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Daastan-ae-aladdin

Episode ~ 1​

Location: Mumbai Central Jail

Jailor- Sabhi kaideyo ko pahadi ki taraf bhejo aaj khudae ka kaam vaha karna hai

Constable- Ji sahaib abhi bhej te hai

Y kah kr Constable jailor k cabin se bahar nikale kr kaidiyo k cells ki taraf chal diya aur vaha ja kr bola

Constable- Ari tum sabhi meri baate dhyaan se suno.....aaj tum logo ko pahadi ki taraf jana hai.....aaj khudae vaho hoge.....ab jalde jalde chalo varna jailor sahaib bhout ghusa honge

Y sune kr sabhi kaide auzar lekr pahadi ki taraf chl diye aur phire pathar thodnai lage

Unhai uhi kaam karti huvi lag bhag 3-4 ghante ho chuke the......es garmi mai itna kaam kr sabhi thak gae the par vo khuch kah nahi sakte the kyuki vo yaha kaide the aur apne kiye ki saza kate rahi thi.....pr en kideyo pr us upar waali ko thodi daya aa gae aur usnai lunch break kr diya.....lunch break hote hi sabhi kaide ek ek kr lunch karne ki leyi jane lage pr ek ladka bina ruke lagatar pathar thodta raha jesi dekh kr constable ko thoda ajeb laga to usnai kaha

Constable- Ari o ladke lunch ho gaya ha thujhe ghante sunae nahi de kya

Par us ladke nai koe jawab nahi diya

Constable- oh hero mai thuje se baat kr raha hu...sunae nahi deta hai kya

Par vo ladka khamos raha aur bs pathar thodnai mai laga raha

Es bar constable ko ghusa aa gaya aur vo us ladke k pass ja kr jor se bola

Constable- Thujhe sunae nahi deta ....mai kb se thujhe awaaz laga raha hu.....bahra hai kya

Es baar vo ladka bola

Ladka- Nahi ....na to mai bahra hu aur na bhuka

Constable- Dekh y haikde apne pass rakh.....lunch ho gaya hai....ja kr khana kha le....varna saam tk es dhup mai bhuke pet teri haikde bhi en pathro ke tarah tute jae ge

Constable ki es bate ko ansuna kr te huvi vo ladka pathar thodta raha...jesi dekh kr us constable ko ghusa aa gaya aur vo bola

Constable- Ja mar mujhe kya

y kah kr vo constable vaha se chala gaya

aur vo ladka lagatar pathar thodta gaya...... phire dhire dhire saari kaide wapas kaam pr lag gae.....din dhal gaya aur raat ho gae
phire sabhi kaideyo k sath vo ladka wapas apne cells mai chla gaya....tabhi un mai se ek kaide us ladke k pass aakr bola

Kaide- Bhai aap ka koe warte hai

Ladka- Nahi....kyu

Kaide- To aapne subh khana kyu nahi khaya

Ladka- Kyuki mujhe bhuk nahi hai

Kaide- Bhuk to sb ko lagte hai chahi vo ensan ho ya janwar khana to sb khate hai

Ladka- Nahi sab nahi

Kaide- Mtlb?

Ladka- Murda log kabhi khana nahi khate

Kaide- pr aap to zinda ho....dekho saas bhi le rahi ho

Ladka(hse kr)- ha bs saas he le rahai hi

Y bate sune kr vo kaide us ladke ki aakho mai dekh nai laga

y dekh kr us ladke ko hirane hoe aur vo bola

Ladka- Kya dekh raha hai

Kaide- dard....jo aapke dil me hai

es bate pr vo ladka khamos raha tabhi vo kaide bola

Kaide- Bhai....mai nahi janta aap ko y dard kise mila....aur apne esi apne dil mai kyu daba kr rakha hai.....pr meri maa kahte
hai....ki dard batnai se kam hota hai....to aap mujhe bataeyi ki aakhir kya huva jes ki karn aap ki y halate ho gae

