Fantasy Lucifer- The fallen angel(completed)

[Lone survivor]

WRITER’s NOTE

School times se likhne ka bahut shauk tha mujhe mostly poems hi likhta tha. School me hi ek ladki mili bahut pyaari thi. College ke 3rd year tak relationship chala fir vo chali gaye door. Uske baad kabhi socha nahi tha dobara kuch likunga. Bilkul man hi nahi karta tha. Nashe to jaise jindagi ban gaye the. Pehle bhi nashe karta tha lekin uske baad jada ho gaye. Akela rahna acha lagne lagega aur dheere dheere sab door hote chale gaye. Main akela hi bacha tha. Tab kahi se xf ka pata chala aur pata nahi kyu aise hi ek raat pehli story ka first update post kar diya. Ek medium mil gaya tha mujhe kuch share karne ka aur acha bhi lagne laga tha. Dheere dheere vapas likhna start kiya aur es baar stories. Xf par kuch stories likhi fir vo band hua to yaha aa gaya. Aur vohi silsila yaha bhi kamyaab raha. Aap sabko sayad idea nahi hoga ki jo thoda bahut interact hota hai humara yaha vo kitna important ho sakta hai kisi ki life me. Es waqt mere pass almost sab kuch hai lekin agar kisi ko kuch share karna chahu to aisa person nahi hai esliye beech beech me kuch updates me apni situation likh deta hu to acha lagta hai. I hope ki humara sath aise hi aage bana rahe.

Ek mew story ka dimag me kuch idea hai lekin kab start hogi eske liye abhi sure nahi hu

May be main kuch dino ke liye rehab chala jau ya fir kuch aur mil jaye sath chalne ke. Lets see

In the end i want to thank each and everyone of you guys who has supported me and gave me so much love. Means a lot

Thank you so much guys. Jaldi hi milte hai ek new story ke sath tab tak ke liye

 

[Lone survivor]

Your writing skills Amazing As Always

Thank you bhai

 

[Lone survivor]

Ye kuchh jyada nahi ho gaya ? Pics viral honge nahi ye to pakka he par Ashmita tut to gayi he puri , ye kuchh jyada tha like sahi me .

Jada to tha lekin ashmita ke liye suresh ke liye nahi

Story me sab sahi ja raha nahi bolunga kyuki kuchh parts confusing bhi lagte he .kher next update me he dekhenge .

Thank you bhai aur confusion hum aise hi banaye rakhenge

 

[Lone survivor]

ye aya asmita ki life ma sab sey bara turning point ab dekhna ye h ky asmita kia kry gi r jab anaya ki pata chly ga es sab kay baray ma tu os kasa reaction hoga aur dosri taraf supreme b zid pay aray h ky jo hora h sahi hora mujy sab sey zyda es bat ka intazar h Lucifer ka curse kon c paremika tory gi jahan tak mera andaza h wo asmita ho gi lakin ye aik guess h hoga kya ye tu story writer ko pata h overall mind-blowing fantastic outclass story h ap aur sab sey bari bat ap daily update dyty h r mene aysa koi writer nahi dekha abi tak jo daily update dyta apky es kam ko ma dil sey appreciate karta ho overall keep posting maza ay gya update ka waiting for the next update

Thank you so so much bhai
Aise hi sath bane raho aapke sare sawalo ke jawab aapko khud hi dundne pad jayenge main nashedi writer hu kuch theek se nahi bataunga

 

[Lone survivor]

8 saal ho gy ha pehly xossip par or ab idr xforum par bc sari ki sari stories parh dali ha lekin assay chutiya writters hain idr k achi khassi stpry chor kar hamaray emotions ki maa bhen chod kar chalay jaty ha bich me.

