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Fantasy Saurya - ek youdha (Completed)

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Hi friend maine xforum pr kafi stories padi hai aur ab mai bhi apni ek story post karne ja raha hu ab jyada wakt na lete huye
story p chalte h jaise jaise log milte rahenge unke bare m batata jaunga .
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UPDATE 3

New chachter

pankaj chauhan - scientist hai aur India m Russian maffia k kaam sambhalta h

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Main jaldi s taiyar hua aur niche gaya to dekha ki ek aadmi Digvijay uncle ko aur Bobby uncle ko marre ja raha tha aur sath-sath ro bhi rha tha aur ek choti s cute si ladki dikhne m bilkul kisi doll ki tarah lag rhi thi wo poonam massi ki goad m baithi hui thi .
Jaise hi m aage gaya wo aadmi mujhe dekhte hi gale laga liya aur bola " Bilkul Deep jaisa chahra h tumhra aur akhen ek dum s saifali ki tarah"
unka bas intna bolna tha ki sabhi n apna sir peet liya . Mom baat ko sambhalte hue

mom- are vikram ab chodo bhi ise aur apni bahan s bhi milne do.

main bhi pahle to soch m pad gaya in Vikaram mahasay ki baat sun par fir maine apna dyan us cute c bacchi p diya jo kb s maasi ke piche chipi ja rahi thi sayad usse yaha sabhi anjan lag rahe the iss liye

main dhire - dhire uski taraf janne laga aur wo apni mummy k aur karib hoti jaa rhi thi ki tabhi maine apne pocket s kuch chochlates nikale aur uski taraf kiye jinhe dekh wo apni mummy (poonam massi) ko dekhne lagi jaise puch rahi ho "kya main chochlates le sakti hu" aur poonam maasi n bhi use akhon s haa kaha
Ab jab use uski mummy s haa mil gai thi to wo turant hi mere hatho s choclates ko chin liya aur phir s apni mom k paas chali gai aur hum sab muskurane lage
poonam - Beta ye tumhare bhaiya h (meri oor dekh ) Saurya ye hai saifali meri pyari si pari .
Apni mom ki baat sun kr saifali mere pass ayi aur mujhe dekhne lagi jaise pahchanne ki kosis kr rhi ho aur main to use dekh jaise kho hi gya tha .

Tabhi Tiya , Tanya aur Shilpa didi aa gaye aur usko dekhne lage ki mom n bola
mom-beta ye h tumlogo ki choti bahan saifali jo aaj tum dono k birthday p aai h
Tiya - are ye to ekdum s doll jaisi lagti h
(aur saifali k gaal kicch diye ) ye to bahut hi cute h
Tanya - Dekho to ekdum pari jaisi lagti h (usne bhi saifali k gaal khicch diya)
saifali ko ye accha nhi lagta tha ki koi uske gol-matol gallo ku khinche usse gussa aa raha tha pr wo chup thi par kab tak q ki kuch aisa hi Shipla didi n bhi kiya aur ussi k sath saifali rone lagi hum logo ko to kuch samajh hi nhi aaya ki ye roo q rhi h to mausa ji bole
Vikram - arre koi iske gaal khichhe ye isko pasand nhi iis liye roo rhi h
main - (apni bahno k taraf jhuta gussa dikha kr) q paresan kr rahi ho tum sab meri angel ko dekho rula diya na ab m tumhari choclates bhi isse hi de dunga .
meri baat sun kr tino samj gayi aur wo bhi roone jaisa muh bana natak karne lagi aur ye sun saifali khus ho gai k mai usko choclates dunga aur wo roote hue hasne muskurane lagi . Badi cute lag rhi thi wo us waqt pr jab usne un tino k muh dekha to wo boli
saifali - bhaiya aap na unko bhi chochlates dena nahi to m app s baat nhi karungi
main - ( kitni achi bachi h y ) thik h angle main unko bhi dunga par party k baad .

abtak karib 6 baj gaye the decorations bhi ho gayi thi aur mehman bhi aane lage the

main ab apni angel k sath baate kr raha tha wo bhi apna ek bhai paa kar bahut kush lag rahi thi.
saifali - bhaiya aapko pata h meri friends na mujhe chidaya krti thi ki mera koi bhai nahi h ab m unko aapke bare m bataungi aur ab aap mere sath hi rhoge . hai na
main - are angel ye kb decide hua ki mai aapke saath rhunga (paresan krte hue)
saifali - kya app fir s mujhe chood kr chale jaoge (roone jaise sakal bana kr)

jab maine usse asse dekha to khud pr gussa aaya aur maine usse gale laga kr bola - arre mai to majak kr raha tha m hamesa aapke sath hi rahunga
saifali (mere gaal pr kiss krte hue) - sachhi bhaiya
main - mucchi my angel

