Fantasy Saurya - ek youdha (Completed)

Ristrcted · Apr 11, 2020

Hi friend maine xforum pr kafi stories padi hai aur ab mai bhi apni ek story post karne ja raha hu ab jyada wakt na lete huye
story p chalte h jaise jaise log milte rahenge unke bare m batata jaunga .
so lets go

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aditya · Jul 14, 2020

Excellent update

Black water · Jul 14, 2020

Super fantastic update

Chinturocky · Jul 14, 2020

Behtareen update.
To Marcus abhi bhi kaid hai prithvi per.
Aur ye log jaldi jaldi sab kam nipta rahe hai.
Henry ka abhi tak kuchh pata nahi usaki entry kab hogi.

Aryanv · Jul 14, 2020

Awesome update bro

Shahrukh · Jul 14, 2020

Awesome and fabulous update bhai keep posting

Arjun Singh 72 · Jul 14, 2020

Nice update
Pahle ek jaadu se shurya ki life main watt laga tha yaha mohini ke jaadu pata nahi Kya hoga
Keep posting

Asif khan · Jul 14, 2020

Classified said:
UPDATE - 84

Ab tak

Saurya ne kuch plans banaye hai aur unpe kaam kar raha hai

Ab aage

Chaliye ek jhalak hum future ki bhi dekh lete hai jaha se hamara hero gaayab ho chuka hai aur Maarcuss ji usko dhundh rahe hai.

Maarcuss- Wo Saurya uska kuch pata chala.

Wo ye sawal apne ek bahut hi bade mahel mein baitha hua puch raha tha.

Jordon- Nahi wo saayad maar gaya hoga karega bhi kya jinda rah kar ab.

Maarcuss- wo maar nahi sakta jab tak main naa chahu pata karo uska aur unn logo ka kya hua jinka humne istemal kiya tha uss Saurya ko iss halat mein laane ka.

Fready- wo wo saare abhi jail main hai waha roote rahte hai apne logo ke marne ke gum mein aur wo jo Dragon ki bacchi hai naa usko humne chinne ki koshish ki to uss Solar dragon ne hamare sainikon ko maar diya. uska kuch karna hoga.

Maarcuss- nahi usko chod do wo bacchi hai abhi. Main chaahe jitna bhi bura kyun naa hu par ek Maa ka dard samajh sakta hu.

Jordon- Maharaj ye aap kah rahe ho jisne Manjulika ko marwaya tha jab wo Maa banne wali thi ye aap kah rahe ho.

Maarcuss- waha meri jaan ko khatra tha jo ab nahi hai aur uss dragon ki bachi ka maine kuch socha hai. Tum sab jaao

Wo 5cho waha se nikal gaye.

Fready- Dekh rahe ho isko ye bas apni jaan kaa soch raha hai. Yaad hai uss Margret ko maarne ki baat nikali thi maine to kya kaha tha isne.

Jordon- yaad hai dost aur wo bhi yaad hai jab uss Niharika ko dhudhne ki baat nikli thi.....Maarcuss bahut hi jyada khudgarj hota jaa raha hai jab se uss Saurya ki talwar iske pass aayi hai ye hame kuch samajhta hi nahi maana hum iske under kaam karte hai par ye nahi chalne wala.

Wo sab baatein kar hi rahe the ki acchanak se ek insan unke saamne aa jaata hai. Ab unn sab ko thoda to shock lagna hi tha wo laga par uss insan ne sab sambhal liya aur fir unn sabhi ko apna ek idea bataya jisse unke so called dusman jaise Margret aur baaki sab ka khatma kiya jaa sakta tha par uske badle unn sabko uss aadmi ko apna maalik manna tha.

Jordon- Plan to sahi hai tumhara saath hi hum tumhara saath bhi dene ko taiyaar hai par tumhari aakhri baat ke liye kuch pareshani hai.

Insan- Yahi naa ki tum 5 logo ki aatma uss Maarcuss ke kabje mein hai. Uski chinta mat karo tum mere plan par kaam karo main tum logo ki aatmayein haasil kar lunga aur apne maalik ko saunp dunga.

Fready- nahi isse to hum fir bhi gulam hi honge naa.

Insan- mere maalik bahut hi acche hai apne gulamon ke liye tabhi to main unko wapas laana chahta hu. Saath hi tum sab ko nayi aur khatarnak taakatein bhi milegi. Main tumhe waqt de sakta hu sochne ke liye.

Fready- Mujhe manjur hai main taiyaar hu unka gulam banne ke liye.

Baaki charo ne bhi yahi kiya.

Maarcuss ko pata nahi tha ki uske apne hi khaas log uske saath bagawat karne waale.

Chaliye ab chalte hai apne Hero ke pass jo iss waqt hospital mein tha Mohit ke saath. darasal hua ye ki jab Mohit ki aankhon ki roshni wapas aayi ye baat uske chaul mein faail gayi. Jab ye baat uske ek compounder dost ko pata chali to wo usko hospital mein cheakup karane ko bolne laga. Mohit ko bhi ye sahi laga aur wo chal diye uss dost ke saath jaha wo kaam karta tha.

Bahut hi bada hospital tha ye yaha akshar medical collage ke students ko bheja jata tha. Waha ke cases ko discuss karne ke liye kah sakte hai uss Hospital aur collages ke bich koi understanding thi.

Bas aise hi XYZ collage jaha par apne Saurya ki saare cousins padhte the waha ke medical students bhi aaye hue the.

Recap of Characters

Kirti - Saurya ke bade Mama ki badi beti jo MBBS kar rahi thi.

Back to story

Haa to hua yun ki Mohit ji ki checking hui aur wo doctor ke room se nikle aur mere ( Saurya) ke saath saath chalne lage ki tabhi koi ladki takra gayi mujhse.

Ladki- dekh ke nahi chal sakte gawar kahi ke mera stethoscope gira diya you idiot.

Main- Arre aap takr...........

Bas main ruk gaya kyunki ye koi aur nahi Kirti thi aur maine ye nahi socha tha isse aise mulakat hogi.

Mohit mamu ne usko dekha tha pahle jab wo bahut choti thi fir usnki aankh chali gayi par uski aawaj ko wo pahchan gaye wahi dusri oor Kirti ko bhi Mohit mamu kuch jaane pahchane lage issiliye wo waha ruki rahi.