Ladka(angaro bhari aakho se)- Janta hu pr....mai nahi chahta ki y dard kam ho

Use ladke ki aakho ki angare dekh kr vo kaide dar jata hi aur kahata hai

Kaide- tke hai bhai...agar aap nahi chahte to mate bataeyi.....pr aap kam se kam khana to kha legeyi....mujhe apna doste samje legeyi

Y bate sune kr us ladke ki aakho mai dard utar aaya aur vo bola

Ladka- mai koe rishta nahi banana chahta kyuki ek baar pahle bhi mai sb khuch kho chuka hu.....ab dobara kise ko nahi khona
chahta hu

Us ladke ki aakho ke dard ko us kaide tk pahochani mai der nahi lagi....aur vo kaide bol pada

Kaide- Tke hai bhai agr aap koe naya rishta nahi banana chate to na banae kam se kam khana to kha legeyi......plzz es bar na mte kahana

Ladka- Tke hai...vesi tumhara kya naam hai

Kaide- Kabir singh.....pr es nachiz koghar wali pyaar se kabir kah kr bulate hai...bake meri doste to mujhe pyaar se kuta kamina
chutiya khuch bhi kah kr bula lete hai....vesi aapka kya naam hai

Ladka- Ali - Naam mai kya rakha hai

Y kah kr dono canteen mai chlai gae
Canteen mai pahoch kr kabir nai do thaliyo mai khana liya aur Ali ke pass aa gaya aur khana khanai laga usnai khana khate hue ali se bate karne ki kosis ke pr ali khamos raha ...jesai dekh kr kabir bhi chup chaap apna khana khanai laga

en dono k khuch na bolnai se jaha y dono bethai the vaha to sanata tha pr enk pass mai bethae 2 kaide bate kr rahai the

Kaide 1- Lukha bhai lagta hai aapko jail ka khana bhoute pasande aa gaya

Lukha(hs kr)- Nahi Aslam bhai ase to koe bate nahi hai

Aslam(mazak mai)- ase hi bate hai lukha bhai....tabhi to aap ander- bahar kar rahi ho....har 2-3 hafto se jail mai aa jate ho phire 2-3 bade jamanate kara kr bahar chlae jate ho

Lukha(gahre saas lete huvi)- Kya kare jab bahar hote hai to andar ke yaade aate hai......aur jab andar hote hai to bahar ke

Aslam- Vesi es bar aapnai kya kiya

Lukha(nirash hote huvi)- Kiya to khuch nahi....yahi to rona hai

Aslam- Mtlb? mai khuch samjha nahi

Lukha- Ari karnai hi wala tha ki tabhi mamla begade gaya

Aslam(aashchray se)- Mtlb?

Lukha- Mtlb tumhai vo news batae ge....udar dekh tv mai..(constable se)- abe oh constable awwaj tez kr

Constable(dar se)- karta hu sahaib

Y kah kr constable nai tv ki awaaz tez kar de jesh pr ek news reporter news de raha tha ki

News repoter- Aaj Lukha ko dobara saza ho gae hai jes k karn use mumbai central jail bheja gaya....y pichlai do mahino mai chothi bar
hai jab use jail bheja gaya hai....pr har baar vo sabuto ke aabhav mai bail pr bahar aa jata hai.....lekine es baar vo bahar nahi aa pae ga kyuki es baar usnai jo kiya hai uske liye kannon use nahi bakshega .......kyuki es bar usnai y sabite kr diya k vo ek darinda hai.....usnai es bar ek manshik roop se ashaksham ladki k sath jabardasti karnai ki kosis ke.....pr uski y kosis kamyab nahi ho pae...kyuki us ladki k apahij chacha nai use bacha liya ....pr es darmiya us ki moute ho gae...pr vo ladki abhi shurakshite hai....sutro k hisab se pata chla hai ki us ladki ka naam sana hai v uski chacha ka naam Sikander tha

Y sb sune jaha ek taraf aslam aur lukha apne bato mai magan the vahi dusri aur koe esa tha jeski aakho mai khune utarna suru hogaya tha tabhi tv par use ek awwaj sunae de jesi sune kr uska y khune aaso mai badal gaya

News reporter- Hmari swadata nai es ladki se bate karnai ki kosis ki par y ladki keval ek baate dohra rahi hai ki aap khude hi dekh y es video cilp mai

