Bohot bohot dhanyawad.........Kya re... just writers logis ko bas ek naina naam hi milta hai kya kirdaar ke liye
BTW writer sahab.... aap kya sochte hai ki ye ek naina naam ki ek kirdaar story mein aane se mujhse bach jayenge ye kirdaar logis.... nahi... haragiz nahi
Oo to ye laalchi story character isliye nahi aayi itne din thanks kehne ke liye.... kyunki wo soch rahi hogi ki kya pata thanks ke sath sath kahi paise waise dene na par jaaye rahul ko.... kitni kanjus aurat hai ye...
Kamini mithayi ka packet dekhte hi aise jhapata maari uspe jaise baaj khargosh pe.... bhukkad kahi ki
ye story wali naina kyun kanjus hai iska saboot....... mithayi milne baad hi dinner pe invite ki..... Warna thanks bolne ke alawa ek dhela bhi na kharch karti wo
bichara hero apne malik ke paiso se bana mithayi de diya, aise to dukan ka than than gopal ho jana hai...
Khair chhodo.... jiski jo marzi kare.... Mujhe kya
Shaandar update, shaandar lekhni shaandar shabdon ka chayan aur sath hi dilkash kirdaaro ki bhumika bhi...
Let's see what happens next
Brilliant update with awesome writing skills
Ab se us kirdaar naina avasthi ki durgati suru
nice one.... the story is rising like a high tide in the sea....Updated 16
07:30 pm rahul taiyar huya …….saj dhas ke wo jagan laal se milne gaya ………
Jagan laal…." Are rahul…..tip top ho ke kaha ko nikle….."
Rahul apni khushi daba ke bola….." Wo tau me dinner pe jaa raha hoon….."
Jagal lal."…..par kaha kiske saath…."
Rahul……." Wo….wo accident wali aurat aaj store pe aayi thi mujhe shukriya ada ki aur dinner pe bulaya he….."
Jagan laal kuch soch ke bola….."achcha…..thik he zyada der mat karna…..10 baje ke baat gate band hota he pata he na….."
Rahul….." Ji me jaldi aa jaunga….tau wo meine store se kuch sweet liye he uska hisab mere tankha me se kat lena…."
Jagan laal…."are wo sab chhodo…..tum apna dhyaan rakhna…."
Rahul…..' ji ji……..me ata hoon…."
Rahul apni cycle nikala aur padal marte huye city ki bhidh ki gali se niklte huye thik 8 baje naina ki address pe phohoch gaya …….
Naina ki ghar ek colony me thi ……rahul khubsurat garden ko nihaarte huye calling bell bajaya …..man me socha naina gardening ka sock rakhti he isliye itni sundar tarike se cutting ki he podho ka…….
Darwaza khula…….rahul ek pal ke liye jhep gaya…..saamne naina ki pati inspector shorts aur baniyan khade the ….
Rahul kuch bolna chah raha tha lekin bol nehi paa raha tha…..inspector bhi rahul ko upar se niche tak dekha aur aisa pratit kiya jeise use kuch yaad aaya …..
Inspector ……" Oh Rahul …. Rahul right"
Rahul ….." Ji sir me rahul hoon….."
Inspector……." Wo bohot din baad dekh raha hoon isliye minde se nikal gaya ……aao aao…."
Inspector ne use andar aane ki jagah di aur rahul andar chal gaya …..rahul ghar ki sundarta ko dekh ke bola….."ghar kafi sundar he sir …."
Inspector……" Haa….naina ko sajane ka kaam bohot achcha lagta he….. yehi karti rehti he dinbhar ….." Naina …..naina….dekh zara koun aaya he"
Naina ek kamre se bahar aayi…..wo ek blue color ki gown pehni hui thi aur thori makeup jisse uski bhara huya jism aur zyada karigari lag rahi thi…..
Naina muskurai….." Oh rahul tum aa gaye….. hum dono tumhara hi intezar kar rahe the……"
Naina ne apne pati ko kuch iasara ki ….uska matlab tha ki " kuch pehen ke aao "inspector samajh gaya aur kamre me jaa ke dhang ke kampre pehnne laga……
Naina….." Aao rahul baitho …..yehi he humara chota sa asiyana…."
Rahul sofe pe baithne se pehle naina ko sweets ki package de ke bola….." Ji mujhe kuch samjh nehi aa raha tha ki kisi ke ghar kya le ke jaate he to bas dubara sweets hi le aaya…."
Naina muskurai….." Tum bhi na…..aisa koi rule he kya kisi ke ghar jaao to kuch leke hi jana padega…..tum baithon na…" Aur rahul ke haath se sweets le li unse …..
Inspector bhi drawing room me aa gaya ….teeno mil ke saay ke saath baatein ki……jab tak naine ne dinner nehi lagayi…….
