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Fantasy Manhoosh ( Revenge By KILLER )
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Very nice update bhai Lekin spelling mistakes bahut hai please thoda dhyan rakhe
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Just abhi abhi aapki story last update tak padhi hai Vik@03 bhai....
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Update 9
Next day bi roj ki tarh bit gya
Delhi....... Vikram ke purane gar
Vikram ke jane Ke baad Kisi ko kuch bi farq nai pada sab Apne mai mast Te enjoy kar rahe te manhoosh chala gya ta Isliye
but didi(nisha didi) and Tiya gar valo Se narj Te Isliye vo unse jyada baat nai karte Te Bas kaam ki baat karte Te unka Ye bartaav dek Ke sab ko thoda shock laga ta liken kisne kuch kaha nai jesa chlta ta vesa chlta rehne diya
•••••••••>hero side
mera traning bi chalu ta mai bahoot jald sab kuch sik raha ta
iss tarh samy bitta gya
Ab mera 17 sal ka Ho gya hu mera body 6 pack hai and dekne mai 18 ka lagta Hu
aaj muje 1 sal ho gya ta USA Mai
aaj meri traing puri Ho gai ti
in 10 sal Mai Maine sabk fighting style and sabi weapons mai expert and computer hacking mai full expert ta
training completely puri karne ke Baad aaj wapis india jana ta
Mai flight Mai bet gya ta Soch raha ta ki 1 sal Mai sab kese hoge
fir mai so jata Hu
flight land karti hai mai Mumbai airport se bahr ata hu vaha par dad, mom and janvi merko receive karne aaye hue te
mai airport se bahr aate h janvi jese muje dekti hai doud ke ate h and merko rote hue gale lag jaati hai mai bi usko gale laga leta hu meri anko mai bi ansu te
me: kesi hai meri angel
janvi: mai tik hu bahiya
hmm
mom: hum se bi mil lo hum bi yahi hai
fir mai mom sent milta Hu
dad: aa gya mera sher
me: yes dad
fir hum gar aate hai and mai room mai fresh hone chla jata Hu
fir mai niche aata Hu
dining table pe sab mera intajar kar rehe te fir mai bi aa jata hu
for sab lunch karne lagte hai
janvi: bhai aaj muje apko shopping karne le jana hoga and abi tak apne muje apna gift bi nai diya hai
me: gift?
mai ese react karta hu jese muje shock laga Ho
mom: kya hua beta
me: mom darsal vo mai sweetie ka gift lana bhul gya hu
itna sunte hi sweetie rone lagti hai apne room mai chali jati hai
mom : beta ab jaa usko uska gift de de muje malum hai tu majk kar raha hai
dad: kya tu majk kar raha hai
maine half mai gardn hilla di
dad: merko to laga tu sach mai uske liye gift nai laya
me: are ese kese bhul jau aap dono ke liye bi gift laya hu
thodi der baad bell bajta hai mai darwaja kolta Hu and gift leta hu jo bahoot bada ta
(Ye gift maine USA mai karida ta and delivery ke liye Bol diya ta)
mai fir jaldi gift leke sweetie ke room mai jata Hu vo abi bi ro rahi ti bed pe lete hue
mai uske pass Jake
me: kya hua meri angel ko
janvi : aap bahoot gande ho mere liye gift nai laaye
me: are kisne kaha mai gift nai laya ye deko gift
mai usko gift dikata hu
gift ka name sunn Ke h vo ek dum uth jaati hai and gift ko dekti hai jo maine side mai raka hua ta
vo bed set utr ke gift kolne lagti hai
gift kulne ke Baad gift dekti h vo bahoot kush ho jati hai and chikti hui and nachti hue mere gale lag jati hai
gift mai ek pink bada sa teddy ta
janvi: thanku thanku bhiya I love you bhai
me: I love you 2 my angel
fir vo mom dad ko gift dikane lagti hai
mai mom dad ko bi unka gift deta hu
mom gift kolti hai usme bahoot h sundr necklace ta and dad ke gift mai ek bahoot kimti watch ti
fir iss tarh sham hone lagti hai
sham ko mai and janvi shopping pe jate hai car leke
car Mai
me: aaj ka kya plan hai my angel
janvi : bhai sabse pele movie deknge fir shopping and dinner
me: Ohk. Let's go
fir hum mall aa jate hai and movie ki tickets leke movie dekne lagte hai
movie Ke baad shopping karne lagte hai mai thodi bahoot apne shopping karta hu because thode din baad scl bi st hone vala ta
dad ne mera admission 12th mai karva diya ta and sweetie 9th mai
shopping Ke baad hum dinner karte hai
tab tak 10 baj gye Te mom ko pele h bol diya ta maine