Isi bich mera gift bhi aa gaya tha jo the smart watchs meri pario k liye . iski khas baat ye thi k hmesha mere phone s connected rhti aur agar 500 m k range m koi bhi gadbad ho to ye turant hi mujhe bata deti (isse MI6 k logo k liye banaya gaya tha ). Maine dononko unki watches di aur wo dono bhi khus ho gai .

asse hi party khatam ho gai aur ab rah gaye the bas mom, dad , vikram, Digvijay, mohit ,bobby, suddha , poonam , shilpa , reshma , aur main . Dad n Tiya ,Tanya aur saifali ko upar room m bhej dia tha
Main waha pr baita sabko bas ghure jaa raha tha mujhe yakin hi nhi ho raha tha ki aaj jo bhi ho raha tha mere sath wo sach hai ya nhi ki tabhi dad bole
Dad - beta janta hu tumhare man m bahut s sawal honge . Tum ab apne sawal puch sakte ho.
Maine pahle to sabki or dekha aur phir puchna suru kiya
Main - mom aap mujhe nana ji k bare m batao aur wo wajah bhi jiske karan aaj aap aur dad essi jindgi ji rahe ho.
Mom ne mujhe nana ji aur unke family k bare m wahi bataya joki shilpa didi n bataya tha aur fir boli
mom - Beta unlogo ko pyar ki koi kadar nhi h un logo n meri choti bahan Saifali(ye mom ki bahan h) ko na sirf ghar s nikala balki usko marne ki kosis bhi ki sirf iss liye q ki wo Deep s pyar krti thi aur shadi krna chahti thi. Fir maine aur tumhare dad n unki shadi karwai to wo hmare bhi piche pad gaye unki wajah s mera 3 saal ka beta muhjse bichad gaya aaj tk rooti hu uski yaad m (aur issi k sath sabhi k aasu bhne lage) pata h beta jab un logo ko Deep aur Saifali ka pata chala to unlogo n unko kidnap kiya aur isse bhi man nhi bhara to unhone unko maar diya (aur mom aur jor s roone lagi).
Main jaldi s uth kr unke paas gaya aur unko chup karane laga jab wo chup hui to mujhe gale s laga liya aur poonam maasi ki or dekh boli
mom- shyad issi liye kisi ko kuch nahi bataya tha maine choti us waqt to mujhe kisi pr bhi yaken nhi tha .
Massi - apne jo kiya sahi kiya didi pr ab aur nhi ab aap sab hmare sath saher chaloge aur hmare sath rahoge ab waqt h unlogo ko unke kiye ki saza dene ka
Mausa - sahi kaha poonam un logo n mere do dosto(Deep and saifali) ko mara h ab to waqt hai unko unke kie ki saza dene ka
Mom - nahi hm khi nahi jayege ek beta to kho hi chuki hu ab aur nhi hm kahi nhi jayege( bolte hue mom n mujhe kas k pakad liya tha)
Dad - sahi kaha sanjana hum ab yaha s bhi dur chale jayenge taki unko hamara pata na chale
Mausa - Bhai sahab aap ye kya bol rhe ho paap unlogo n kiya aur dukh aap log jhelna chah rahe ho kab tk uuhi bhagte firoge .
Massi - Jiju kya apko ab hmpr bhi bharosa nhi rha jitna pyar aap dono Deep aur Saifali s krte h utna hi hm bhi karte h aur hm kabhi unke katilon ko nhi chodenge .
Digvijay(fufa ) jo chup chap mujjhe ghure ja rha tha wo bhi bol pade - Bhai sahaab ab waqt aa chuka h ab hame samne aaana hi hoga kbtk chupkar baitege
Bobby aur shuddha n bhi yahi kaha par mom dad to manne ko razi hi nhi the maane bhi q sabse jyada to undono n hi khoya tha wo bas na krte rahe ki tabhi main bola
Main -(gusse m) mom - dad aaplog bahut roo liye ab roone ki baari unki hogi ab m unhe bataunga ki kisi ko khone ka dard kya hota hai aur ab hum log yaha nhi saher m hi rhenge m bhi to dekhu kisme itni himmat h ki mere mom dad ko hath lagaye aur ab aap dono na nhi karoge appko meri kasam.
ye sunte hi mom n mujhe ek chanta khinch k diya chaaataaak aur rone lagi