Reporter- To bataeyi kya huva aapki sath....kya karne ki kosis ke lukha nai

Sana- Mera bhai aae ga aur mujhe tum sabe se dur le jae ga....aae ga mera bhai....mera Alaadin bhai mujhe yaha se bhoute dur le jae
ga....bhoute dur

Reporter- Bataeyi

Sana- bhoute dur le jae ga mera bhai tum sb se samjhai

News reporter- Hmari swadata nai es ladki k bhai k bari mai aas pass sabhi se phucha to unhoni bataya ki eska bhai jail mai hai kyuki usnai apnai puri parivaar ko mar dala tha ....sune kr yakine nahi hota ki ase log bhi hmari samaj ka hisa hai...ek ladka apne hi parivar walo ko mar kar jail mai betha hai

Y awwaz sune kr koe tha jo apne aashu rok nahi pa rha tha aur y aur koe nahi balki ali tha

Ali(mann mai )- Meri pari zinda hai.....use khuch nahi huva.....vo zinda hai..usai use raate khuch nahi huva tha...pr uske kya halate ho gae hai........aaj meri bhen meri pari dar dar ki thokari kha rahi hai....aur kevale use yasmin k karn ....pr ab aur nahi....mai aa raha hu pari tumhari pass....aur ek wada karta hai tumhai dhukh daine wali ko tumhara bhai zinda nahi chodega ...mai aa raha hu un sabhi se intekam leni.....yasmine ko uski dhoke ka dard dine...usnai mujhe se mera sb khuch chin liya ...mera naam.... mera parivar....mera doste....sb khuch...jo merai liye maine rakhta tha....aur ab mai use sai uska sbe khuch chienae lunga....zindagi ka zahreela khel usnai shuru kiya tha aur ab esi khatam mai karuga....pr uske liye mujhe yaha se nikalna hoga....aur meri pari k pass jana hoga...pr kaise...soch ali........soch liya

Y soch kr ali apne jagah se uthe gaya aur bahar jane laga jesi dekh kr kabir bola

Kabir- Kaha ja rahi ho bhai

Ali- apne sahi jagah

Y kah kr ali vaha se chla gaya y bate kabir ko ajeb lagi aur vo bhi ali k piche chle diya aur vaha ja kr usnai dekha ali ek pathar ko dusri pathar pr ghesh raha tha .....y usai ajeb laga es liye usnai ali se pucha

Kabir- Kya kr rahi ho bhai....aur y pathar pr pathar kyu ghesh rahi ho

Ali- taki eski dhar tej ho jae

Kabir- aur uska tum kya karoge

Ali-dhar tej r ki mai do murder karuga

Y sune kr kabir chock gaya aur bola

Kabir-k...kya ...kaha....murder

Ali- ha

Kabir- kyu aur kiska

Ali-tumhare kyu ka jawab mai tumhai bate mai bataoga lekine tumhare kiska ka jawab hai lukha
aur aslam

y sune kr kabir aur chock gaya aur bola

Kabir- kya .....vo dono ....tum jante ho unki pahoch kaha tke hai

Ali- mai y to nahi janta ki unki pahoch kaha tk hai.....pr mai y jarur janta hu ki jalde hi unki pahoch
upar waali tke ho jae ge

Kabir-dekho pagal mte bano....agar tumnai unhe mara tu unki aadmi hmai ese jail mai zinda gade
degay

Ali- vo esa tb karege na jab vo maregay .....agar vo mari hi na to

Kabir-abhi tum hi to kah rahi the ki tum unhai mar donge aur abhi tum kah rahi ho vo maregay
nahi...aakhir tum karna kya chahte ho

Ali- vo dono kutee ki moute maregay par zinda rahi gay

Kabir- mai tumhara mtlb nahi samjha

Ali- Samjhe jao gay....vo bhi bhoute jalde

Kabir- aakhire tumhare dimage mai kya chle raha hai

Ali- mai tumhai nahi batao ga kyuki jo chiz mai tumhai kr kai dikha sakta hu....vo batani ki kya
jarurate hai