fir hum gar aa jate hai and mom dad sent thodi bahoot baat karke so jate hai sweetie mere sath soie hui ti
subh mai 4 baje ut jata Hu mai sweetie ko side mai karke uth jata Hu and gar ke bahr aake jogging karta hu and exercise karta hu
(Jack and Maria traning dene Ke baad wapis lout gye Te)
mai 7 bje tak exercise vgra karta hu wapis gar aata Hu vaha garden mai dad exercise kar rehe te nai unke pass jata Hu
Me: gm dad
dad: GM beta
dad: traning kesi ti
me: good
dad: hmm. Breakfast ke Baad mere sath ana kuch kaam hai
me: ohk dad muje pta hai kya kaam hai
dad: Tuje kese pata hai
me: Baad mai bta dunga
dad: hmm.chalo AB
Fir hum gar mai aata jate hai mai room mai jaake dekta Hu to sweetie abi tak so rahi ti
mai usko forehead pe kisa karke uta ta hu vo uth ke merko gaal pe kiss karti hai
me: good morning my angel
janvi: gm my sweet Bhai
me: chl ab jaldi fresh hone jaa fir breakfast karna hai
for vo chali jati hai Apne room mai
mai bi fresh ho jata hu and niche jata Hu and mom ko GM wish karta hu vo bi gm wish karte hai
iss tarh breakfasht Ke baad mai room mai ake change karta hu and niche aata Hu vaha pe dad bi ready go chuke Te
me: chle dad
dad: ha chalo
mom: kaha jaa rehe ho aal log
dad: are kahi nai bas mai isse le jaa raha hu kuch kaam hai
Janvi: KYa kaam hai Dad
dad: are kuch nai office jaa raha hu ese scl mai kuch kaam hai to Maine kaha mai chod dunga (juth)
mom
hk
fir mom and janvi ko byy bol Ke hum nikl jate hai
dad ki office CBI head quarter
vaha pauchne ke Baad dad Apne cabin mai jate hue
dad: sab jaldi dek lene ke baad cabin mai ana
me: ohk
Mai to dek raha ta sab kese work karte hai vagara
fir thodi der baad mai cabin mai jata hu and chair pe bet jata Hu
chair pe bet ke
me: so mujse kisko baat karni hai mere dad ko ya Raw chief ko
meri baat sunne Ke baad dad ko jese shock laga Ho
because dad Raw chief Ye baat kuch logo ko hi malum ta merko nai btya ta
dad: Ye baat tumko kisne btya
me: vimram ko pta nai hoga but "Killer"
Ko to pta hoga na dad
meri baat jesi hi puri hui dad ko firse jatka lga
dad: means USA mai underword ka safaya karne vala killer or koi nai mera beta vikram hai
maine ha mai mundi hila di
dad ko firse jatka lga
dad ne pani piya and thodi der baad bole tum killer kese
me: uske liye apko 1 sal piche jana hoga jab Mai usa gya ta
baki next update mai....................
Next day bi roj ki tarh bit gya
Delhi....... Vikram ke purane gar
Vikram ke jane Ke baad Kisi ko kuch bi farq nai pada sab Apne mai mast Te enjoy kar rahe te manhoosh chala gya ta Isliye
but didi(nisha didi) and Tiya gar valo Se narj Te Isliye vo unse jyada baat nai karte Te Bas kaam ki baat karte Te unka Ye bartaav dek Ke sab ko thoda shock laga ta liken kisne kuch kaha nai jesa chlta ta vesa chlta rehne diya
•••••••••>hero side
mera traning bi chalu ta mai bahoot jald sab kuch sik raha ta
iss tarh samy bitta gya
After 10 years..........
Ab mera 17 sal ka Ho gya hu mera body 6 pack hai and dekne mai 18 ka lagta Hu
aaj muje 1 sal ho gya ta USA Mai
aaj meri traing puri Ho gai ti
in 10 sal Mai Maine sabk fighting style and sabi weapons mai expert and computer hacking mai full expert ta
training completely puri karne ke Baad aaj wapis india jana ta
Mai flight Mai bet gya ta Soch raha ta ki 1 sal Mai sab kese hoge
fir mai so jata Hu
flight land karti hai mai Mumbai airport se bahr ata hu vaha par dad, mom and janvi merko receive karne aaye hue te
mai airport se bahr aate h janvi jese muje dekti hai doud ke ate h and merko rote hue gale lag jaati hai mai bi usko gale laga leta hu meri anko mai bi ansu te
me: kesi hai meri angel
janvi: mai tik hu bahiya
hmm
mom: hum se bi mil lo hum bi yahi hai
fir mai mom sent milta Hu
dad: aa gya mera sher
me: yes dad
fir hum gar aate hai and mai room mai fresh hone chla jata Hu
fir mai niche aata Hu
dining table pe sab mera intajar kar rehe te fir mai bi aa jata hu
for sab lunch karne lagte hai
janvi: bhai aaj muje apko shopping karne le jana hoga and abi tak apne muje apna gift bi nai diya hai
me: gift?
