji se bahar ki taraf chali jaati hai....

Or bad me ek admi ke sath aati hai...
"sir...apki baate kuch intresting lgi...mai to shayd apse utna kuch pucha nhi skti...ye sir apka interview lenge...."

"Hello mr amul...I am raj,ha btaiaye mr amul...why you hate animals ,and mostly dogs...."

"sir...jisdin ap unhe mahsoss krna seekh jaoge na...ap bhi hate krne lgoge..."

"Why"

"ap insano se hate krte ho...koi bhi apka dushman to hoga na..."

"yes...sbhi ke hote hai..."

"kyu hai wo apka dushman...kyuki usne apko kuch kaha hoga...kuch kiya hoga apke sath..agr uski bhasha aisi hoti...ki aap smjh na sko..to kya wo apka dushman hota...."

Sonali dusri chair pr bethi smile krne lgti hai...or raaj chup ho jaata hai..

"ap uski bhasha smjh paye...uske kriyakalaap ko smjh paye ..islie apka wo admi dushman ho gye....koi kutta apko kitni bhi gali de...kya smjh payege...nhi na..."

"yes but..."

"ap nhi smjh payege....kutta apko bol rha hai...sale bsdk.....nyi bike lekar aaya hai...utar...hme muutna hai is bike pr...kya ap us pr gussa krege ...nahi na...ap utrenge or use pyar se kahege...ole lele dogi....kitna cute dogy hai....bolta hua kitna cute lg rha hai...
Or use ulta khane ko kuch de or doge..."

Pas bethi sonali ki hasi chhut jaati gai...
Raaj bhi muskuraye bina rah nhi paata...

"rahi baat nfrt ki...sch btana raaj sir...kitni ladkiya pti abtk..."

Raaj sharmakr sonali ki taraf dekhne lgta gai ..

"are boliye sir...jada se jada 2,3....in kutto ko dekho...ye log kisi kutiya ka mobile noumber nhi mangte....ye kisi kutiya ka pichha nhi krte...vanatine day,hug day,kiss day...unhe koi mtlb nhi...or na hi inhe oyo rooms ki jarurt...jaha dekho...wha pyar ka izhar kr dete hai....dekha nhi apne sdko pr..."


Sonali muh pr pr haath rkhkr hasne lgti hai....

"sir ap bahut funny baate krte hai..."

"no thats not funny...thats reality...apki life me ek ldki aana mushkil hai...or inki life hi inke lovers se bhri hoti hai....hm insan ko inse nfrt kuu nhi krni chahiye....kmaakr mai lau...khata hai wo docomo....kha khakr lala ji ho gya....kutto se nfrt kyu na kre yar......sbko lgta hai ki hamri new car ya bike ka udghatn hmne kiya...prr nhi...hakeekat me kutte susu krke krte hai...kutte kisi ko katle unhe koi kuchh nhi kahta...tum kutto ko maardo...tum jallaad bn jaoge..."


Office

"Amul ...apse ye kaha tha ki main secret mt btana....apne worker wala achha point diya...pr bad me wo kutta wala...ap jante hai apka kitna mjak bn rha hai...social media pe kitna virel hai..
Log apko villan or janvro ko hero smjh rhe hai..log pagal kah rhe hai apko...joke bn rhe hai ap pr.."

"i dont care about it...let it be...banne dejiye...jo mere drd ko smjhega...wo mjak nhi udayega..."
"ek kutta se insan ki tulna kr rhe ho...you are completly lost your mind..."

"sir...wo nanga ghumta hai...ap ghumkr dikha skte ho kya nanga...wo kisi bhi kutiya ke sath s...x kr skta hai...ap kisi rah chalti ladki ka hath pakadkr dikhao...kya apke kutte ne kbhi apko kmaakr khilaya hai...gya hai wo office...suni hai boss ki dant...hm insan...saale beti ki shadi krne ke chakkr me ...dahej dene ke lie khud ka ghar tk bech dete hai...apke kutte ne kabhi beti ki shadi ke lie kisi se udhar liya hai...their life is much batter than us...unhe na kisi se shadi krni...na kisi ki shadi kwani...na kmaana...they are much batter thn us...bolte h compare mt kro..."



Home

"sangeeta...dekho tumhara docomo hero bn gya...usne kuch nhi kiya...hmesha bethkr khaya hai...mai kmaata tha...iske lie khana laata tha...time se office jaana boss ki daant sunni...or hero bna ye...log mujhe pathhar dil bol rhe hai...or ye docomo hero bn gya.....isne kiya kya ...kyuu bna ye hero...kyu itne log iske support me hai..mera dukh meri baat koi kyu nhi smjhta....agr aisa hai to...kaash...mai kutta hota...or ye docomo amul hota...tb ise smjh aata amul ki life kya hai....jaise ye mje me rahta hai...kash mai rahta...jaise mai strugle krta hu...kash ye krta...

6am
Subah uski ankh khulti hai...
ghar ki chhat bahut unchi thi...pta nhi kaise...Amul jaise hi chalne ke lie hota hai...use ajeeb lgta hai...jaise hi niche dekhta hai...

"Bhoo"uchhla pda achank

Apni awaj use ajeeb lgi...firse wo kuch bolne ke lie jaise hi muh khola..
"Bho... bho"uske muh se kutte jaise bhokne ki awaj aayi...wo apne pero ko dekhta hai...kutte ke per...2nhi...4...amul ko shak hota hai...wo aine ke samne jaata hai or...aine me dekhta hai...wha ek kutta tha...

"Kya...mai docomo bn gya...esa kese ho skta hai..."

"Hello amul..."awaj aati hai...
Amul pichhe mudkr dekta hai...pichhe uske duplicate...yanee amul khada tha...
amul kuch bolta hai...or niklti bs bhokne ki awaj hai...

"Are..yar...apka bhokna mujhe smjh nhi arha...pr haa...apko ek baat btau...mai docomo hu...apka dog"wo bolta hua muskura deta hai...

"Bho bho"

"Dekho yar....ab ap bahut saree bate puchoge...mujhe smjh nhi aayegi...mai khud sbkuch bta deta hu....sham me aap didi...i mean sangeeta ji ki tasveer k samne bol rhe the ki docomo amul hota or amul docomo...to...bs islie shayad upr wale ne apki sunli...or 7din ke lie...mujhe...amul bna diya...or apko docomo...."samne khada hua docomo bolta hai...

amul ek kone me jakar beth jata h

Docomo office jaata hai....
Docomo me insan bnne ke sath sath... Har baat uske dimak me daal di gyi thi...jaise amul ka office kidhar hai...wo kaise baat krta tha...

Lekin amul ke sath aisa nhi tha...
Kone me bethe bethe ..4ghnte bad Achank pet me kuch drd sa mahsus hua...or use ekdm yaad aya ki...usne khana hi nhi khaya subah...gate bahar se bnd tha

"Ohh shit...ab kya kru."..wo preshan hota hua kitchen me jaata hai...lekin kitchen me sb uchai pr tha..amul dukhi mn se fir se whi jakar beth jaata hai...pet me bahut tej drd hone lga tha ab...pr kya kre...intjaar krne ke alawa wo kuch nhi kr skta tha..

