Prince Arya
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Fantasy Shiva the common man
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Kalyansurya
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Mind blowing performance bhai update accha tha
Ha thoda chota jrur tha but bhut accha tha
Bas aap update continue rakho hamare saat bne raho ...waiting for next update
Ha thoda chota jrur tha but bhut accha tha
Bas aap update continue rakho hamare saat bne raho ...waiting for next update
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Guys first sorry for late update.
Actually update almost ready tha. But mene use save nahi kiya aur bo draft se delete ho gaya.
So i will try to update tomorrow.
Thanks for your support.....
Actually update almost ready tha. But mene use save nahi kiya aur bo draft se delete ho gaya.
So i will try to update tomorrow.
Thanks for your support.....
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Update-17
Uske baad shadi achhe se ho gayi sabhi log kuch din me apne apne ghar ko nikal gaye .
Mammi papa bhi jane lage.
Par me delhi me hi ruk gaya.apne dosto se milne ka bol ke.
Ab aage...
Subah ka samay me mama ke ghar ek kamre me so raha tha ki Achanak se meri ankh khul gayi.mujhe thoda achha feel nahi ho raha tha, mene time dekha toh abhi 5 baje the, toh me bed se uth kar chat par aa gaya. Mere bade mama ka ghar thoda simple sa bana hua hai. Toh chat par ek kamra bana hua hai jiske saath ek attached bathroom and toilet hai. Aur baaki ka area khali hai. Kabhi kabhi mere nana ji ko shok hai chat par sone ka. Toh bo hi ye bathroom use kar lete hai.chat ke kamre me ek foldable bed aur bichane ke liye kuch gadde bagehra rakhe hue the.toh jab me chat par pahoocha toh dekha ki chat ke ek side me kirti so rahi hai. Mene use disturb karna thik na samjha. Me balcony me aa gaya subah ka time tha toh halki halki hawa chal rahi thi. Me bahi ek chair rakh ke beth gaya, aur abhi jo sapna dekha uske bare me sochne laga.
Chota sa flashback (subah ke sapne ka)
Ek sunsaan jungle ke beecho beech me ek ladka adhmari halat me pada hua hai aur uske charo aur kayi saare log sward liye khade hue the.
Bo sabhi taiyar khade the us adhmare ladke ko marne ke liye. Unme se ek ninja ishra karta hai apne saathiyon ko, toh ek aadmi apni sward dono hatho se pakde hue us ladke ki taraf badta hai bo sward chal pata ki usse pehle hi bo ladka apni talwar uske heart par laga di aur bo ruk gaya. Tabhi baaki logo ne uss ladke par hamla kar diya bo ladka kafi der tak lada par choton ki bajah se aur saamne itne saare logo ki bajah se bo haar gaya aur phir se gir gaya.
Tab baha ek aadmi aata hai.jo ki dekhne me kuch aisa dikh raha tha.
Bo aadmi baha khade ninja ko rukne ka ishara karta hai. Sabhi rul jate hai phir jis aadmi ne attack ka order diya tha bo uss ladke ko check karta hai. Aur phir use ek ajeeb se kamre me le jaya jata hai jaha par ek ajeeb sa pathar ka bana ek kua tha. jisme ek ajeeb se jharne se paani aa raha tha bo pani jab us kue me pahuuchta toh baha se smoke jaisa kuch nikal raha tha.phir bo ninja uss ladke ko ussme daal dete hai. Jisse uss kua ke paani se smoke aana band ho gaya tha.isse feel karke hi meri aankh khul gayi thi subah.
Flashback end.
Me chair par beth kar ye soch raha tha tabhi kirti mere paas aati hai aur mujhe awaj deti hai.
Kirti- shiva shiva, kya hua.
Mein-(chonkte hue)kuch nahi mausi bas thodi baicheni ho rahi thi toh upar aa gaya aur yaha aakar aankh lag gayi.
Kirti- chal koi baat nahi neeche aa ja aur breakfast kar le.
