Adultery KALYUG ( Antt Hi Aarambh Hai ) { Incest , Fantasy , Romance , Thriller }

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Update ... Wednesday night / Sunday morning or night...

 

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Ghanta!!!!

Kitni spelling mistakes hai aur editing aise likh rahe ho jaise kitna bada kaam kiya ho

Now coming to the story!

From now on I'll give ratings to ur update, so u can understand which update was exciting for me... Also these ratings are from my pov

Rating- out of 10

Sabse badi mistake story me, spelling hi hai!! Flow khraab ho jata hai jab bhi koi aisa sabd aa jata hai jiska matlab hi na banta ho

Now coming to the update!

It was nice as always, although abhi tak mujhe kuch exciting nazar nhi aaya hai... It's typical tv serial type, even though I believe it's ur original story but sometimes u have to think out of the box plot too!

Like, yasodha ka gaon chorna aur fir manju aur Kamalnath ka jhagda ye koi khaas cheez nhi thi!... Even udhar sher singh aur uske bete ka bhi charitra chaukane wala nhi tha!

Update me emotion har jagah bhara hua tha, jaise tej singh ki bebasi aur ek pita ki mohabbat... Saath hi yasodha ki khamoshi aur dimaag me chal rahi ulajhan... Sab bilkul sahi tarah tumne bataya lekin bas ise dikhane me tum choonk gaye!

Wo raat ke andhere me sunsaan sadak par ek baap ka apni beti se alvida kehna aur beti ki godh me pal rahe bachhe ki kilkaari dono hi ek alag ahasaas deti agar tum ise thode aur achhe se dikhane ka prayaas karte! Kyunki tej singh ne unhi haatho se apni beti ko buse baithaya hai jiss haatho se har pita ka sapna hota hai ki wo apni beti ka khushi se kanyadan kar sake!

Aur itni jaldi gaon ki khubsurati ko chorna bhi mujhe sahi nhi laga... Mere kehne ka matlab hai, tumhe thoda gaon ki khubsurati bhi dikhani chahiye thi taaki hume uss vatavaran se lagaav ho pata jise yasodha chorkar ja rahi hai..

Ab tak to hume sirf yasodha ko chorkar sabhi ke emotion tumne dikha diye! Ummeed karungi uske man ki bhi baat hume aage janne ko mile.

Aakhir nayak ki maa hai wo

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May be my revo sound like a total negative type... But it's just becoz till now mujhe kuch naya ya chaukane wala kuch nhi dikha hai... Emotionally connected hu but mentally abhi bilkul nhi!!

Hope aage ke update me tum jarur kuch magic karoge jo main notice nhi kar paungi aakhir isiliye to tum _ABHAY_Smarty_ ho

Thanks for the update, abhay-kun~

(Ps- ye sher singh ki gm karni chaahiye thi tej singh ko naam to dono ke ek hi lagte hai... To ye tharak singh kaise ho gaya aur uske bete ki to m-b karni chahiye main character ko .... Aur ye manju ki betiyo ke saath future me MC ka kuch chakkar to nhi chalne wala agar haa to ye manju bilkul sahi kar rahi yasodha ko ghar se beghar karke big boss ki tarah )

Noted all ur points...

Will be working on it... Thanks...

 

[_ABHAY_Smarty_]

Nice update _ABHAY_Smarty_ bhai

Thanks Bhai

 

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Waiting for the next update

Few minutes Bhai

 

[_ABHAY_Smarty_]

Congratulations for new thread bro
Nice update bro

Thanks Bhai

 

[_ABHAY_Smarty_]

Glad that you take review positively

Varna kuch writers to unki kahani ki koi burayi kar do to kehte hai, padhne ki jarurat hi nahi hai.

Thoda sa criticism nahi le pate

You have to accept positive and negative... Balance banane ke liye saath hi behtari ke liye...

 

[_ABHAY_Smarty_]

Nice update

Apni beti ki jaan bachane ke liye, yashoda ki bali chada di.
Log apne pyaro ke liye kisi bhi hadd tak gujar jate hai, lekin usse bhi kisi begunah ki jaan lena justify nahi kiya jaa sakta.
Wrong is wrong.

Filhall to nandu ko apne bare me bhi puri hakikat nahi pta, jab use pta chalega ki yashoda ne use janm nahi diya tha, jab use pta chalega ki yashoda ne kin mushkilo ka samna kiya, kya khoya nandu ko bachane ke liye. Tab uski kya halat hogi. Khair ye to aage ki baat hai.

Waiting for next update

Thanks Bhai

 

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Nice story

Thanks Bhai

 

[_ABHAY_Smarty_]

Bahut hi lajawab update

Thanks Bhai

 

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Superb update

Thanks Bhai

 

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Update will be on... 11 AM... Just finished... Ek baar spelling mistakes check kar lun...