Achank gate khula...or docomo dikhai diya...
Amul uski taraf hasrst bhri nigaho se dekhne lga..ki shayad ab khana milega...or khud b khud...uski poonch hilne lgi..

"Ufff...yrr...ap fir samne aagye...chaliye side hatiye...aaj office me bahut kam tha..." docmo andar akr soffe pr bethkr bag side me fenkta hai...or pani pine lgta hai..

Amul ke pet me bht jaada drd tha. pr wo bs mn maare wha betha rha...krib 5min tk docomo ese hi soffe pr betha rha...or amul ko bethe hue ko dekhta raha...

Docomo-pet me drd ho rha hoga na.....mere pet me bhi roj hota tha...pr isi trh mai apke aane intjar krta tha...ki kb ap ayege or mujhe khana denge..kai bar mai rota tha...jb ap ate the...or apne dost ke sath upr chle jaate the...mujhe bhuka chhodkr...24ghanto se mai bhuka tha..kai baar to upr hi chla gya ye sochkr ki khana nhi to..jo ap pi rhe ho wo hi dedo...kuch to pet me jaye...pr ap mujhe bhga dete the...or aakr so jaate the..us raat puri raat mai rota tha...lekin bs dil me...kuki aawaj krke rota to apki nind khul jaati...fir bhi ek khwaish rhti thi ,ek ummid ki shayd subah kuch milega...prr firse jladi jaldi me mujhe kuch dena bhul jate the...or bahar se lock krke chale jate the....

Docomo bolkr uthta hai..or khana lakar amul ke samne rakh deta hai....
Amul pet bhrkrk khana khata hai....or fir jakar sangeeta ki photo ke samne beth jata hai...najane kya soch rha tha...

Next day....docomo uthkar jaldi se fresh hota hai...or amul ko khana khilata hai...
Docomo-ap soch rhe honge ki ghr me rhna kitna mushkil hai...is ghr me ap puri trh bor ho gye honge...hai na...apne socha hoga ki baahr hota to shayad khane ko kuch mil jata hai..mai ghr lock nhi krunga..ap dekh lijiyega bahr wale kutto ki life bhi...


Docomo ke jane ke bad.. amul bahar nikal jaata hai...ghumne ke lie...
"Oye...be ye kon hai be...apne area me"ek kutta bolta hai...

"Are wah...mai kutto ki baate sun skta hu...wow new experiance..."

"Abe...ye ilaka hmara hai..kon hai tu...koi ameer kutta lgta hai be..."ek kaala kutta...jo shaayd is gang ka leader tha...usse bolta hai...uske pas 3kutte or bethe the...

Amul-mai...mera nam amul hai...mai yha pas me rhta hu..."

"Or...mai kaliya..ye hmara ilaaka hai...yha sbse pahle hmne susu kiya tha ...wo dekh..."
"Wo kya h"amul deewar ki trf dekhta hai

"Abe...tu kutta hi hai na...are wo susu hai re...apun ka susu...dekh kesi chamak maar rhi hai...sala insano ka asian pants bhi fail hai..."

Amul-okkay..nice..but.....we should go washroom for that...
"Are...ye to insano ke jesi english bolta hai...lgta hai tere malik ne bahut sikhaya hai tere ko..ye apni party join krega..bol"

itne me kuch kutte aate hue dikhayi dete hai...jo bhut tej daud rhe the...
Amul-ye kya...

"Chlo...chhoot na jaye...sbse pahle...hmara hak..."kutte chillate hue daudne gte hai...
Amul daanv dekhta na taanv...wo bhi bhagne lgta hai...

Amul-are kya hua...kyu bhag rhe ho...
"Sbsbe phale..hamra hak.."pahla kutta bolta h

Next kutte se -kya hua...kyu bhag rhe ho..
"Bhago...sbse pahle hmara hak.."
Amul teesre se -kya hua yr...bta do..kyu bhag rhe hai hm

"Abe...sbse pahle hamra hk...wo gaadi dekh...nyi aayi hai mohalle me..sbse pahle uspr hm muutenge...yahoo..."
Amul-what....tum susu krne ke lie..oh god...susu krke kya hoga...

"Abe...tujhe kuch nhi pta..are isme hme kick milti hai...abe jo mja nyi gaadiyo pr susu krke aata hai wo to sala chicken khane me bhi nhi aata.."

"Abe jaldi daud kisse baat krne lga...dekh pichhe dusre muhalle ke aagye hai..sala compitition hi itna bdh gya hai..."dusre kutta bolta hai...
Amul whi ruk jaata hai...
"Waah kya compitition hai..."amul sochta hai
Amul bhaagkr thak gya tha...wo jakr ek ped ke niche beth jata hai...

Achank samne ek aadmi gun liye khada tha..kisi ko shoot krne wala tha...
Amul chaunk jaata hai use dekhkr..
"Bho bho"ek kutta aakar us aadmi ki taraf bhokne lgta hai...wha bheed khadi thi...sb us banduk wale admi se dr rhe the...bs us kutte ke alawa...
Amul -bhai tum kuu chilla rhe ho..
"Are wo mera malik hai...ye aadmi use mar dega...mai esa nhi hone dunga"
Amul-are pr...uske hath me gun hai...mt jao mr jaoge tum bhi...

"Kya...tum insano ke jaise ku bat kr rhe ho..ya insano ke sath rhkr tumhari bhi unke jaise ghatiya soch ho gyi...wo mera malik hai...agr mene use nhi bchaya to kese chalunga sr uthakr..sb kahenge tune WAFADAARI nhi nibhai..mujhe shrm aayegi kutta hone pr..."or itna bolkr wo kutta ekdm us banduk wale pr jhapat'ta hai...goli ekdm kutte ko lgti hai...

Or wo kutta whi se mr jata h...is bich wo malik wha se bchkr bhag jaata hai...wo admi bhi public ki vajah se idhar udhar ho jaata hai...

"Bechara kutta...mr gya..kitna achha kutta tha"ek aadmi bolta hai ..or chal deta hai...amul whi us kutte ke pas betha rh jata hai...or uski ankho me aansu the...

Wo pure din sdk pr betha rhta hai...pr use koi khana nhi daalta...wo smjh chuka tha ki bhuk kya hoti h..bahut se bachhe use chhed rhe the...
Sham ho chuki thi whi bethe bethe...achank wo charo kutte aate hai...

"Are boss...tumne kuu nhi kiya susu...bda mja aaya...tumhe pta hai hmara mohalle ne baaji mardi"
Amul use us kutte ki sb bat btata hai.
"Are to isme konsa usne nya kaam kiya sb kutte aisa krte h..bs kbhi insano ko hamra balidan dikhai deta hai ,kabhi nhi..."


Amul ghr aajata hai...ghr docomo bhi aachuka tha
"kaisi lgi apko bahar ki jindagi..."

"Bho bho bho"
"pta nhi ap kya kahna chah rhe hai...aayiye khana khalijiye...apne dopahar bhi kuch nhi khaya hoga...."

Amul ki ankho me paani aajata hai ye dekhkar...
Or wo khana khane lgta hai..

Next day...
Wo charo kutte amul ke sath bethe the...amul unse bht kuch puch rha tha..amul ko mja aarha rha unse bat krne me...

Achank kuch kutte thoda dur khde hokr unki taraf bhonke lgte hai..

