Fantasy AJNABEE (completed)

[Swaraj]

Itni achhi story itni jldi khtm krdi

Pehli story thi fantasy based
Ab part 2 jald ayegi

 

[Swaraj]

Lagta hai story ka end next part start karne ke chakkar me jaldi se kar diya.
Story ko kuch episodes tak aur chalaya ja sakta tha.
Khair waiting 4 next part

Jaisa maine kaha kuch had tak aap log sahi ho.
Story fantasy based hai aur meri pehli fantasy based hai
Ise ek experiment ke tour par likh raha tha bro
Aap sab ka response ke upar part 2 jald shuru karunga
Meri doosri story "beauty and the beast"ko please support kijiye

 

[Swaraj]

Nice end bro aapne bhot hi achi likhi

Thanks a lot bro

 

[Swaraj]

bahut khoob swaraj bhai............. bemisal...... lekin last chapter me ghatnakram kuchh jyada teji se chala........ isliye the end padhkar jhatka sa laga

khair.......... story lay me bandhi hui hi poori ho to achchhi lagti hai..... jabardasti lambi kheenchne me boring ho jati hai

ab to fantassy me bhi perfection dikha hi diya apne......

badla ka 3rd sequel .... yash aur kajal ki kahani..... apke chir-parichit andaj me badhiya shuru hui hai.....

best of luck

Aap mere sabse purane readers me se ek ho bro
Meri story badla ko sabse pehle aapne pasand kiya tha
Khair the story sirf ek experiment ke tour par likh raha tha
Kyunki pata nahi tha ki itne log pasand karenge
Response bohut acha hai
Part 2 aur dhamakedar hogi
Beauty and the beast ko pasand karne ke liye thanks bro
Story bohut intense hai
Saath rahiye

 

[Rohan Rathore]

Thanks bro.kaisi lagi zaroor batana

Ji bilkul bhai

 

[tpk]

waiting

 

[Assassin]

"akele akele kya kar raha hai bhaiya??"ragini ne terrace par aakar poochha

"Bas tahal raha tha"aakash bola

"Darr nahi lag raha hai tujhe??pehle to andhere se darta tha"ragini boli

"Tujhe darr lagta hai ragini??"aakash ne poochha

"Haan andhere se to sabko dar lagta hai"ragini boli

"Aaj se tujhe kam se kam andhere se darne ki zaroorat nahi hai ragini"aakash ne muskurate hue bola

"Kyun ??tu bada gama pahalwan hai kya???"ragini ne kamar par haath rakhkar kaha

Ye sunkar aakash zor zor se hasne laga

"Gama pehelwan to nahi lekin andhere ka raj....mera matlab andhere se tujhe bacha sakta hoon"aakash bola

"Ok jaldi neeche a warna mummy daant lagayegi"ragini boli aur daudkar neeche chali gayi

Aakash bhi sone chala gaya
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Ragini jogging ke liye jab park gayi to hairan reh gayi
Aakash jogging kiye ja raha tha aur pasine se nahaya hua tha

"Tu??aur jogging??Sapna no nahi dekh rahi hoon??"ragini boli

"Kyun na karu??"aakash apna haath strech karte hue bola

"Are wo baat nahi tu to kabhi in sab me rehta hi nahi tha na"ragini

"There's always first time"aakash ne aankh marte hue fir duadne laga
Ragini bhi peeche peecha ho li

"Baap re kitna bhagta hai,waise jahan tu tha wahan bhi aise hi jogging karta tha kya??isse mujhe yaad aaya bhaiyya.tune abhi tak bataya nahi kahan tha tu itne din??"ragini ne poochha

Aakash kuch batane ja hi raha tha ki usne dekha ki ek bheed ekattha ho gayi hai ek jagah par
Dono bhai behen wahan gaye

"Kya hua bhai sahab??"aakash ne poochha

"Dekho na ek saamp waha dikh gaya ,park me aise saampo ka paana achi baat nahi hai na ??
Kal hi society ke secretary ko bolkar iske baare me kuch kehna padega"aakash ke paas khada aadmi bola

"Jab tak hum unhen pareshan nahi karenge,ye aapko pareshan nahi karega"bol aakash ne zameen me jhukte hi jaise apne haath zameen par sparsh kiye,ek saamp waha se tezi se bhag gaya

"Are ye to wahi saamp hai"wahi aadmi bola

"Insano ne koun si jagah khali rakhi hai bhai sahab??insano ke liye jagah kam pad jaati hai ye to fir bhi bechare jeev hai"bol aakash ragini ko lekar aage badh gaya

