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Romance TANHAI KE SAHARE

fnd, this is my 1st story to bataiye mujhe kya imrovement karni he .and plz rate my writing


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Rbcl.007

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Ab uss gadi ka gate khulta he pareshan aur ghabrake ek ladka nikal ta he . usse lagta he ki usene uss bande ko maar diya jisne uske gadi ke aage kuda tha .par jab wo road ke upar aata he toh uske hosh hi ud jati he kyun ki road pe koi aadmi nahini ek ladki wo bhi bina kapde ki padi hui he . ladka khud se bolta he beta RB tere toh ache se lag gaye bhai ! .phir wo ladki ke pass jata he ye dekhne ke liye ki wo jinda he ya nahini ladki munh ke bal giri thi par uske halat dekh ke RB samajh jata he ki uss ladki ke sath kya hua he .ab kya kare kya nakre police ko phone kare ya nahini yehi ho sochta rehta he . phir wo check karta he ki ladki jinda he ki nahini naseeb se uski sanse ab bhi chal rahi thi . pehle toh uske dimag maine khayal aat he ki ambulance ko phone karke yanha se bhag jaye .par phir sochta he aacident ka case banjayega aur wo fash jayega aur ladki ki jo halat he shatyad rape charge bhi lag jaye . phir wo sochta he iss ladki ko pehle road ke side le jaaat hun phir sochunga kya karna he . jab wo uss ladki ko uthane ke liye jaata he usse thoda ajib lagta he ek toh ladki upar se bina kapde ke aur wo bhi iss haalat maine .par karna to tha to usne fir uss ladki ko uthane ke sidha kiya aur ladki ke chere ko dekhte he uske gale se ek bhayanak cheekh nikalti he jo ki aas paas ki mahol maine dhire dhire ghul mil jati he bas piche chod jaati he to aankhon maine aansoo aur subakta hua aawaj .. RB ko yakeen hi nahini ho rah tha ki ye swati he aur uske sath aisa hua he . aaj uske dil ro raha tha kyun ki uska ka pyar aur usaka dil ki dhadkan aaj uske samne iss halat maine padi thi .


Jab thoda usse hosh aat he toh wo bhag ke apne car ke pass jata he aur car ko road pe lane ki koshis karta he par car start hi nahini hota he .phir ho apne phone car se niklta he aur ambulane ko phone karta he . aur bhag ke swati ke pass jata he aur apne shirt nikal ke swati ko odh det ahe . tabhi kuch time baad ambulance aa jati he aur wo swati ko leke ambulance main e hospital le jata he . Aur dr ko request kart ahe ki swati ko admi karne ke liye par jaisa hamre desh maine hota he ki chahe patient mar jaye par police complian pehli honi hogi .. dr sunta hi nahini he . naseeb se wanha pe ek police inspector apne kisi relative ko visit karne aay hota he .. wo dr ko bolta he jaldi treatment karne ke liye .tab jaake swati ko Dr OT maine leti haie . RB poolice wale ko sab bata ta he ki kya aur kaise hua he . police wala usse bolta he ki tum iss ladki ko yanha se le jao kyunki agar police case hui toh oolta tumhe hi phasa denge log kyun ki jo ek ladki sath aisa kar sakte haine wo kanoon ko easily kharid sakte haine . karib 2 ghante baad swati ki treatment puri . subha ke 4 baj agye the par abhi bhi wo inspector wanha se gaya nahini tha . wo barabar RB ko samjha rah tha ki usse aage ky akarna he police karbai se bachne ke liye .


Phir subha ke 8 baje hi Dr.ke mana karte hue bhi RB aur police inspector ne swwati ko discharged karake ambaulance maine RB ke ghar bhej deta hae. Aur ek RB ke ghar pe hi uska ilaj karne ka salha deta he .

RB swati ko leke ghar to aajata he par ab usse samjh nahini aa raha tha ki kya kare . gam manaye , roye .itne salon baad swati ke milne pe khush ho ya uske halat pe roye . Par wo apne gam ko bhula ke swati ke dekh bhal maine lag jaata he . apne office se wo emergeny chutti le leta he . ek nurse bhi lagadeta he wo aur ek private Dr jo har din aaak eswati ko check up kar jati thi . Obviously who police wala hi ye sab arrange kiya hua tha . Aaj lag bhag 5 dinke baad swati ko hosh aaya tha . par wo sirf aankh khol ke dekh rahi thi .shayad uske dimag abbhi is kabil nahini hua tha ki wo ye bhi jaane ki kosis kare ki wo kanha, kaise aai kuch bhi . agar chahti bhi to bhi uske juban uske sath na de pata kuch puchne ko .
 

