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Romance Randi ka aashiq ( mohabbat ka mara ek awara)

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Wah bhai wah ye update to ekdum badhya hai aur bilkool sahi likha gaya hai.
Wo part padke bari hanssi aayi jab Aq ne ek pati ka girehbaam pakra ye soch kar k wo kissi aur aurat k pichwade par apna ragadh raha tha.
Ab Riya se bhi mulakat ho gayi aur pata bhi chal gaya aq kyun naam rakha hai.
Update passand aya bhai.
Eise ho likhte chalo.
Agle update ka intezar rahega
All the best

Thank you so much casi bhai Maine bhi apki hi copy karne ka try kita but puri tarah success nahi hua hu,, mere liye ye bahut khushi ki Baat Hai ki apko update pasand hai bahut bahut dhanyabaad...

Update post kar di hai
 
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Update 3.......

Mai : ap bhi use karti hai bf
Mere sawal k jawab me us ladki ne gardan hilayi aur seat se khadi ho gayi
Maine pucha kha chali ap
Riya mera stop Aa Gaya hai
Mai man me ye bus ko bhi abhi hi rukna tha........

Ab age....

Uske Jane k Baad Mai to uski hasi uski batein uske chahere me hi kho gaya tha alag ehsaas ek alag khusi ko aaj na jane kitne dino Baad mehsus kar raha tha

Gungunati hai ye hawaye....
Gungunata hai gagan...
Gaa raha hai ye sara aalam...
Zoobi doobi... Paa ram pam..


Jaisa filme hota hai ho raha hai hu wa hu...

Uske khayalo me khoye Rehne se na jane kab mera stop Aa Gaya Mai utra aur hotel ki taraf chalne laga aaj dil me ye dar nahi tha ki receptionist mujhe rokega ya mujhse sawal karega why I'm late etc.

Hotel Aa ke dekha to samne hi reception par receptionist tha
Mujhe dekh ke usne kaha ana aaj fir tum late ho gaye (ye mera hi classmate tha jiski yahan duty thi)
. Bhai tu kab time ka panchual hoga dekh bhai Teri class ka half time nikal chuka hai

ese hi na jane usne mujhe kitni hi batein suna di aur mai use dekh k bas muskurata raha

Receptionist ne mujhe muskurata dekha to pucha kya hua bhai tu itna muskura kyo raha hai

Mai jabse use dekha hai tab se teri bhi shakal achhi lagne lagi ye Kehte hue class ki taraf bhagne laga wo pichey chillata raha kya bola idhar Aa kamine....

Class me Aya to class lag rahi thi mai bhi pichey Aa ke apne dosto me mil ke khada ho gaya Paas me sara aur sameer they


Mujhe pass me khada dekha to Sara ne kaha Ana bhai meri assignment Bana di apne

Mai : Haa bana di ye Kehte hue bag se assignment nikal k use de di..

Sara khush hote hue : thank you so much bhai
Dear sis Mai tumse naraz hota tumne mere liye bas nahi rukwai but aaj nahi hu
Pucho kyo maine kaha sara se.

Sara sorry bhai Maine sameer ko bola tha lekin usne kaha bhi tha driver ko but us khusad driver ne roki nahi..


Hey you are my lovely sister tumhe mafi mangne ki zarurat nahi hai aur Acha hi hua jo aj bus nahi ruki mujhe khush hota dekh sara ne pucha bhai aaj ap bahut khush nazar Aa rahe hai kya Baat Hai

Fir Maine use aaj kaise mai by chance riya se mila sab bata diya.. Hamari khusur pusur teacher ne sun li bola kon hai jo class ko disturb kar raha hai uske itna hi Kehte ham dono chupp ho gaye aur sir & mam khane ki dishes ke bare me batane lage mai hotel management ka course kar raha tha chandigarh University se b. A. Hm me yahan Rajasthan me training thi meri
Puri class me Sara hi thi esi jisse mai Baat karta tha sameer ki girlfriend thi isliye aur hamesha se mujhe ek bahen ki bhi kami thi isliye use apni sagi bahen ki tarah manta tha mai. Mai kisi aur ladki se Baat nahi karta tha kyoki ye mere dharam mere rules k against tha waqio se Sirf kaam ki Baat hoti thi college aur study se related...

