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Romance TANHAI KE SAHARE

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Update No 63
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Vicky- aare sorry baba par ye bhavi achanak ..

Dipika – wo hum bhavi devar ke bich ki baat hai ..

Tabhi RB ka phone bajne lagta hai ..

RB – hlw

Uss side******

RB – haan kon ladki ?? kya hua hai ? kya hua maa ko ? nahiiiiinn

RB ke mobile niche gir jata hai aur RB apne ghutne ke bal jameen pe beth jata hai .
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Ab Aage
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Vicky- kya hua RB ..
RB – wo maa maa swati maa
Ritesh jo ab tak wanhi khada hua tha jhat se phone uthata hai aur dur jake baat karne lagta hai ..
Uske baad ritesh sab ke pass aata hai ..
Ritesh- dipika tum ek baar RB ko sambhalo hum abhi aate hain ..
Vicky aur ritesh wanha se aage badh jate hain ..
Vicky- kya hua
Ritesh – wohi jiska dar tha swati RB ke ghar ponhach gayee aur usne uski maa ko nisha wala clip dikha diya yeh bola hai ki nisha ko rb ne black mail karke rape kiya hai aur usne nisha ka bhi koi video proof layi thi imean confession type kuch .. aur usne yeh bhi batya hai ki RB uske sath bhi ek baar jabardsati karne ki kosis kiya tha yeh sunke aunty ko dil ka doura pada hai aur unhe medical le gaye hain ..
Vicky- iss behan ki *** swati ki to ek baar aunty thik ho jaye phir maine iss batata hoon .. sal aritu didi ka to pata nahii agar aunty ko kuch hua na to maine sach maine iska ya rape kardunga ya murder phir chaye mujhe jail ho ya phasi ..
Ritesh – pehle koi taxi dekh hospital jana hai ..
Ritesh ek taxi rokta hai aur vicky jaake RB aur dipika ko wanha le aata hai .
Ritesh –RB ko sambhalne maine laga hua tha wanhi vicky dipika ko jo kuch h ua uske bare maine bata raha tha .. aise maine hi thodi hi time maine sab Hospital ponhach gaye.
RB bhag ke icu ke tarf jaata hai uske sath maienn baki sab bhi ho jaate hain .
Rb ka ro ro ke bura haal ho gaya tha . filhal ke liye kisi ko andar jaane ko nahini de rahe the milne ko .
Vicky dr se poochne ke liye chala jaata hai .
Vicky- dr ab aunty ke halat kaisi hai ..
Dr- abhi unki halat achi hai par abhi unhe aaram ki jarurat hai aap wait kijiye jab unke hosh aane ke baad dr kuch test karenge uske baad aap unse mil sakte hain par ek ek karke ..
Vicky- thik hai dr ..
Vicky wapas sab ke pass aata hai .
Vicky- RB tu hosh se kaam le agar tu aise royega to aunty ko jab pata chalega to unka kya hoga .. aansoo ponch dr se baat karliya hai maine wo thik hai unhe kabhi bhi hosh aa sakta hai ..
Vicky- ruby aunty (RB ke padoshan jo unhe yanah leke aaye thi ) uncle ko khabar diya hai aapne ..
Ruby aunty- haan beta maine RB ke papa aur shashank bhaiya ko bhi bata diya hai wo aate hi honge ,,(nihar ke papa)
Vicky- aap ne unhe baki kuch to nahini bataya hai an ..
Ruby aunty- nahni maine sirf unko yanha aane ko bol diya hai ..
Vicky- sahi kiya aunty ..
Dipika- aunty wanha hua kya tha aap jaanti ho ..
Ruby aunty- beta wo koi ladki aayi thi tumhari hi dost hai koi wo aake boli ki RB usse paise ke liye apne pyar ke jaal maine phasaya aur uske apne sone ke liye kaha jab wo na mani to uske sath jabardasti kiya par wo wanha se bhag agyee .. maine aur didi ne uske baat ko maan ne ko jab mana kardiya tab wo didi ko bohat kuch sunayee.. aur nihar ke bhi bohat bura bhala bola usne aur phir ..
Ritesh- kya hua bolo aage aunty .
Ruby aunty – wo apne phone maine RB ka aur ek ladki ka .. maine bol bhi nahini sakti .. usne bataya ki RB ne usse black mmail karke uska rape kiya hai .. aur usne uss ladki ka video bhi dikhay jiss main wo ro ro ke yeh baat keh rahi thi ..uske bad wo RB ko jail bhejegi bolke chali gayee did iss baat ko sehan naini kar payee aur wo ..**