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Jaise hi aakash aur ragini ghar aaye.ghar me sab chupchap mile

"Papa a gaye hai tour se"ragini ne dheere se bola
Aur dono bhai behen breakfast karne jaise hi baithe saamne amit malhotra paper par aankhen gadaye hue mile

"Ab tabiyat kaisi hai??"mr malhotra ne paper se aankhen bina hataye poocha

"Bas thik hoon"aakash bola

"Aaj tumhare birthday par hi loss karwa kar aaya hoon, Congratulations"mr malhotra ne paper table par rakhte hue kaha

"Isme bhaiyya ka kya dosh ki aapke shares ludak gaye??? malhotra industries ke shares se bhaiyya ka kya lena dena papa??"ragini boli

"Jab se usne janm liya tabse hi to lena dena shuru ho gaya tha"mr malhotra bole

"Malhotra shares kaise loss kar sakti hai,aadhe ghante pehle hi to 1.25 points upar aayi"aakash bola

"KYA??"mr malhotra aur ragini dono hairan hokar muh khol kar bole

Mr malhotra ne apna mobile nikala jhat se kuch fatafat dabaya aur....

"Y y ye to sach hai,lekin tumhe kaise....tum kab se...."mr malhotra ko apne share ke badhne par jitni hairani nahi ho rahi thi
Apne bete ko dekh usse zyada ho rahi thi

"Happy birthday beta"mrs malhota ne apne bete ke liye breakfast me hi duniya bhar ke pakwan se plate bhar diya

"Haan haan khilao is nalayak ko,hun ek tukka lag gaya to apne aap ko tees maar khan mat samajh lena"bol mr malhotra dining table se uthakar chale gaye

"Papa ki baaton ka bura na manna beta,unki zaban aisi hai,dil ke bohut ache hai"mrs malhotra boli

Aakash muskurate hue apne maa ke gale lag gaya

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GANDEN MONASTERY TIBBET
"Sensei sensei"ek boudh bhikshu daud kar aaya

Ek boodha boudh bhikshu pahadiyon ko dekh raha tha usi ke paas chillate hue aaya boudh bhikshu

"Wo ...wo...."boudh bhikshu bola

"Pata hai mujhe"vridh boudh bhikshu bola

"Lekin....lekin ye galat hai sensei"boudh bhikshu bola

"Aur jo tum logo ne 18 saal pehle kiya wo kahan tak sahi tha??abhi agar use uski priyasi nahi mili to poori duniya andhere me doob jayegi,koi suraj nahi uthega"vriddh bola
Aur aasman ki aur dekhne laga

Ye story abhi padhni shuru ki he
Thodi bohot common starting ke baad kuch naya bhi padhne ko mil raha he fantasy me, keep writing

 

[Assassin]

"akele akele kya kar raha hai bhaiya??"ragini ne terrace par aakar poochha

"Bas tahal raha tha"aakash bola

"Darr nahi lag raha hai tujhe??pehle to andhere se darta tha"ragini boli

"Tujhe darr lagta hai ragini??"aakash ne poochha

"Haan andhere se to sabko dar lagta hai"ragini boli

"Aaj se tujhe kam se kam andhere se darne ki zaroorat nahi hai ragini"aakash ne muskurate hue bola

"Kyun ??tu bada gama pahalwan hai kya???"ragini ne kamar par haath rakhkar kaha

Ye sunkar aakash zor zor se hasne laga

"Gama pehelwan to nahi lekin andhere ka raj....mera matlab andhere se tujhe bacha sakta hoon"aakash bola

"Ok jaldi neeche a warna mummy daant lagayegi"ragini boli aur daudkar neeche chali gayi

Aakash bhi sone chala gaya
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Ragini jogging ke liye jab park gayi to hairan reh gayi
Aakash jogging kiye ja raha tha aur pasine se nahaya hua tha

"Tu??aur jogging??Sapna no nahi dekh rahi hoon??"ragini boli

"Kyun na karu??"aakash apna haath strech karte hue bola

"Are wo baat nahi tu to kabhi in sab me rehta hi nahi tha na"ragini

"There's always first time"aakash ne aankh marte hue fir duadne laga
Ragini bhi peeche peecha ho li

"Baap re kitna bhagta hai,waise jahan tu tha wahan bhi aise hi jogging karta tha kya??isse mujhe yaad aaya bhaiyya.tune abhi tak bataya nahi kahan tha tu itne din??"ragini ne poochha

Aakash kuch batane ja hi raha tha ki usne dekha ki ek bheed ekattha ho gayi hai ek jagah par
Dono bhai behen wahan gaye