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Daastan-ae-aladdin

Episode ~ 2​

Ab tke,

Kabir-abhi tum hi to kah rahi the ki tum unhai mar donge aur abhi tum kah rahi ho vo maregay nahi...aakhir tum karna kya chahte ho

Ali- vo dono kutee ki moute maregay par zinda rahi gay

Kabir- mai tumhara mtlb nahi samjha

Ali- Samjhe jao gay....vo bhi bhoute jalde

Kabir- aakhire tumhare dimage mai kya chle raha hai

Ali- mai tumhai nahi batao ga kyuki jo chiz mai tumhai kr kai dikha sakta hu....vo batani ki kya
jarurate hai

Ab aage...

Ali- ek baate batao kya tu maira ek kaam kr sakti ho

Kabir- ha jarur batao kya kaam hai

Ali- kya tum mujhe lighter,thoda masaala aur thoda pani aur ha ek roti la kr de sakti ho

Kabir- la to sakta hu....yaha meri bhoute chalte hai...but tum inka karoge kya

Ali-Lighter aur masaala meri plane k liye main hai aur pani mujhe penai k liye chahiye vo kya hai
na mujhe bhoute pyass lage hai aur roti kyuki mujhe bhuk bhi lage hai

Kabir- masaala....roti... mtlb??

Ali- ari itnai bde ho gae ho pata nahi masala mtlb haldi mirchi and vagera vagera aur roti to tum jante hi ho

Kabir-janta to ho pr mujhe laga sayade tum koe plane bana rahi ho un dono ko marnai ka but ab lag raha hai ki tum mera chutiya bana rahi ho.....tabhi to y saari chize manga rahi ho

Ali- y unhai marnai k liye hai....sach mai

Kabir- ha masali se tum unhai jala jala kr marogay

Ali- ha tum esa kah sakte ho

Kabir-pagal samjha hai kya

Ali- dekho es time agar mai tumhai samjhao ga to ....tum samjh nahi paogay tum ek kaam karo jo
maine kaha vo lakr de do tke hai

Kabir-Tke hai

Kabir(mann mai)-pata nahi ab eski dimage mai kya chle raha hai.....kahi khude pagal to nahi ho
gaya ....kya pata ....pr ek bate to paki hai eski baate mujhe pagal jarur kar degi

Y sb sochte huvi kabir vaha se constable k pass gaya aur use se lighter,masala, roti aur pani ki ek botle le kr ali k pass pahocha aur phire ali k pass ja kr bola

Kabir-y lo .....aur ban jao bavarchi

Ali(has kr)- ha par aaj nahi kale....ab tum jaao mujhe abhi kaam karna hai...tke hai

Kabir- tke hai....tumhai jo karna hai karo....aur ha maine constable ko kah diya hai vo tumhai
pareshan nahi karega...so tum jo karna chahte ho karo

Ali- Tke hai ......aur shukriya

Phire kabir apne cell mai chla gaya aur ali apna kaam karni laga karib 3-4 ghnte bade ali bola

Ali- Lo y kaam to ho gaya ab bs jo maine socha hai sbe vesa ho jae to kle mujhe bavrchi bane nai
se koe nahi rok sakta

Y kah kr ali apne cell ki aur chle diya aur vaha ja kr so gaya karib subah k 5 baje hogi tb vo utha
aur kabir k cell ki taraf chle diya

Ali- ari kabir uthe....ek bate puchani hai tujhe se

Kabir- sone do na....abhi to subah bhi nahi hue

Ali- Utha ja khumbh karn....maire swaal ka jawab de kr so jana

Kabir(aakh masalte huvi)- kya hai....kyu uthaya itne subh subh pata hai mai kitna acha sapna dekh
raha tha...ki mai yaha se bahar nikalnai hi wala tha ki tumnai mujhe utha diya.....ab bolo kya baate
phuchani hai

Ali(hse ti huvi)- yahi k kya tum meri sath yaha se bahar nikale na chaho gay

Kabir(chock kr)- maire sath mtlb ??