Ya mera first comment ha just to appreciate u man roz regular update or itni dhasu story k liya bcz i am a silent reader i never reply to anything.. but to you my man hats off soo please dont leave this story in the middle . Great work keep it up

Much love to you bhai
Keep supporting

 

[Lone survivor]

Ek no story hai bro maza aagaya bro

Thank you bhai

 

[Lone survivor]

Vai kya Pol dance kya Maja aagya .....lagta hai anisa ab innaya ke liye Kam karegi jo lucifer usko job dega....

Raichand ko samajh aa gya hoga k ijat utarne Kitna dukh milta Hai....Lakin ashmita lucifer ko kya kahegi uska intezar hai ...

Bdw super update ...​

Thank you so much bhai
Keep supporting

 

[Lone survivor]

Are lone bhai ab kya raai de jo aap likh rahe ho wese soche tab hi de na

To socho na bhai

aapne bahut umda khel khela hai ashmita ke saath....but mere khayal se asli saanvi shayad asmita hi ho.

Kyu socha aapne aisa?

...aapne uska dil to tod hi diya aage dekhte hai wese suresh ke sath bilkul sahi kiya...ab usko pta chalega ki izzat jaati hai tab kesa lagta hai....khair keep waiting for nextttttt update

Thank you bhai

 

[Lone survivor]

Excellent update bro,

Such mein feelings badal rahi hai Lucifer mein,

Superb

Thank you bhai

 

[Lone survivor]

So, Aghor mar gaya hai..? Kya sach mein? Kyonki soul trading ka zikra kahani mein do baar ho chuka hai isliye koyi mare bhi to uski maut par yakeen karna mushkil hai...

Mar gaya hai aghor sayad

Lucifer ke haath paaon to kaat diye the Aghor ne par tabhi Lucifer ka Devil yaani Satan ka roop saamne aa gaya aur apne aap Lucifer ka shareer theek hone laga... Kya raaz hai Lucifer ke in do roop ka? Kyonki Lucifer ke paas apni sabhi shaktiyan nahi hain ya kahun ke wo unhe bhool chuka hai isliye Aghor se ladna uske liye aasan nahi tha... Par, Devil waale swaroop mein usne aasani se Aghor ko maar diya... Ya kahun ke us roop ko dekhne ke baad hi Aghor almost mar gaya tha... Kya Lucifer ki double personality hain? Yaani ek wo jo use Devil kehlane par vivash kar deti hai aur ek wo jismein wo kisi se pyaar kar paata hai... Btw. Us Devil waale roop mein ye bhi kaha tha, ki Lucifer ne use control kiya hua hai... Past, jab tak poora past saamne nahi aayega, rahasya bana rahega...

Pura past kabhi samne aaega hi nahi
Bas assumptions par kaam chalega yaha

Idhar, Aghor mar chuka hai par saath hi kuchh sawaal bhi apne pichhe chhod gaya hai... Jo ghaav wo Lucifer ko dene waala tha, jiske baare mein Mitika ne bhavishyavani ki thi, wo sirf Mitika ka bhram tha? Ya fir abhi Aghor waapis lautega?

Bhram to bilkul nahi tha

Afterall, usne pehle to yahi kaha tha ki Saanvi yaani Inaaya se sex ke baad hi wo Lucifer ko maarne aayega... To kya ye possible hai ki Aghor ne apni soul kisi aur ko de di ho (Kaal ki tarah), aur jab Lucifer aur Inaaya ka milan ho tab wo dobara hamla kare, jismein Lucifer ko wo gehra ghaav lagega... Sawaal ye bhi hai ki Kaal ne apni soul kise di thi, Aghor ko hi..?

Sawal to bahut hai lekin jawab ek ka bhi nahi hai

Eda ke saath jo past scene aaya wo bhi kuchh sawaalon ko janam deta hai... Ye to pehle se hi pata hai ki Eda bachpan mein aur shayad uske baad bhi, Lucifer se door rehti thi, jabki Lucifer use pasand karta tha... Guru ji se is baat ka zikr bhi kiya tha usne... Par Eda ki baaton se ye lagta hai ki Eda ne jo bhi kiya wo karna ke liye use shayad kaha gaya tha..? Supreme ne.. Guruji ne..? Par jo ye past scene hai, ye exactly kab ka hai, kya aisi ghatna huyi thi jiske kaaran Lucifer se milne pahunchi thi Eda? Aghor ke baare mein usne bhi Lucifer ko chetaya tha, aur ek aur baat saamne aayi ki Lucifer aur Aghor shayad sage bhai hain/the...

