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★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★
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Handling family responsibilities is not an easy task and Shikha takes the responsibility of the family. For this reason, she gave up his love. Shikha has very good thinking. Shikha is fulfilling the promise given to her father. Sometimes a person loses in the face of circumstances.
Richa is talking to mother in favor of Shikha, but mother and Yash are opposing Richa's talk. From what Richa is saying, she shows her love for her sister.
Shikha's mother should look at all her children from a perspective, only showing love to the boy is wrong, she should also take care of Shikha.
Yash is getting rid of responsibilities. We do not have to be free from our responsibilities but we have to fulfill it completely. Yash has not done any work of praise.
Spider-Man Ji, I liked your story very much. You have introduced us to the reality of life through this story. Hope your story wins the competition. Thank You...
Handling family responsibilities is not an easy task and Shikha takes the responsibility of the family. For this reason, she gave up his love. Shikha has very good thinking. Shikha is fulfilling the promise given to her father. Sometimes a person loses in the face of circumstances.
Richa is talking to mother in favor of Shikha, but mother and Yash are opposing Richa's talk. From what Richa is saying, she shows her love for her sister.
Shikha's mother should look at all her children from a perspective, only showing love to the boy is wrong, she should also take care of Shikha.
Yash is getting rid of responsibilities. We do not have to be free from our responsibilities but we have to fulfill it completely. Yash has not done any work of praise.
Spider-Man Ji, I liked your story very much. You have introduced us to the reality of life through this story. Hope your story wins the competition. Thank You...
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Kal ho na ho
Dosto...mai en sabhi ki writers ki tarah legend nahi hu
Aur na hi mujhe en sabhi ki tarah
Likhna aata hai
Mai to bs ek sidha sadha member hu
Jesni apni soch ko ek kahani ka rupe dekar aap sabhi ki samni phesh kiya hai
Mera mane na hai ki pyar sharir si pari hai....prem mai shurate nahi balki sherate dekhi jaate hai
Aur apni esi soch ko meni es kahani ki rupe mi aap sabhi ki samni prastute kiya hai
Mai en sabhi mahani writers ki tarah expert nahi hu
Es liye agar kahi koe bhule hogae to maaf kar degiye ga
Aur ha agar y kahani thodi bhi aapki dile ko chu te hai to hmesa yade rakhna
Jo kari abhi kari...kyuki pata nahi dosto
Kal ho na ho
Dosto...mai en sabhi ki writers ki tarah legend nahi hu
Aur na hi mujhe en sabhi ki tarah
Likhna aata hai
Mai to bs ek sidha sadha member hu
Jesni apni soch ko ek kahani ka rupe dekar aap sabhi ki samni phesh kiya hai
Mera mane na hai ki pyar sharir si pari hai....prem mai shurate nahi balki sherate dekhi jaate hai
Aur apni esi soch ko meni es kahani ki rupe mi aap sabhi ki samni prastute kiya hai
Mai en sabhi mahani writers ki tarah expert nahi hu
Es liye agar kahi koe bhule hogae to maaf kar degiye ga
Aur ha agar y kahani thodi bhi aapki dile ko chu te hai to hmesa yade rakhna
Jo kari abhi kari...kyuki pata nahi dosto
Kal ho na ho
Sach kaha vire
Pyar jesm si nahi
Balki aatma si kiya jata hai
Mai nahi janta teri story baakiyo ko kesi lagi ge par
Vire....sach kahta hu
Teri kahani ni emotional lar diya
Ek bar ki leyi to esa laga mano y kahani meri khude ki hai
Veri sach kahta hu
Dil khus kar diya
Mai rabe so duwa karuga ki
Jes tarah teri kahani ni mera dile jete liya hai