"Abe...inki ye majaal...inki to...sathiyo...akraman..."kaaliya bolta hai..or wo bhagne lgta hai kutto ki taraf..

Amul kyu pichhe rhta...wo bhi bhagne lgta hai...sbse aage ab amul tha...
Wo kutte aage bhag rhe the...or ye team unke pichhe..amul bhokte bhokte bhaag rha tha...
Kuch dur jaakr wo kutte achank ruk jaate hai...
Amul bhonkta hua unke aps jaakr khada ho jata hai...wo kutte gurrane lgte hai

"Are...pahle ye drkr bhag rhe the...ab sher bn rhe hai...kaaliya bhai maro salo ko.." pr koi response nhi..

Amul jaise hi pichhe dekhta hai...foonk sarak gyi...pichhe to koi tha hi nhi...mtlb...wo akela aagya yha..ab kya hoga..."

Wo kutte gurrate hue amul pr toot pdte hai...or amul ki achhe se kutaai ho jati hai...amul pitkar apne mohalle me aata to or unhe whi betha dekhta hai..
"yrrr tum sbne mujhe pitwa diya...wapas kyu agye.."


"Abe...tera dimak khiskela hai kya...are unhe apne area se bhgaana tha...unke area me kayeko guusa tu.."

Amul thoda shant sa hokar-salo...kutte hi rhoge tum....

"Ha to kutte hi rhege na...sher bne esi kismt nhi...or insan bne itni bhi bekar kismt nhi..."
"whatt...mtlb insan bnna buri bat hai..."

"Or nhi to kya...abe tu jaanta.."
Itna hi bol paya wo ki use koi dikha deta hai...

"Are chuje kya hua...udaas kyu hai"ek chuja udas ghum rha tha..

"mene suna tha..wo hmare malik...meri ma ko kaatne wale hai...sunday me...kuch rishedar ayege unke...mai meri ma ke bina kaise rhunga..."rota hua chuja btane lgta hai..


"Are yrr...tu ro mt...hm hai na...hm tujhe apne khana de diya krege...ro mt beta.."wo kutta jakar chuja ke sr pr hath firata hai....

"Ye insan itne bure hai..ye sale ese hi mrege...kabhi accident se...kabhi nyi nyi biamariyo se...or fir upr wale ko doshi thahrayge...apne krm nhi dekhege...chup ho ja chuje...ro mt.."

Amul ka dil bhar aaya ye dekhkr

"Chuje mujhe maaf krde yr ..mai bhi shayad utna hi doshi hu...jitne ye insan"

"nhi...ap to achhe ho..ap kutte ho...agr insan hote to mai apko dekhkar bhag jata...wo meri maa ko mar denge wo...mai bhi mr jaunga unke sath.."

"nhi...teri ma ko kuch nhi hoga..dekhna...wo tere sath rhegi.."

Amul use dilasa dekar chal deta hai wha se..or sochna lgta hai...rone lgta hai...
Agle din use bahut maar pdti hai... usne khana chura liya tha...lekin dando se use bahut mara gya.....7din katne use bahut bhari dikh rhe the....docomo roj use khana deta...uske bad bhi uske lie wo 7din kisi narak se km nhi the.... Aaj 6th day tha....amul janta tha ki ab wo insan bn jayega...wo apne dosto..kaliya or un 4aro ke sath pure din khela...


Docmo-so..ab ap fir se..insan bn jayege..or mai...kutta..kash mai kuch or din insan bnkr rah skta...lekin..apko preshan nhi dekh skta..fir ap meri awaj shayad kbhi nhi sun skoge...islie abhi kahta hu.. ...mai apko bahut pyar krta hu..

Amul jakar wapas sangeeta ki photo ke samne beth jaata hai...ankho me aansu liye

"Sangeeta...plsss tum to uprwale ke pas ho na..bs ek baar..esa kuch krdo ki mai or docomo dono bate kr ske. .plss mai hath jodta hu...upr wale se kaho...bs ek mohalat...plss"amul rota hua bolta h


Or dekhte dekhte achank wo insani roop me aajata hai...mtlb amul bn jata hai..
Or piche dekhta hai to...piche docomo ka roop nhi bdla tha

Docomo-are wah...ap to kl insan bnne wale the na...aj hi...or mai ...mai kutta kyu nhi bna...

Amul bhagkar jaata hai or docomo ke per pakad leta hai...

"are...ap mere malik ho...ye kya kr rhe ho ap..."

"mujhe maaf krde yr...plss mai smjh gya...hm insan kaise hote....or tum...tum schme insano se jada behtr ho...mene tumhe bhuka rkha...mujhse ek din bhi bhuk brdasht nhi hui...wo ...wo kutta malik ke lie mr gya ..itni wafadari..."

Docomo-haa malik mai bhi apke lie mr skta hu...
Amul khada hota hai...amul ki ankho me bahut aasnu the ..

"nhi mere bhai...nhi...bhgwan kre tumhe meri umr lg jaye..."
Or amul docomo ko gle se lga leta hai...

Docomo bhi rone lgta hai..

"malik.. sangeeta didi mujhe kbhi mujhe akela nhi chhodti thi...wo mujhse kahkr gyi thi ki malik ka khyal rkhna...malik ek bar ap gao gye the...mai 8din tk bhuka rha tha...mrne ko ho gya tha...or fir sangeeta didi ki baat yaad aayi...ki apka khyal rkhna hai...islie mai nhi mra..."

"maaf krde yr...or nhi sun skta....mujhe pta h mene kitne paap kiya hai...or sun...ab hm dono achhe se rhege...okk...or tu bahar bhi ja sakta hai.. ... hm ek plate me khana khayenge...prr plss mujhe maaf krde..."

"nhi malik....ap hmesha mere malik rhoge...sangeeta didi ki trh...,"

"mai malik...or sangeeta didi..."

"malik unhone hi kaha tha ki mai unka bhai hu....islie..."

"mera bhi bhai hai.....hmesha rhega .."
Or itne me hi docmo kutta bn jata hai. ..
Amul use dekhkr muskurata hai...or use firs se seene se lga leta hai ..

Subah uthkr amul sbse pahle us chuje wale ke ghr jaata hai..

"bhaisahab...mujhe apki ye murgi...or chuja chahiye"
"Are...ese kese dede"
"dono ke 1000dunga..."

Wo kuch nhi bolta
"5000...."
"Thik hai lao.."

Amul unhe 5000deta hai...or us murgi ko chuje ko apne pas le aata hai....
Amul us chuje ko hath me lene ko hota hai ..pr chuja bhagne ki koshish krta hai...lekin amul use pakad leta hai...

"ab teri ma tujhse kabhi dur nhi hogi...mere pyare chuje....or tu kbhi rona mt...tu chhota sa bht cute hai.."


Or amul us chuje ko kiss kr deta hai...
Or use fir apne dosto ki yaad aati hai...
Amul us trf jaata hai...

Wha chorahe pr bethe dikhi dete hai wo charo kutte...

Amul-hi kaliya
Kaliya ekdm amul ki trf dekhta hai...
Or bhokne lgta hai

"mujhe are mai amul hu...tumhare sath kal tha na...dekho...mene us chuje ki maa ko bcha liya...mene kaha tha kuch nhi hoga..."

Wo sb kutte use dhyan se dekhne lgte hai...