mai ese react karta hu jese muje shock laga Ho
mom: kya hua beta
me: mom darsal vo mai sweetie ka gift lana bhul gya hu
itna sunte hi sweetie rone lagti hai apne room mai chali jati hai
mom : beta ab jaa usko uska gift de de muje malum hai tu majk kar raha hai
dad: kya tu majk kar raha hai
maine half mai gardn hilla di
dad: merko to laga tu sach mai uske liye gift nai laya
me: are ese kese bhul jau aap dono ke liye bi gift laya hu
thodi der baad bell bajta hai mai darwaja kolta Hu and gift leta hu jo bahoot bada ta
(Ye gift maine USA mai karida ta and delivery ke liye Bol diya ta)
mai fir jaldi gift leke sweetie ke room mai jata Hu vo abi bi ro rahi ti bed pe lete hue
mai uske pass Jake
me: kya hua meri angel ko
janvi : aap bahoot gande ho mere liye gift nai laaye
me: are kisne kaha mai gift nai laya ye deko gift
mai usko gift dikata hu
gift ka name sunn Ke h vo ek dum uth jaati hai and gift ko dekti hai jo maine side mai raka hua ta
vo bed set utr ke gift kolne lagti hai
gift kulne ke Baad gift dekti h vo bahoot kush ho jati hai and chikti hui and nachti hue mere gale lag jati hai
gift mai ek pink bada sa teddy ta
janvi: thanku thanku bhiya I love you bhai
me: I love you 2 my angel
fir vo mom dad ko gift dikane lagti hai
mai mom dad ko bi unka gift deta hu
mom gift kolti hai usme bahoot h sundr necklace ta and dad ke gift mai ek bahoot kimti watch ti
fir iss tarh sham hone lagti hai
sham ko mai and janvi shopping pe jate hai car leke
car Mai
me: aaj ka kya plan hai my angel
janvi : bhai sabse pele movie deknge fir shopping and dinner
me: Ohk. Let's go
fir hum mall aa jate hai and movie ki tickets leke movie dekne lagte hai
movie Ke baad shopping karne lagte hai mai thodi bahoot apne shopping karta hu because thode din baad scl bi st hone vala ta
dad ne mera admission 12th mai karva diya ta and sweetie 9th mai
shopping Ke baad hum dinner karte hai
tab tak 10 baj gye Te mom ko pele h bol diya ta maine
fir hum gar aa jate hai and mom dad sent thodi bahoot baat karke so jate hai sweetie mere sath soie hui ti
subh mai 4 baje ut jata Hu mai sweetie ko side mai karke uth jata Hu and gar ke bahr aake jogging karta hu and exercise karta hu
(Jack and Maria traning dene Ke baad wapis lout gye Te)
mai 7 bje tak exercise vgra karta hu wapis gar aata Hu vaha garden mai dad exercise kar rehe te nai unke pass jata Hu
Me: gm dad
dad: GM beta
dad: traning kesi ti
me: good
dad: hmm. Breakfast ke Baad mere sath ana kuch kaam hai
me: ohk dad muje pta hai kya kaam hai
dad: Tuje kese pata hai
me: Baad mai bta dunga
dad: hmm.chalo AB
Fir hum gar mai aata jate hai mai room mai jaake dekta Hu to sweetie abi tak so rahi ti
mai usko forehead pe kisa karke uta ta hu vo uth ke merko gaal pe kiss karti hai
me: good morning my angel
janvi: gm my sweet Bhai
me: chl ab jaldi fresh hone jaa fir breakfast karna hai
for vo chali jati hai Apne room mai
mai bi fresh ho jata hu and niche jata Hu and mom ko GM wish karta hu vo bi gm wish karte hai
iss tarh breakfasht Ke baad mai room mai ake change karta hu and niche aata Hu vaha pe dad bi ready go chuke Te
