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Main ne kab kaha iss mein UA hai?
Main ne wohi kaha jo tum keh rahe ho.
Baaki jaakar dekho kal main ne iss baare mein sawaal kiya tha sumo se aur padho sumo ka jawaab
★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★
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Main ne wohi kaha jo tum keh rahe ho.
Baaki jaakar dekho kal main ne iss baare mein sawaal kiya tha sumo se aur padho sumo ka jawaab
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dhanywad casi bhai itani tarif karne ke liye aur is story ko itana pasand karne ke liye,lekin aapke review se mujhe ye bhi pta chal gaya ki aap bahut hi emotionl bhi ho ,aur sach me ye gana hai hi itana shandaar ,aur music banane wale ne bhi kya banaya hai ki sidhe dil ko hi lag jaaye ,
UA wali bat hai to meri ek VSC 2018 ki story xp me isliye DQ ho gayi thi ki usme ant me bachcha aaya tha aur maine usme age bhi mantion kar diya tha ,us story ko logo ne bahut pasand kiya lekin fir bhi age mantion karne ke karn mujhe meri dusari story ke liye dabba diya gaya ,jo ki us story se behtar to bilkul bhi nhi thi ,aur is bar bhi wahi situation aa gayi ki muje ant ek bachche se hi karna tha isliye maine age mantion nhi kiya na hi age ka koi refrence bhi diya ,lekin fir bhi agar ye story DQ ho jaaye to bhi koi gam nhi kyoki ise likhne ke liye mai tadf raha tha aur ye likh diya ....aise abhi inhone rules ko thoda badala hai passing refrence allow kar rhe hai ,jab aapne query thread me sawal kiya tha aur jo apko ans mila tha to mujhe lga tha ki ye story bhi DQ ho jayegi ,lekin abhi lag rha hai ki itana chal jaayega ....aur bahut se writes is par bat kar rhe hai kyoki kabhi kabhi ise likhna behad hi jaruri ho jaata hai ,aagar main us bachche ke bare me nhi likhta to story ka pura feel hi khatm ho jaata ,ya mujhe bhi santusti nhi milti ......
shayd meri dusri story aap naa pad paaye kyoki wo devnagri me hogi ,kyoki devnagri me likhne me main jyda comfortable rahta hu ...
fir se apka behd dhanywad is pyare review ke liye ......
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LOVE WITH FIXERR
The story is about a girl named Ruhi and falls in love with a boy named Hasan, But Hassan betrays Ruhi and tries to mistreat him, But at the same time, Aryan arrives and saves Ruhi.
Aryan's character in the story is tremendous, he first helps Ruhi and later saves Noor from Hassan. Aryan had to suffer a lot in his past. Ruhi's love saved Aryan. The truth is that love has a lot of power. It is very difficult to say where life begins and where it ends.
In today's time, it is very difficult to find true love. Just as Roohi found a true partner in his life, I pray that everyone gets his love in life.
Damha Ji, I liked your story very much. You have written every word of the story very beautifully. Enjoyed reading the story. I hope you win this story competition. Thank You...
The story is about a girl named Ruhi and falls in love with a boy named Hasan, But Hassan betrays Ruhi and tries to mistreat him, But at the same time, Aryan arrives and saves Ruhi.
Aryan's character in the story is tremendous, he first helps Ruhi and later saves Noor from Hassan. Aryan had to suffer a lot in his past. Ruhi's love saved Aryan. The truth is that love has a lot of power. It is very difficult to say where life begins and where it ends.
In today's time, it is very difficult to find true love. Just as Roohi found a true partner in his life, I pray that everyone gets his love in life.
Damha Ji, I liked your story very much. You have written every word of the story very beautifully. Enjoyed reading the story. I hope you win this story competition. Thank You...
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KAL HO NA HO
This story is a love story. In which a boy loves a girl very much and the boy tries to talk to the girl in his last time, but is unable to talk. By the time the girl realizes this, it was too late. Due to a small mistake, the girl is unable to speak to her love even for the last time. But now it's late, the boy has left this world. The boy's love is unbreakable, the boy remains worried about her even after he dies. The boy said a lot in his last time.
People tell the truth, when a person dies, then we realize the importance of that person. The title of the story is perfect which suits the story.
Suryaa Ji, I liked your story very much, Your story is very beautiful. Well I like stories with happy ending but still I like your story very much. I hope you win this story competition.
