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Erotica जोरू का गुलाम उर्फ़ जे के जी

motaalund

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Vo bhi aayega,...aglali post vahi hogi, ...thodi si Bhumika aur uske pahle ki ek do poston ke saath,.... aapne accha kiya yaad dlaya ,... Muhe bhi vo bahoot accha lagata hai lekin Hindi men story ka focus thoda shift hua, English men BDSM aur SISSIFICATION jayada tha kyonki mujhe lagta tha Hindi men is theme par kahaniyan naa ke barabar hain, lekin,... Hindi men readers ko shayad jyada sisi type male role nahi chalata , isliye sisfictaion hai lekin thoda sa toned down


aur vo monologue jo philosphy mujhe aahci lagti hai bas smajhiye maine apne man ki baat kahi likhi hai thanks again
you have taken a balanced approach...
 

motaalund

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MARVELOUS UPDATES
kishori ke dil ki baten, uske kunware ango ka vistar se varnan, unhe istemal karne ke upay aur unse milne wala anand aapse accha koi nahi bayan kar sakta
padne ke baad soch-2 haalat kharab hoti rehti hai, aisa lagta hai adhunik kokshastra pad rahe hai
you are unmatchable komaal bhabhi
keep posting hot updates like this
waiting for more
सही कहा.... अद्वितीय...
 

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एकदम नहीं उतरेगा, बल्कि अभी तो चढ़ेगा वो मेरी सास और ननद के ऊपर,... वो भी मेरे सामने
इन एपिसोड का तो बेसब्री से इंतजार रहेगा...
 

motaalund

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I am speechless, for words, looking at your presence on my thread, a writer of writers, king of words,... thanks so much, if possible and you can find some time, please do have a look, at least a glimpse of my other story too, where i have started dabbling in Incest, till now a genre i had not dared to venture,.. thanks once again,
both of you are unparalleled
 

motaalund

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Updates studded with knowledge,vision.
.Marvelous story.Can't find suitable words to describe your skills and abilities.
Gazab,jandar, shandar, jabardast r a few words I know & hence putting it here for ur updates.👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌👌🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯💯⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐✅✅✅✅✅✅✅
you are right...
used appropriate words to describe her inborn gifted competence..
 

motaalund

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Ab story hindi main to comment bhi Hindi main Dena chahunga, monologue ki khas baat ye hain ke komal as character apne Mann ki saare baate khul ke batati hain,kyun wo guddi ko le jana chati hain,usake sath kya karegi aur uske sath hi uske pati ki jo kaise taboos main reh Chuka hain jisase wo use Azad karna chahti hain aur khul ke pyar karna sikha rahi hain.Aur as women komal ko maja Dena nahi hain maja lena bhi hain as in her words 'main chodungi'.aur aise hi guddi kobhi asali jawani ka maja Dena hain.
बचपन से पति के दबे हुए अरमानों को ...
गुड्डी भी तो भईया को ललचाती थी...
लेकिन सबके सामने शरीफ बन कर ...
 

motaalund

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I always hanker for your comments as soon as I finish my post.

But now, I am finding myself, bereft of words, at a loss, what to say. I and most of readers will say in unison that I don't deserve such accolades, a pen pusher, a purveyor of porn.

And for one charge I do accept my guilt, search for appropriate words, either in Hindi or in English,...

सुवरन को खोजत फिरत, कवि,व्यभिचारी, चोर,...

( an example of Shlesh)

so I too look for a word which should convey the feelings of the characters.

Now about the world view and I agree with you that a balance is required. When the narrator in the story says, female or feminine, it only means a world view ( and you have perfectly understood it) and let me quote the relevant lines,

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"My focus was not on gender issues, but attitudes and value systems which define its organizational culture. It was typically Athenian vs Spartan,

Athenian loved to love, enjoy and discuss poetry, focused on softer aspects of life and in Sparta; they knew how to fight and liked to fight. My contention was that in post competitive, post modern world, War is obsolete. We should show care, cooperation and instead of wasting time in fighting, we must learn to show compassion, karuna."


This is the view of the narrator, protagonist of the story, Like in Greek Theatre sometimes Narrator or orchestra says a few pithy lines to bring the issues to the forefront,... and as the story is ending here, bring it to, what i a thought was fitting finale.

List yes has numbers not quite in serial and one reason was it was copied from Eise Sutton, but not the entire list.

For writing this story I read many books on the female domination and one which enthralled me most,... was

Elise, Sutton, Female domination and I will be sharing a link on a separate a post for downloading the book ( separate post so that if mods delete it, it does not delete my comments )

There was a lot of demand for translation but I failed and I thought to almost rewrite the story in Hindi ( with some part of structure and most of concept )

but let me reteraite I agree with you about the harmony, a balance of forces, Yin and Yang, Ardhnarishwar.
you underestimate yourself....
your finesse and prowess has unique feature..
I have rarely seen it in other writers....

I have not said about gender (male or female) but feminine or masculine characteristics... which may be even in men/women.
and balance between them.
Please forgive, if I hurt you.
 
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