★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Niks96]

My review for
JAD
by Niks96
Ye kahani mujhe bahot hi passand aayi.
Ek budhe aadmi ne ek naujawaan ke dil mein wo baat bitha diya ke wo naujawaan
ab har saal keise bhi karke apne gaon jata hai taake wo bhi apne jadon se juda rahe.
Sirf ek train ke safar ko ek kahani banake likhna bahot badi baat hai.
Sweet and simple.
very well written and described.
Assal mein jab umar ho jaati hai tab log apne uss jagah ke taraf khud ba khud khinche jaate hein yeh sahi baat hai aur wohi uss uncle ne dikhaya aur kaha.
Lekhak ne issko baakhubi likha aur pesh kiya hai.
all the best for this lovely story.

Sabse pehle to Casinar Sir ko ek baar aur shukriya unke lovely review ke liye.

Asal me ye koi kahani nahi thi ye ek real incident tha jo mere saat hua tha 2014 me...is incident se me kafi prabhavit hua tha aur mene ise us waqt apni dairy me note kiya tha...abhi kuch dino phele diwali ke time safai karte waqt wo dairy mere haat lagi..aur wo incident ek bar fir yaado me taza ho gaya...khuskismati se theek usi time ye story contest chalu tha...to mene socha is contest me ye incident zarur batana chahiye...is trah is rachna ka janam hua.

Last me aapke precious review ke liye ek bar aur apko shukriya kheta hu.

Dhanyewad

 

[Aakash.]

FALLING IN LOVE
I want to thank you that you wrote a love story. Love is the happiest feeling in the world. Whoever got addicted to love, could never leave it.
The story is about a boy named Vicky who likes a girl but Vicky becomes depressed after the rejection of the girl, but on the persuasion of the parents, the boy goes to speak sorry and finally the girl also says yes to this love.
You have created a very good college atmosphere in the story. While reading the story, it did not feel that this is the story, it seemed that everything was happening in real terms.
I think this is a short story contest, because of which you have not been able to show the feelings of the character properly. If I have made a mistake, I apologize for it.
Fighter Ji, I liked your story very much, the dialogue of the story was amazing. I sincerely hope you win the story competition.
Thank You...

 

[Damha]

babut acchha....... maja aageya padke

Thanks for review

 

[Damha]

bhai bahut badiya story.... fixer ka kkhud ka biwi ne dhoka diya....... bad me woh or ki life fix karne ka decide kiya.....bahut khub

Shukriya bhai main ne jab story likhni start ki to mere zehan me bus ek cheez thi FIXERR baki jo dil me aya likhta raha ye FIXERR ki biwi ka scene achanak he dimagh me aya tha

 

[Damha]

TITLE - LOVE WITH FIXERR
WRITER - Damha

Ye ek khoobsurat kahan hai jo apni flow me bahti kab ant tak pahunch gayi pata hi nahi chala .
Mujhe Ruhi ka kirdar pasand aaya . Bajaye matam manane ke wo apne tareeke se baaton ko suljhati hai aur aage badh jati hai .
Aaryan ka charecter interesting banaya hai aapne khair pyaar , dhokha , lalach , sajish aur emotions sab kuchh bahut achhe se mix kiya hai aap ne .

All the best for contest

Shukriya Venom bhai jab main ne ap ka review parha bohat Acha laga kiu ke yahan kuch readers bus kuch writer ki stories per he review de rahe the shayad wo hamari story parh bhi nahi rahe ap ka review pehle nahi aya mujhe laga ke AP bhi un readers ki tarha ho but thank god ap waise nahi ho

 

[Waliaz]

Review: Ishq Wala Love
Writer : Blue Prince

Wow ! This is the first word dat came to my mind after reading ur story. At first I was lost in d atmosphere of story. Then in d middle I was experiencing cute nd innocent love story. At last my eyes got wet after reading d last line. Blue bhai I can't explain d feeling in just few words. Honor killing still happens and it's a curse for society. Your story is heart touching. 5 out of 5 stars from my side.

 

[The Blue Prince]

REVIEW

STORY - ISHQ WALA LOVE

WRITER- The Blue Prince

LINK – https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-699757

Bahut badhiya mast kahani hai siwaye rahul mar gawa mast life chal rahi thi dono ki par bhai baap ko hajam na hui unki khusiyan..story ki jitni bhi tareef karun wo kam hai aur jo police ne aakar use bacha liya ye point bhi mast tha aur wo apne bete ke sath hai ye jaankar dil ko khusi hui pyar na sahi uski nisani to salamat hai wo mara nahi balki dil me jinda hai rahul to amar hoi gawamai aapko 10 me 10 deta hun bhai ji

Thank you so much Rahul bhai for sparing time to read and review my story.