This story is a love story. In which a boy loves a girl very much and the boy tries to talk to the girl in his last time, but is unable to talk. By the time the girl realizes this, it was too late. Due to a small mistake, the girl is unable to speak to her love even for the last time. But now it's late, the boy has left this world. The boy's love is unbreakable, the boy remains worried about her even after he dies. The boy said a lot in his last time.
People tell the truth, when a person dies, then we realize the importance of that person. The title of the story is perfect which suits the story.
Suryaa Ji, I liked your story very much, Your story is very beautiful. Well I like stories with happy ending but still I like your story very much. I hope you win this story competition.
Thank You...
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STORY - मोक्ष (प्यार, नफरत और डर)
WRITER - kamdev99008
LINK - https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-695326
PLOT- is story ke naam se lagta hai ki ye koi philosophical story hogi ,prem ,nafrat aur fir dar se hote hue moksha tak pahuchne ki yatra ko darshane ka ek prayas kiya gaya hai …
Darshanik rup se to main is philosophy se bilkul bhi sahmat nhi hu lekin story ke jariye writer ye dikhane me safal rhe hai…
Prem - bachpan ke prem ko pane ki khwahis kise nhi hoti ,aisa prem jo shayd kismatwalo ko hi nashib hota hai,kyoki adhiktar bachpan ka hamara pahla pyar kisi na kisi karn se hamshe dur ho jaata hai aur fir jindagi bhar ham usi prem ki talash me rahte hai,wo kami kahi na kahi dur karne ki koshis chlte rahti hai aur jimmedariyo ke dabao me akar ham use bhool bhi jaate hai,usi tarh ravi ke samne do prem the ek tha maa ka pyar jo wo pane ki chaht me tadf rha tha lekin jis umra me use milna tha use nhi mila aur wahi dusari tarf thi radha ,maa ke prem ke liye usne radha ke prem ki kurbani de di wahi se janm hua nafrat ka
Nafrat- jaise prem maa se tha waise hi nafrat bhi maa se hi hua kaarn story me apko pta chl jaayega
Dar -kahani ka har pahlu maa par hi aakar atak jaata hai,yani ki maa se prem paane ki abhilasha fir maa se prem naa paane ke karn nafrt ,fir maa se prem ki ummid me uske naa kho jaane ka dar …aur fir maa ke prem se hi virakti jise writer ne moksha ki sangya di hai ….
Readers se kahna chahunga ki story ko achche se samjhne ke liye aapko pura padhna hoga aur last ki summary se apko puri story clear ho jaayegi …
MERITS-
1. Kahani ke pahle part me apko pahle pyar ki khusbau aayegi ,bahut jyada nhi lekin aap use mahsus jarur kar sakte hai
2. Bhasha bahut hi clear hai ,kyoki ye ke philosophical story hai us lihaj se thoda samjhne me dikkt ho sakti hai lekin bhasha aur wyakarn me koi bhi problem nhi hai
3. Jivan ki kuch kadavi sachchi ka samna hota hai ,ki kaise bachcho ko prem karne me bhi maa ne bhedbhaw kiya aur kaise jimmedari insan ke andar ki kamnao ko mita deti hai
DEMERITS-
1.reders ko shuru ke kuch samay story ke sath judane me thodi kathnai ka samna karna hoga ,bina dhairy ke story padhne walo ke liye ye story nhi hai…
NOTE FOR WRITER- Kamdev ji aapne ek bahut hi achhi story likhi hai ,ek alag sa ahsas hai aur jivan ki kuch kadvi sachchi ka darshn isme dekhne ko milta hai …
Best of luck for contest….
STORY - मोक्ष (प्यार, नफरत और डर)
WRITER - kamdev99008
LINK - https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-695326
PLOT- is story ke naam se lagta hai ki ye koi philosophical story hogi ,prem ,nafrat aur fir dar se hote hue moksha tak pahuchne ki yatra ko darshane ka ek prayas kiya gaya hai …
Darshanik rup se to main is philosophy se bilkul bhi sahmat nhi hu lekin story ke jariye writer ye dikhane me safal rhe hai…
Prem - bachpan ke prem ko pane ki khwahis kise nhi hoti ,aisa prem jo shayd kismatwalo ko hi nashib hota hai,kyoki adhiktar bachpan ka hamara pahla pyar kisi na kisi karn se hamshe dur ho jaata hai aur fir jindagi bhar ham usi prem ki talash me rahte hai,wo kami kahi na kahi dur karne ki koshis chlte rahti hai aur jimmedariyo ke dabao me akar ham use bhool bhi jaate hai,usi tarh ravi ke samne do prem the ek tha maa ka pyar jo wo pane ki chaht me tadf rha tha lekin jis umra me use milna tha use nhi mila aur wahi dusari tarf thi radha ,maa ke prem ke liye usne radha ke prem ki kurbani de di wahi se janm hua nafrat ka
Nafrat- jaise prem maa se tha waise hi nafrat bhi maa se hi hua kaarn story me apko pta chl jaayega
Dar -kahani ka har pahlu maa par hi aakar atak jaata hai,yani ki maa se prem paane ki abhilasha fir maa se prem naa paane ke karn nafrt ,fir maa se prem ki ummid me uske naa kho jaane ka dar …aur fir maa ke prem se hi virakti jise writer ne moksha ki sangya di hai ….