Vicky apne phone se ek photo nikal ke bolta hai aunty yehi ladki video wali thi ..
Ruby- haan beta iska matlab kya wo ladki sach keh rahi thi hamare RB ne aisa kiya hai ..
Dipika- iss ladki ko to maine aaj nahini chodne wali ..
Vicky- aunty aap tension mat llo .ab hum yanha hai aap ho sake to aaram karlo ya ghar chale jao ..
Ruby aunty- thik hai beta mujhe bachoon ko bhi khana khilanahoga .. batate rehna kya hua ..
Uske baad ruby aunty wanha se chali jaati hai ritesh jaake unhe bahar taxi maine bithake aata hai ..
RB ka ro ro k ebohat bura haal tha .. Ritesh usse ke pass hi beth ke usse dilash de raha th a..
Dipika- ye usne sahi nahini kiya usne ..
Vicky- isne to iss baar had hi cross kar di .. socho shashank uncle wagera jab yanha aayeneg unhe ye pata chalega to unhe kitna bura lagega jo baat ko wo hum sab se chupana chahte the sirf hamare khusi ke liye unhone apna gam ko chupa liya tha wo phir se saamne aa jayega ..
Tabhi ek nurse jo anadr thi bahar aati hai aur kuch der maien wo apne sath kuch doctor aur nurse koleke aati hai .. kuch der ke chek up ke baad wo bahar aajate hian ..
Vicky aur RB unke pass chale jaate hain ..
RB – dr meri maa ab thik to hai na
Dr- haan ab koi tension ki baat nahini hai unko hosh aagaya hai aap kuch der maien un se mil sakte hain par wo abhi bhi kamjor hai to jada der mat miliye aur na hi jada bhid banana ek ya do log hi jaa sakte ho milne ..
Uske baad dr baki ke nurse se aage kya krna hai ye bolke chale gaye …
Thodi der maien nurse aake bolti hai ki aap jaake mil sakte hain .. RB aur vicky andar jaate hain ..
RB uske ma ke pass jaata hai jo ab bhi aankh band karke bed maine leti hui thi ..
RB – maa ,, maa main jaanta hoon aap sun rahe hain plz aankh kholo ..
RB ‘mom- kya wo sach hai .
RB - maa wo ..
RB ‘ s mom – maine kya pucha ?
RB – wo wo
Vicky- aunty aap nahin jaanti hai wo swati ka yeh sab plan hai wo ritu ki behan ai ..
RB’ mom- maine wo nahini pucha wo toh maine uske baton se jaan hi chuki hoon ..par wo ladki jo keh rahi thi kya wo sach hai wo dusri ladki nisha kon hai aur tu suke sath aisa kiya hai ..
Vicky- nahini aunty
RB ‘ s mom- tum chup raho vicky . tum jabab do kya puch maine ..
RB – maa wo galti se maine kuch nahini jaanta hai uss bare maien ..
RB ‘ s mom- kya tu nahini jaanta wo ladki ro ro ke keh rahi thi ki tu suko blackmail karke uske jabardasti physical hua tha .. kya wo sab jhoot hai ..
RB – nahnin maa. Maine usse koi black mail nahini kiya tha wo sab ba s
RB’s mom- matlab tune yeh kiya hai tujh se mujh ko yeh umeed nahini thi RB ab tere pap aayeneg to maine usse kya kahungi .. wo to yeh khabar sunke toot hi jayenge .. hey bhagwaan ye tune kya kardiya .. aahhhhh
RB – maa kya hua aapko
Vicky aunty nurse nurse dekho aunty ko kya ho gaya hai
Nurse jaldi se dr ko emergency call karti ahi aur jaldi se dr wanah aajte hain RB aur vicky ko bahar bhej diya jaate hain ..
Thodi der maien dr bahar aate hain ..
Vicky – dr kya hua aunty ko ..
Dr- maine kaha tha ki unhe tension na dena unka blood pressure unstable ho gya tha jisse heart pe pressure aaya isiliye wo behosh ho gay hain aap dhyan rakhe aage se unhko kisi tarha ka tension wagera mat deiin..
Dr yeh bole wanah se chale jaate hain ..
RB – yeh maine kya kardiya hey bhagwaan maa ko thik kardo .. meri galti ki saza unhe kyun de rahe ho .. mujhe yeh sab karna hi nahini chahiye ***********
Dipika- RB kya hua tumhe RB RB vicky RB ko dekho
Vicky jab ab tak andar ke tarf dekh raha tha bhag ke RB ke tarf aata hai RB behosh hoke girne hi wala hota hi ke vicky aake usse pakad leta hai ..