"janta hu...tum sb soch rhe hoge...ki ese kesa ho skta hai...shayd tum kutto ka drd smjhne k lie...mujhe kutta bnaya tha upr wale ne...mujhe maaf krdo yr...mai sb insano ki trf se maafi mangta hu...tum ab janvro se"


Ekdm wo kala kutta amul ke paas aata hai...or pucnh hilane lgta hai...

Amul bethkr usko gle se lga leta hai..
"tum sbke lie ek achha ghar bnaunga...fr srdi me wha rhna...khana peena sb free...okk
Achank amul ko ek gaadi dekhai deti hai...
"oye...sbse pahle apna hak...bhago.. Kick milegi..."

Kuttte ekdm us gaadi ke piche bhag lete hai..

Amul ke chrhre pr smile aajati hai...
5sal bad amul bekar pde khandar ko kharidta hai... Or use janvro ke rahne ke lie taiyar kr deta hai...wha srdi ke mosm me kambal dlwa deta hai...or usme bht sare kutte...billi...kabutar..gay ke bchhe sone lge the...wha unka khana pina jitna ho skta tha amul krta tha...

Or sangeeta ki photo ke samne khada hokr bolta hai -sangeeta...tumne mujhe sbse pyara gift diya..my docomo...

Kuch din bad...uske pados me wo ek murgi or chuje ko dekhta hai...or fr pdosi ke ghr me chala jata hai..
"bhaisahab...kb khila rhe ho chiken."
"Ohh ji prso hi mahmaan aane wale hai... "
Amul-2000me mujhe ye murgi or chuja doge...

Amul us chuje ko chumta hua bolta hai- teri ma or tere ye amul dost...hmesa tere sath rhege...or usko kiss kr deta hai...

THE END

Hansi mazak aur gambhirta ka bahut achha mishran hai "DOCOMO I LOVE YOU". Ankita ji sach kahun to mujhe lagta hai ke shayad prasidh novel writer "ved parkash sharma" apna naam badalkar is forum par likh raha hai. aapki lekhni mein kya jadu hai. pathkon ko is kadr sammohit karti hain aapki kahaniyan ke end hone se pehle koi ruk nahi sakta.

kahani ki shuruat hi badi interesting aur dramatic hai, yani amul ka naam rakha jaana, fir 14 saal ki umar mein wo kutte dwara kaate jaane ki ghatna jiski wajah se use KUTTAFOBIA ho gaya jiska lagbhag aadhi kahani tak asar saaf dekha ja sakta hai. uski poori interview mein kutta hi chhaya raha. shayad wo uski kutton ke prati nafrat ki wajah se tha.

Fir aapne samjhane ki koshish ki hai ke uske anusar sirf insaan hi dharti par rehne layak jeev hain baki sabki koi value nahi hai matlab unke hone na hone se koi fark nahi padta, amul ke anusar jaanvar sirf insano ke tukdon par palne waale jeev matr hain unka apna koi wajud nahi hai.

Par kehte hain na ke doosre ka dukh tab tak pata nahi chalta hai jab uska jeevan jee kar na dekha jaaye. yahi hua amul ke saath. Shayad sangeeta ne hi upar bhagwan se bolkar yeh switching karwai ke docomo insaan ban gaya aur amul kutta.

ab shuru hota hai amul ka kutte wali life jeene ka safar. tab jakar use pata chalta hai ke jin kutton ki life wo easy aur aramdayak samajhta tha unki life kitni mushkil hoti hai, jab khud bhukha raha tab jaake use ehsaas hua ke kaise wo khud docomo ko bhukha rakhta tha aur jab koi bhukha rehta hai to use kaisa feel hota hai yeh usne jaana.

fir jab wo kutton ke gang mein shamil hota hai to ek kutte ka apne malik ke liye shahid ho jana aur fir kutton ka chuze ki maa ke liye dard yeh sab kuchh aisa tha jo ke khudgarz insaan bhi nahi soch sakte. amul ko ek jeev ke roop mein apna jeevan jeene par pata chala ke sirf insaan hi anand nahi leta jeev bhi apni tarah se apni life ko enjoy karte hain.

to is tarah se is kahani mein yeh baat samjhane ki koshish ki gayi hai ke dharti par har jeev ki value hai koi bhi jeev akarn yahan nahi hai. ham insano ko sabhi jeevon ki kadr karni chahiye. mazak mazak mein aapne pata nahi kya kuchh samjha diya apni kahani mein ankita ji.

main to shuru se hi aapki lekhni ka fan raha hun, isliye aapki wo best kahani aaaahhhhh ka ek part maine likha. chahe main uske saath insaaf nahi kar sakta. btw best of luck for your story I hope ke aap yeh contest jeeten....dhanyavaad

 

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कहानी- बदला
रचनाकार- मानिक सर

शीनू गरीब घर की लड़की है जो अपनी माँ कुसुम के साथ रहती है और नौकरी के लिए पिछले 6-7 महीने से दर दर की ठोकर खा रही है, लेकिन अभी तक नौकरी नहीं मिली। रिश्तेदार में सिर्फ एक मामा ही हैं जो दूर के हैं, लेकिन मामी के रूखे व्यवहार के कारण कभी दोनों रात नहीं रुके उनके यहां।

बात तो सही है इतना आसान नहीं है आज के जमाने में नौकरी पाना। सामने वाले कि शर्त पूरी करने के बाद भी नौकरी मिल जाएगी इसकी कोई गारंटी नही है।

बैंक में उसे नौकरी मिल गई, लेकिन तब तक उसने अपने मन का गुबार निकल दिया था अपने शब्दों के द्वारा। वैसे शीनू ने सही कहा कि एक लड़की के लिए नौकरी पाना इतना आसान नही है। विवेक ने फिलहाल अभी तो उसकी प्रतिभा देखकर उसे नौकरी दे दी। जिसके कारण वो खुसी के मारे रोने लगी।

शीनू को 5 व्यक्ति प्रतिमाह का लक्ष्य दिया गया इंश्योरेंस करने के लिए। लेकिन शीनू के लिए ये इतना आसान भी नहीं था, सभी उसके जिस्म के प्यासे थे, इसीलिए महीने भर में मात्र दो ही इंश्योरेंस कर पाई वो जिसके कारण उसे चेतावनी भी मिली उच्च अधिकारियों द्वारा।

दहेज रूपी दानव समाज से कभी नहीं जाने वाला। सोच ही ऐसी हो गई है लोगों की। कुसुम के साथ भी ऐसा ही हुआ।जिसके कारण दीपक उसे प्रताड़ित करता। तंग आकर उसने उसे छोड़ दिया और ट्यूशन देकर अपनी और शीनू की परवरिश करती रही।

विवेक और शीनू एक दूसरे से प्यार करने लगे जिससे उनके घरवालों को कोई परेशानी नहीं थी, लेकिन शीनू के अंदर बदले भी भावना कम नहीं हुई। विवेक के समझाने के बाद भी वो नहीं मानी। अंत मे विवेक ने उसकी मदद करने की हामी भर दी जिसमे उन दोनों का साथ दिया शीनू की बचपन की सहेली रुचि ने।

तीनों ने मिलकर बहुत अच्छे से फसाया दीपक को। अगर वो इस डील को खुद देखता तो शायद तीनों का मंसूबा कभी कामयाब नहीं होता लेकिन वो ठहरा अय्यास तो सब कुछ मैनेजर के भरोसे छोड़ दिया और मैनेजर अपने कमीशन के चक्कर मे 40 करोड़ बाजार से उठा लिए।

फिर शुरू हुआ जाली पेपर और माल खरीदने बेचने और बनवाने का जाली और गलत काम। वैसे दीपक होशियार आदमी था और उसका शक बिल्कुल सही था, लेकिन इसबार उसका पाला एक बैंकर से पड़ा था। विवेक इस काम मे बड़ा माहिर था। उसने तनिक भी शक नहीं होने दिया दीपक को। और आखिरकार दीपक की कंपनी दीवालिया घोषित हो गई।

रुचि, विवेक और शीनू तीनों बिना डरे प्रतिदिन की तरह एकदम सामान्य व्यवहार करते रहे। कुसुम को भी भनक नहीं लगने दी।

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Dream girl....