Class khatm hui to Mai second bunk karke hotel k gardan me ped ki chhawo me baith k dhoop sekne laga mere chahere se abhi bhi wo hasi nahi gayi thi jo riya se mil k mili thi muje ankho me chamak ke sath maine jeb ( pocket) se phone nikala socha riya ka Naam fb par search karunga Mai search karne laga fir apni hi bewakoofi par hatas hoke baith gaya kyoki mai riya ki profile picture kaisi hai nahi janta tha aur usse puchna bhi Yaad nhi tha isliye jitni bhi girls riya Naam se thi sab ko request karne laga...

Request ho Jane k Baad profile na puchne k liye khud ko vilame karne laga...

Kuch der Baad phone baja dekha to fb messager par mujhe happy birthday ke bahut se messages they happy birthday to you etc. aur sath hi ek request thi pickock horny ke naam se maine use thank you bola aur request accept Kar li real birthday kab tha mera mai khud nahi janta tha ye request isi ki thi jo mujhe birthday wish kar raha tha..

Wo i'd bahut se sticker send kare jaa rahi thi mujhe mai thank you bolte bolte thak gaya tha fir last time use thanks again bhai likha to uska reply aya...

I'd : ham boy nahi girl hai

Maine jyada bhaow na dete hue fir thanks kaha & apse mil k Acha laga aur phone ko again pocket me daal liya ye soch k koi launda hai jo fool bana raha hai kyoki ye wohi daur hai jisme londo ko girl banne ka shauq tha aur sale khud hi status dalte they ki tum fb par girl to ban gaye afsos Maa kabhi nahi ban paoge..

Kyoki mere bahut se friend esa karte they aur khud hi status dalte they mai unse hamesha kehta tha ye dhoka hai aur dhoka dena sabse bada paap hai chahe rasta koi bhi ho dhoka to aakhir dhoka hi hota hai..

Fir Mera phone baja dekha to usi ka message tha
I'd : apne shayad hame pehchnaa nahi ham riya hai jo apse subah bus me mile...

Itna padna tha aur mai wohi paglo ki tarah jhumne laga oye walle walle oye shava oye shava...

Maine bhi reply Kiya pehle nahi lekin ab janta hu kitni khubsurat hand writing hai apki... Itna Kehte hi khud bhi hasne laga

Ese hi usne mujhse related bahut se sawal puche than she ask do you have girlfriend

Maine bhi sach Kehte hue Haa me jawab diya


Riya ne pucha sath me hai
Maine reply Kiya nahi uski is December ko shadi jo gayi wo mujhe fb par mili thi she's Indonesian..

Riya : Acha
hmm aur ap single hai maine pucha

Riya : ji Haa mai single hu
Jab ye pada to meri khushi me. Chaar chand lag gaye they
Riya : to Kab tak hai apki yaha par training
Mai : 4 din Baad wapas apne shaher chala jaunga, vaise apse kuch puche

Riya : ha ha pucho
Mai : can be we friends
Riya : hindi me bolo na mai jyada English nahi janti
Mai : kya ap mujhse dosti karna pasand karegi actually jab se apko dekha hai tab se hi pura Pagal ho gaya hu..
Maine Anjaam ki parwah kiye bina wo Keh diya jisme aar ya par ki suition create ho jati hai

Maine voice message me kaha
Mai janta hu ham aaj mile hai lekin jab se apko dekha mai pura Pagal ho gaya hu ek alag hi khushi mili mujhe, i love you kya khayal hai mere bare me. ..
Maine message to send Kar diya esa lag raha tha ki maine jald bazi kar di na jane kitne hi sawal mere andar ghumne lage jinka jawab riya ko dena tha riya ne mere messages to dekh liya uske Baad reply nahi kiya kuch der manir wait Kiya to dekha wo off ho chuki hai...

To be

Continue......