Bilkul usi tarah
Teri kahani y competetion bhi jeti
Aur aa vire
Result chahaiye kuch bhi rahe .....likhna mate chodna
Aur hmesa u hi kahaniya likh te rahna
Aut yaade rakhyo vire
Ki vaahi guruji ka khalsa vahi guruji ki fatahe
Oh bhai kahani to aapki bhi dile khus kar gae
Vesi aapka naam kya hai
Eti soni kahani likh te ho
To naam bhi sona rakho na
Apna asle naam batao
Paaji
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STORY - Kal ho na ho
WRITER - saagar
LINK - https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-693687
PLOT- writer ke dwara ek achchi koshis ki gayi hai ,ladke ko cancer aur fir usak mar jaana msg karna ,ye sab kuch bahut hi pruana theam hai aisi kahaniya salo se padhne me mil rhi hai ,to is story me mujhe kuch naya sa nhi lga ,
Lekin weiter ke effort ko njarandaj nhi kiya ja sakta,likhne ke liye unhone time diya jo ki apne aap me hi bhut badi bat hai ,
Story me kai achche lines ka upyog kiya gaya hai jise ham dialogs kah sakte hai ,comman plot par story likhna aise bhi kathin kaam hota hai ,to writer ke liye meri tarf se thumbs up …
MERITS-
1. Emotional story line rahi jo ki achchi thi ,writer ne ise sawarne me mehnat ki hai
2. Kuch line sach me achche upyog me laaye gaye hai jo ki padhne me achche lagte hai
3.last line mujhe sabse jyda pasand aayi ,kaam aaj hi kar lo kya pta kal ho na ho
DEMERITS-
1. Spelling mistakes bahut jyda hai jo ki pdhane ka maja khrab kar deta hai
FOR WRITER SAAGER - good luck dost ,achchi story thi apki
STORY - Kal ho na ho
WRITER - saagar
LINK - https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-693687
PLOT- writer ke dwara ek achchi koshis ki gayi hai ,ladke ko cancer aur fir usak mar jaana msg karna ,ye sab kuch bahut hi pruana theam hai aisi kahaniya salo se padhne me mil rhi hai ,to is story me mujhe kuch naya sa nhi lga ,
Lekin weiter ke effort ko njarandaj nhi kiya ja sakta,likhne ke liye unhone time diya jo ki apne aap me hi bhut badi bat hai ,
Story me kai achche lines ka upyog kiya gaya hai jise ham dialogs kah sakte hai ,comman plot par story likhna aise bhi kathin kaam hota hai ,to writer ke liye meri tarf se thumbs up …
MERITS-
1. Emotional story line rahi jo ki achchi thi ,writer ne ise sawarne me mehnat ki hai
2. Kuch line sach me achche upyog me laaye gaye hai jo ki padhne me achche lagte hai
3.last line mujhe sabse jyda pasand aayi ,kaam aaj hi kar lo kya pta kal ho na ho
DEMERITS-
1. Spelling mistakes bahut jyda hai jo ki pdhane ka maja khrab kar deta hai
FOR WRITER SAAGER - good luck dost ,achchi story thi apki
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bhai ek baat kehta hu yaha koi bhi profesinoal writer nahi hai hai jo ap keh rahe ho ke ap ek normal member ho hum bhi ek normal member the bus likhne ko dil kia to likhna shuro kia aur hum writer ban gye writing sb ki hobby hai hum dil se likhte hai kisi ko story likhne se kuch nai milta sab bus entertainment ke liye likhte hai so please ye mahan writer wali baate band karo dil se likho kisi ko majboor mat karo tarif karne ko jis ko pasand aye gi wo khud review de ga i hope you don't mind
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Thanks shudhire
Mai tere bate yaade rakhuga
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Samje gaya bhai
And
Maine mahan writers do teen writers ki karn use kiya
Jesi aanand bhai fighter bhai aur vj bhai
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Enki kahaniya dile ko chu late hai es leyi
And wesi aapni bhi acchi kahani likhe hai
Pde kar rogte khade ho gae thi
And wesi aapni bhi acchi kahani likhe hai
Pde kar rogte khade ho gae thi
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