Naina….." Rahul …. mujhe tumhari pasand nehi pata thi….to nonvage aur vage dono banaya he……pata nehi keisa banaya he……"
Rahul….." Mujhe swad ka kuch pata nehi he …..jo mile kha leta hoon…"
Inspector…." Rahul tum vage ho ya non vage…"
Rahul….." Me non vage hoon par me jis store pe kaam karta hoon…..wo log pure vegetarian he…."
Naina….." To tumhe to mushkil hogi khane me…"
Rahul……" Khas nehi…..wo log vegetarian khana bhi bohot achcha banante he….aur jo karmsari he wo log alag se mej me khana bana ke khate he to unke saath kabhi kabhi non vage khana kha leta hoon"
Naina sabke plate me khana padoch ke boli….." Rahul suru karo "
Rahul bohot sharma raha tha ….. inspector aur naina uspe haas rahe the aur keh rahe the…"apna hi ghar samjho sharmao mat……"
Dinner ke baad naina ne rahul ko drawing room me bitha ke bedroom me gayi …rahul intezar kar raha tha ki naina aa ke uske samane baith ke baatein karenge aur wo apni dil ki khwahish jo naina ki baatein karte huye khubsurat aakhon me doobne ka mar karta he …..
Rahul bekarar tha …. tabhi bedroom se kuch girne ki awaaz aayi … Rahul ke kaan khargosh ki tarah khade ho gaye ……bedroom ki taraf nazar gaya ….darwaza adha khula tha…..phir se kuch girne ki awaaz aayi…..rahul anushashit tha lekin khud ko rok nehi paya aur dhime kadmon se bedroom ki darwaze jhank ke dekha to uska gala sukh gaya nazara dekh ke…..
Andar kamre me bicho bich inspector ne apni patni naina ki jabre ko kas ke dabay gusse me par dhimi swar me bol rahe the…."bola tha …ise dinner pe mat bulao…..par tune nehi suna…"
Naina dard se tadap rahi thi……binti kar rahi thi apni pati se …..lekin uske haath se apne aapko bacha nehi paa rahi thi….
Rahul ke mathe pe pasina aane laga ……wo kuch pal andar jhakta raha …..inspector ne naina ko bed pe dhakka de ke bapach mud ke room se aane laga to rahul jhat se tezz kadmo me drawing room me aa ke baith gaya …..
Rahul ne dekha dono pati patni ek saath drawing room me aa rahe the ….aur chehre me bhao aise jeise dono pati patni saat janmo ka bandhani ho ……
Dono rahul ke saamne baith gaye ….rahul ki dimaag me kayi baatein ulaj raha tha….wo bisheshta ikhtiyar nehi kar paa raha tha ……aur use khatre ka mahol pratit huya …usne jitna jald ho sake nikalna hi behtar samjha……
Rahul….." Ji mujhe ab chalna chahiye ….9:30 baj gaye ….store ka malik 10 baje gate pe tala laga dete he …."
Inspector…." Are to kud ke gate phand lena…abhi abhi to dinner kiya he tumne ….thori der aram karo….kha ke aise hi chalna phirna thik nehi he sehet ke liye buri he"
Rahul……" Ji ji…meri adat he…..ab me chalta hoon ji…."
Naina muskurai……" hum to chah rahe the ki tumse aur thori baatein kar ke hum tumhare bare me jaan lenge ….kyu ji"
Inspector….." Haa …. Hum yehi chah rahe the…..lekin ab kar bhi kya sakte he …tumhari bhi mazboori he……waise chaho to humare ghar ruk sakte ho…."
Rahul ke man me wo yaad aaya jo abhi thori der pehle ek pehlu se inspector ki gusse bhari aankhe naina ko khouf dikha raha tha aur rahul khud bhi ek pal ke liye khoufzada ho gaye the…….
Rahul…." Nehi nehi…kaal subah bohot kaam bhi he Store me ….wo saman bobot aane wala he na….gudam me saaman rakhna hoga……milenge kisi din….dinner ke liye shukriya …"
Rahul shighrata me jane ke liye uth khade huye aur bahar nilkalne ki darwaze tak jaane laga …….naina uske piche piche gayi……..
Rahul darwaza khol ke bahar kuch kadam chal gaya aur boundary ka gate kholte waqt darwaze ki taraf dekha ….naina darwaze pe khadi thi …..uske honthon pe muskaan thi…..lekin aakho me kuch aur baat thi jeise do mukhi sanp ki chal abhipray……….
Rahul ek pal ke theher gaya kadam ruk gaye aur dil dhadak uthe dugni raftar se ….man keh raha tha kya ye aakhri mulakad hoga naina se ……dil peas sa gaya lekin rahul asli duniya me bapach aate huye naina ko haath hila ke bye kiya aur apni cycle uthai aur bina piche mude padel maarne laga…..rahul ko ehsaas hua jeise naina abhi bhi darwaze pe ruk ke use dekh rahi he jate huye……..
Bohot bohot shukriya dost..........nice one.... the story is rising like a high tide in the sea....
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