Readers se kahna chahunga ki story ko achche se samjhne ke liye aapko pura padhna hoga aur last ki summary se apko puri story clear ho jaayegi …
MERITS-
1. Kahani ke pahle part me apko pahle pyar ki khusbau aayegi ,bahut jyada nhi lekin aap use mahsus jarur kar sakte hai
2. Bhasha bahut hi clear hai ,kyoki ye ke philosophical story hai us lihaj se thoda samjhne me dikkt ho sakti hai lekin bhasha aur wyakarn me koi bhi problem nhi hai
3. Jivan ki kuch kadavi sachchi ka samna hota hai ,ki kaise bachcho ko prem karne me bhi maa ne bhedbhaw kiya aur kaise jimmedari insan ke andar ki kamnao ko mita deti hai
DEMERITS-
1.reders ko shuru ke kuch samay story ke sath judane me thodi kathnai ka samna karna hoga ,bina dhairy ke story padhne walo ke liye ye story nhi hai…
NOTE FOR WRITER- Kamdev ji aapne ek bahut hi achhi story likhi hai ,ek alag sa ahsas hai aur jivan ki kuch kadvi sachchi ka darshn isme dekhne ko milta hai …
Best of luck for contest….
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EHSAAS
You have written a family story this time. I liked that you wrote the story.
There is no age to love, people love even after they die. Nature is so beautiful that it makes the heart happy. I loved the way you started your story.
Anu's thinking, way of living life is different. After a quarrel with her husband, Anu has to take full responsibility of Neha. Mohit's mother's behavior was wrong for Anu, we should look at daughter-in-law from daughter's perspective.
Both Anu and Mohit get lonely due to the quarrel and Amit wanted to take advantage of this loneliness of Anu. Initially Anu also likes Amit, but Amit's destiny is bad, Anu later learns this.
Neha also played an important role in the story, she also did not like her mother's loneliness and because of Neha, Mohit and Anu's heart is reunited today.
Sometimes there is a fight in any relationship, In anger, we sometimes say things that sound bad. But then we should forget all this and strengthen our relationship.
mohit98075 Ji, I liked your story very much. You have written the story very beautifully. I sincerely hope you win this story competition.
Thank You...
You have written a family story this time. I liked that you wrote the story.
There is no age to love, people love even after they die. Nature is so beautiful that it makes the heart happy. I loved the way you started your story.
Anu's thinking, way of living life is different. After a quarrel with her husband, Anu has to take full responsibility of Neha. Mohit's mother's behavior was wrong for Anu, we should look at daughter-in-law from daughter's perspective.
Both Anu and Mohit get lonely due to the quarrel and Amit wanted to take advantage of this loneliness of Anu. Initially Anu also likes Amit, but Amit's destiny is bad, Anu later learns this.
Neha also played an important role in the story, she also did not like her mother's loneliness and because of Neha, Mohit and Anu's heart is reunited today.
Sometimes there is a fight in any relationship, In anger, we sometimes say things that sound bad. But then we should forget all this and strengthen our relationship.
mohit98075 Ji, I liked your story very much. You have written the story very beautifully. I sincerely hope you win this story competition.
Thank You...
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dr sahab..... bas itna hi kahunga..........
sochkar likhne me merits-demerits ka khyal rakha jata hai..........
jeekar likhne ke liye kuchh nahi socha jata.....
isliye kal apse baat karte karte hi likh diya
bhasha meri kuchh klisht hai...lekin.... jo samjheinge wo shabdon ko nahi emotion ko pehchan leinge
aapne meri kahani ko itni badi rating di............. thanks a lot
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STORY - Adrishya bandhan....