me: chle dad
dad: ha chalo
mom: kaha jaa rehe ho aal log
dad: are kahi nai bas mai isse le jaa raha hu kuch kaam hai
Janvi: KYa kaam hai Dad
dad: are kuch nai office jaa raha hu ese scl mai kuch kaam hai to Maine kaha mai chod dunga (juth)
mom
hkfir mom and janvi ko byy bol Ke hum nikl jate hai
dad ki office CBI head quarter
vaha pauchne ke Baad dad Apne cabin mai jate hue
dad: sab jaldi dek lene ke baad cabin mai ana
me: ohk
Mai to dek raha ta sab kese work karte hai vagara
fir thodi der baad mai cabin mai jata hu and chair pe bet jata Hu
chair pe bet ke
me: so mujse kisko baat karni hai mere dad ko ya Raw chief ko
meri baat sunne Ke baad dad ko jese shock laga Ho
because dad Raw chief Ye baat kuch logo ko hi malum ta merko nai btya ta
dad: Ye baat tumko kisne btya
me: vimram ko pta nai hoga but "Killer"
Ko to pta hoga na dad
meri baat jesi hi puri hui dad ko firse jatka lga
dad: means USA mai underword ka safaya karne vala killer or koi nai mera beta vikram hai
maine ha mai mundi hila di
dad ko firse jatka lga
dad ne pani piya and thodi der baad bole tum killer kese
me: uske liye apko 1 sal piche jana hoga jab Mai usa gya ta
baki next update mai....................
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Bas ek saal aur age badha dijiye hero ka tab xforum ke hisab se hero ki age 18 ki ho jayegi.......Update 9
Next day bi roj ki tarh bit gya
Delhi....... Vikram ke purane gar
Vikram ke jane Ke baad Kisi ko kuch bi farq nai pada sab Apne mai mast Te enjoy kar rahe te manhoosh chala gya ta Isliye
but didi(nisha didi) and Tiya gar valo Se narj Te Isliye vo unse jyada baat nai karte Te Bas kaam ki baat karte Te unka Ye bartaav dek Ke sab ko thoda shock laga ta liken kisne kuch kaha nai jesa chlta ta vesa chlta rehne diya
•••••••••>hero side
mera traning bi chalu ta mai bahoot jald sab kuch sik raha ta
iss tarh samy bitta gya
After 10 years..........
Ab mera 17 sal ka Ho gya hu mera body 6 pack hai and dekne mai 18 ka lagta Hu
aaj muje 1 sal ho gya ta USA Mai
aaj meri traing puri Ho gai ti
in 10 sal Mai Maine sabk fighting style and sabi weapons mai expert and computer hacking mai full expert ta
training completely puri karne ke Baad aaj wapis india jana ta
Mai flight Mai bet gya ta Soch raha ta ki 1 sal Mai sab kese hoge
fir mai so jata Hu
flight land karti hai mai Mumbai airport se bahr ata hu vaha par dad, mom and janvi merko receive karne aaye hue te
mai airport se bahr aate h janvi jese muje dekti hai doud ke ate h and merko rote hue gale lag jaati hai mai bi usko gale laga leta hu meri anko mai bi ansu te
me: kesi hai meri angel
janvi: mai tik hu bahiya
hmm
mom: hum se bi mil lo hum bi yahi hai
fir mai mom sent milta Hu
dad: aa gya mera sher
me: yes dad
fir hum gar aate hai and mai room mai fresh hone chla jata Hu
fir mai niche aata Hu
dining table pe sab mera intajar kar rehe te fir mai bi aa jata hu
for sab lunch karne lagte hai
janvi: bhai aaj muje apko shopping karne le jana hoga and abi tak apne muje apna gift bi nai diya hai
me: gift?