Vicky- RB RB kya hua tujjhe .. DR. Nurse
Ritesh bhag ke jaake dr aur nurse ko bula laate hain RB ko jaldi se andar le jaate hain..
Sab RB ke sath dr ke piche chale jaate hain ..
Dr andar RB ko check kar rahe the bahar sab tension ke sath besabar DR ke bahar aane ka wait kar arhe the .. thodi der maien Dr bahar aate hain ..
Ritesh – dr RB ko kya hua ..
Dr- kuch nahini wo jada stress ke chalte unka prefrontal cortex ke upar jada pressure pad isiliye o behosh ho gaye the ab wo thik hai .hum unhe IV laga diya hai kuch der maine unhe hosh aajayega ..
Vicky yeh sab kya ho raha hai pehle aunty ab wo RB .. uss Sali ko toh maine chodunga nahini ab ..
Vicky bahar ko jaane ko hota hai ki dipika ur ritesh usse rok dete hain ..
Dipika- tum pagal mat bano koi faida nahini hoga tum uska kuch kar nahin sakte na hi usse iss baat se farak padega wo toh jada khus hogi ki uska man chaha kaam ho gaya .
Vicky- par usse aise hi RB ke jindegi ke sath khelne nahini de sakte na ..kash kaise bhi karke yeh matter khatam ho jaye ..bas uncle wagera baat ko samjh jaye phir uss swati ko dekhta hoon maine ..
Dipika – tum tension na lo uske bare maine tumhe tension lene ki koi jarurat nahini hai maine wo dekh loongi ..
Vicky- matlab ..
Dipika – apna phone dena ..
Vicky- kyun
Dipika- kaha na phone do apna ..
Dipika vicky se uska phone leti aur kuch der check karne ke baad ek call laga deti hai …
Vicky- kisse call kar rahi ho .
Dipika – jo RB ko sambhal sake aur jis kaam ko tumhe pehle se hi kar dena chaiye tha .
RB aankh band karke soya hua tha tabhi usse kuch awaaz sunayee deti hai .. wo dhire se apna aankhe kholta hai to apne saamne nurse ko dekhta hai jo usse utha rahi thi .
Nurse- sir uth jaiye ,aap se milne police inspector aaye hue hain ..
RB – thik hai tum unhe bithao maine aata hoon thodi der maine .
RB ab purane yadon se maine khote hue kab nind maine so gaya tha usse khud bhi pata nahini tha par wo yadein itne gehre the ki uske so jaane ke baad bhi uske sapne main wo sab phir se khud ko dohrane lag gaye the .
RB uthke bed maine beth jaata hai aur aur phir thodi der apni dimag ko normal karne ke baad fresh hone washroom chala jata hai wanha se sidha bhaar aata hai janah couch pe insp uska wait kar rahe the ..
RB – good morning insp sir. Aap itne subha subha .
Insp- good morning . hmm kuch betein karni thi tumse .. waise ab unka haal kaisa hai ..
RB – sir ab wo kafi achi hai pehle se par aap ko toh pata hai ki jo uske sath hua hai uska kitna gehra asar dimag maine padta hai .. waise aap kis bare maine baat karne wale the .
Insp- maine uss time to tumhe wanha iss liye bacha liya ki tum police case maine faltu maine na phas jao . par ab lagta hai ki tumhe bachane ke chakar maien ab meri noukri jayegi ..
RB – kya hua sir .
Insp- tum ne mujhe ye kyun nahni bataya ki yeh diwang ji ki beti hai .. iska baap iss state ka sab se bada industrialist hai aur iska bhai iss area ka MLA. Tumhe pata hai na jab unhe pata hoga tab kya hoga iss pure sehar maine aag laga denge aur mera to pucho hi mat ..
“kuch nahini karenge wo aur na hi unhe kuch pata cahlega unhe to yehtak pata nahin hoga ki maine kanha hoon ..”
RB aur insp uss tarafa dekhte hain .jaha swati door ke pass khadi thi .
RB – tum kyun aaye bahar pagal ho kya
RB bhag ke jaate hai aur swati ko lek bed maien leta deta hai ..
RB – tum pagal ho kya bilkool tumhe mana kiya tha dr ne bed se bhi uthne ko phir bhi ..
Swati- mujhe insp se baat karni hai ..
RB – par
Swati- plz
RB –ok
RB bahar jake insp ko bulake lata hai .
Insp – aur ab tumhari tabiyat kaisi hai