Mein- time kya hua hai.
Kirti- 10 baje hai.
Mein- toh mammi nikal gayi ghar ke liye.
Kirti- haa bo toh subah hi chali gayi.
Mein- thik hai aap chalo me aata hu thodi der me.
Kirti- jaldi aa phir ghumne chalenege.
Mein- ok jao neeche aur mere kapde bhej dena upar.
Ye bol kar me fresh hone chala gaya jab aaya toh mere kapde bathroom ke bahar hi rakhe the, mein nahya aur neeche chala gaya breakfast karne.
Aaj ka khana choti maami ne banaya tha.
Sabne breakfast kiya aur choti maami ko paise diye.
Phir choti maami bhi apni packing karne me lag gayi kyu ki aaj bo aur chote mama apne honeymoon par jaa rahe the.
2 ghante baad bo apni car se nikal gaye.
Sab unko goodbye karne niche aaye hue the, ki tabhi kirti ne kuch aisa kaha ki sab ko shock laga.
Thanks for reading....
Uske baad shadi achhe se ho gayi sabhi log kuch din me apne apne ghar ko nikal gaye .
Mammi papa bhi jane lage.
Par me delhi me hi ruk gaya.apne dosto se milne ka bol ke.
Ab aage...
Subah ka samay me mama ke ghar ek kamre me so raha tha ki Achanak se meri ankh khul gayi.mujhe thoda achha feel nahi ho raha tha, mene time dekha toh abhi 5 baje the, toh me bed se uth kar chat par aa gaya. Mere bade mama ka ghar thoda simple sa bana hua hai. Toh chat par ek kamra bana hua hai jiske saath ek attached bathroom and toilet hai. Aur baaki ka area khali hai. Kabhi kabhi mere nana ji ko shok hai chat par sone ka. Toh bo hi ye bathroom use kar lete hai.chat ke kamre me ek foldable bed aur bichane ke liye kuch gadde bagehra rakhe hue the.toh jab me chat par pahoocha toh dekha ki chat ke ek side me kirti so rahi hai. Mene use disturb karna thik na samjha. Me balcony me aa gaya subah ka time tha toh halki halki hawa chal rahi thi. Me bahi ek chair rakh ke beth gaya, aur abhi jo sapna dekha uske bare me sochne laga.
Chota sa flashback (subah ke sapne ka)
Ek sunsaan jungle ke beecho beech me ek ladka adhmari halat me pada hua hai aur uske charo aur kayi saare log sward liye khade hue the.
Bo sabhi taiyar khade the us adhmare ladke ko marne ke liye. Unme se ek ninja ishra karta hai apne saathiyon ko, toh ek aadmi apni sward dono hatho se pakde hue us ladke ki taraf badta hai bo sward chal pata ki usse pehle hi bo ladka apni talwar uske heart par laga di aur bo ruk gaya. Tabhi baaki logo ne uss ladke par hamla kar diya bo ladka kafi der tak lada par choton ki bajah se aur saamne itne saare logo ki bajah se bo haar gaya aur phir se gir gaya.
Tab baha ek aadmi aata hai.jo ki dekhne me kuch aisa dikh raha tha.
Bo aadmi baha khade ninja ko rukne ka ishara karta hai. Sabhi rul jate hai phir jis aadmi ne attack ka order diya tha bo uss ladke ko check karta hai. Aur phir use ek ajeeb se kamre me le jaya jata hai jaha par ek ajeeb sa pathar ka bana ek kua tha. jisme ek ajeeb se jharne se paani aa raha tha bo pani jab us kue me pahuuchta toh baha se smoke jaisa kuch nikal raha tha.phir bo ninja uss ladke ko ussme daal dete hai. Jisse uss kua ke paani se smoke aana band ho gaya tha.isse feel karke hi meri aankh khul gayi thi subah.
Flashback end.
Me chair par beth kar ye soch raha tha tabhi kirti mere paas aati hai aur mujhe awaj deti hai.