Ali-kyuki agle 20 min. me mai yaha se bahar ja raha hu

Kabir- kya ? ...kise ....kahi tum pagal to nahi....ek min. tum nai kahi vo masal wala plane banya hai
kya ...agar ha to mai nahi chle raha

Ali- soch lo.....bade mai pachtaogay

Kabir- tumhai pura yakine hai tuhara vo bavarchi plane kaam karega

Ali- ha ....aur vaise meri bavarchi bane nai mai abhi 15 min. aur 16 sec baki hai

Kabir- tum pagal hogae ho ya ....phire mujhe pagal kar dogay

Ali- hmari iq level hme kabhi bade mai check karegay abhi ek kaam karo lukha aur aslam ko kise
bahar lekr aao......aur phire use badi chatan k piche beth kr show enjoy karo okay

Kabir- pr vo meri bate kyu sunaigaya

Ali- kyuki tum unhai kahogay k tumhai y khabar mile hai ki koe unhai marna chahta hai aur vo
shakhs ek samye esi jail mai hai.....aur use shaks ki bari mai ...ali yani k mai janta hu

Kabir- tumhai lagta hai....vo es bate pr yakine karega

Ali-paka karega

Kabir-pr tum etnai yakine se kise kah sakti ho

Ali- kyuki kal maine uski bate suni thi.....jes sai y saaf saaf pata chlta hai...ki vo ek number ka fhatu hai....aur usi apne jaan ki bhoute fhikare hai....ab time waste mate karo aur jalde jaao

Kabir- Tke hai

Y kah kr kabir lukha ki cell ki taraf chal gaya aur bola

Kabir- lukha bhai....are oh lukha bhai

Lukha- kon chila raha hai bhenchod....pata nahi abhi lukha k sone ka time hai

Kabir- Pata hai lukha bhai lekine agar aap abhi nahi uthai to phire kabhi nahi uthae pao gay

Lukha- Mtlb kya hai tera bhenchode

Kabir-vo aapki jaan ko khatra hai

Lukha(aakh bde karta huva)- kya ...pr kise se

Kabir- ha bhai kise se hai y mujhe to nahi pata pr mera ek doste hai use pata hai...aap abhi
chalyai...maire sath .....pata hai aglai 15 min. mai aap pr jane lewa war ho sakta hai

Lukha- to tu phuch kr kyu nahi aaya ....kahi koe game to nahi khel raha hai na

Kabir- bhai aapke sath game khel kr....mai kya karuga....aapki aasirwade se to hme sabhi yaha chain se rah rahi hai.....aur waise bhi aapke sath game khel kr mujhe nark thodi janna hai

Lukha- tke hai ...mai aa raha hu...tu chle mai aslam k sath aata hu

Kabir- ji bhai

Y kah kr kabir lukha k cell se bahar aa gaya aur phire lukha aur aslam ko apne sath lekr ali k pass pahocha

Lukha- yahi vo ladka hai kya

Kabir- ha bhai...yahi hai vo

Lukha- kya naam hai tera ladke

Ali- Ali ~Naam mai kya rakha hai

Lukha- ohh....attitude...accha hai.....ab bata kis se khatra hai mujhe

Ali-bata ta hu pr pahali esi yaha se jane ko bolo

Lukha- tke hai....kabir abhi k liye tu yaha se nikale

Lukha ki bate sune kr kabir vaha se chla gaya aur vaha ja kr khada ho gaya jaha ali nai use kaha tha

Aslam- ab bata bhai ko kise se khatra hai

Ali - khatra nahi balki paka hai vo esi mera mtlb hai lukha bhai ko mar dega

Lukha- y kya bak rha hai

Ali- bak raha mai nahi balki aap ho....jesi thodi der mai vo halaal karega

Lukha- bata kone madarchode hai.....abhi use uskai pariwaar k sath utha leta hu

Ali- aap chah kr bhi esa nahi kr saktai kyuki uska pariwaar to pahlai hi upar waalai ko pyara ho
chuka hai.....bs ek bhen hai