Swati- dekh to rahe hain insp ..waise aap tension mat lijiye aap ke upar kisi tarha ki bhi aanch nahini aayengi ..
Insp- par aapke
Swati- kya unhone mera missing ka complin kiya hai ya phir unhe pata bhi hai maine kanha hoon .
Insp- nahini maine pata kiya tha unhe shyada pata nahin hai iss bare maine .
Swati- insp unhe farak nahin padta .. aap bilkool tension mat lijiye aapke bare maine humkisi ko kuch nahin batayeneg na hi aap to kisi ko pata bhi nahini lageaga .
Insp- thik hai maine chalta hoon phir ..apna khayal rakhna . RB tum aana tum se kuch baat karni hai ..
RB – thik hai insp chaliye .. tum plz yanha se phir se mat uthna thik hai ..
RB insp ke sath bahar aata hai ..
Insp – dekho RB mujhe jitna meri fikar nahini hai utna tumhari hai .maine to kaise bhi karke bach jaunga .par mujhe lagta hai ki tumh eswati ke ghar walon ko inform kardena chahiye .kyun ki agar uske ghar walon ko pata chal gaya to bohat bura haoga ..kosis karna ki ya to isse uske ghar walon ke pass bhijwa do ya phir ye kosis karo ki ye baat kisi ko pata na chale jab tak ho sake .
RB – thik hai sir maine dhyan rakhoonga iss baat pe .
RB insp ko bye bolke andar jaata hai .. swati ab bed pe so ke RB ka wait kar rahi thi ..
Swati- insp kya bol rahe the .
RB – kuch nahin tum wo sab chodo aur jaldi se medicine le lo ..
RB medicine nikal ke swati ko deta hiai swati medicine kha leti hai .. RB usse bed maine takiye ke sahare betha deta hai ..
Halaki in teeen char dino maine wo kafi had tak thik ho chuki thi par phir bhi uske private part maine jo chot aaye the uske chalte wo sidha hoke beth nahini paa rahi thi .
Swati- RB ek baat puuchun ..
RB – haan .. tum yanah matlab ab kya tum isi sahar maine rehte ho aur yanah koi aur nahni hai tumhari maa .. I mean sorry maine itne din se yanah hoon par yeh puch nahin payee.
RB kuch der swati ko dekhta hai phir niche ke traf dekhta hai phir ek halki si saans chod ke bol ta hai ..
RB – maine yanha nahin rehta .uss raat ko maine yanha lot raha tha .kuch kaam tha mujhe isiliye aaya hua tha kuch din ke liye ..
Swati- yeh ghar
RB – mera hi hai jab yanha se trasfer hua to maine uske baad time nahini nikal paya isse bechne ko .phir baad maine dil nahini kiya isse bechne ko .isiliye jab bhi yanha aata hoon to hotel ke wajaye yanhi reh jaata hoon .
Swati- kya aksar aaya karte the tum yanha …
RB – nahini iss sehar maine ab raha hi kya hai .. bas . chodo jaane do wo sab ..
Swati- to ab matlab koi office kaam tha ya kuch personal
Tabhi door bell bajta hai
RB – maine dekh ke aata hoon
RB ye converstion se bohat hi umcomfortable ho raha tha swati se yun baat karne se uske dil aur dimag ka santulan bigad raha tha .. isiliye wo sirf bahan dhoond hi raha tha ki wanha se kaise nikle tabhi bell bajke uska kaam aasaan kar diya ..
RB jaake gate kholta hai ..
Gate ke kholte hi achanak RB ke naak maine ek jor ka ghoonsa padta hai jiss se RB apna hath naak maine deke niche jhook jaata hai

.. tabhi uske pet maine ek mooka padta hai ..
“ kya be saale tujhe bola tha ponhach ke phone karne ko do teen deen ho gaye

tu phone nahini kiya .mujhe tere ofiice se pata chala ki tu kab ka yanah ponhach chuka hai ..

aur chuti bhi le liya hai advance maine ..”
RB ko iss awaaz ke sath aur bhi awaaz suni dete hain ..


RB apne naak ko sehlata hua upar sar uthata hai uske saamne uske saare purane dost Vicky dipika Anita aur Ritesh khade the .. aur Ritesh usse teesra mooka maarne ko hath uthaye khada tha .
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Continued
mera aapki is story phela ya dusra comm.hoga ye story bahut achhi hai but is update me achanak past se present me ye samajh me nahi aaya.
 
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