Spoiler

January...
"Good bye mom....m going..."riya college jaati hui bolti hai...

Riya college pahuchti hai..achank pichhe se koi uski ankh pr hath rkh leta hai...
"Bolo kon"
"Ravi"riya bolti hui uski hath hataa deti hai...
."kyaa yar...hmesha pahchan leti ho"ravi riya ke sath chalta hua bolta hai...
"Are budhhu ,awaj se pahchan leti hu....ab ankh bnd krke bolta kon hai...pagal ..."

"Haa yar....bss pta nhi tha..waise tum kab aayi"
"Bss 10min pahle...."

"Ek good news hai .."
"Kyaa"
"Mai kisi ko pyar krne lga hu...i love her alot..."ravi thoda sharmata hua bolta hai...

"Woww really...mera best frnd kisi ko pyar krne lga...not bad..kon hai wo...kya naam hai..."riya rukti hui utsukta se puchhti hai...

"Hmmm surprise hai...tum meri sbse achhi dost ho...ese kese bta du...thoda sabr kro..."

"Uff...m sure wo bahut khubsurat hogi..."
"Sbse jada...uske jaisi maine ldki hi nhi dekhi ajtak..."

"Okay....plss mujhe jaldi btana...m waitng...orr aj ghr pr aajana...ghr pr minni ka birthday hai...plss come..."

Evening.....
After bday party ...
"To ravi ji.....akhir apko apki dream girl mil hi gyi" ravi and riya ka ek common dost bolta hai...

"Mili nhi...wo to meri hi hai...abse nhi...janmo se...salo se..bchpn se...meri hi rhegi...hmesha"ravi bolta hai...

"Woww....nice.." abhishek bolta hai..
"Per tumne to mujhe btaya ki ab mili tumhe tumhari gf"riya hairani se bolti hai...

"Are...ehsas...ehsas aisa hai ki...jaise hmara janmo ka sath hai...wo meri...or mai uska..."

"Riya....tumhara dreamboy kaha hai...kb aayega..."abhishek riya se muskurata hua puchhtabhai...

"Pata nhi kaha hai...kya kr rha hoga...or kb aayega..."

"Koi to hoga...jo sirf tumhare spne dekhta hoga....tumhari mannte mangta hoga...koi to hoga jo sirf tumhare lie shahrukh khan hoga..."

"Kya pta ...wese koi faeda nhi hoga mere spne dekhne se...kyuki mai shadi whi krungi jaha mera priwar chahega...family ke rhte to meri love narriege hone se rhi. ."riya haste hue bolti hai...

"Pyar krne wale...pagal hote hai...kaise bhi krke...apne pyar tk pahuchne ka raasta dhund hi nikalte hai..."ravi bolta hai...
"Hahahaha.."hasee ki lahar daud jaati hai...


Next day...
Ghar me buri trh hahakaar macha tha...rone ki awaaje gunj rhi thi......
Ravi ka ro rokar bura haal tha...
Kisi ne ravi ka maa ka bht hi brutally trike se katl kr diya tha.....uski ma ka sr ,dhad se alg kiya hua tha...
Sbhi ravi ko or uske pariwar ko dilaasa dete hai...lekin kisi apne ke jaane ka gm...usse jaada or kon smjh skta hai...
Ravi ke priwar me 5member the...2bhai...mata pita...or dada ji...
Riya ko pta lgta hai...wo bhi bhaagi hui jaati hai...

Ravi riya ko dekhte hi use hug krke rone lgta hai...
Akhir best frnd thi uski...riya use dilasa deti hai...use smjhaati hai...

Police ne wo kamra pura seal kiya hua tha...jaha se uski mom ki dead body mili thi...
Kuch der bad inspector wagmare bahar aate hai...
Inspector-mr ranjeet...apki wife ke pas se...hme kuch mila hai..
Sbbi inspectoe ki trf dekhne lgte hai...
Inspectoe ek kaagaj ranheet ko deta hai...

Riya or ravi bhi use dekhne lgte hai...
"Tumhe...mujhse koi alag nhi kr skta...koi nhi...or jisne koshish ki...wo mrega..."
Ravi-ye...ye sb kya hai...kya hai ye...
Ranjeet-inspector sahab...hmari to kuch smjh nhi aarha...kya hai iska matlb..

"Hmari samjh me aarha hai...mr.ranjeet...apki wife ke pas esa khat milna...iska matlb saf hai...ki apka kisi ka sath affair hai..or usne apko paane le lie...apki wife ko mara hai...kyuki wife hi apki love story ke bich me aa sakti thi.."inspector us latter ka khulasa krte hue btata hai...

"Inspector sahab...ye ap kya kah rhe hai...mere bchhe javan hai...or ap...esi baate....esa mai soch bhi nhi skta...or esi koi orat ya ldki nhi hai"ranjeet thoda paresan hote hue bolte hai...

"Is note ka...or kya mtlb ho sakta hai..mtlb to yhi hai...baki sachhai ka jald hi pta lg jayega...tahkeekat jaari hai.."inspector wha se chal deta hai...sath hi ranjeet ka phon no, office adress...sb kuch puchte hai..tahkeekat ke lie....
Idhar ranjeet or ravi bhri trh pareshan ho jaate hai...

College canteen...
Ravi apni mom ki maut se bahut udas tha..
"comon ravi...bura to hua pr...kya kr skte hai...plsss abhi us ghtna ko 10din gujar chuke hai...ab thoda khush rho pls..."riya ravi ko smjhati hui bolti hai..

"Hmm...m trying...prr wo kon ho sakta hai ...kya schme...papa ka kisi se affair tha...mummy kiske pyar ke raste me aayi hogi..." ravi bolta hai

Police puri tahkeekat krti hai...pr kuch pta nhi lg pata...khun bahut shatir trike se kiya gya tha...

15january...2am..
Mr vinod sharma...riya ke papa...raat me washroom jane ke lie uthte hai..
Ankho me nind thi..jaise hi wahsroom se wapas aate hai...unhe bed pr koi betha dikhai deta hai..
Kale kpdo me...chehre pr mask lga hua...admi ya orat...ye bhi nhi pta tha...
"Kon ho tum"vinod ji hairani se puchte hai...
"Maut"udhar se awaj aati hai...
"Kya..kya bkwas hai ye...tum.."itna hi bol paye vinod ji...ki ekdm uske mathe me khanajr jaa gda....