mai ese react karta hu jese muje shock laga Ho
mom: kya hua beta
me: mom darsal vo mai sweetie ka gift lana bhul gya hu
itna sunte hi sweetie rone lagti hai apne room mai chali jati hai
mom : beta ab jaa usko uska gift de de muje malum hai tu majk kar raha hai
dad: kya tu majk kar raha hai
maine half mai gardn hilla di
dad: merko to laga tu sach mai uske liye gift nai laya
me: are ese kese bhul jau aap dono ke liye bi gift laya hu
thodi der baad bell bajta hai mai darwaja kolta Hu and gift leta hu jo bahoot bada ta
(Ye gift maine USA mai karida ta and delivery ke liye Bol diya ta)
mai fir jaldi gift leke sweetie ke room mai jata Hu vo abi bi ro rahi ti bed pe lete hue
mai uske pass Jake
me: kya hua meri angel ko
janvi : aap bahoot gande ho mere liye gift nai laaye
me: are kisne kaha mai gift nai laya ye deko gift
mai usko gift dikata hu
gift ka name sunn Ke h vo ek dum uth jaati hai and gift ko dekti hai jo maine side mai raka hua ta
vo bed set utr ke gift kolne lagti hai
gift kulne ke Baad gift dekti h vo bahoot kush ho jati hai and chikti hui and nachti hue mere gale lag jati hai
gift mai ek pink bada sa teddy ta
janvi: thanku thanku bhiya I love you bhai
me: I love you 2 my angel
fir vo mom dad ko gift dikane lagti hai
mai mom dad ko bi unka gift deta hu
mom gift kolti hai usme bahoot h sundr necklace ta and dad ke gift mai ek bahoot kimti watch ti
fir iss tarh sham hone lagti hai
sham ko mai and janvi shopping pe jate hai car leke
car Mai
me: aaj ka kya plan hai my angel
janvi : bhai sabse pele movie deknge fir shopping and dinner
me: Ohk. Let's go
fir hum mall aa jate hai and movie ki tickets leke movie dekne lagte hai
movie Ke baad shopping karne lagte hai mai thodi bahoot apne shopping karta hu because thode din baad scl bi st hone vala ta
dad ne mera admission 12th mai karva diya ta and sweetie 9th mai
shopping Ke baad hum dinner karte hai
tab tak 10 baj gye Te mom ko pele h bol diya ta maine
fir hum gar aa jate hai and mom dad sent thodi bahoot baat karke so jate hai sweetie mere sath soie hui ti
subh mai 4 baje ut jata Hu mai sweetie ko side mai karke uth jata Hu and gar ke bahr aake jogging karta hu and exercise karta hu
(Jack and Maria traning dene Ke baad wapis lout gye Te)
mai 7 bje tak exercise vgra karta hu wapis gar aata Hu vaha garden mai dad exercise kar rehe te nai unke pass jata Hu
Me: gm dad
dad: GM beta
dad: traning kesi ti
me: good
dad: hmm. Breakfast ke Baad mere sath ana kuch kaam hai
me: ohk dad muje pta hai kya kaam hai
dad: Tuje kese pata hai
me: Baad mai bta dunga
dad: hmm.chalo AB
Fir hum gar mai aata jate hai mai room mai jaake dekta Hu to sweetie abi tak so rahi ti
mai usko forehead pe kisa karke uta ta hu vo uth ke merko gaal pe kiss karti hai
me: good morning my angel
janvi: gm my sweet Bhai
me: chl ab jaldi fresh hone jaa fir breakfast karna hai
for vo chali jati hai Apne room mai
mai bi fresh ho jata hu and niche jata Hu and mom ko GM wish karta hu vo bi gm wish karte hai
iss tarh breakfasht Ke baad mai room mai ake change karta hu and niche aata Hu vaha pe dad bi ready go chuke Te
me: chle dad
dad: ha chalo
mom: kaha jaa rehe ho aal log
dad: are kahi nai bas mai isse le jaa raha hu kuch kaam hai
Janvi: KYa kaam hai Dad
dad: are kuch nai office jaa raha hu ese scl mai kuch kaam hai to Maine kaha mai chod dunga (juth)
mom
fir mom and janvi ko byy bol Ke hum nikl jate hai
dad ki office CBI head quarter
vaha pauchne ke Baad dad Apne cabin mai jate hue
dad: sab jaldi dek lene ke baad cabin mai ana
me: ohk
Mai to dek raha ta sab kese work karte hai vagara
fir thodi der baad mai cabin mai jata hu and chair pe bet jata Hu
chair pe bet ke
me: so mujse kisko baat karni hai mere dad ko ya Raw chief ko
meri baat sunne Ke baad dad ko jese shock laga Ho
because dad Raw chief Ye baat kuch logo ko hi malum ta merko nai btya ta
dad: Ye baat tumko kisne btya
me: vimram ko pta nai hoga but "Killer"
Ko to pta hoga na dad
meri baat jesi hi puri hui dad ko firse jatka lga
dad: means USA mai underword ka safaya karne vala killer or koi nai mera beta vikram hai
maine ha mai mundi hila di
dad ko firse jatka lga
dad ne pani piya and thodi der baad bole tum killer kese
me: uske liye apko 1 sal piche jana hoga jab Mai usa gya ta
baki next update mai....................
Kahani wakai me mast chal rahi hai........
Ab dekhate hai ki Vikram apane pariwar walo se kaise badla leta hai .........
Waiting for next update................
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