Rahul sach main amar hoi gawa.... I am so happy that apko meri story pasand aayi. Yeh sach hai bhai zamana pyar karne walon ko khush nahin dekh sakta. Yehi story main dikhane ki koshish ki thi. Thanks for the wonderful review

 

[The Blue Prince]

TITLE : ISHQ WALA LOVE
लेखक - ब्लू प्रिंस

सबसे पहले तो दो गाली मेरी आंखो में आंसू लाने के लिए *** ***
अब आते हैं कहानी पे....

इश्क़ वाला लव...
बचपन जिसके साथ गुजरा, चले जवानी की राह पे जिसके संग... वो हमसफ़र मोहब्बत थी मेरी, वहीं तो था मेरा इश्क वाला लव....

जोरदार कहानी या कुछ यूं कहूं तो शब्दों मै लिपटा हुआ प्यार का चक्रव्यूह...
कहानी अपने वेग से आगे बढ़ती है और कहानी कि नायिका अपने गुजर चुके जीवन का हर लम्हा फिर से जीवंत कर देती है....किस तरह बचपन का प्यार अपने परवान चढ़ा किस तरह खट्टी मीठी यादों से प्यार के परवानों ने अपना घर संजोया लेकिन ऊपर वाला भी सोच रहा होगा की क्यों मैंने प्यार बनाया....अगर प्यार बनाया भी तो क्यों मैंने प्यार के दुश्मनों को बनाया....?? मैने तो बस इंसान बनाए, उनको ये गुनाह का पाठ किसने पढ़ाया...?
लेकिन शायद किसी ने ठीक ही कहा है... एक कहानी जहां ख़तम होती है दूसरी कहानी वहीं से शुरू भी होती है....
ब्लू भाई आपने कहानी को जीवंत बना दिया , काश आपने थोड़ा शब्दों पे ध्यान दिया होता तो कहानी कि शुरुवात में हो रही दिक्कत कहानी को इधर उधर भटकने नहीं देती....लेकिन मुझे वो सब कुछ समझ आया जो आपने लिखा भी और आपने अपनी कहानी के जरिए हम पाठकों को बताया भी....

आपका बहुत बहुत शुक्रिया जो आपने एक बेहतरीन कहानी हमारे दरमियान रखी
में आपको 5 में से 3.5 अंक देता हूं .5 अंक सिर्फ इस वजह से ज्यादा दिए क्योंकि मुझे लव स्टोरी पसंद नहीं लेकिन फिर भी में पढ रहा हूं।

Vijay bhai ka review aaya.

First of all vijay bhai yeh review mere liye bahut khaas hain. Wo isliye kyunki aapne meri love story ko read kiya and apne views diye. Because you told me that you hate love stories . So Yeh mere liye bahut badi baat hain . I really respect and love you for that

Secondly bhai thank you so much for this wonderful review. Apke diye gaye suggetsions ko bhi main dhyaan main rakhuga. Agar aapki aankhon main aansu lekar aayi hai yeh story toh 2-4 gaalian aur de do Its a big win for me. Bahut shukriya vijay bhai for appreciation.

 

[The Blue Prince]

Review on story - Ishk Wala love
Written by - The blue prince

Kya love story likhi h bro. Ek ek word motio jaisa h. Aisa lga jaise movie chal rhi ho. Ishika and Rahul ka innocent love or uska tragic end. Start se lekr end tk unki love story ka zikr story ma ha. Last ma ankhon ma aansu a gye bro.

10 out of 10 from my side . Brilliant story

Thank you so much bhai for writing your views about my story. The readers appreciation is like a dose for every writer . It motivates them further.

 

[The Blue Prince]

My review for Ishq Wala love

Written by The Blue Prince

Aapki Kahani read krte hue yehi dil mai ho rha tha ki Kya hua hoga ishika ke saath? Aur last Mai iska jb utttr mil toh ma haka baka reh gea. Kya tragic end dia h bhai.

Apki writing aisi h mano sb real mai ankhon k samne ho rha ho. Apke likhne Ka andaz kamaal h. Story Ka flow perfect tha. Dialogues, narration sb top notch tha.

Aapki thriller story ka fan toh pehle se hi tha. Ab love stories Ka b ho gea hu.

All d best bhai. Rating - 10/10 .

I am glad that aapko meri story pasand aayi. Rahul aur Ishika ka character pyaar karne walo ka ek reflection hain. Yeh cute sa pyaar hum sabh feel karte hain jabh jawani ke daur se guzar rahe hote hain. Thanks bhai for liking my small effort.