Kirti- shiva shiva, kya hua.
Mein-(chonkte hue)kuch nahi mausi bas thodi baicheni ho rahi thi toh upar aa gaya aur yaha aakar aankh lag gayi.
Kirti- chal koi baat nahi neeche aa ja aur breakfast kar le.
Mein- time kya hua hai.
Kirti- 10 baje hai.
Mein- toh mammi nikal gayi ghar ke liye.
Kirti- haa bo toh subah hi chali gayi.
Mein- thik hai aap chalo me aata hu thodi der me.
Kirti- jaldi aa phir ghumne chalenege.
Mein- ok jao neeche aur mere kapde bhej dena upar.
Ye bol kar me fresh hone chala gaya jab aaya toh mere kapde bathroom ke bahar hi rakhe the, mein nahya aur neeche chala gaya breakfast karne.
Aaj ka khana choti maami ne banaya tha.
Sabne breakfast kiya aur choti maami ko paise diye.
Phir choti maami bhi apni packing karne me lag gayi kyu ki aaj bo aur chote mama apne honeymoon par jaa rahe the.
2 ghante baad bo apni car se nikal gaye.
Sab unko goodbye karne niche aaye hue the, ki tabhi kirti ne kuch aisa kaha ki sab ko shock laga.
Thanks for reading....
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Update-18
Phir choti maami bhi apni packing karne me lag gayi kyu ki aaj bo aur chote mama apne honeymoon par jaa rahe the.
2 ghante baad bo apni car se nikal gaye.
Sab unko goodbye karne niche aaye hue the, ki tabhi kirti ne kuch aisa kaha ki sab ko shock laga.
Ab aage...
Sabhi ek saath kya kaha kirti, tu honeymoon par jayegi bo bhi shiva ke saath.
Kirti- ye kisne kaha.
Bade mama- abhi abhi to bola tune, ki ye dono toh gaye hum kab jayenge.
Sab log(ek saath)- haa abhi kaha tune.
Kirti- ohh pagal logo kuch toh dimaagh ko saaf karo arre akhir modi ji kitni gandgi saaf karnge, sab ke dimaagh me kachra bhara hua. Jise dekho usko mujhe honeymoon par bhejne ki padi rehti hai. Arre me toh shiva se keh rahi thi ki, ye dono toh ghumne gaye ab hum log kitni der me nikal rahe hai city ghumne itne dino baad aaya hai toh delhi to ghumna banta hai ki nahi.
Bade mama- haa hum sab sab samjh rahe hai tu shiva ke saath ghumne ka bahana bana rahi hai.
Kirti- kya bhaiya aap bhi.
Mein- aap taiyaar ho jao mausi 10 min me nikalna hai aur me intjaar nahi karoonga.
Kirti- haa me bas 2 minites me ready ho ke aati hu.
10 minutes baad hum baha se nikal gaye city ghumne meri car se( jo papa ne bheji thi mere ghumne phirne ko mama ke yaha).
Bahi dusri taraf ek band andhere kamre me ek aadmi kursi se bandha pada tha jiske muh par ek ajeeb si chij bandhi hui thi. Kuch iss tarah ki
Tabhi uss kamre me ek darbaja khulta hai aur ek kala saya jisko dekh pana muskil tha.
Kala saya (Russian accent me)- you will never see tha light again.
The darkness you gave to others will haunt you, after the death.
Aur phir bo kala saya ek injection uss bandhe hue aadmi ko laga deta hai, injection lagne ke kuch der baad hi uss bandhe hue aadmi ke chehre par bahut jayda dar ke emotions aane lagte hai bo aadmi chikhna chahta hai par cheekh nahi pata uss ajeeb ai chij ki bajah se, phir bo kala saya use bahi usi halat me chod kar chala jata hai.
Yaha dusri taraf markus aur uske log ek jagah meeting me beth kar plan bana rahe the.
Markus- amit toh kya tumhara plan taiyaar hai agli delivery tumhare hi area me hai.