Kirti- Aapko dekha hai kahi par yaad nahi aa raha.....hmm kya main aapko jaanti hu.

Mohit- Nahi main nahi jaanta tumhe. Saurya chalo hume der ho rahi hai.

Hum nikal gaye waha se par uss Kirti ko to Mohit mamu ka chahra pahchana lag raha tha.

Kirti(khud se)- ye...iski sakal to Shurbhi dadi se bahut milti hai....kahi ye ....nahi wo to andha tha iki to aankhen hai.....mujhe kya main chalti hu.

Bas Kirti apne raaste chal di aur main aur Mohit mamu bahar chale aaye hospital se.

Mohit- tujhe pata hai wo ladki kon thi?

Main- mujhe kya pata (jhoot)

Mohit- wo teri bahan thi tere bade Mama Shamsher singh ki badi beti.

Main- kya par aapne usko pahchanne se mana kyun kar diya.

Mohit- wo chod tu chal ab ghar chalte hai waise bhi bahut dur aa gaye iss checkup ke kaaran. Upar se maine Maa ko bhi nahi bataya abhi tak meri aakhhon ke baare mein aaj unko ghar bulla leta hun wo tujhse milkar bahut khush hogi.

Main- hmm ye sahi rahega.

Hum ghar gaye waha Mohit ne Shurbhi apni Maa ko call kiya aur sab kuch bataya sirf mere waha hone ka nahi jiske baad to jaise uske khushi ka koi thikana hi nahi raha aur wo urant hi waha se nikal gayi.

Maine bhi uss waqt mein Sameera ko phone kiya aur usse baat ki unn sab ke baare mein jinki list maine Ritvik ko di thi.

Sameera- wo sab hum dekh rahe hai kuch targets jo India ke the wo humne khatam kar diye hai par tum Russian Maafiya ki baat kar rahe the wo kaise kare...

Main- Arre itni Powers hai tumhare pass aur ye nahi kar sakte tum log.

Sameera- Powers kin powers ki baat kar rahe ho tum.

Main- Arre mera matlab itni training contacts ye sab inka use karo..

Sameera- Pata nahi kyun par mujhe bada hi ajeeb lag rahe ho tum aur tumhari baat bhi.....par ab aadesh hai aapka to kuch na kuch to karna hi hoga hame.

Bas Sameera ne call cut kar diya

Kuch der ke liye hum Sameera ke pass chalte hai.

Sameera- Pata nahi par mujhe bhi Ritvik ki baat sahi lag rahi hai saayad Samrath ko sab yaad aa chuka hai.

Sameer- Nahi yaar agar aisa hota to hame pata chal jaata sab kuch aur kya wo Malika ke pass nahi jaate agar unko sab yaad aa jaata to.

Ritvik- par yaar ye bhi to soch ki hum ab uspe nazar nahi rakh paa rahe hame inn insano wale upkarano ka istemal karna pad raha hai.

Sameera- Aur wo Power wali baat jab usne kaha tha na to uska matlab hamari powers se tha jinn ki powers se.

Sameer - haa aur tum iss nishkarsh par kaise pahuch gayi meri bahena.

Sameera- Arre wo insan kahte hai naa 6th sense bas ussi se.......ab majak chodo mujhe lagta hai hame kisi se baat karni chahiye iske baare mein.

Sameer- Pita ji se bole kya..

Ritvik- nahi yaar tumhare Pita aur mere pita dono hi abhi unn kale jinno ki pareshani se nipatne mein vyasth hai hame koi aur chahiye.

Sameer- Fir to jinnlok ke bahar se hi kisi ke pass jana hoga.

Ritvik- Parilok ki Rajkumari unko bulate hai agar Samrath ko sab yaad aa gaya ho to wo jarur bata degi hame.

Sameera- Nahi wo bahut vyasth rahti hai hame khud hi pata karna hoga.

Ritvik- Nahi mujhe lagta hai hame intezar karna chahiye agar unko yaad aaya hoga to wo jarur kuch soch samajh kar hi kar rahe honge waise bhi hame yaha bas unki raksha ke liye bheja gaya hai naa ki unki jaasoosi ke liye.

Sameera- hmm ye bhi sahi hai

Chaliye ab hum chalte hai yaha se ek dur Niharika ke planet par jaha plan banaya jaa raha tha Varsha ko patane ka.

Kaal sarp- Haa to Alex beta tumhe uski taarif karni hai jab bhi dekho usko uski taarif karna shuru kar do ek baar wo tumse dosti kar le fir tum usko mujhse milwa dena main usko sab bata dunga aur wo maan jaayegi aur fir main tum dono ki shadi karwa dunga.

Alex- kuch jyada nahi soch liya aapne matlab....

Kaal sarp- jyada nahi.....yahi hota hai aaj kal saayad tumhe pata nahi hai..

Alex- haa mera ladkiyon ke baare mein gyaan bahut kam hai.

Kaal sapr- hmm to bas meri baat mante raho thik hai ab jao mahel mein aur uski taarif karte rahna samjhe

Alex-thik hai.

Alex nikal gaya waha se mahel ki oor.

Mahel pahucha to usko turant hi Varsha dikh gayi jo saayad kuch kaam mein lagi thi. Alex chal diya uske pass.

Alex- tumhare baal bahut sunder hai Varsha aur tumhari puch jab tm dragon banti ho to bahut hi kamal ki lagti hai kabhi yaha kabhi waha bilkul matlab.

Varsha waha se aage chali gayi aise jaise usn ekuch sunna hi na ho. Alex fir se uske pass gaya aur fir se usse baat karne laga.

Alex- Varsha tumhari naak bhi bahut acchi hai .

Varsha- Arre tumhe koi kaam nahi iska ye matlab nahi ki baaki saare bhi aise hi hai bekar mein pakao mat mujhe jo bolna hai saaf saaf bolo aur niklo yaha se.

Alex- wo.....wo main soc......kuch nahi main to bas taarif kar raha tha

Varsha- To ho gaya ya abhi aur baaki hai agar baaki hai naa to usko baaki hi rahne do kyunki mujhe nahi sunna kuch ab jao yaha se......pata nahi kaha kaha se aa jaate hai kaam ke na kaaj ke dusman annaj ke.