"Kya hua bhai sahab??"aakash ne poochha

"Dekho na ek saamp waha dikh gaya ,park me aise saampo ka paana achi baat nahi hai na ??
Kal hi society ke secretary ko bolkar iske baare me kuch kehna padega"aakash ke paas khada aadmi bola

"Jab tak hum unhen pareshan nahi karenge,ye aapko pareshan nahi karega"bol aakash ne zameen me jhukte hi jaise apne haath zameen par sparsh kiye,ek saamp waha se tezi se bhag gaya

"Are ye to wahi saamp hai"wahi aadmi bola

"Insano ne koun si jagah khali rakhi hai bhai sahab??insano ke liye jagah kam pad jaati hai ye to fir bhi bechare jeev hai"bol aakash ragini ko lekar aage badh gaya

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Jaise hi aakash aur ragini ghar aaye.ghar me sab chupchap mile

"Papa a gaye hai tour se"ragini ne dheere se bola
Aur dono bhai behen breakfast karne jaise hi baithe saamne amit malhotra paper par aankhen gadaye hue mile

"Ab tabiyat kaisi hai??"mr malhotra ne paper se aankhen bina hataye poocha

"Bas thik hoon"aakash bola

"Aaj tumhare birthday par hi loss karwa kar aaya hoon, Congratulations"mr malhotra ne paper table par rakhte hue kaha

"Isme bhaiyya ka kya dosh ki aapke shares ludak gaye??? malhotra industries ke shares se bhaiyya ka kya lena dena papa??"ragini boli

"Jab se usne janm liya tabse hi to lena dena shuru ho gaya tha"mr malhotra bole

"Malhotra shares kaise loss kar sakti hai,aadhe ghante pehle hi to 1.25 points upar aayi"aakash bola

"KYA??"mr malhotra aur ragini dono hairan hokar muh khol kar bole

Mr malhotra ne apna mobile nikala jhat se kuch fatafat dabaya aur....

"Y y ye to sach hai,lekin tumhe kaise....tum kab se...."mr malhotra ko apne share ke badhne par jitni hairani nahi ho rahi thi
Apne bete ko dekh usse zyada ho rahi thi

"Happy birthday beta"mrs malhota ne apne bete ke liye breakfast me hi duniya bhar ke pakwan se plate bhar diya

"Haan haan khilao is nalayak ko,hun ek tukka lag gaya to apne aap ko tees maar khan mat samajh lena"bol mr malhotra dining table se uthakar chale gaye

"Papa ki baaton ka bura na manna beta,unki zaban aisi hai,dil ke bohut ache hai"mrs malhotra boli

Aakash muskurate hue apne maa ke gale lag gaya

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GANDEN MONASTERY TIBBET
"Sensei sensei"ek boudh bhikshu daud kar aaya

Ek boodha boudh bhikshu pahadiyon ko dekh raha tha usi ke paas chillate hue aaya boudh bhikshu

"Wo ...wo...."boudh bhikshu bola

"Pata hai mujhe"vridh boudh bhikshu bola

"Lekin....lekin ye galat hai sensei"boudh bhikshu bola

"Aur jo tum logo ne 18 saal pehle kiya wo kahan tak sahi tha??abhi agar use uski priyasi nahi mili to poori duniya andhere me doob jayegi,koi suraj nahi uthega"vriddh bola
Aur aasman ki aur dekhne laga

Ye story abhi padhni shuru ki he
Thodi bohot common starting ke baad kuch naya bhi padhne ko mil raha he fantasy me, keep writing

 

[Swaraj]

Ye story abhi padhni shuru ki he
Thodi bohot common starting ke baad kuch naya bhi padhne ko mil raha he fantasy me, keep writing

Thanks a lot bro
Erotic,adultry aur sex based story ke bheed me meri koshish rehti hai ki khud ko challenge karke naya karun
Meri pehli fantasy story hai.koi galti ho to nazar andaz kar dijiyega

 

[Suryaa]

Sache mi aapki story bhote aachi and ha starting mi baaki fantasy kahniyo ki tarah thi....par aagi pde kar dikha to ...kaafi alag bhi thi
eski second part ka wait rahiga
and
mai aapsi aur yaha story pdne waalo si kahana chuga ki meri bhi kuch stories es website par chle rahi hi
me bhai ki tarah expert to nahi hu....par apni taraf si try kar raha hu...so aap sabhi vo stories bhi jarur pdna aur apni comment karna na bhulna
aur jaha mujhe aur dhyan dena chahiye vo bhi batana
My threads are
1. Naam ek Rupe Anek
2. Aaladin- Naam to suna hoga
3. Boss