Main bhi waha s utha gya aur sidha ghar s nikal kar pahuch gaya talab k pass .
Raat ka waqt tha koi bhi yaha nahi tha . yaha par to log din m bhi aane s darte the karan tha ki is talab k aas pass logo ko sayya dikhai padta tha pr ye mera favorate jagah thi yaha mujhe bahut apnapan sa lagta tha main bahut hi khush ho jata tha yaha aakar.
Main abhi yaha baitha hi tha ki mere kano m kisi k khusfusane ki awaje aane lagi

sayya1- Dekho malik udas hai. hame kuch krna chahiye unke liye.
saya 2- abhi hm kuch nhi kr sakte unke liye nhi to malik k upar khatra ho sakta h
saya 3- dekho wo to idhar hi dekh raje h kya wo hame sun sakte hai
sayya1- nahi y nahi ho sakta jab tk unki aayu (age) 18 varsh n ho jaye wo hame sun sakte
saya3- pr wo to yahi dekh rahe hai kaya aisa ho sakta h ki unko unki kuch saktiya waqt s phle hi mil gai ho .
saya2 - agar aisa hua h to malik khatre m pad jayenge hame unki rakha karni chahiye
saya1 - aesa ho mumkinto nhi par agr hua hai to hame un saktio ko rokna hoga bahar aane s abhi bhi 60 roshani(days) baki h unki saktiyo k ujagar hone m

wahi main jaha baitha tha mujhe bas dhemi-dhemi awaze aa rahi thi pr samaj ganta kuch nahi aa raha tha .
main- (awaz ki oor) kon h waha ? chale jao yaha s nhi to bahut marunga

mera bas aisa bolna tha ki tabhi waha ekdum s ujala hojata hai aur wo roshani k golo m badal kar mere ander sama jata h aur m behosh ho jata hue

jab aakhen khuli to mai kisi jungle m tha aur mere samne ek baba type aadmi baitha hua tha wo bas aakhen band kiye dhyan m leen tha aur m usko dekhe ja raha tha ki ye kon hai. unke chahre pr ek ajeeb si chamak thi jo mujhe santi de rahi thi . kuch der unko uhi dekne k baad m jab aaspaas dekhne laga to paya main kisi jungle m hu aur mere kapde bhi change ho gaye hain .
maine ek armor pahn rakha tha aur sath hi mere paas 2 talware thi aur ek tir-kaman aur ek chamakta hua khanjar jispar dragon bana hua tha .
meiri body bhi badi majboot lag rahi thi mujhe m ek dum kisi anime movie k hero jaisa lag raha tha pr meri phatti padi thi ek to pata nhi kaise m yaha aagya aur ab ye sab m bahut hairan tha
Main abhi khud ko dekh hi raha tha ki wo baba bola .
Baba- putra kuch chintit nazar aa rahe ho kya baat hai( muskurate hue unhone pucha)
main -aap kon ho aur mai yaha kaise
baba - tumne hi to mujhe bulaya h m to bas tumhara ek subh chintak hu
main - mm....maine n..nhi bulaaya aapko
aap ho kon aur kya chahte ho mujhse
baba - putra m tumse bas kuch bate krne aaya hu tumhare sapno k bare m
Ye sun kr to m pagal hi ho gaya q ki aaj tk maine kisi ko bhi apne sapno k bare m nhi bataya
main - aap ho kon aur mere sapno k bare m kaise jante ho
baba - q ki wo sapne maine hi diye h tumhe to mujhe to pata hi hoga
main - kya mere mathe pr kuch likha h jo aap ye sab bole ja rahe ho sapne bhi koi de sakta h kisi ko
baba - ye sapne nhi h ye tumhare aane wali jindgi ki kuch dundhli si tasveere hai
main - kya app bhi kuch bhi phekte ho dekho jaldi mujhe yaha s nikalo nahi to main jo apke umar ki lihaz kr raha hu wo main bhul jaunga . waise ik baat batao kitne saal k ho tum.
baba - beta meri umr to karib 1327 saal h isse pahle ki tum kuch aur bolo meri baat suno "tum koi aam insan nhi ho tumme bahut sari saktiya h jo jaag rahi h waqt s phle hi jinpe m kawach lagane wala hu q ki tumhara sharir abhi us layak nhi ab tumhe m roj yahi milunga aur tumko yog sadhna shikauga jisse tumhe apne ye sabhi vidyaye ( knowledge) wapas yaad aa jayegi aur thmhe puri nistha k sath y sab krna hoga q ki waqt bahut kam h hamare pass.