Kuch na kuch to hua hi hoga bhai tabhi eda gaye lucifer ke pass

Idhar, Anisha ne naukri chhod di hai! Use is job ki kitni zarurat thi, ye koyi chhupi huyi baat nahi hai fir bhi Lucifer ke liye hi usne ye job chhod di... Ashmita ko shayad uspar doubt tha ki wo Lucifer se hi milne jaa rahi hai, isiliye wo itne sawaal kar rahi thi us se... Khair, Anisha ne Lucifer ko dhoond liya aur Anisha ke aate hi Lucifer ka devil waala roop gaayab ho gaya aur wo normal ho gaya... Kya uski premikaon ki presence mein apne aap hi uska roop normal ho jaata hai? Btw. Anisha too, seems to be Falling in the world of Lucifer...

Everyone is Falling in the world of lucifer

Suresh... finally use bhi saza de di hai Lucifer ne... Obviously, izzat ke badle izzat, is se behtar nyay kya ho sakta tha uske liye... Par I think ke jo kuchh bhi Lucifer ne uske saath kiya wo kewal Suresh ki wajah se nahi balki Ashmita ke kaaran bhi kiya... Kyonki jo kuchh Lucifer ne Naag se kaha, us se yahi lagta hai ki Lucifer jaanta tha ki Ashmita uska peecha kar rahi thi, aur jaan boojh kar Ashmita ko dikhane ke liye hi ye sab usne Suresh ke saath kiya... Ab dekhte hain ki Lucifer ke kahe mutabik, Ashmita top par pahunchegi ya bilkul toot jaayegi... Afterall, sirf baap ki izzat hi nahi balki ek baar fir se apna ek dost bhi kho diya hai usne aur jo umeed Inaaya ke saath dosti punarjeevit hone ki thi, wo bhi almost khatam ho gayi hai...

Kho to bahut kuch diya hai ashmita ne aur ye ek sach hai

Beharhal, Anisha ko job waapis milegi ya nahi? Yadi haan, to kya Lucifer usmein bhi kuchh karega?

Karna to chahiye usse

Ab lagta yahi hai ke Lucifer shayad Inaaya se milne jaaye, because wo Lucifer se naaraz to hogi hi... But naarazgi se jyada dukhi hogi, usne jo messages Lucifer ko kiye the us se to yahi lagta hai... Seems like something big is going to happen in the next update, as you mentioned...

Hona to tha lekin mood badal gaya mera

Rahi baat, kahani ke baare mein vichaaron ki, to I don't think ki kuchh bhi kehne ki zarurat hai... You're an experienced writer aur aap bhi jaante hain ki jab koyi is prakar se review deta hai story par that clearly shows the quality of the the story... Shayad koyi ye na bhi kahe, par halki stories par ek reader bhi apna waqt invest karne se parhez karta hai... And it's the quality of your writing that forces me to read and review it... Beharhal, kewal do hi kahaniyan hain filhal jo main Fantasy genre mei padh raha hoon, aur ye usmein se ek hai...

Thank you so much mere bhai
Much love to you

As usual, all the three updates were beautiful... Eda – Lucifer ki conversation ho ya fir Lucifer aur Anisha ki, both of them were written excellently... Wahin Maansi ki baatein bhi chehre par muskaan laane ke liye kafi thi...

Outstanding Updates Bhai & Waiting For Next...

 

[Lone survivor]

Bahut hi badhiya update diya hai Lone survivor bhai....
Nice and beautiful update.....

Thank you bhai