Alex bechara chup chap waha se nikal gaya waha se ki raaste mein usko Niharika mil gayi.

Niharika- Arre Alex kaha jaa rahe ho.

Alex- Kahi nahi wo Varsha ke pass gaya to usne bhaga diya...

Niharika(hasti hui)- accha chalo main tumko uske saath acche se milwati hu.

Alex- Matlab

Niharika- Matlab jaise Dragons ki mulakat hoti hai ladayi mein aur kya. Main abhi Jinn lok jaa rahi hu Varsha ke sath tum bhi chalo uske saath kuch dhammal hi kar lena.

Alex- par waha to log jaante......

Niharika- Arre usse koi fark nahi padega waise bhi jo waha par villan hai usko to marna hi hai to chinta mat karo.

Alex bhi maan gaya fir kya tha dono hi chal pade Varsha ki oor aur usko bataya ki Alex bhi chal raha hai to pahle to Varsha ne thoda aana-kaani ki par fir maan gayi.

Chaliye ab hum bhi chalte hai waha Jinlok main jaha ab kuch dhammakedar hona tha.

Ye tinno hi apna bhesh badal kar chal diye the waha inka maksad sirf ek tha Zafar jo Vetal lok ka uppsenapati tha uska khatma.

Tinno hi chupte chupate jinn lok ke dark region mein pahuch gaye .

Niharika- Tum dono jao ander main dekhna chahti hu tum dono kaise handle karte ho iss chiote se case ko

Varsha- Kya iske sath bilkul nahi main nahi jaa rahi.

Niharika- Nahi tumhe to janna hi padega main bhi dekhna chahti hu ki tum mere binna kaise ladti ho.

Alex- Main ready hu.

Varsha-Chalo thik hai par isse bol do koi gadbad naa kare.

Fir chupte chupate dono Zafar ke mahel mein. Par ek galti kar di thi inn logo ne bahut hi halke mein iss kaam ko le liya tha inn logo ne jiska parinam ye hua ki Alex aur Varsha pakde gaye. Abhi wo jinn logo ke bhesh mein the.

Zafar- tum jinno ki itni himmat ho gayi ki mere tak aa gaye ab bas dekhte jao tumhe bhi kaale jinn mein badal dunga aur tu ladkitu to bilkul totta hai tere to mazze l.....

Abhi wo kuch aur bolta ki Alex ne apne muh se aag ka gola ussi roop mein chod diya zafar ki oor jisse wo thoda ghayal ho gaya tha.

Alex- jaban sambhal ke bol

Aur Alex apne asli roop yana Dragon Prince ke roop mein aa gaya ek Lal rang ka bada sa dragon jiski munche nikli hui thi aur aankhe bilkul nili. Saath hi mein sar par ek mukut jaisa kuch tha uske.

Ye munche aur Mukkut nishani tha ki wo Royal Dragon Faimly se belong karta hai . Isse pahle jis roop mein Varsha ne usko dekha tha wo koi normal dragons ka roop tha par iss roop ko dekh kar to wo bas dekhti hi rah gayi usko.

Wahi Alex pure gusse mein tha wo apni puri powers istemal kar raha tha waha par logo ko maarne mein kuch hi pal lage honge aur sab khatam bas ek Varsha aur wo zafar rah gaye the dono hi Alex ko dekh rahe the ek khauf se to dusra aascharya se.

Alex uss Zafar ke saamne gaya aur ek jordaar garjana jisko sun kar hi wo behosh ho gaya.

Alex ne apna roop badla jinno ki tarah ban gaya aur fir Varsha ko khola, wo to bas dekhe hi jaa rahi thi Alex ko.

Thodi der main dono waha se nikle aur wapas uss jagah par pahuche jaha Niharika ne unn dono ko choda tha.

Alex uss Zafar ko uthaye hue tha. VArsha usko dekh rahi thi.

Niharika- to kaisa raha?

Alex ne uss Zafar ko uske saamne patak diya.

Alex- ye lo ye raha wo ab iska jo karna hai wo karo.

Niharika- bahut acche tum dono ne bahut accha kiya.

Niharika ne fir apna fire sword nikala aur usse uss zafar ka galla kaat diya jisse wo apne original roop yaani vetal ke roop mein aa gaya. Niharika ne uske sar ko ek laat maari aur portal se usko Vetallok bhej diya. Fir Alex aur varsha ke saath nikal gayi apne planet par.

Inn sab ke kaaran bahut kuch hua jaise Raani pari jinki shaktiyan wo Zafar khinchta rahta tha aur usse jinlok ke dark region ko badhata tha wo band ho gayi. Raani pari ko acchanak se ek jhatka laga aur wo behosh ho gayi. Uss pal ke liye pura Parilok hi andhere mein chala gaya. Dusra ye hua ki Vetal lok ke raaja Vetalraj ne apne saare waise logo ko jaldi se apne pass bulla liya jo dusre planets par logo ko vetal mein badal rahe the. Ab esse ek baat aur ho gayi jo bilkul bhi sahi nahi thi. dusre planets par jo log Vetal ban gaye the wo bekabu ho gaye.

Isko kuch iss prakar samjho agar sabse takatwar chala jaata hai to logo mein hodd lag jaati hai apne aap ko uss jagah ke kaabil shabit karne ki bas yahi hua aur har taraf Bhagdad machne lagi.

2 din baad iska asar Earth par bhi hua American sub continent par jitne bhi log badal gaye the wo paagalon ki tarah maar kaat karne lage. Ye baat News Channels par chalne lagi aur jald hi Saurya ko bhi pata chala.

News Channels ka kahna tha ki ye kisi virus ke kaaran hua hai jo sabke dimmag par asar kar raha hai aur unko bekabu bana raha hai.

Iss baat ka pata Niharika ko bhi laga usne fourun Saurya se cotact kiya. Saurya bhi Baba ko lekar pahuch gaya fir se Niharika ke planet par.

Niharika- Saurya lagta hai uss Vetalraj ne jaan bhujh kar aisa kiya hai taaki use dusman ek baar mein hi khatam ho jaaye. Saath hi uska badla bhi pura ho jaayega.

Main- Yaar ab problem ko chodo aur uske solution ka socho.

Baba- Solution hai aur aisa ki 1 teer se 2 shikar ho jaayenge.

Main- Haa to batao naa.