WRITER – Mr.raj1100
LINK - https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-696984
PLOT – ha ha ha
Majedar plot hai ,pahle to lagta hai ki ye ek tragedy hogi lekin fir ek nayi tradedy ho jaati hai ,
Anshika aur suraj ki shadi,fir suraj ka namard nikalana ,aisa lag rha tha ki ab shayd anshika ko koi dusara khus ya molest karga lekin writer ne ek badhiya turn diya jisse story thodi comic bhi ho gayi ,
MERITS-
1.ek unique plot tha ,shayd short story me likhne ke liye word limit hota hai ,lekin is ek long story ke rup me likha jaaye to majedar story banegi
DEMERITS-
1.mujhe laga ki thoda jaldi khatm kar diya thoda aur badhana tha ,khaskar last scene ko thoda detail kiya ja sakta tha
NOTE FOR WRITER- badiya story hai mr raj ji ,ise contest ke bad ek long story me tabdil jarur karna
Best of luck for contest….
STORY - Adrishya bandhan....
WRITER – Mr.raj1100
LINK - https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-696984
PLOT – ha ha ha
Majedar plot hai ,pahle to lagta hai ki ye ek tragedy hogi lekin fir ek nayi tradedy ho jaati hai ,
Anshika aur suraj ki shadi,fir suraj ka namard nikalana ,aisa lag rha tha ki ab shayd anshika ko koi dusara khus ya molest karga lekin writer ne ek badhiya turn diya jisse story thodi comic bhi ho gayi ,
MERITS-
1.ek unique plot tha ,shayd short story me likhne ke liye word limit hota hai ,lekin is ek long story ke rup me likha jaaye to majedar story banegi
DEMERITS-
1.mujhe laga ki thoda jaldi khatm kar diya thoda aur badhana tha ,khaskar last scene ko thoda detail kiya ja sakta tha
NOTE FOR WRITER- badiya story hai mr raj ji ,ise contest ke bad ek long story me tabdil jarur karna
Best of luck for contest….
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STORY - एक छोटी सी प्रेम गाथा
WRITER- SANSKARI LARKA
LINK – https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-697012
PLOT – Ise kahate hai short and sweet love story ,naa chikchik na jhikjhik …
Pahle paragraph ki 3ri line
वास्तव में प्रेम किसी को प्राप्त करने का नाम नही,अपितु त्याग का नाम ही सच्चे प्रेम की परिभाषा है
Is ek line me hi pure story ki definition chhupi hui hai ,
Aasha se prem aur us prem ke liye kiya gaya samarpan
Is story ke liye merits aur demerits nhi likhunga kyoki uski koi jarurt hi nhi hai ,ye ke chhoti si love story hai jo ki bahut hi gahre arth rakhti hai
NOTE FOR WRITER- sanskari bhai apki story bahut hi achhi thi ,lekin likhne me bahut kanjusi kar di thoda aur lamba kar dena tha,main manta hu ki ye story apne aap me jitani bhi hai mukamml hai lekin reders ko achank end thoda shock me daal deta ahi……
Baki emotions ke lahje se puri tarh se paripurn hai kyoki jo chij aap likh rhe ho use shabdo me bayan bhi to nhi kiya ja sakta
Best of luck for contest….
STORY - एक छोटी सी प्रेम गाथा
WRITER- SANSKARI LARKA
LINK – https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-697012
PLOT – Ise kahate hai short and sweet love story ,naa chikchik na jhikjhik …
Pahle paragraph ki 3ri line
वास्तव में प्रेम किसी को प्राप्त करने का नाम नही,अपितु त्याग का नाम ही सच्चे प्रेम की परिभाषा है
Is ek line me hi pure story ki definition chhupi hui hai ,
Aasha se prem aur us prem ke liye kiya gaya samarpan
Is story ke liye merits aur demerits nhi likhunga kyoki uski koi jarurt hi nhi hai ,ye ke chhoti si love story hai jo ki bahut hi gahre arth rakhti hai
NOTE FOR WRITER- sanskari bhai apki story bahut hi achhi thi ,lekin likhne me bahut kanjusi kar di thoda aur lamba kar dena tha,main manta hu ki ye story apne aap me jitani bhi hai mukamml hai lekin reders ko achank end thoda shock me daal deta ahi……
Baki emotions ke lahje se puri tarh se paripurn hai kyoki jo chij aap likh rhe ho use shabdo me bayan bhi to nhi kiya ja sakta
Best of luck for contest….
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