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Ab uss gadi ka gate khulta he pareshan aur ghabrake ek ladka nikal ta he . usse lagta he ki usene uss bande ko maar diya jisne uske gadi ke aage kuda tha .par jab wo road ke upar aata he toh uske hosh hi ud jati he kyun ki road pe koi aadmi nahini ek ladki wo bhi bina kapde ki padi hui he . ladka khud se bolta he beta RB tere toh ache se lag gaye bhai ! .phir wo ladki ke pass jata he ye dekhne ke liye ki wo jinda he ya nahini ladki munh ke bal giri thi par uske halat dekh ke RB samajh jata he ki uss ladki ke sath kya hua he .ab kya kare kya nakre police ko phone kare ya nahini yehi ho sochta rehta he . phir wo check karta he ki ladki jinda he ki nahini naseeb se uski sanse ab bhi chal rahi thi . pehle toh uske dimag maine khayal aat he ki ambulance ko phone karke yanha se bhag jaye .par phir sochta he aacident ka case banjayega aur wo fash jayega aur ladki ki jo halat he shatyad rape charge bhi lag jaye . phir wo sochta he iss ladki ko pehle road ke side le jaaat hun phir sochunga kya karna he . jab wo uss ladki ko uthane ke liye jaata he usse thoda ajib lagta he ek toh ladki upar se bina kapde ke aur wo bhi iss haalat maine .par karna to tha to usne fir uss ladki ko uthane ke sidha kiya aur ladki ke chere ko dekhte he uske gale se ek bhayanak cheekh nikalti he jo ki aas paas ki mahol maine dhire dhire ghul mil jati he bas piche chod jaati he to aankhon maine aansoo aur subakta hua aawaj .. RB ko yakeen hi nahini ho rah tha ki ye swati he aur uske sath aisa hua he . aaj uske dil ro raha tha kyun ki uska ka pyar aur usaka dil ki dhadkan aaj uske samne iss halat maine padi thi .


Jab thoda usse hosh aat he toh wo bhag ke apne car ke pass jata he aur car ko road pe lane ki koshis karta he par car start hi nahini hota he .phir ho apne phone car se niklta he aur ambulane ko phone karta he . aur bhag ke swati ke pass jata he aur apne shirt nikal ke swati ko odh det ahe . tabhi kuch time baad ambulance aa jati he aur wo swati ko leke ambulance main e hospital le jata he . Aur dr ko request kart ahe ki swati ko admi karne ke liye par jaisa hamre desh maine hota he ki chahe patient mar jaye par police complian pehli honi hogi .. dr sunta hi nahini he . naseeb se wanha pe ek police inspector apne kisi relative ko visit karne aay hota he .. wo dr ko bolta he jaldi treatment karne ke liye .tab jaake swati ko Dr OT maine leti haie . RB poolice wale ko sab bata ta he ki kya aur kaise hua he . police wala usse bolta he ki tum iss ladki ko yanha se le jao kyunki agar police case hui toh oolta tumhe hi phasa denge log kyun ki jo ek ladki sath aisa kar sakte haine wo kanoon ko easily kharid sakte haine . karib 2 ghante baad swati ki treatment puri . subha ke 4 baj agye the par abhi bhi wo inspector wanha se gaya nahini tha . wo barabar RB ko samjha rah tha ki usse aage ky akarna he police karbai se bachne ke liye .


Phir subha ke 8 baje hi Dr.ke mana karte hue bhi RB aur police inspector ne swwati ko discharged karake ambaulance maine RB ke ghar bhej deta hae. Aur ek RB ke ghar pe hi uska ilaj karne ka salha deta he .