Baba- Vetal lok ki rajkumari yaani Mohini wo sab rook sakti hai aur saath hi unki jeevan rekha bhi isse badh jaayegi.

Main- Thik se samjhaiye.

Baba- Ruko tum R.G ko bullao yaha ussi ne mujhe Mohini ke jivankaal ko badhane ka ye upaaye bataya hai.

Maine portal khola aur unko bhi bulla liya.

Main- Chalo ab batao kya baat hai.

R.G- ji Mohini ji urff Vetal lok ki rajkumari ko bacchane ka ek hi rasta hai wo hai unko koi vetal kaate. Isse hoga ye ki unki shaktiyan jo ab tak sooyi hui hai wo ek hi baar mein jaag jaayegi.

Baba- Aur chuki unki saari powers jaag chukki hogi to wo sabhi vetalon ko kaabu kar sakti hai aur saath hi unn sab ke ander se wo taral(liquid) bhi nikal sati hai jo unko Vetal bana raha hai usse 2 faiyde hai. Pahla ye ki wo saare jo vetal ban chukke hai wo normal ho jaayenge. Dusra wo ki uss taral se Mohini ki jeevan rekha bahut hi jyada badh jaayegi matlab wo nahi maregi.

Main- Waah ye to bahut hi accha hai.

Fir kya tha Maine ek plan banaya aur fir uske hisab se Baba aur N.mom ko waha se pritvi par le aaya baaki ke logo ko dusre planets ko dekhne ko bol diya.

Aaj ke liye itna hi ab dekhte hai aage ki Saurya ka plan kya hai aur kya wo success hoga yaa nahi aur bhi baatein hai jaise ki Pari lok ka kya hoga jo 2 din se andhere mein hai. Rani pari ko kya hua hai wo kaise thik hogi aur ek baat kya Alex ke liye thodi si bhi jagah bani hai yaa nahi Varsha ke dil mein ek aur surpise hoga.

Note- Iss baar story close karne ka surprise nahi dene wala pichle baar bhi aisi koi mansha nahi thi bas kuch personal problems aa gayi thi

Excellent brilliant fantastic good update

Asif khan · Jul 14, 2020

Classified said:
UPDATE - 85

Ab tak

Mujhe ab Mohini ko uske powers dilane the taaki wo unn sab logo ko jo Vetal mein badal chuke the thik kar sake

Aage

Main Baba aur N.Mom ko lekar Earth aa gaya.

Main- Aap dono ko jaisa bola tha waisa hi karo baaki main kisi vetal ko lekar aata hu.

Baba- Samrath pata nahi kyun par mujhe lagta hai jab Mohini ko uski powers milegi wo khud pe control nahi kar paayegi.

Main- Pata hai mujhe issi liye to N.mom ko lekar aaya hu. Wo ye sambhal legi par usse pahle jo kaha tha wo karo aur dhyaan rahe unn dono ko chot nahi lagni chahiye.

Maine itna kaha aur portal khol diya dono ke liye aur dono chale gaye. Maine bhi ek portal khola aur chal diya American subcontinent .

Waha pahucha to halat bahut hi khatarnak hue the. Har taraf log lad rahe the maar kaat kar rahe the. Ye wahi log the jo Vetal mein badal chukke the.

Ek pal ke liye to main khud ko koosne laga ki ye sab meri wajah se ho raha tha.

Kappa- Abhi iska waqt nahi hai agar yahi karte rahe naa to ho gaya......tumhe abhi unn sab ko bachana hai kisi ek ko uthao aur le chalo saath.

Maine Kappa ki baat mante hue ek aadmi ko pakda aur usko behosh karke Portal se le aaya apne saath.

Wahi dusri oor N.mom aur Baba le aaye the unn tinno ko.

Yaha par tinno se matlab tha Shilpa, Paridhi aur Mohini. Tinnno ke tinno hi behosh pade the.

Main- Sameera aur Baakiyon ka kya kiya ?

Baba- Wo abhi Jinlok chale gaye Shilpa ke kahne par. Bahut muskil tha unn tinno ko yakin dilana ki Shilpa ko sab yaad aa chuka hai.

Main- hmm chalo ye bhi sahi hai. Ab shuru karte hai. N.mom shield banaiye.

N.mom- Taiyaar hai shield. Bas uss Vetal aur Mohini ko ander daalna hai.

Humne uss Vetal aur Mohini ko uss shield ke under chod diya.

Main- Baba wo love portion laaye ho naa R.D se.

Baba- Haa laya hu par mujhe nahi lagta ye sahi hoga.

Main- Yahi sahi hoga Baba. Aap bhi jaante ho Parilok ko kaise andhere se bahar lana hai aur kaise Rani pari ko thik karna hai.

Baba- Jaanta hu par fir bhi ye galat lag raha hai kisi ke dil mein khud je liye aise pyaar jagana sahi nahi hai tum swarti hote jaa rahe ho.

Main- Baba agar swarthi hota naa to sabhi ko lata yaha bas Paridhi aur Shilpa ko hi nahi samjhe aap ab chalo wo love portion mujhe do aur aap N. mom ke saath Mohini ko dekho tab tak main ye karta hu.

Baba- thik hai jaisi tumhari iccha.

Fir kya tha wo chale gaye aur main wo love portion liye badhne laga Shilpa ki oor.

Ander se dar bhi lag raha tha ki kahi galat to nahi kar raha par koi aur raasta hi nahi tha bas ye dono hi thi jo Rani Pari aur Pari lok dono ko wapas thik kar sakti thi.

Wahi dusri oor Baba aur N.mom ne uss Vetal ko hosh mein la diya tha.

Pahle to wo apne aas pass dekhne laga samajhne ki koshish karne laga ki wo yaha kaise fir uski nazar Mohini ki oor gayi jo behosh padi thi.

Bas wo Mohini ki taraf badhne laga dhere dhere par usko kaha pata tha wo kya karne jaa raha hai.

Apne daant bahar nikal wo pahuch gaya Mohini ke pass aur apna muh Mohini ke gardan par rakh diya. Apne daant uski gardan ke ander daal diya aur uska khoon chusne laga. Par ye jyada der nahi chala kyunki ab Mohini ke sareer se khoon uske muh mein nahi jaa raha tha balki uske daanton se wo taral(liquid) Mohini ke shareer mein jaa raha tha wo bhi uske naa chahte hue.