main ye sun jor jor s hasne laga fir bola
main- sorry babaji apne galt bande ko chuna h bewakoof bannane k liye m king hu king aaj tak k RAW MOSSAD AUR SEAL k sare records tode hai maine wo bhi itni si umr m agar fir s mujhe bewakoof banane ki kossis ki to ulta latka dunga
meri baat sun baba muskurane lage aur mujhe gussa aane laga aai bhi q na ek ladka jo 17 saal ki umar m na sirf RAW S training li MOSSAD n bhi jisko kud chun k train kiya aur fir NAVY SEAL n unki manno to m abhi world ka best agent hu usse ek pagal sa buddha kuch bhi bole ja raha h upper s has bhi raha h
maine bhi gusse m unko challenge kr diya aur wo to jaise issi ka intazar hi ke rhe the

fir kya maine appna pose liya kungfu ka aur unka wait karne laga ki kb wo aaye aur mujh pe hmla kre par ye kya m jamin par gira tha wo hile bhi nhi aur muje to mere pure body m bahut dard ho raha tha.

jab maine unki taraf dekha to wo muskura rahe the mai gusse m fir khada hone laga aur khada hua hi tha ki fir s m jamin pr pada hua tha ab hilne ki takat na bachi thi aur wo to bus muskuraye jaa rahe the

Maine kaise bhi kr unke pairo k paas gaya aur bola
main- mujhe sikhna hai apse master
baba - (apne hath aage kiya aur unke haath m ek katora aa gaya jisme kuch tha aur unhone meri orr usse bada) isse pilo aur ab tum kal wapas yaha aa karyog sadhana sikhoge taki apni saktio ko punh prapt kr sako .Ab tumhe apne ghar jana chahiye .

issi k sath maine wo katore k andar k kadhe ko piya aur baba n mere sar pr apna hath fera aur m wapas us talab k pass pahuch gaya .
jab m utha to mera phone baj raha tha dad ka call tha maine pick kiya.
main - ha dad
mom - main hu tu mera phone q nhi utha rha tha kha hai tu subah k 4 baje h ham sab tujhe kab s dhund rahe h aur tu h k (aur mom rone lagi)
main - mom main aakar batata hu app chup ho jao please mom
mom - jaldi s aa warna achha nhi hoga
call cut
main turant utha aur daudte hua ghar pahuch gaya . pr ek baat ajeeb thi maine 20 minute ka rasta 5 min m complete kr liya tha
ghar aa ya to sab log hall m hi baithe the mere aate hi mom n mujhe gale s laga liya.
aur sab mujhse puchne laga chala gaya tha ... bla...bla...

In sawalo k dauran 2 log the jo mujhe bas ghure ja rahe the wo the mere Fufa aur Didi pata nhi q maine bhi jyada socha nahi aur ignore kr diya. Aur sabko bol diya ki m bas todi der akela rhna chahta tha to apne kheto m chala gaya tha aur wahi mujhe neend aa gai to so gaya.
Sabhi mere jawab s santusth nazar aaye siwaye unhi 2 logo k pr wo bole kuch nahi.

Ab main apne room mai aa gaya aur fresh hone laga tabhi mujhe un baba k bare m yaad aaya mujhe laga koi sapna hoga aur waise bhi bade ajeeb sapne aate the mujhe. pr tabhi mujhe koi awaj sunai di .
Awaj - Malik wo sapna nhi hakikat h aur apko ab taiyar hona hoga.
Main awaj sun kr room m edhar udhar dekhne laga ki fir awaj aai
Awaj -Malik main aapke ander hu
Main - kk..koon ho tum aur mazak kyun kr rhe ho koi kisi k andar kaise ho sakta h
Awaj - Malik main apki book hu jise kal un baba n azad kr diya h isiliye m apse baat kr pa rahi hu
Aur isi k sath ek kitab mere dil k paas s nikli aur hawa m udne lagi ye ek Lal rang ki kitab thi aur jab maine usse chua to mujhe bhut tez shock sa laga aur m sidha dewar s ja laga. aur wo kitab fir s bolna suru ho gai