Riya ki family me bhi 5member the...2bhai ek bahan .or papa mummy...

Inspector wagmare jb wha pda note dekhta hai to...hosh ud jaate hai uske...
"Tumhe mujhse koi alg nhi kr skta...koi nhi...or jisne koshish ki...wo mrega"
Ye...te to...ranjeet ke ghr bhi same...inspector ka dimak hil gya...

Bahar aakr family ko wo note dikhata hai...sbka dimak khrab ho gya...ese kese ho skta hai..iska matlb khuni ek hi hai..

"Ye sb kya hai sir...wha ranjet ji ke ghr bhi yhi note tha...or ab..."riya roti hui bolti hai...

"Case saaf hai...madam..apki mom...or ranjeet ji ka...kuch relation hai...in dono ke relation me,in dono ke partner hi sbse bdi deewar the...unhe hta diya gya..."inspector kuch sochta hua bolta hai..

"Apka dimak khrab ho gya hai kya...bina tahkeekat ke anwab shnab bole ja rhe ho...jb kuch krna bski nhi hai to kuch bhi bologe kya..."riya ki maa gusse me aag babula hoti hui bolti hai...

"Dekhiye sir...apka tahkeekat krne ka kam hai ap kijiye...lekin bina proof ke ese ulti sidhi bate mt boliye..meri bahan or unka beta ek college me pdhte hai..
Islie thodi bht un logo se jan pahchan hai...meri ma ranjeet uncle ko bhaisahab kahkar bolti hai..."riya ka bda bhai inspector ki baat pr gussa hota hua bolta hai...

"Hmm...thk hai...sboot lekar bhi aayenge...lekin ...mujhe to saaf dikh rha hai...ki daal me kuch kala hai.."inspector bolta hua chala jaata hai...

"bahan ji...unhe bolne dijiye...in logo se kuch nhi hota to...ese hi anab shanab bolenge..ap tnsn mt lijiye"ranjeet ji riya ki maa ko smjhate hue bolte hai...

Inspector ne ranjeet pr najar rkhne ke lie ek aadmi ko khufiya trike se rakh diya...

Ravi riya ke ghr jaata hai ..
Ravi-tum thik ho na...
Riya-haa...m allright...
Ravi-hm dono ke ghr me...ek jaisi ghatna...tumhe kya lgta hai...aisa kyu ho rha hai...
Riya-soch sochkr dimak khrah hai...kabhi kabhi inspector ki baat ko bhi sichti hu...prr

Ravi-kaise baate kr rhi ho...hmare parents aise nhi hai yr...tum aisa soch bhi kaise sakti ho..wo dono ek dusre ko bhai bahan ki tarah mante hai..
Riya-to fir ye sb kya hai...tum hi btao...us latter ka kya mtlb hai...
Ravi-mujhe bhi nhi pta...ek kaam kro...tum apne dad ke room me chek kro...shayad kuch mile...or mai meri mom ke room me...ho sakt hai kuch mil jaye...


"Hmm...its good..."riya ravi ki bato se sahmat hote hue bolti hai...
Ye dono bahut achhe trh se hakeekat krte hai...4din tk pareshan rhte hai...pr unhe kuch nhi milta ...roj dono bat krte hai..discuss krte hai...pr koi faeda nhi...

31january...
Inspector ka dimak hil gya...sr fatne ko ho rha tha...jb usne riya ke ghr pr..uski maa ko mra paya...or uske pas bhi whi note tha....prr bat sirf yhi nhi ruki...udhar ranjeet bhi mr gya...ek hi time...ek hi rat..dono ka katl...or dono ke paas samne note..ab inspector ke pas kahne ko kuch nhi tha....wo note riya ke bhai ko dekar bs chucphap hi chala jaata hai...

Dono ghar me matam ki cheekhe gunj rhi thi....
Ab kispr shak kre..jo vajah katl hone ki dikhai de rhi thi...wo vjh hi nhi rhi...agr ranjeet or riya ki ma ka affair tha...to inka khun kyu hua...kisne kiya...

"Shinde...mamla kuch or hai...jo hmari soch se...abhi koso dur hai...ye khuni...bahut shatir hai...bahut jaada...mene ek aadmi ranjeet pr nigrani ke lie rakha tha...uske bad bhi usne ranjeet ko mar diya...or usi time..mrs vinod ko bhi...akhir chal kya raha hai uske dimak me...chahta kya hai wo..."inspector pareshan hota hua bolta hai...


"Ye sb kya ho rha hai ravi...kon hamre pariwar ke pichhe hath dhokar pda hai.."riya ravi se phon pr bt krti hui bolti hai...


"Pata nhi...mera to dimak kam nhi kr rha hai..kuch samajh ni aarha...hmare sr se papa mmy dono ka saya uth gya..."ravi rota hua bolta hai..

"Ravi himmt se kaam lo...aise rovge to kaise kaam chalega...plss"
"Haa...suno....mujhe ek clue mila hai...."
"Kaisa clue.."
"Tumne shayad note nhi kiya.....wo har 15din me ye khun kr rha hai..wo bahut chalaak hai..usne dono ko ek hi time maraiska mtlb shayad...15 din ka time hai uska...wrna wo ek ko kl bhi mar skta tha...dono ko ek sath kyu."

"Matlb abse 15din bad firse koi..."riya bolti hui rone lgti hai...
"Tum rov mt...kuch sochte hai...abi 15 din me kaafi time hai...so dont wry...tb tk kuch krte hai hm..."ravi riya ko smjhata hua bolta hai...

Inspector ki tahkeekat jaari thi..uska bhi dimak jhannaya hua tha...pr kuch smjh nhi aarha tha..na koi sboot,na finger print...kuch nhi pta...prr ha itna pta tha ki...agla khun 15din bad hoga...inspector abhi 15din ke wait me tha...or sath hi hakeekat bhi chal rhi thi...


5 Din tk dono ke gho pr police pahra deti rhi...lekin 5din bad wo log hat gye...kyuki hun to 15dib bad hona tha...idhar ravi and riya ye bhi dimak ke ghode dauda rhe the...udhar inspector...

6din bad...
"Hello"inspector phon pe bolta hai...
"Sir...mr ranjeet ke ghr unke papa...or vinod ke ghr...unke bete la khun ho gya."phon pr constable inspetor ko suchna deta hai...
"Kyaaaa....."indpector ka muh khula rah gya sunkr...

Inspector jaldi se gadi me bethta hai...or chal deta hai riya ke ghar ki taraf...
"Ye kaise ho sakta hai...khun to 15din bad hone wala tha...."inspector soch sochkr pareshan tha...

Riya'shome...
Riya ka bda bhai...dono per kate hue the...bed pr pda tha..bed ki chadar khun se lathpath...
Or wha pda tha ek note...

"15din bad khun krunga...kyu...ye kisi shastra me likha hai kya...bewkuf nhi hu...jo koi clue dunga...jo hamre bich me aayega...wo mrega...."

"Hello...mr avinash ke office me jaakr...unki puri detail...nikwao...wo kisse milte the...kya krte the...jaldi..."inspector phon krke riya ke bhai ki detail nikalne ki koshish krtwata hai....
"Sir...kya hai ye sb...kyu ho rha hai...hmare haste khelte priwar me bs hm do jne bche hai..hm kaise rhege..."riya roti hui bolti hai.....