Mohini ki aankhen khul gayi wo ekdum se baith gayi wahi par. uski aankhen puri lal thi. Usne ke dhakka diya uss vetal ko aur wo door jaa gira. Wahi Mohini khadi hui aur khud ko dekhne lagi.

Wo vetal fir se khada hua aur daudhte hu Mohini ki oor. Mohini khud ko hi dekhe jaa rahi thi ki usne apna hath upar uthaya jisme uss vetal ki gardan aa gayi.

Vetal chatpatane laga. Mohini bas usko dekhe jaa rahi thi. fir achanak uske gale par apna muh rakh kar uske shareer se wo taral chuss liya par issi dauran uske muh khoon lag gaya jo uss vetal ke liye accha nahi hui.

Mohini ne naa sirf uss vetal ko insan bana diya balki uska saara khoon bhi chuss gayi aur wo wahi maar gaya.

Baba- Ye dekho ye ab bekabu hone wali hai.

N.mom- hmm pata hai aur ye bhi jaanti hu isko kaise rooka jaaye.

Baba- to intezar kis chiz ka kar rahi ho jaldi se wo karo.

N.mom- hmm

N.mom ne ek thaili jaisa kuch nikala jisme lal rang ka kuch tha.

Baba- ye kya hai

N.mom- khoon hai ye Saurya ka bas yahi hai jo usko shant kar sakta hai. Usne kaha tha ki Mohini uska khoon pinna chahti thi isse usko takat bhi milegi aur wo khud ko control bhi kar paayegi.

Baba- Itna sara khoon...par hum isko ustak kaise pahuchaye.

N.mom- Pahuchana kya hai wo khud aayegi aap dekhte jao.

Abhi wo baat kar hi rahe the ki Shield tutne ki awaj aayi. Mohini bahar aa chuki thi. Wo charo taraf dekh rahi thi uske hoonton par khoon laga hua tha.

Mohini yaha waha dekhne lagi aur uski nazar N.mom aur Baba par gayi. Wo daudti hui unke pass jane lagi.

Baba- ye to yhi aa raghi hai ab kya...

N.mom- bas shanti se khade raho hame kuch bhi nahi karegi ye.

Dono waise hi khade rahe aur Mohini unn dono ke pass aayi aur unpe jhapata maarne hi waali thi ke N.mom ne wo khoon wali thaili aage kar di. Mohini bhi ruk gayi aur uss Khoon ki thaili ko dekhne lagi. Kuch der dekhne ke baad wo ekdum se jhapat padi uss thaile par aur usko pinne lagi.

Usne pura khoon pi liya aur theek uske baad wo achanak se hawa mein udne lagi uski aankhen jo lal ho gayi thi ab bilkul normal ho gayi thi aur bhi jo changes aaye the usme wo sab bhi wapas pahle jaise ho gaye.

Thodi der hawa mein hi rahne ke baad wo jameen par aa gayi aur behosh ho gayi.

Baba- Ye to behosh ho gayi.

N.mom- haa sayad iske body ko thoda time lagega.

Wahi dusri oor main apna haath mein wo love portion liye khada tha Shilpa ke aage. himmat hi nahi ho rahi thi ye karne ki par karna to tha hi.

Maine wo love portion Shilpa par chidka aur fir Paridhi par bhi.

Main- Pata nahi sahi kar raha hu yaa nahi par yahi ek raasta hai mere paas.

Maine ye bola aur fir dono ke upar paani chidak diya jisse dono hi hosh mein aa gayi. Hosh mein aate hi sabse pahle dono ki nazar mujhpe padi.

Shilpa to jaanti thi mujhe par Paridhi se ye meri pahli mulakat thi to usne nahi pahchana.

fir dono hi yaha waha dekhne lage uss jagah ko samajhne ki koshish karne lage .

Shilpa- Saurya tu yaha kya kar raha hai main yaha kya kar rahi hu.....ye kon si jagah hai aur ye ladki ye kon hai.

Paridhi- Kon si jagah hai ye kahi tum mujhe kidnap to nahi kar aaye agar aisa hai to tum bahut pachtaoge....

Main bas wait kar raha tha kab wo love portion apna kaam pura kargi. Mujhe jyada intezar nahi karna pada.

Karib 2 second mein hi Paridhi mere galle lage hui thi. Abhi usko kuch yaad nahi aaya tha saayad ye bas uss love portin ka kammal tha agar yaad aata to dono ko hi aata. Isme bhi jyada intezar nahi karna pada mujhe.

Shilpa- Samrath , Paridhi

Paridhi- Shilpa didi .

Dono mujhe chod ek dusre ke galle lag gayi aur roone lagi.

Kuch der hue unn dono ka rona dhona chalta raha par jaise hi unki nazar mere upar padi dono ki dono hi mujhe gusse se ghoorne lagi.

Ab ye hua issliye kyunki Mohini mere galle gali hui thi aur chumme jaa rahi thi mujhe.

Paridhi- Ye kon hai didi aur hamare Samrath ke saath iss tarah.....

Shilpa- Pata nahi kon hai dekho tho isko kaise chipak rahi hai.

Dono hamare taraf aayi aur usko khinch kar alag kar diya.

Paridhi- kon hai ye aur ye aise kyun chipak rahi thi tumse.

Main- Ye ye vetal lok ki rajkumari hai

Mohini(jhuk kar)- Jinlok ki Malika aur Parilok ki Rajkumari ko Vetal lok ki Rajkumari ka pranam.

Paridhi- Vetal lok ki rajkumari ? Tum yaha kya kar rahi ho wo bhi hamare Samrath ke saath.

Mohini- Rajkumari Maine bahut intezar kiya hai inse milne ka aaj naa jaane kitne saal baad aur kya kya sah kar inse milli hu.

Shilpa- To tum bhi inse pyar karti ho

Paridhi- Didi ye kya.....

Main- Arre yaha duniya tabah hone par hai....meri baat sunno pahle

Paridhi-Bhadh mein jaaye duniya pahle ye jo ho raha hai wo clear karo.

Mohini- Hmm main inse pyar karti hu aur inse shadi bhi karna chahti hu par aap sabhi ke izzazat ke baad

Shilpa- tumhe pata hai naa inki pahle se kitni patniya hai.