Padh liya bhai.
Mast update hai. Sahi ja rahe ho. Full romance starting hai. Sab bilkool sidha sadha innocent ladke ki kahani hai. Usska bholepan ka koyi faeda na uthaaye.
Ab ye sach mein jaldbaazi mein I love u keh diya shuru mein hi dhat....
Chslo3ab dekhte hein Riya ka jawab kan aur kia ata hai.
Acha likh rahe ho.
Keep it up.
 

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bhai:congrats:for for starting brand new story
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kya kahe hum.....??
shabd hi nahi hai hamare paas.

bimar hai lekin firbhi bhi tabiyat se review dene ki koshish karenge wo bhi teeno update ke,main koi rating nahi dene wala (agar aap rating chahte hai to mujhe pm kijiyega).

sabse pahle plot,
bhai plot copy kiya gaya hai:bat:
meri luv shtori :love: se (par naa wo koi randi thi aur naa main koi chutiya....:bigboss:)I mean kayiyo ke zindgi ki sachayi hai yeh ki kisiko dil-e-jaan se pyar karo aur mile sirf dhoka nafarat ke is bazar me sache pyar kimat fatne wale made in china ke condom se bhi sasti hai....
khair plot jabardast hai ab aur waqt jaya naa karte huye mudde pe ate hai
update 1
Update 1 ( friends ye story narrator, Randi, aur apna aashiq teeno sunayenge) Randi ki jubani... Kehte Hai mohabbat jitni sachchi ho utna hi Dard deti hai........ Ap log soch rahe honge ki Dard mujhe hua nahi Esa nahi hai... Jahan tak mujhe Yaad hai meri fake Matlab shadi to asli thi usse lekin mere liye nahi wo yahi manta tha ki meri usse shadi real hai kyoki wo Ishq me andha itna tha mere siwa use kuch dikhayi hi nahi deta tha.... Haa to Mai kahan thi Dard mujhe hota hai mujhe wo bhi Ishq me hehe hehe my foot... Aq( name changed) Aq mujhse kehta tha - maine pighla diya hai pattahro ko.... Ek tera dil pighalta hi nahi.... Kehne ko to Mai Randi hu.. Are are mai wo Randi nahi hu jo kotho par rehti hai... Ap logo ki bhasa me kahu to Mai wo Randi hu jise duniya wale ek sabhya parivaar me Rehne wali ladki samajhte hai... Maine kabhi kisi se pyaar nahi kiya na jane kitne hi ladke meri life me aaye agar tadad ki Baat karu to 100 se jyada hi honge... Ye bhi nahi janti na jane kitno ne mere liye apni nase kati meri Awaaz sunne k liye itne Pagal they ki mujhe bhi hasi aati thi majnuo par... Haa ek Baat zarur kahungi Kehne ko to maine na jane kitne hi dil tode lekin esa koi nahi tha jiske sath sex na kiya ho Maine apne har ek aashiq ki pyaas bujhayi thi unhe chodne ( break-up) se pehle... Mai Sirf apni pyaas bujhane k liye logo ko fasati thi pyaas bujh Jane k Baad goodbye fir usse koi rishta nahi rakhti thi mai... Maine sabhi ka dil todne se pehle sabhi ko unke hisse ka Pyaar bakhubi diya kisi se na paise liye na kabhi koi gift liya Sirf sex hi karte hotel me kabhi phone par... Ek esa aya meri zindagi me jisne mujhe aur meri soch hi badal ke rakh di jisne mujh par apna sab kuch hi qurban kar diya sab mujhse sex karne ki zidd karte mai usse sex karne ki zidd karti hawas ka namo nishaan bhi nahi tha usme .... Aq Haa yahi Naam tha uska 21 saal ka naujwaan chokra ... Jiske dil k andar insaniyat k liye beinteha pyaar tha jiski jaban par kabhi koi jhut nahi tha agar mai sach kahu to jhut se uska dur dur tak koi rishta nahi tha Apne wado ( promises) ko pura karne ke liye jaan ki bazi laga deta tha ... Wo esa tha khud to bhuka reh leta lekin mangne wale ko khali hath nahi lautata tha ....... But.......... Hahahaha mujhse milne ke baad maine to uske character ko hi Maar diya uski himmat ko uski sacchai ko aur..... Aq ko bhi.. .... Ye duniya chand tak to pahuch gayi lekin insaniyat se gir gayi hai... Aq jaise lakho me ek hote hai jo dusro ke liye jina chahte hai.. Uske sapne bahut bade bade they kehta tha mai....... ( age pata chalega) Uski baton par hasi aati thi mujhe kyoki impossible jo namumkin hai use karne ko kehta tha.. Hahahaha mujhse yani Randi riya ( name changed ) se milne ke baad wo mera paltu kutta ban gaya kutto se bhi jyada wafadar ... Ye kahani mere zulmo ki hai jo maine us par kiye hai .......... Narrotor ki jubani.. Introduction... Riya 18 saal ki ladki dekhne me bahut jyada nahi thik thak khubsurat ladki Awaaz esi ki jo sune wo Pagal ho jaye iski do behne hai ek 14 year ki hai ek 4 saal ki ek bhai hai jo iska iski umar ka Baap auto chalata hai iski Maa housewife hai ye middle class family se belong karti rajasthan se.. Aagi.. Ise dalla Keh sakte hai ye riya ka padosi cousin bhai hai.. Aq 21 saal ka from punjab... Kehte Hai na sachche insano ko ye duniya wale bewakoof Kehte Hain ye mahasye bhi wohi hai.... Aq ke friend : sameer Aq ka ham umar girlfriend bhi hai iski... Ame Aq ka friend Aur waqi k character age ate jayenge... To be Continue......
waahhh.....:applause:starting me hi lead character ka asali chehra dhikha diya jo thoda confusing hai aur hona bhi chahiye (character interesting banane ke liye) jo dheere dheere age chalkar explain hota jayega, bhai main yaha pe baaki ke kuch common aur spoiler bhari chize skip karunga aur sirf do important cheezo ke baare me baat karna chahunga,
first,bhai main is first update ko story me included karne ke bajay description me include karna chahunga, aur bhai koi khas jarurat nahi thi thi teeno ke separate point of view ko mention karne ki.
second, intro-bhai agar intro alag se dete to mujhe wo jyada acha lagata khair pehla update mere liye story ka hissa nahi hai mere liye ye ek badhiya sa dil ko chune wala Thoda sa emotional type ka confessing sa intro cum description tha.