"Ve are investigating ..."inspector mayoos sa hota hua bolta hai...

"Bs...ho gya...apne itn kaha or ho gya...yha pura priwar mara gya...or aap kah rhe hai..."riya foot foot kr rone lgti hai....

Udhar yhi haal ravi ka tha...uske family me bs...2bche...ek wo...or ek uska bhai...pura pariwar ujad gya tha...jaaye to kaha jaye...samajh nhi aarha tha...
Dimak buri trh hila hua tha....

Kon hai...kyu or rha hai wo ye sb...
Or not bs har br ek hi baat...
Khair jo hua so hua...ab unhe apne bhaiyo ko bchana tha...
Riya ko apne chhote bhai ko...or ravi ko apne chhote bhai ko...
Lekim bchaaey kisse...ye smjh nhi arha tha...
Dono ko police protection di jaati hai....ghar ke charo or police fail jaati hai....

Inspector wagnare apni trh se puri chhanbeen kr rha tha...lekin kuch bhi pta nhi lg paa rha tha...

"Sir...kya lgta hai...ab to wo affair wali bhi baat jhuti sabit hui"shinde wagmare se puchta hai...

"Shinde...ye koi pariwarik dushmani hai....in dono pariwar ka koi..kattar dushman hai....jisne kasm khai hai...ki sbko maarega...pure priwar ko..ab in dono priwar me... Bs...2 ,2shaks bche hai...inhe kaise bhi bachana hoga...kaise bhi krke.....in dono families me...common kya hai...kuch common hai...jo hme dikhai nhi de rha hai.....pta krna hoga uska...chalo...tum rjveer ke office ek bar or jao...mai riya ke college jaata hu...kuch to pta lge.......


"Good morning class..."achank inspector wagmare class me dakhil hota hua bolta hai...
Sbhi police ko achank aise dekh ghbra jaate hai...

"Kya baat hai sir..."teacher preshan se hote hue bolte hai..."
"Tahkeekat"wagmare itna bolkr students ki taraf dekhta hai...

"Friends....ap sb jaante hi honge ki...apke classmates..riya ...and ravi...dono ke hi gahr me..ajib or grib trh se murders ho rhe hai...so i mujhe in dono ke sbhi dosto se puchtach krni hai....plss co-oprate....."

Kuch der bad...riya ke 5frdns....inspector ke pas waitng rooms me jaate hai...inme 3girls thi...or 2boys...

"Hmm...apna nam btaiye..."

"Mai...ankit....hiii m kunal...mai rashmi...mera nam neha hai...or mai priti..."sbhi apna naam btate hai...

"Hm...tum sbke dimak me....koi bhi bt aarhi bai...in murdsrs ko lekar ..kuch bhi samajh me aarha ho...bindas btao..."

"Sir...mujhe lgta hai ye...ye sb sucide kr rhe hai...",neha bolti hai...

"Hmm...next"inspector uski bachkani baat ko ignore krta hai...

"Sir...ye koi babut bda murdrer hai...jisko...sb kuch pta hai...ki...in priwaro me...kb kon aadmi kya krta hai..."ankit bolta hai...

"Hmmm..."orrr...
"Sir...ye pkka...love matter hi hai...."kuna bolta hai...
"Love matter wo kaise..."

"Sir....riya or ravi best frdns hai.....ho skta hai koi...riya ko like krta ho...or...ravi ki riyabse dosti...use psnd na ho...islie wo...ravi ki family ko targer kr rha hai..."

"Very good....axectly...ye ho sakta hai...or ye bhi ho sakta hai ki...koi ravi se pyar krti ho...wo riya ke priwar ko target kr rhi ho...kyuki use psnd nhi ravi ka riya se milna..."inspector bolta hai...

"Agr aisa sir ....to...agr wo ravi ki lover hai...to jalan ki vjh se riya ke priwar ko mar rhi hai...its ok...but...ravi ke priwar ko kyu......same yhi sawal...riya ko chahne wale pr bhi lagu hota hai...wo riya ke priwar ko kyi maar rha hai..."neha bolto hai....

"Yhi to mujhe bhi samajh nhi aarha..."inspector bolta hai...



"Kyuki...riya ka priwar...kabhi uski love marrieg hone nhi dega.....aisa riya ne btaya tha..."achank pichhe se awaj aati hai...
Jaise hi pichhe mudkr sb dekhte hai...pichhe ravi or riya dono khade the...

"Ohhhhh...tum dono...."

Inspector unke pas jaata hai...
Inspecror-riya...and ravi..tum dono...mujhe un sbke nam btao..jinpr tumhe is matter me shk hai...

"2saal ke andar...mujhe 3ldko ne prpose kiya....unke nam hai...ek ka ashok...ek vikas...or ek anil..."riya bolti hai...

"Mere sath aisa kuch nhi tha..."ravi bolta hai....


Inspector ahsok ,anil or vikas se puchtach krne ke lie..unhe police station le jaata hai....

Wagmare-hmmm....btao...tummse kisne...ravi ki priwar ko maara....
Anil-sir...mene aisa kuch nhi kiya...mai to soch bhi nhi sakta...mai bs riya ko like krta tha...pr jb usne mna kiya to..mai side hat gya...
Vikas-sir...riya ko mene prpose jrur kiya tha...pr bad me mujhe lga ki wo ravi ko like krti hai...riya ne wese bhi mujhe mna kr diya tha...uske bad...meri dusri gf bni...or jb ye ye khun hue...ap tahkekear kr skte hai...mai mere ghr pr hi tha...or ek bar meri gf ke sath...

Ashok-sir...riya ko mai bhut pyar krta tha...lekin mai riya ka bura kabhi nhi chahunga.....mai uske priwae ko...maarna to kya...soch bhi nhi skta aisa...pyar to sbko khushi deta hai sir...jaan nhi leta kisi ki.....

Inspector -hmmm...tahkeekat to sbki hogi...sara kuch smjh ayega tumhe...abhi tum apna adres likhwao...or ghar jao...or kisi ne bhagne ki koshish ki...to ksm se...sidha ancounter krunga......jao...
Teeno uthkr chal dete hai......
Inspector-shinde......nikal in sbki janm kundli...sathi hi ranjeet ke offise or uske frdns dushman sbki...koi bhi chhootna nhi chahiye...


Riya-ravi.....police ko chhodo...pr ab hme kya krna chahiye......
Ravi-bs...apne chhote bhai ka dhyan rkho...or kya kr skte hai....

Krib 1mhina gujar gya...inke ghr se police force bhi hat gyi...1mhind tk...na police ke hath kuch lga...na koi mra...dono ke bhai...ekdm safe tha...kuch had tk...tension km bhi ho gyi thi...
Anil,vikas or ashok ,or inke sath sath inke pancho frnds sbki achhe se jaan padtaal ki gyi...lekin koi sboot hath nhi lga...

1mhine tk...sb thode se relax bhi ho gye the...

Achank....
Ravi ke bhai ki bhia hatya kr di jaati hai...
Hatya is bar ghr me nhi...balki school se aarhe ,ravi ke bhai ko utha liya gya...or tb jungke me le jaalr maara gya...or uske paas bhi same note tha...