Amit- sir aap bilkul chinta na kare iss bar mene kuch aisa plan kiya hai jiske bare me bo chor soch bhi nahi sakta.
Yaha mein aur kirti abhi delhi ke ek maal me se movie dekh kar aa rahe the tabhi mujhe kuch aisa dikha jise dekh kar mein ek dum shocked ho gaya.
Aaj ke liye itna hi dosto.
Thanks for reading.
Phir choti maami bhi apni packing karne me lag gayi kyu ki aaj bo aur chote mama apne honeymoon par jaa rahe the.
2 ghante baad bo apni car se nikal gaye.
Sab unko goodbye karne niche aaye hue the, ki tabhi kirti ne kuch aisa kaha ki sab ko shock laga.
Ab aage...
Sabhi ek saath kya kaha kirti, tu honeymoon par jayegi bo bhi shiva ke saath.
Kirti- ye kisne kaha.
Bade mama- abhi abhi to bola tune, ki ye dono toh gaye hum kab jayenge.
Sab log(ek saath)- haa abhi kaha tune.
Kirti- ohh pagal logo kuch toh dimaagh ko saaf karo arre akhir modi ji kitni gandgi saaf karnge, sab ke dimaagh me kachra bhara hua. Jise dekho usko mujhe honeymoon par bhejne ki padi rehti hai. Arre me toh shiva se keh rahi thi ki, ye dono toh ghumne gaye ab hum log kitni der me nikal rahe hai city ghumne itne dino baad aaya hai toh delhi to ghumna banta hai ki nahi.
Bade mama- haa hum sab sab samjh rahe hai tu shiva ke saath ghumne ka bahana bana rahi hai.
Kirti- kya bhaiya aap bhi.
Mein- aap taiyaar ho jao mausi 10 min me nikalna hai aur me intjaar nahi karoonga.
Kirti- haa me bas 2 minites me ready ho ke aati hu.
10 minutes baad hum baha se nikal gaye city ghumne meri car se( jo papa ne bheji thi mere ghumne phirne ko mama ke yaha).
Bahi dusri taraf ek band andhere kamre me ek aadmi kursi se bandha pada tha jiske muh par ek ajeeb si chij bandhi hui thi. Kuch iss tarah ki
Tabhi uss kamre me ek darbaja khulta hai aur ek kala saya jisko dekh pana muskil tha.
Kala saya (Russian accent me)- you will never see tha light again.
The darkness you gave to others will haunt you, after the death.
Aur phir bo kala saya ek injection uss bandhe hue aadmi ko laga deta hai, injection lagne ke kuch der baad hi uss bandhe hue aadmi ke chehre par bahut jayda dar ke emotions aane lagte hai bo aadmi chikhna chahta hai par cheekh nahi pata uss ajeeb ai chij ki bajah se, phir bo kala saya use bahi usi halat me chod kar chala jata hai.
Yaha dusri taraf markus aur uske log ek jagah meeting me beth kar plan bana rahe the.
Markus- amit toh kya tumhara plan taiyaar hai agli delivery tumhare hi area me hai.
Amit- sir aap bilkul chinta na kare iss bar mene kuch aisa plan kiya hai jiske bare me bo chor soch bhi nahi sakta.
Yaha mein aur kirti abhi delhi ke ek maal me se movie dekh kar aa rahe the tabhi mujhe kuch aisa dikha jise dekh kar mein ek dum shocked ho gaya.
Aaj ke liye itna hi dosto.
Thanks for reading.
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bahot khub,
good story dear,
bas ek baat kehna chahunga ki agar regular update de paye to story hit h.
Bhai log pehle toh late update ke liye bahut bahut sorry.
Thoda busy tha kuch dino se ab kosis karoonga jaldi jaldi update ki.
Aur bhai log ek sikayat bhi hai aap log review karte hi nahi ho aisa kaise chalega BHAIYA.
plz guyz apna feedback jaroor de.