Mohini- Hmm pata hai....par fir bhi main ye chahti hu aur ye jaruri bhi hai.

Paridhi- pahle hum test karenge uske baad.

Main- Aaee pagal tumhare test ke chakar mein mera pura plan fail ho jaayega tum sunno Parilok andhere mein hai Rani PAri behosh hai 2 din se tum dono unke pass jao abhi ke abhi. Mohini tumhe bahut kaam karna hai yaha Earth par hi nahi balki aur bhi bahut jagahon par. Log vetal ban chuke hai unke ander se tumhe wo taral bahar nikalna hai.

Paridhi- Kya Maa ko ye sab ho gaya aur mujhe pata bhi nahi...

Maine portal khol diya parilok ke liye aur Shilpa aur Paridhi dono hi ander chali gayi.

Aaj ke liye itna hi ab dekhte hai aage kya hota hai kya Shilpa aur Paridhi Parilok aur Rani pari ko sambhal paayenge aur Kya Mohini kar paayegi apna kaam

To bane rahiye

Writer - Ye kal jo bola tha wo hai agla update raat ko dega.

Very nice boht badhiya

Shah40 · Jul 14, 2020

Mast updates diye jaa rahe ho bhai story bhi Bahoot achchi hai keep it up

Salu12 · Jul 14, 2020

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UPDATE - 82

Ab tak

Writer ne hagte hue socha aur uske dimag mein time collapes ki baat aa gayi. To usne mujhe pahucha diya wapas se ussi waqt mein jaha se sab shuru hua tha.

Aage

Mere aankhon ke saamne ujala cha gaya aur jab utha to main ek bus mein tha. Mujhe ye samajh ahi aa raha tha ki uss Jwala ne kis jagah choda tha mujhe main confed tha ki tabhi bus ruki aur main bus se utra.

Aaadmi- arrre bhai samman to lete jao apna kahi kauno bomb wom to naa chode jaa rahe.

Maine usko dekha par pahchan nahi paya pata nahi chal raha tha main kis time mein aaya hu. MAine wo samman uthaya aur bus se bahar nikla saamne mujhe Mohit ji dikhayi diye tab mujhe yaad aaya ki ye Tanya aur Tiya ka Birthday wala din hai. Main gaya unke pass aur unse baat ki unko apne saath chalne ko kaha.

Inn sab ke dauran bas ek hi baat chal rahi thi dimmag mein ki aaya ki abhi jab mein ghar jaaunga to Poonam maasi wahi hogi. Fir se wo sab drama hoga aur pata nahi kya kya. Main soch hi raha tha ki tabhi Kappa ki awaj aayi mere ander se.

Kappa- tum chaho to isko abhi hone se rok sakte ho aur tumhe rokna bhi chahiye meri maano to sabse pahle Red book Orange book inn dono ka socho agar unn sab ko ek karna hai to tumhari madad ke liye koi to hona chahiye.

Main- Tum yaha par kaise Jwala ne to bola tha tum....

Kappa- Maine bhi to bola tha hum dono ek ho chuke hai ab koi hame alag kar hi nahi sakta .

Main- To uss waqt tum kaha the jab mein tumse baat kar raha tha.

Kappa- Main to wahi tha par kisi jaadu ne baandh rakha tha mujhe.

Main- kisne aur kyun....

Kappa- Tumne baandh diya tha mujhe jab sab kho kar baithe the naa tab tumne mujhe band kar diya tha jaadu se. Tumhe kisi ki sunni hi nahi thi uss waqt.

Main- Sorry dost, Par main tumhe batau bhi to kya batau mere ko khud samjh nahi aa raha kya baat hui thi wo to uss Jwala ne sab bataya.

Kappa- Hmm pata hai aur usne wo sab kiya jo usko karna chahiye tha. Ab tumhari baari hai kuch karne ki.

Main- Pata hai main kya soch raha hu ki ye sab jo gadbad shuru hui hai wo Pihu ke aane ke baad se na usse pahle hi agar maine kisi tarah Baba ko wo karne se rok liya to.

Kappa- Jo bhi sochna thandhe dimmag ke saath sochna samjhe.

Main- Haa samajh gaya aur iss baare mein maine soch liya hai par Baba tak jaaya kaise jaaye.

Kappa- tumhari chize dur hui hai tumse naa ki tumhari wo vidhyayein jo tum sheekh kar aaye ho.

Main- To kya main Portal khol sakta hu matlab abhi yaha se Baba ke paas jaa sakta hu.

Kappa- ye tum par hai ab ki tum kya karte ho. Main bas tumhe raasta dikhaunga aur kuch nahi.

Main- Hmm thik hai.....accha kappa ek baat bas ek baat batao yaar ye kya iss baar bhi Maa Papa ko marna hoga mera matlab ki wo talwar ke liye hamare ek hone ke liye.

Kappa- Bas itna hi kahunga nahi iske aage tumhe khud dekhna hoga Saurya.

Main usse baatein kar raha tha ki bus rukki.

Mohit- Stop aa gaya kya beta.

Main- Hmm aa gaya hai. Accha aap apna phone dena jarra mom(Sanjana) se baat kar lu.

Mohit- Par tumne to bola tha surprise dena hai.

Main(maan mein)- Arre Mamu agar hum gaye to hum bhi surprised rah jaayenge.

Main- aap do naa mujhe unse urgent baat karni hai aur mera phone discharge ho chuka hai.

Mohit mamu ne de diya apna phone aur maine Mom ko call kiya.

Mom-(Dhere se) Mohit beta Poonam yaha aayi hui hai tujhe kuch pata hai iska.

Main- Mom main hu Saurya. App kiski baat kar rahi ho kon Poonam

Meri awaj sun kar to jaise Mom sann hi rah gayi thi.

Mom- T...tt..tu Mohit ke saath hai kya...

Main- Haa wo main wo Tiya aur Tanya ka birthday manane ke liye aa raha tha.

Mom- Beta tu mat aa aur Mohit ko bhi rok le rok usko tum dono mat aawo samjhe.

Main- Par Mom kya.....

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Mohit- Kya hua beta baat ho gayi teri.

Main- Haa Mom kuch pareshan lag rahi thi wo kisi Poonam ki baat kar rahi thi wo aayi hai ghar pe au....