RB swati ko leke ghar to aajata he par ab usse samjh nahini aa raha tha ki kya kare . gam manaye , roye .itne salon baad swati ke milne pe khush ho ya uske halat pe roye . Par wo apne gam ko bhula ke swati ke dekh bhal maine lag jaata he . apne office se wo emergeny chutti le leta he . ek nurse bhi lagadeta he wo aur ek private Dr jo har din aaak eswati ko check up kar jati thi . Obviously who police wala hi ye sab arrange kiya hua tha . Aaj lag bhag 5 dinke baad swati ko hosh aaya tha . par wo sirf aankh khol ke dekh rahi thi .shayad uske dimag abbhi is kabil nahini hua tha ki wo ye bhi jaane ki kosis kare ki wo kanha, kaise aai kuch bhi . agar chahti bhi to bhi uske juban uske sath na de pata kuch puchne ko .
Ye sahi me alag he twist he story me :crazy:
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Ab dhire dhire swati ko apni halat ki samjh aane lagta he aur aaj uske aankhon se aansoon behna chahate to the shayad wo bhi sukh gaye the wo sirf khud ke nasib ko kosh rahi thi ki wo jinda kyn bach gayee . aaj kuch jada der tak swati hosh maien thi pehele hosh maine aake hi behosh ho jati thi ,toh nurse ne RB ko phone kiya ki swati ko pura hosh aagya he . RB bhag ke aat he abhi tak swati us se mil nahini payee thi kyun ki jab swati ko hosh aata tha tab RB wanha nahini hota tha . nurse swati ko phir se check karke medice deke chali jati he aur swati ki phir se aank lag jati he . Tabhi RB wanha aata he aur swati ko leta dekh ke sochta he ki wo phir se behosh ho gayee . nurse wanha pe nahini hoti he toh RB swati ke pass beth jaata he wo swati ki hath ko pakd ke bate karna lagta hai “kyun yaar itne saal ho gaye par tum aaj bhi mujh se nahini baat karti ho chalo kam se kam tumhara dost tha yehi manke baat kar leti mujhse tum tab bhi mere se baat nahini kar rahi thi aur aaj bhi chup leti hui ho , plz ek baar uthjao tumhe pata nahini tumko iss haal maine dekh ke mere dil maine kya beet raha he . plz uth jao na ek baar baat kar lo chahe toh hmesh ke tarha gali hi de dena mujhe par plz tumhari ye halat mujh se ab aur nahini dekhi jati he “ ye bol ke RB phut phut ke rone lagta he aur swati ke chehere pe apna hath rakh ke rone lagta he tabhi usse apne hath maine kuch gila gila mehsoos hota he . jab wo dekhta he to swati ro rahi thi .uskke aankh ab bhi band thi matlab wo behosh na thi aur RB ki baat sun rahi thi . RB ghabra jata he aur wanha se jane lagta he tabhi swati uski hath pakd leti he aur apne pass bethne ko ishara karti he .


RB ke passbeth te hi swati ka sabar ab toot jata he anb wo phut ke roni lagti he .. “bhagwaan ne mujhe meri saj ade diya he RB ! maine jo kiya he tumhare sath apne maa ke sath najane kitne doston ke sath usake liye bhagwaan mujhe saja toh dena tha . par najane kyun mujhe maut nahini aarahi he .kosish kiya thamaine RB bohat himat juat ke kosish kiya tha ki sab ke life maine khushi laskun meri maut se kyun ki jindegi se to sabko dukh hi ponchaya he .kyun bachay mujhe plz mujhe mar jane do “

RB –“agar ek baar bhi maut ki baat kina phir khudke pehle mujhko nara hua paogi”

Swati-“ plz RB RB aisa na kaho mere liye sab ne kuch na kuch bhugta he aur tum un sab maine sab se jada ab plz mere liye apnijaan deneki baat karke mujhe aur taqleef mat do”

RB –“taqleef toh tum mujhe de rahe ho baar baar maut ki baat karke “

Swati -“tum nahinidekh sakte kya ? kya halat he meri ab jeene ka kya faida mera .iss tarha jindegi bhar ghut ghut jeen se acha mar hi jaana acha he “

RB – “ thi he chalomeri ye khwaish puri karogi?”

Swati –“chalo ,iss jindegi maine kuch toh acha kaam kiya tha maien ki aakhir waqt maine tumhara kuch khwaish pur kar paungi .plz batao kuch bhi aaj agar tumne jaan bhi mang diya to bhi maine khushi khushi de dungi “

RB-“aare mainetumhe kya puch rah ahun aur tum mujhe ye baten suna rahi ho.bolo pura karogi ya nahini ?”

Swati –“haan,pucho!”

RB –“mujh se wada karo ab tum aage se marne ki baat nahini karogi aur phir se thik hogi wo bhi jaldi se mere lie tumahre maa ke liye tumhare ghar walon ke liye aur ********”

Swati –“aur ?????”

RB –“kuch nahini bas wada karo jaldi thik ho jaoge “

Swati “thik he . tum mujh se wada karo ki iss ke wadle miane tumse ja mangungi tum mujhe doge ?”

RB-“aare maine pucha tha tumne nahini ..chalo thik he wada jo mangogi maine pura karoonga , ab so jao .”

Phir RB swati ko sula ke dusre room maine nikal jata he

Swati -“ bas tumahre sare swal aur meri sari galti sirf wo aakhir “aur” maine hi reh gaya “
 

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