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Yes!! Isliye iss story me mene system introduce kiya. It will keep things interesting. ( ꈍᴗꈍ)ek hi genre pe likhne ke baad creativity khatm ho jaati hain... aur likhna bhi ubau ho jata hain wahee saree cheeje imagine karte hue....
Chalo 1 update kam kar lo bhai. 9 de doWelcome to the thread bhai. (◍•ᴗ•◍)❤
Ek minute...
Kya kaha?
Daily 10 update? Arrr yamraaj bhai jaan hi maang lo... ಥ‿ಥ
Thanks dude! Yes! System ki khud ki past story hai aur secrets hai jo samay aane par khulenge. And yes, system ka behaviour bhi change hoega kahani aage badhte badhte. Rahi baat Veer ke iq ki toh bro wo bhi dheere dheere badhega. Abhi aap jaante hi ho ki Veer kesa tha pehle, usse ekdum se ye sab mila hai. Ek dum se toh wo change nahi sakta na?! Uski personality zaroor badlegi aur wo nidar aur badass banega but harr ek experience lene ke baad. Aise achaanak se nahi.Very good concept, actually one of my favourite, lekin brother don't give way to much of ego to the system. Aisa lagta hai jaise koi senior apne junior ko sikha rha hai, aur veer aisa inshaan hai jo koi chhota sa bachcha hai jiski iq level kisi chhote bachche jaisi hai. Please look at this, banki lajawab kahani hai. Keep it up
Dhanyavaad odin bhai! (◍•ᴗ•◍)Aaj ke update mein hume nidhi ki baare mein jan ne ko mila jo ek divorce hai aur ek acche man ki aurat hai jo apne problems hone ke bawjud veer ke liye itna kuch kiya fir jab woh veer ke ghar gayi toh usko asliyat ka pata chala fir hame kavya ka perspective bhi dikhaya gaya aur most importantly veer ko apne aandar aayi huyi system se baat karne ka dikhne ko mila fir usko rules and regulations bataya jaise usko apne body status badhane ke liye kya karna padega aur last mein usko pahla mission bhi mil gaya hai ab dekhna hai veer aam aadmi rahta hai ya badsaha ban pata hai...
Thanks bro! System is different from AI. AI doesn't have any feelings. And you can see system showing signs of feelingsAwesome Update
Kyaa Veer ke andar koi AI ghuss gaya hai jo uski madad kar rha hai. Par woh ghusha kab aur kaise.
Dekhte hai Veer iss system ki madad se apni kismat badal paata hai yaa jaisa hai waisa hi reh jayegaa
Daily updates nahi aaenge bro.Wah bhai kya update likhe ho good update
Ab bass thi bta do ki weak me kis - kis
Din update ayega
Arre bhai lagta hai aapko favourability ka concept samajh nahi aaya.Mast update bhai ab aage nidhi mam ko 90 ya 100 na mil jaye dekhte hai aage
Wow mere badshah
ya mere vohem
Mai ne tv pe ak seriel dekhi he
indrajit
uski yad dila di
Fabulous update.....
Bhai kahani padhke.. jaise Hollywood film dekh raha hoon yesa lag rahahai....bahot badhiya socha apne sabse alag story ...wait for next update
Aalu bhai ka lovely review (。♡‿♡。)brijesh kee mati shuruat se hi bhrast thee ya phir uski nayee patni ne aake uska yeh haal kiya pata nahin... lekin itna gira hua insan jisse apne khoon tak kee parwah na hain akhir beta hain wo uska jo zindagi aur maut se joojh raha hain kya itni bhi insaniyat na bachi hain uske andar... akhir jaan tak chali jaye wo bhi parwah na hain usse... cheeh yeh insan ke naam pe bhi kalank hain... aisa insan kisi se bhi kaise pyar kar shakta hain.. shivaya vasna ke uske andar kuchh bhi na hain chahe paiso kee vasna ho ya sareer kee vasna...
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yeh kavya kee deemag ghaas charne gayee hain kya... isse pehle call nahin kiya phir achanak kyun... paglait isse pehle wo ghar se bahar bhi na nikala gaya tha,,, thora toh sochna chahiye tha kee kaisi halat mein wo ghar se gaya hain agar kisi mushibat mein ho toh... saale matlabi log...
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yeh sala system kaun hain be... aur isko activate kisne kiya,,, isne akhir isse hi kyun chuna... kya isse bebas majloo log ko chunna pasand hain... kahan se aayi/aaya hain wo... aur bhala usse veer kee madad kar ke kya fayda... aaj se pehle wo kabhi iske pass kyun nahin aayee... duniya pe raaz... isse pehle kahan thee wo...
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jahir hain veer ke man mein yeh saare sawal chal rahe honge...../// kisi bahri duniya se aaye hain yeh lekin idhar pahunchi kaise... kya yeh koi alien hai ya AI... isne akhir take over kaise kiya... aur kya yeh marta hua insan ko bacha shakti hain... akhir swansh chhot rahi thee veer kee toh phir jinda kaise hua... kya us system kee shakti host pe depend karti hain jitna powerful host utni jyada takatwar yeh... toh kya usne isse pehle kisi aur bhi insan ko chuna tha.. toh kitne samay se hain yeh dharti pe... kya veer bhi kabhi uske saath dharti se bahar jayega..
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abhi system ko hum samjh nahin paye hain shayad badhte update ke saath uski chhamtaye aur karya shaili pata chalti jayegi... usne kahan ghamand na krna warna patan hoga... jisse jahir hain wo ek nekdil jo bhi hain wo hain... nidhi ek alag hi dukh mein zindagi jee rahi hain phir bhi usne insaniyat dikhte hue madad kee... shayad veer apni naaye payee hui chhamta se uski madad kar sake uski khushiyan wapas paane mein... pehli kamai hogi nidhi mam kee madad kar ke.. lekin points kee sankhaya nahin batayee... 1 saal samay kaafi lamba hain dekhte hain tab tak yeh khud ko kitna badal pata hain aur kitno kee madad kar pata hain... ..
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well excited to see how system helps him improve for the better... and to stand up for himself against those who always humiliated him... loved this update...