Mohit- Kya Choti maalkin aayi hai arre ye kya ho gaya. Tu Tu ek kaam kar chal mere saath mere ghar hum wapas chal rahe hai hum nahi jaa sakte waha.

Ab mujhe to yahi chahiye tha maine bhi haa bol diya aur hum stop pe aaye aur wapas ki gadi par baith wapas chale gaye aur pahuch gaye Mohit Mamu ki kholi mein ye ek chaul tha.

Wo mujhe ghar tak ka raasta batate gaye aur main unko waha tak le gaya. Darwaje pe talla laga tha.

Main- Mamu wo chabhi talla laga hai yaha.

Mohit- Haa Haa ye lo arre wo main thoda pareshan ho gaya tha naa bas issi mein....accha tu ander jaa main Sanjana didi se baat karke aata hu.

Main- Thik hai.

Main ander aaya sabse pahle mujhe diwar par ek photo dikhi jisme Maa( Saifali jiska naam ab Shuhani ho gayi thi), Mohit, Deep, Suddha Aunty aur Bobby uncle ki photo thi uske bagal mein Divya bua aur Roshan fufa ke saath Maa Papa ki photo thi. aise hi bahut si photos.

Main dekh hi raha tha ki Mohit mamu aa gaye.

Main unse kuch bolta usse pahle hi mera phone baja.

Ritvik- arre Saurya tu to gaon jaa raha tha naa ye teri location to koi aur jagah bata rahi hai.

Main- Haa kuch baatein ho gayi thi chinta mat kar..... aur haa kuch naam bhej raha hu mujhe ye sab e sab marre hue chahiye.

Ritvik- kinki baat kar raha hai tu.

Main- Arre hai kuch chutiye jo aage jaa kar meri family ke liye pareshani khadi karenge tu bas unko maar de.

Ritvik- yaar tu sahi to hai naa....hum boss ko kya bolenge fir

Main- Arre tu powers use kar na apni aur khatam kar unko kisi ko kuch samajh hi nahi aayega.

Ritvik- kya powers tu kya bol raha main samjha nahi

Main- arre mera matlab apni skills mere bhai skills use kar unko aur khatam kar sabko.

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Fir maine usko Pankaj, Dilawar,wo Russian Don sabhi ke details usko forword kiye kyunki mujhe iss baar koi bhi faaltu ka jhamela nahi chahiye tha.

Ye sab karne ke baad maine Motih mamu se niind aane ki baat ki aur main sone chala gaya. sona to bahana tha mujhe to Baba ke pass jaana tha.

Room mein aate hi maine jaldi se darwaja band kiya aur fir portal khola aur pahuch gaya uss jungle mein wahi jungle jaha maine apni patniyon ke bodies ko dafnaya tha wahi jungle jaha mera training hota tha.

Maine dekha wo baithe hue the dhyaan mudra mein aankhen band thi unki.

Main- Baba Baba

Meri awaj sun kar wo to jaise ghabra gaye.

Baba- kon ho tum aur Samrath ka roop le kar yaha kyun aaye ho.

Main- Baba Shaant ye main hi hu Saurya hi....

Baba- Nahi tum wo ho hi nahi sakte uska yaha aana abhi sam....

Main- aapne srap diya tha maine apni patniyon ko yaha dafnaya tha

Aisi hi bahut si baatein maine unko batayi aur unko vishwas dilaya ki main Saurya hi hu.

Baba- Par tum yaha kaise matlab abhi to tumhe yaha hona bhi nahi chahiye tha.

Main- Hmm pata hai par ye jaruri bhi tha Main ye baatein sirf aapko bata raha hu kyunki aap hi meri madad kar sakte ho.

Baba- Pahle to mujhe kuch samajh nahi aa raha ki ho kya raha hai par tum batao mein kya madad karu.

Main- Mujhe Alex Chahiye abhi ke abhi aur aapko abhi Bansoa jaana hai waha par Headmaster honge unko aur unki poti ko aapko yaha laana hoga saath hi koi Sangeeta bhi hogi unko bhi.

Baba- Alex tak ka to thik hai wo main kar dunga par Bansoa wo kuch jyada ho jaayega mujhe lagta hai.......

Main- nahi Baba iss baar nahi pichle baar logo ki sun sun kar yaha fas gaya iss baar nahi maine bahut socha hai iss baare mein.

Baba- Arre par sun to lo fir sochna ki kya karna hai aise hi ye jaruri nahi ki tum sabhi ki baat maan lo par suunna chahiye usme koi harz nahi.

Main- hmm thik hai boliye.

Baba- Waha waise bhi sab sahi hai aur mujhe nahi lagta abbhi kuch karna sahi hoga.

Main- Nahi sabhi safe nahi hai waha wo Niharika wo safe nahi hai....ek minute iss Niharika ka kya hua ye to maine pucha hi nahi.

Kappa- ab aaye tum sahi jagah par tumhe pata hai jis waqt ye sab ho raha tha matlab tumhara ye time travel bas ek Niharika thi jo puri tarah se shurakshit thi uss shield mein jisme wo thi aur agar main galat nahi to abhi tak uska wo period bhi khatam ho gaya hoga.

Main- usko to 3 saal lagne the naa

Kappa- bas ek hi baat kahunga time period collapse hua aur ....

MAin- Uff kya baar baar ek hi jawab dete rahte ho accha ek baat batao woMaarcuss kuch nahi kar sakta kya iss time collapse mein.

Kappa- wo kar kara hai wo uss time period mein tumhe dhundh raha hai paaglon ki tarah kyunki tum gaayab ho chuke hio.

Main- kya. accha to main usko milunga yaa nahi.

Kappa- tum to yaha h naa to usko waha kaise miloge.

Main- Matlab main usko nahi milunga.

Kappa- Maine aisa kab kaha agar usko bhi time period collapse ka pata chala to wo tumhe aaram se pakad klega.

Main- Usko kaise pata chalega....

Kappa- tum bataoge naa usko.

Main- Main kyun bataunga usko ye...

Kappa- Taaki wo tumhe dhundh le aur tum usko maar do...

Main- Arre bhai kuch aasan bhasa mein samjhao ye jalebi banana band karo

Kappa- Simple bhasha mein bas itna hi hai ki tum usko waha se yaha laaoge aur fir Yaha ke Maarcuss aur Uss Maarcuss ko ek karoge jiske baad wo Maarcuss khud tumse maut ki bhikh maangega.