Inspector ab buri trh preshan ho jaata hai.......

"Hello...."inspector ke pass phon aata hai...
"Sir...kya apko pta hai...ek kdka...abhishek bhi unka common frdns tha...or wo bhi andar andar riya ko like krta tha...usdin abhishek college aaya nhi tha..."anil inspector se btata hai...

"Uska adress btao..."inspector bolta hai...

"Sir...mere pas nhi hai...aap ravi se lelijiye...."

Inspector ravi ka noumbrr dial krta hai...
Pr swich of ...
Wo sidha ravi ke ghar uska adress lene chal deta hai....
Inspector jb ravi kr ghar pahhcha to andar se lock laga tha...
Inspector ko najane kya hota hai...wo pichhe se...jakar...dewar kudkr andse ghus jaata hai...or upr chal deta hai...

"You love me...you love me not.....you love me...you love me not...you love me...you love me not..."inspector ko ye awaaj aati hai...
Inspector jb anda jaata hai...to hairan ho jaata hai...
Ravi ke kamre me bs riya ki photo lgi thi...or deewaro pr riya likha tha...
Or ravi...bed pr leta...blade se apne hath pr riya likh rha tha.....

"Ohhh myy god...yee..."inspector apne mn me bolta hai...

Inspector-to tum the....tumne apne priwar ko maar daala...
"Jo mere or uske bich me aayega...sb mrege....mere pariwar ko wo psnd nhi thi...bolte the hmse hasiyat wo chhoti hai...to bs..."ravi ek kaatil hansi hasta hua bolta hai...or ekdm flower pot uthakr inspector ke sr me de maarta hai...

Inspectoemr sambhl pata...isse pahle wo bhagne lgta hai....
"Abishek...tu gya sale..."itna bolkar ravi bahar bhag jaata hai.....usne abhishek ka naam inspector ko gumrah krne ke lie bola tha...
Inspectro tb tk bahar aata ravi gayab bo chuka tha...
Wo jaldi se college ki taraf gaadi kr deta hai...sbhishek ka adress niklwane k lie...


Riya...apne bhai ke sath bethi thi...
Achank ravi wha aajata hai.....
Riya-ravi tum...
Ravi-paani ...milega...
Riya-haa...
Riya andar paani lene jaati hai...
Or jaise hi baahr aati hai...uski cheekh nikal jaati hai..
Samne ravi uske bhai ki gardn pr khanjar rkhe khda tha...
Riya-ye sb kya hai ravi...
Ravi-jo tumhare or mere bichme aayega...wo mrega...
Riya-what...tum...tumne...tumne sbko mara...apne pariwar ko...mere pairwar ko...kyu...

Ravi-tumne kaha tha na...ki tumhara priwar tumhari kbhi love mrg hone nhi dega...ab dekho...hm dono sath rhega...ek sath...
Riya-ravi...pagal mt bno..chhodo use...
Ravi-nhi...mrga ye bhi...hahahaha...

Riya-rum psycho ho kya...chhodo use.....leave him....
Ravi-nhi...
Riya-are tum itni si bat nhi smjh ske...itna hahakar mchane ki kya jrurt thi...pyar mai bhi tumse krti hu......mai tumse shadi krungi...pr ise chhod do...ye hmare raste me nhi aayega...plsss

Ravi-tum jhut bol rhi ho...
Riya-nhi...mai bhi tumse pyar krti hu duffer....plss..mere pura priwar gya...kmsekm ise chhod do...mai pkka tumse shadi krungi...i love you

Ravi-sch bol rhi ho na...
Riya apna hath dikhati hui-ye dekho...
"Ravi"riya ke hath pr tatoo bna hua tha...

Ravi-mere naam ka tatoo...schme tum mujhse pyar krti ho...mujhe pta bhi nhi lga...

"Ha Mai bhi tumse pyar krti hu...prr tum...hm sath rhege...jo khoya so khoya...ab tumhe ya apne bhai ko nhi khona chahti...i love you ravi......"
Raiya bhaagkr aati hai...or ekdm ravi ko hug ke kr leti hai...

Ravi-i love you too....
Ravi us khanjar ko fenk deta hai...or uske bhai ko chhod deta hai...
"I love you ravi...riya uske gale se lgkr rone lgti hai..."
Khanakr pichhe pda tha...riya apne bhai ko khanjar uthane k lie ishara krti hai...
Uska bhai uska khanajr uthakr de deta hai...
Or riya pichhe hatkr ekdm ravi ke pet me khanajr paar nikal deti hai......
"Sale psycho...." mai kl hi jaan gyi thi...jb tere ghr gyi thi...tbhi ye tatoo banwaya...tujhe fasans ke lie..."mar ab...kutte kmeene...ise pyar kahte hai kya...pura priwar ujaad diya...."riya rone lgti hai....

Or apne bhai ko lekar jaane lgti hai...achank inspector aajata hai.....
"Mene kuch nhi dekha..."inspector bolkr chal deta hai...

thriller queen ankita ki ek behatarin peshkash. psycho murderer ravi apne pyar ki khatir do pariwaron ko ujad deta hai. waise sach kahun ankita ji ravi wala scene mere dimag mein aa gaya tha kyunki riya pehle hi bolti hai ke uski family kabhi bhi uski love marriage nahi hone degi doosri taraf ravi clear kar deta hai ke jise wo beinteha pyar karne laga hai wo bachpan se hi uske saath hai aur wo koi aur nahi riya hi thi.

riya ne apne dimag ka istemal karke apni aur apne bhai ki jaan bacha li yehi bahut badi baat hai.

aapne bahut achhi kahani likhi hai ankita ji. poori kahani mein mere rongte khade rahe. kab kiska katl ho jaye samajh hi nahi aa rahi thi. best of luck for your story.

 

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thriller queen ankita ki ek behatarin peshkash. psycho murderer ravi apne pyar ki khatir do pariwaron ko ujad deta hai. waise sach kahun ankita ji ravi wala scene mere dimag mein aa gaya tha kyunki riya pehle hi bolti hai ke uski family kabhi bhi uski love marriage nahi hone degi doosri taraf ravi clear kar deta hai ke jise wo beinteha pyar karne laga hai wo bachpan se hi uske saath hai aur wo koi aur nahi riya hi thi.

riya ne apne dimag ka istemal karke apni aur apne bhai ki jaan bacha li yehi bahut badi baat hai.

aapne bahut achhi kahani likhi hai ankita ji. poori kahani mein mere rongte khade rahe. kab kiska katl ho jaye samajh hi nahi aa rahi thi. best of luck for your story.

Thanks maniik ji...ye story mene bs 1ghnte me sochkr typ ki thi...jesi iski theme thi...mai ise esa bna skti thi ki kisi ko smjh nhi aata ki ho kya rha hai...bht jada suspanse create krti...filfal isme suspanse na ke brabar hai...is story ko delet krne ke lie mene kai admins se baat ki...pr unhone bola ki ab delet nhi hogi..agr delet ho jati to ise achhi banakr chahe normal thread pr hi post krti...or ykeen mano ye kahani meri sb kahaniyo me best kahani hoti....yha iska satyanash ho gya....sachme...mai is kahani se bahut jada nakhush hu