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Thank you so much casi bhai Maine bhi apki hi copy karne ka try kita but puri tarah success nahi hua hu,, mere liye ye bahut khushi ki Baat Hai ki apko update pasand hai bahut bahut dhanyabaad...
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Thank you so much casi bhai Maine bhi apki hi copy karne ka try kita but puri tarah success nahi hua hu,, mere liye ye bahut khushi ki Baat Hai ki apko update pasand hai bahut bahut dhanyabaad...
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Bhai 3rd update bhi post kar di hai apka review nahi aya
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abhi yeh 3rd update padhkar thodi hi der me deta hun review aur rating
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Ha bhai Intezaar hai jo bhi mistake lage unhe zarur batana
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Super duper update
Dekhte hai kya hota hai riya kya jawab deti hau
Dekhte hai kya hota hai riya kya jawab deti hau
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Padh liya bhai.
Mast update hai. Sahi ja rahe ho. Full romance starting hai. Sab bilkool sidha sadha innocent ladke ki kahani hai. Usska bholepan ka koyi faeda na uthaaye.
Ab ye sach mein jaldbaazi mein I love u keh diya shuru mein hi dhat....
Chslo3ab dekhte hein Riya ka jawab kan aur kia ata hai.
Acha likh rahe ho.
Keep it up.
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bhai
for for starting brand new story
review
kya kahe hum.....??
shabd hi nahi hai hamare paas.
bimar hai lekin firbhi bhi tabiyat se review dene ki koshish karenge wo bhi teeno update ke,main koi rating nahi dene wala (agar aap rating chahte hai to mujhe pm kijiyega).
sabse pahle plot,
bhai plot copy kiya gaya hai
meri luv shtori
se (par naa wo koi randi thi aur naa main koi chutiya....
)I mean kayiyo ke zindgi ki sachayi hai yeh ki kisiko dil-e-jaan se pyar karo aur mile sirf dhoka nafarat ke is bazar me sache pyar kimat fatne wale made in china ke condom se bhi sasti hai....
khair plot jabardast hai ab aur waqt jaya naa karte huye mudde pe ate hai
update 1
starting me hi lead character ka asali chehra dhikha diya jo thoda confusing hai aur hona bhi chahiye (character interesting banane ke liye) jo dheere dheere age chalkar explain hota jayega, bhai main yaha pe baaki ke kuch common aur spoiler bhari chize skip karunga aur sirf do important cheezo ke baare me baat karna chahunga,
first,bhai main is first update ko story me included karne ke bajay description me include karna chahunga, aur bhai koi khas jarurat nahi thi thi teeno ke separate point of view ko mention karne ki.
second, intro-bhai agar intro alag se dete to mujhe wo jyada acha lagata khair pehla update mere liye story ka hissa nahi hai mere liye ye ek badhiya sa dil ko chune wala Thoda sa emotional type ka confessing sa intro cum description tha.
ab aate hai asal story pe,
update 2
bhai hindi me rajasthani tadka waah yaar maza agaya boleto na kam na jyada, humour jabardast,
and the explanation of feelings like pehla pehla pyaar hai na filmy tha naa mangadant tha bilkul hi real incident lag raha tha,hero ka naam pahle jab padha to laga ki galat padha hai isliye zhoom karke dekhe(fenk rahe hai) to maa kasam raat ke 2 baje ghar me jab sanata tha tab achanak jor se has pad(yeh sach hai)
I mean really unexpected men
khir ab aate hai 3update par
yeh update bhi dhansu tha jaise sabhi riya naam ki ladkiyon ko req bhejna (sasura pagla gaya tha pyar ma) aur achanak se propose kar dena ye thoda unexpected tha utna unexpected riya ka use aproch krna bhi tha (saala sach me chutiya hai jo uske aise unexpected behaviour ke baujood kutto ki tarah piche pada hai)bhai chota sa review dene wala tha without ratings lekin likhte likhte ye tumhare update se bhi lamba ho gaya
inshort,
ⓩⓐⓑⓐⓡⓓⓐⓢⓣ story mujhe to lagi ab jinhe nahi padhni wo jaakr shaktimaan dekhe.......
akhir me seriously ek hi baat kehna chahunga...
ana quanda sachme......
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for for starting brand new storyreview
kya kahe hum.....??
shabd hi nahi hai hamare paas.
bimar hai lekin firbhi bhi tabiyat se review dene ki koshish karenge wo bhi teeno update ke,main koi rating nahi dene wala (agar aap rating chahte hai to mujhe pm kijiyega).
sabse pahle plot,
bhai plot copy kiya gaya hai
meri luv shtori
se (par naa wo koi randi thi aur naa main koi chutiya....)I mean kayiyo ke zindgi ki sachayi hai yeh ki kisiko dil-e-jaan se pyar karo aur mile sirf dhoka nafarat ke is bazar me sache pyar kimat fatne wale made in china ke condom se bhi sasti hai....khair plot jabardast hai ab aur waqt jaya naa karte huye mudde pe ate hai
update 1
waahhh.....
starting me hi lead character ka asali chehra dhikha diya jo thoda confusing hai aur hona bhi chahiye (character interesting banane ke liye) jo dheere dheere age chalkar explain hota jayega, bhai main yaha pe baaki ke kuch common aur spoiler bhari chize skip karunga aur sirf do important cheezo ke baare me baat karna chahunga,first,bhai main is first update ko story me included karne ke bajay description me include karna chahunga, aur bhai koi khas jarurat nahi thi thi teeno ke separate point of view ko mention karne ki.
second, intro-bhai agar intro alag se dete to mujhe wo jyada acha lagata khair pehla update mere liye story ka hissa nahi hai mere liye ye ek badhiya sa dil ko chune wala Thoda sa emotional type ka confessing sa intro cum description tha.
ab aate hai asal story pe,
update 2
bhai hindi me rajasthani tadka waah yaar maza agaya boleto na kam na jyada, humour jabardast,
and the explanation of feelings like pehla pehla pyaar hai na filmy tha naa mangadant tha bilkul hi real incident lag raha tha,hero ka naam pahle jab padha to laga ki galat padha hai isliye zhoom karke dekhe(fenk rahe hai) to maa kasam raat ke 2 baje ghar me jab sanata tha tab achanak jor se has pad(yeh sach hai)
I mean really unexpected men
khir ab aate hai 3update par
yeh update bhi dhansu tha jaise sabhi riya naam ki ladkiyon ko req bhejna (sasura pagla gaya tha pyar ma
) aur achanak se propose kar dena ye thoda unexpected tha utna unexpected riya ka use aproch krna bhi tha (saala sach me chutiya hai jo uske aise unexpected behaviour ke baujood kutto ki tarah piche pada hai)bhai chota sa review dene wala tha without ratings lekin likhte likhte ye tumhare update se bhi lamba ho gayainshort,
ⓩⓐⓑⓐⓡⓓⓐⓢⓣ story mujhe to lagi ab jinhe nahi padhni wo jaakr shaktimaan dekhe.......
akhir me seriously ek hi baat kehna chahunga...
ana quanda sachme......
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Thank you so much bhai for review..
Shuru me i love you isliye kaha hero ne ki asal me ye ek true story hai usi according kahani chal rahi hai well sorry for mistakes
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