Main- Par kyun kyun wo karega aisa.

Kappa- Kyunki wo future jaanta hoga usko pata hoga ki kya hone wala hai kaise wo apna sab kuch khoyega fir jivan bhar ke liye kisi ke talwe chaatega. Usko uss jindgi se jyada accha tumhare haathon se marna accha lagega.

Main- Aisa kya hona hai waha aur tumhe kaise pata ye sab.

Kappa- Uske saath gaddari hogi uske saare log usko chod denge aur fir wo bas ek gulam banna rah jaayega. Ye sab mujhe uss Jwala se pata chala hai maine bhi sab dekha tha sab pucha tha. Ab waqt barbaad naa karte hue Baba ke saath nikal lo Niharika ke Planet par aur haa uss Alex ko bhi le lena usko bhi varsha se milwa dena.

Main- kya yaar maine pata nahi kya kya soch rakha tha aur tum ho ke...

Main(baba se)- Baba wo Bansoa ka program cancel karo aur Uss Alex ko bulao.

Baba ne mere sar par haath rakha aur bola khud bulla lo wo tumhara hi hai aur saath hi mujhe Red book bhi de diya.

Red book milla mujhe usko kaabu mein karna koi badi baat nahi thi 2 second naa lage mujhe uske takat ko control karne mein aur ye dekh Baba ka muh khula ka khula rah gaya abhi tak unko ye pata nahi chala tha ki main future se aaya hu wo bas ye samajh rahe the ki waqt se pahle kuch hua aur main badal gaya.

Main - Alex Yaha aao.

Wo mere saamne aa gaya ek bada sa dragon.

Main- Kaise ho mere dost.

Uss waqt Alex ki haalat dekhne wali thi usko kuch samajh mein hi nahi aa raha tha. Wo kabhi mujhe to kabhi Baba ko dekh raha tha. Abhi wo kuch bolta usse pahle.

Main- Chal ready ho jaa tere liye ladki dekhne aa rahe hai.

Alex- Baba ye kya hai kya aapne isko kuch......

Main- Nahi dost inhone kuch nahi kiya tu bas chal hamare saath koi sawal mat puchna kyunki mere pass khud jawab nahi hai tu chal waha

Alex- Kaha jaana hai batao mein le chalta hu.

Main- Main hu naa main le chalta hu.

Maine ek bada sa portal khola jiska ek end Niharika ke planet par tha.

Main- Chalo ab ander chalo.

Baba- tumhe portal bhi kholna aata hai par kaise..

Alex- Tum ho to mere maalik hi par kuch to gadbad hai tumme.

Main- Jo bhi gadbad hai wo baad mein pata chal jaayega abhi tum chalo mere saath

Maine unn dono ko bahut samjhaya aur fir wo maan gaye jaane ko par jo humne dekha waha dusri taraf wo to maltab kuch alag hi tha. ye bilkul alag tha uss waqt se jab man aur Alex Varsha ko lene aaye the. Har taraf logo ki chahal pahel thi ek bahut hi bada mahel bana hua tha uss mahel ke chaaro oor Varsha udd rahi thi aur kisi ko bhi isse koi aascharya nahi tha.

Hum aage badhe hi the ki kuch sainik aaye waha aur hame gher liya.

Sainik1- Chalo rani ne bulaya hai tumhe.

Main-(maan mein) Raani yaha kab se raani aa gayi yaha to aisa kuch bhi nahi tha.

Main- (Alex aur Baba se) koi kuch nahi karega humme inke saath chalna hai samjhe.

Baba aur Alex ne apna sar haa mein hillaya. Alex uske baad hamri tarah ban gaya yaani roop badal liya. PAr usko Varsha ne dekh liya tha shuru mein kuch bhi nahi koi expression nahi.

Fir hum tinno ko le jaaya gaya Mahel mein Raani ke paas.

Jab hum jaa rahe the tab maine dhyaan diya ki ye mahel bilkul ussi jagah par hai jaha Niharika ka ghar tha.

Hum mahel mein gaye aur waha hamara kaidiyon ki tarah sawagat bilkul bhi nahi hua aisa lag raha tha hum koi unke khaas mehaan the.

Alex- ye ho kya raha hai yaha Malik...

Main- arre malik nahi dost hu tera samjha Saurya bola kar maalik nahi.

Baba- Par ye ho kya raha hai kya hum koi khaas mehmaan hai.

"JI bilkul aap khass mehmaan hi ho aur aaj apke aane ki khushi mein meri beti ne yaha jashan ki taiyaari karayi hai" ek aawaj aayi piche se.

Hum jab mudde to saamne N.mom khadi thi jo bahut hi khush najar aa rahi thi.

Main- Aap!

N.mom- Hmm main ab chalo taiyaar ho jaao tum sab baakki baatein baad mein. (Chilla kar pyaar se) Varsha beta yaha aao

Aur issi ke saath Varsha waha aa jaati hai aur apna roop badal leti hai.

Varsha- Haa Rani Maa

Main- Rani maa par....

N.mom- baad mein abhi nahi. (Varsha se) Beta jaao inn mehmaano ka dhyaan rakhna aur uss Dragon ka bhi.

Varsha- thik hai ( humse) Chalo tumhe rooms dikhati hu.

Aaj ke liye itna hi ab jisko jo bolna hai bolo yaar ek update dekha nahi ki kuch log ucchal padte hai chalo ab writer ki maarne mein mazza aayega arre bhai kam-se-kam thoda wait to karo mauka to do usko par nahi yaha to bas dekha aur bolna shuru ki writer ne to kuch socha hi nahi bas aise hi likhta jaa raha hai jo maan mein aaye isko to kuch aata hi nahi. Yaar bahut se log to aise hote hai jo apki story par kewal kamiya dekhne hi aate hai.

Agar kisi ko bura laga ho to maaf kar dena par ye mat kahna ki binna kuch sooche hi likh diya writer ne. Iss part ka end hona hai aur agle part ke liye jo socha hai maine usme family ke members ki jarurat honi hi hai. Ek baat aur ye bas ek chota sa time period ka collapse hai story starting se nahi ho rahi

Mast update ha bhai main ap ki bat par agree karta hn ap ko jase bhi likhe rha ha bhot acha likhe rhy h

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