Kitab - malik aap abhi kamjor ho aap ko phle apne chakro ko jagana hoga tab hi aap mujhe chu sakte ho tab tk m apke baki k saktio k tk phuchne ka rasta dhundti hu

Itna bol kr wo book khud gayab ho gai aur mai bas dekhta raha .Kuch der baad mom n mujhe khane pr bullayaaur m niche chala gaya

Aaj sunday tha to Mausa Maasi bhi hamare yaha hi rh gaye. Saifali , meri angel ne to breakfast k time hi bol diya tha sabko ki wo mujhe aur Meri bahno ko apne saath he le k jayegi nhi to yahi rahegi. Issi liye ham sabko Dad n jaldi s taiyar hone ko bol diya aur hm bhi apni packing krne lage .
Mom aur Dad p to saifali n jaise jaadu hi kr diya ho wo jo bhi bolti mom dad ready ho jate sayad isliye q ki wo hubhahu saifali mausi ki tarh hi dikhti thi (massi n photo dikhai thi mujhe) aur sayad bate bhi unki tarah hi karti thi

aise hi karib 4 baje k aas pass meri faimlyaur mohit uncle mausa , mausi k sath unke car s chal pade unke ghar. Fufa ji aur Bobby uncle ne kaha ki wo 3-4 din m gaon ka kam nipta kr saher aa jayege .

Saher pahuchte pahuchte hame karib raat k 10 baj gaye.
Main car m baita apne agents ko unke kaam samjha raha tha jo ki ek secret base banane ka tha seher m kisi sunsan jagah taki m waha s operate kr saku.
Sath hi sath unko apne Nana ji k case jo ki koi terrorist group ko funding krne ki thi k bare m pata karne ko kaha.

jab tk main ye kr rha tha tabtak mausa ji ka ghar bhi aa gaya. Isko ghar kahna meri galti hogi q ki ye bunglow h wo bhi bahut bada aur sunder.
Ham sidha ander chale gae aur ander s to ghar aur accha tha .
Raat ho gai thi to hame apne apne rooms jo phle hi taiyar the unme chale gaye aur m so gaya . Sote hi m jungle m phuch gaya aur wo baba mere samne aa gaye m bas unhe dekhe ja rha tha.
Baba - beta tumse us kitab ne kya kaha
main ye sun k chowk gaya k inko kaise pata chala fir yaad aate hi normal ho gaya ki inhone hi to book ko azad kiya tha
main - ji usne to chakra jagrit krne k liye bola tha
Baba - to ab hm wahi karenge . kya tum kabhi dhyan m baithe ho (meditate).
main - ji baba jab bhi man assant hota tha to baith jata tha
Baba - chalo thik h ab m tumhe apne chakro ko jagrit krne k barre m bataunga aur aisa bolte bolte hi unhone apna hath mere sir par rakha aur pata nhi kaise pr mere dimag m 7 chakro k bare m aur kaise unko jagrit karna h y ek dum kisi movie ki tarah chalne lagi aur mujhe pata chal gaya k mujhe kya krna h .
Baba- kya tum samajh gaye
main - ha baba m samajh gaya hu
Baba - beta bas ek baat ka dhyan rakhna ki ye kam tumhe 7 din m hi pura krna h na to kam aur na hi jyada agar tum pahle hi ye krne late ho to tumhare sharir us urja ko jhel nhi payega ye sharir bahut kamjor h tumhe isse ek din ka waqt dena hoga taki ye us sakti ko dharan kr sake ek baar tum isme kamyab ho jao fir m tumhe aage k nirdesh dunga ab tumhe roj yaha aana hai aur roj apne ek chakra ko jagrit krna hai

Itna bol Baba gayab ho gaye aur main lag gaya apne charka jagane .
 

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Nice update bhai
Bhai hero agar agent he to wo fufa ki nazar ko ingor kyun kar rahahai
bhai Sayad usko pata ho fufa k bare m yaa wo kuch jyada hi paresan ho gaya h apne sapno k chakar m yaa fir jo uski life usko surprise p surprise diye ja rahi h uske karn bhi ho sakta h
 

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bhai Sayad usko pata ho fufa k bare m yaa wo kuch jyada hi paresan ho gaya h apne sapno k chakar m yaa fir jo uski life usko surprise p surprise diye ja rahi h uske karn bhi ho sakta h
Thik hai bhai lekin itna ignore ek best agent keliye achha nahin lagta
 
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