Incest Rishta

[amita]

Aapne apani kavita hata kar accha nahi kiya
Anyway saath banaye rakhiye
Dhanyawad


।। होता है जब असर साथ मे, तो हर शब्द कविता हो जाता है,
इंतज़ार का भी कभी तजुर्बा लीजिये, वक्त अमिता हो जाता है।।





बस तन्हाई के सताएं है जुर्म और हमारा कोई ख़ास नही,
के न यूं हमें नज़रों में अपनी बेईमान करो....
यक़ीनन न होगा आपका दामन ऐसी "कविताओं" से खाली,
के बस कुछ ज़रा सा तो हम पर इत्मीनान करो ।।



आपने साथ बनाये रखने की ताकीद की है तो और तजुर्बा सुनिए.......

है तकाज़ा बेवफाइयों का पसरा,
बेग़ैरती दिलों में जहां तक है....
ये तो मुक़द्दर का खेल है साहब,
देखें साथ हमारा कहाँ तक है।।

Dhanyawad

 

[amita]

तकल्लुफ न उठाइये तारीफ़ों का,
बे नज़र है ये इनका कोई ईमान नही....
चाहत फ़क़त किसी इंसान की है,
यक़ीनन हम कोई बेईमान नही।।

Bahut khub

 

[amita]

Waiting for next update

Update likh rahi hu, abhi pura nahi hua hai.
Pura hote hi post kar dungi
Dhanyawad

 

[Iron Man]

Update likh rahi hu, abhi pura nahi hua hai.
Pura hote hi post kar dungi
Dhanyawad

Intzar rahega shandar update ka

 

[amita]

aapne jo sanket diye hain....................wo sab meri najar mein hain.............

khaskar ke mohan ki dual identity......................
is shahar mein alag......................
aur dusre shahar (shayad puna) mein alag

aur yahi ruchika ke sath relation ko ek alag pahchan dega
..................................
dusre ruchika ke maa-baap ka jikr kiya tha apne shuruati update mein...........
ruchika............... mohan aur sandhya ki bei nahin hai................... lekin hai pariwar ki hi kisi close member ki beti
...................................................

mein naraj ya gussa nahin hoon........................ sirf apna point of view logical way mein bataya hai meine
unhi points ke base par jo apne story mein diye hain

anyway...................... keep it up
waiting for next eagerly

ps : ap pahle ruchika-mohan ka flashback complete karein fir kahani present me lekar chalein

Aapka kahani me itni jayada dilchaspi aur uske har pehlu ko batana ek acche pathak, vishleshak aur samikshak ke guno ko darshata hai jo aap me kut kut kar bhare hue hain.

Main aapse abhi iss bare me behas na karte hue bas itna hi kanhugi ki aur bhi bahut sare sanket hain jo aage chal kar pata lagenge. Abhi bata dene se sara maza khatam ho jayega.


Aapki iss baat se main bilkul sehmat hu ki pehle atitavlokan darshaya jaye balki ye mulbhut kahani thi, lekin pathako ke dabav me thoda badalna pada.

Abhi jis vishay par baat chal rahi hai usse samapt karke vapis atitavlokan par kahani chalegi.


Aap jaise jagruk pathkon ki alochana bhi acchi lagati hai kyonki usme kanih na kanih prerna chupi hoti hai

Dhanyavad

 

[amita]

Intzar rahega shandar update ka

Update pura nahi hua, ab kal aayega
Dhanyawad

 

[Rahul]

waiting update

 

[Iron Man]

Update pura nahi hua, ab kal aayega
Dhanyawad

Intzar rahega lajwab update ka

 

[vikram_singh]

Dear Amita,

This is the first time ever that I am commenting on any story on this or any other similar site. One of the reasons for doing that is for commending you for your good storyline and writing skills. I am not a frequent visitor to the site but whenever I do visit I try to catch up on the updates on stories I follow.

From whatever I gather from your responses to comments on your posts, you are obviously a good human being as you make it a point to respond to every comment and suggestion received. But, to put things in perspective, you are not here on this site because you are a good human being. You are here because of your good, creative and effective writing skills. I am amused as well as piqued at the way you let the writer in you accede control to the good person in you by letting aggressive readers dictate terms as to the way forward in your story. Oftentimes, I find you trying to justify a particular twist/turn in your story in your response to a comment by a reader. As the creator of the story, you owe no justification to anybody for anything in your story.

Do go through the comments of your readers, show gratitude for their for their analysis and good comments but try to avoid detailed responses to every one of them as they seem to be consuming a lot of your productive time and influencing your creativity.

Cheers!!!!

 

[vikram_singh]

A humble suggestion for admins of the site.

A new post in every story should an update of the story only. Every comment or likes of readers should not appear as new posts but they should appear in a comments section of the last posted update only. Oftentimes, a reader is going through endless pages/posts to get to an actual update to the story. This is very frustrating for a reader.

As for some writers who leave their stories unfinished midway and not responding to any requests for updates, I find they have all the time to actively comment on other writers’ stories. Such unfinished threads for which no updates have been posted for a month should be removed from the site as they make the site appear to be unprofessionally handled. The only threads visible on the site should either be for completed or currently active ones.This site at present has a lot of unfinished stories bringing a bad name to the site. Any such writers leaving their stories unfinished should be blocked or their membership removed/discontinued.