Lukha- To uski bhen koooooooo

Ali- na lukha na ....ek sabdh bhi nahi

Aslam- tujhe kyu mirchi lagi...ek min.....tu hi hai wo hena

Ali- Sahi jawab...aur eski liye tumhai aur esi milte hai saza-ae-moute

Lukha-vo to abhi pata chlega ki kese moute milete hai....kyuki hme sher hai

Ali- tke hai to chlo uskai liye ....ek game khelte hai pakdam pakdai....jo jeta vo sikander aur jo hara vo cha-chundhar....so pakdo lossers

Y kah kr ali aage aage bhag raha tha aur vo dono uskai pichai

Ali- kya huva sher itnai jaldi shuware bane gae....hi hi hi hi...mujhe pata tha ki tum dono se na ho pae ga

Lukha- Ruke ja saale abhi bata ta hu kon shuware hai aur kon sher

Ali-ohh to tum janwaro k doctore bhi ho...mujhe pata nahi tha....lo mai to har gaya

Y kah kr ali ek jagah aa kr ruke gaya

Aslam- kya huva ....itnai jaldi thake gaya.....abhi to bhoute uchal raha tha

Ali- mujhe pata chle gaya yaha mera yahi aakhri samye hai.....agar koe galti ho gae ho to maaf
karna...kya tum meri aakhri khawaise puri kr sakti ho

Lukha- chle tke hai...tu bhi kya yaade rakhega....bole kya khawais hai teri

Ali- e nahi balki do hai

Lukha- Chle bole dono puri ho jae gi

Ali- pahali y ki mujhe cigrate pine hai

Lukha- ha..ha ha ha....tu to sabe se bada ganjhadi nikala re....moute samnai hai aur ahi bhi cigrate
pine hai......chle tu bhi kya yaad rakhega y lai

Y kah kr lukha nai ali ko cigrate de aur bola

Lukha- y le pi lay

Ali-laao
y kah kr ali nai cigrate le aur shulgae aur bola

Ali- mai to bhule gaya tha dhumrapaan karna shahate k liye hanikark hai

Aslam- kya backchodi laga rakhi hai pena hai to pe ...nahi to fhek de aur bhai aap kya eski backchodi dekh rahi ho....mai to kahta hu abhi k abhi mare do esi

Lukha- nahi meri dadi kahte thi ki marnai walai ki aakhri ichiya puri kari chahhiye....punay milta
hai....aur ladke bata teri dhusri ichiya kya hai

Ali- Meri dusri ichiya hai tum dono k moute

Y kah kr ali ni cigrate phek de aur turate vaha se jump mare kr dusri side jirgaya aur es se pahlai
lukha aur aslam khuch samjhe pate

BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOM!!!

Aur undono k par khachi ude gay
aur keval unkai hi nai unke aas pas ke kae chizo k parkhache ude gay yaha tke ke jail ki boundary ka hi ek hisa biche mai se tute gaya tha

Dhamkae ki awaaz sune kr kabir turante ali k tarafe pahocha aur bola

Kabir- ali...ali tum tke to ho

Ali- ha ....tke hu....bs ek glass milk-rose mile jaae to jaan mai jaan aa jae

Y kah kr ali khada ho gaya ...use dekh kr kabir bola vo dono kaha hai

Ali- vo dono yaha se bhag gae....pr vo dono mare gae

Kabir- mtlb??

Ali- kitnai mtlabhi ho tum jab dekho mtlb puchte rah te ho....y mtlb bade mai phuchana aur abhi yaha se chlo constables aate he hogi

Kabir-Tke hai

Phire kabir aur ali vaha se tute hue boundary wall ko langha kr nikale gae

vo yaha se nikale kr tb tke bhagte rahi jab tke unhai y yakine nahi ho gaya k ab vo jail se kaafi dure aa chuke hai

Kabir- mujhe yakine nahi ho raha hm sach mai .....bahar hai...kahi y koe sapna to nahi

Ali- accha

y kah kr ali nai kabir ki ek chuti kate jes sai kabir chila utha aur bola

Kabir- kya kar rahi ho...pagal ho gae ho kya

Ali- Nahi tumhai yakine dila raha hu...ki hme sach mai bhar hai

Kabir- pr mujhe y samjhe mai nahi aa raha tumnai y sb kise kiya

Ali- y bhi batao ja pr pahali en kaideo wali kapde se bahar nikale

Kabir- ha tke hai....y tum mujhe pr chode do ....yaha pass mai hi mera ghar hai....vaha chlte hai