ab aate hai asal story pe,
update 2
bhai hindi me rajasthani tadka waah yaar maza agaya boleto na kam na jyada, humour jabardast,
and the explanation of feelings like pehla pehla pyaar hai na filmy tha naa mangadant tha bilkul hi real incident lag raha tha,hero ka naam pahle jab padha to laga ki galat padha hai isliye zhoom karke dekhe(fenk rahe hai) to maa kasam raat ke 2 baje ghar me jab sanata tha tab achanak jor se has pad(yeh sach hai)
I mean really unexpected men:lotpot:
khir ab aate hai 3update par
yeh update bhi dhansu tha jaise sabhi riya naam ki ladkiyon ko req bhejna (sasura pagla gaya tha pyar ma:love:) aur achanak se propose kar dena ye thoda unexpected tha utna unexpected riya ka use aproch krna bhi tha (saala sach me chutiya hai jo uske aise unexpected behaviour ke baujood kutto ki tarah piche pada hai)bhai chota sa review dene wala tha without ratings lekin likhte likhte ye tumhare update se bhi lamba ho gaya

inshort,
ⓩⓐⓑⓐⓡⓓⓐⓢⓣ story mujhe to lagi ab jinhe nahi padhni wo jaakr shaktimaan dekhe.......

akhir me seriously ek hi baat kehna chahunga...

ana quanda sachme......:lotpot:

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Padh liya bhai.
Mast update hai. Sahi ja rahe ho. Full romance starting hai. Sab bilkool sidha sadha innocent ladke ki kahani hai. Usska bholepan ka koyi faeda na uthaaye.
Ab ye sach mein jaldbaazi mein I love u keh diya shuru mein hi dhat....
Chslo3ab dekhte hein Riya ka jawab kan aur kia ata hai.
Acha likh rahe ho.
Keep it up.

Thank you so much bhai for review..

Shuru me i love you isliye kaha hero ne ki asal me ye ek true story hai usi according kahani chal rahi hai well sorry for mistakes
 
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