Ali- Tke hai chlo

Phire ali aur kabir dono kabir k ghar ki taraf chle diye

vaha ja kr dono ne kapde change kiye aur phire ali kabir se bola

Ali- kya police es jagah k bare mai jante hai

Kabir- ha....vo mujhe yaha se hi pakade kr lekr gae the

Ali- oh vesai tum pr kya jhuta aarop lagaya tha unhonai

Kabir- corruption ka....mai ek police inspector tha....ek imander police inspector...aur merai imandari k thofai mai mujhe jail ho jae.....vesi tumhai kise pata chla ki mujhe pr jhuta aarop lagaya
gaya tha....tum to mujhe jante bhi nahi ho

Ali- ha pr mai junhai-jhaaro ko bhoute acchi se janta hu.....aur tumhare soch vesi nahi hai

Kabir- lagta hai tumnai kafi karibe se junhai-jhaaro ko dekha hai.....vesi y sbe chodo aur batao k tumnai vo sb kise kiya

Ali- jarur pr pahali yaha se niklo aur ha vo kapdai bhi le kr chlo ......kyuki meri khayal se vo ek bar yaha jarur aae gay

Kabir- tke hai

Aaaj k liye itna hi

Aapka doste suryaa

and

Thanks for reading

Bahut Badhiya....
Lukha aur Aslam Gaye......

Jail se bhi Azaadi mil gayi.....
Ab sister se milna hai....

Aur Ab hoga Intekaam ka elaan...??

 

[Suryaa]

update Suryaa ji....... Extraordinary

Thanks naina ji
Aapke comment aur support k liye
Ese hi sath bani rahi
Aapka doste suryaa

 

[Suryaa]

Bahut badhiya start hai dost..
Kahani ka plot achchha hai..
Ali ne lukkha aur aslam ko vajib saza di...
Ab aage dekhte hain ki vo kaise bahar nikalta hai jail se..?

Surya bhai spellings par thoda dhyan do..mistakes bahut jyada hain..jiski vajah se read karne me kafi dikkat jati hai..agar kisi tarah read kar bhi liya to uska arth samajhne me problem hoti hai..

Dusri baat short words ka use kam se kam karo...kyon ki short words use karne se kayi words aise ban jate hain ki writer ne vo likha kisi aur maqsad se hota hai parantu padhne wale ko uska arth kuch aur hi samajh me aata hai..

Third problem pronunciations ki hai...aap male ko female aur fenale ko male sambodhit kar rahe ho...isse samajh me nahi ayega ki ladka koun hai aur ladki koun...?

Ek baat aur kahna chahunga dost...updates me picture add karne ki jagah story par jyada focus karo...kyon ki badhiya writer vahi hai jo apni kahani aur usme likhe shabdo se reader's ke dil aur dimag par uss ghatna ka sketch bana de..

Otherwise, aapki story mast hai...
Meri wishes aapke sath hain...aapki kahani har pathak ke dil par ek amit chhap chhod kar jaye.

Sb se phale to aapka tahi dil se shukriya Aanand bhaiya
Aapka comment padh kr accha laga
Aur jo bate aapne batae hi mai unka dhyaan rakhuga
Sach batao to maire y problem shurwate se hai
Kyuki meri hinglish etni acchi nahi hai
Aap y kah sakte ho k vo abhi ghutno k bale chle te hai
But mai try kr raha hu improve karne ki
Es liye google translator ka bhi estamal karta hu
But phire bhi kae galtiya rah jati hai

But i promise ....i will try my best
And once again thanks for your appreciation and knowledge full comment
Once again thanks aanand bhaiya
Mai umeed karta hu aap ese hi sath bane rhaigay aur apna shayog es kahani ko pradaan karegay
Aapka doste
Suryaa

 

[Suryaa]

badiya surya bhai

Thanks bde bhaiya
Aapke support k liye
Ese hi sath bane rahah
Aur es kahani ko apna shayog pradaan karay