★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[sharaabi]

Story reality
Bahut achi story thi lekin sach me
Dimag guma ke rakhney wali baat hua
Kuch bhi samaj se pare end thora jald laga
Mere tarf se 5 me 4

 

[The Immortal]

My review for
Amar-Kalpana
By
Immortal
Ek ajeeb o gharib kahani jissko lekhak ne bahut acchi tarah se pesh kiya hai.
Padhna shuru kiya to main khud sochne par majboor hua ke eisa kaun si kahani ho sakti hai jo kalpanik aur real bhi ho sakte hein jiss ne mujhe end tak padhne mein juda rakha.
Aur padhne ke dauraan jud gaya main bhi kahani aur usske kirdaaron ke beech.
Wo kahani behtareen hote hein jahan paathak khud ko uss kahani mein judte hue paata hai. Matlab yeh ek behtareen kahaniyon mein se ek hai.
Lekhak ne issko bakhubi likha aur pesh kiya hai. Narration aur description awwal hai.
Buss ek choti si baat meri samajh mein nahin aayi ke college ko collage kyun likhte ho tum sab??!!
Do last entries ko main me padhte padhte bich mein rok diya kyunke bahot abbreviations istemaal kiya gaya hai. Are bhai ek contest ke liye kahani likha ja raha hai full shabd to likho sms contest to nahin chal raha hai nah? To unn donon kahaniyon mein bhi main ne dekha collage likha gaya hai college ko. Kia bhai collage to photos ka kiya jata hai, aur jahan padhne jaate hein ussko COLLEGE kaha jata hai collage nahin.
Immo bro yeh kahani mujhe bahut passand aayi. Bahot hi accha likha hai tumne. Badhya hai aur top 5 mein jaa sakta hai.
All the best bro.

Casi sir Ka review
Thanx for your wonderful review. Apka review bohat mayne rakhta hai mere liye.
Aur mujhe khusi hui apko kahani Pasand aayi .
Wo collage sayad autocorrect Mai aa Gaya Hoga jise meri aankhe post karte time Dekh na payi warna college to Maine niche bhi Likha tha sayad Apne us par dhayan Nahi diya .
Please correct the name of the writer . There is one more immortal here KSHMR

Once again a big big thank you for your wonderful review & thanx for not revealing the end.

 

[Niks96]

निक्स भाई कहानी ज़ोरदार रही बस अंत में सब क्लेअर कर देते मैंने शायद तारीफ के लिए शब्द गलत चुन लिया

Oh sorry meri traf se bhi bhai...apki prashansha ko theek se smaj nhi paya...aur story ki clarity story contest ki word limit ki restrictions ki wjah se nhi ho payi...jald hi iska part-2 lekar aaunga usme sab clear ho jayega...keep supporting

 

[Niks96]

REALITY? @Niks96

Language - Hinglish

amazing story writing dear hila kar rakh diya, lekin yaar iska end adhura nahi chodna that

In sum a very engrossing super natural story

Thanks brego4 bro...aur end adhura nhi tha isme back story ki requiremnet thi...jo contest ke word limit rule ki wjah se nhi de paya...jald hi iska part-2 dunga...usme sab clear ho jayega...keep supporting

 

[Niks96]

Story reality
Bahut achi story thi lekin sach me
Dimag guma ke rakhney wali baat hua
Kuch bhi samaj se pare end thora jald laga
Mere tarf se 5 me 4

Shukriya sharaabi bhai...inti tareef ke liye...aur rhi bat end ki to wo thoda jald isliye lga kyuki story maximum word limit ke paas ponch gyi thi...aur ye story ka part-1 hai...iska part-2 bhi me likh rha hu jo me waise to contest me dena chata tha par wo 6000 words limit me nhi aata isliye use alag se post karunga...tab saare raj par se parda ut jayega...till then keep supporting

 

[Casinar]

My review for
Rishtay Natay
By
Cutekameena
A story which is at the same time a lesson the those husbands who are the so called mama's son.
Iss choti aur pyari si kahani mein ek seekh hai unn naujawan patiyon ke liye jinnko apne maa aur biwi ke darmiyaan ke rishte ko ya to banana nahin ata ya sambhaalna nahin ata.
Jiss tarah se iss kahani ke hero ne itni asaan tarike se donon maa aur biwi ko khush kiya donon taraf se wo kaabil e taarif hai.
Lekhak ne bade sarhalta se issko likh kar wo seekh de diya hai.
Rishte pyar se bante hein ghusse ya khauff se sab bigarte hein yehi seekh milta hai iss kahani se.
Aakhir mein jiss khubi se main protagonist ne apni maa se darkhwast karke apni wife ko khana banane ki liye ilteja kiya wo bhi badi baat hai.
Agar har saas apni bahu mein apni beti ko dekhein to sabhi unn gharon mein jahan saas bahu ke beech anban hote rehte hein wo sab khatam ho jaenge. Pata nahin kyun dunya bhar ke saas bhool jaate hein ke wo bhi kabhi ek ghar ki beti thi, bahu thi.
Bahot achhi choti si kahani hai ye aur mujhe passand aya.
Cutekameena bhai thanks for this cute little story and all the best for the contest.

 

[Fighter]

REVIEW

STORY - Falling in love

WRITER- Fighter

LINK – https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-700145



PLOT – ise main love story nhi kahunga asal me ye story apne naam par gai hai falling in love,bas yhi tak ki story hai..

Viccky uraf fighter ek Kabir sing type ka ladka hai jise apni junior se pyar ho jaata hai ,mujhe ise padhkar movie Kabir sing ki hi yad aa rahi thi ,pahli najr me ladaka ladki ko dil de baithata hai ladki bhi use chahane lagti hai lekin logo ke dar se wo uska pyar kabul nhi karti ,ladke ko gussa aata hai lekin fir kuch dino ke bad ladki uske pyar ko accept kar leti hai …..

Pahli najar ka pyar hamesha se writers ke liye ek favraite topic raha hai ,



NOTE FOR WRITER- fighter bhai aapne ek achchi story likhi hai

Best of luck for contest….

Thanks bro for liking & reading & review

Aapki baat sahi h pr mene kabir singh ka soch k nhi likha tha vo review dekhakr mene gor kiya tb pta chla .
Aapne honestly review diya usk liye dil se thanks
Y story mene apne aapko ko y dekhne k liye likhi thi ki itne dino bad likhne pr kuch tikthak likh pata ho ki nhi ab itne dino bad jo xforum ko open kiya to y contest ka announce tha bas likh diya .
Thanks

 

[SKELTON]

Review on story - Ishk Wala love
Written by - The blue prince

Kya love story likhi h bro. Ek ek word motio jaisa h. Aisa lga jaise movie chal rhi ho. Ishika and Rahul ka innocent love or uska tragic end. Start se lekr end tk unki love story ka zikr story ma ha. Last ma ankhon ma aansu a gye bro.

10 out of 10 from my side . Brilliant story

 

[Casinar]

My Review for
Reality
by Niks96
kahani ko padhte waqt sirf wo chemical locha yaad aya jo Munna bhai MBBS mein Sunjay Dutt ko hua tha
Kahani ko bahut khub likha gaya hai aur main protagonist ke uss bimaari ko behtareen tarike se lekhak ne dikhaya hai.
yeh khauffnaak bhi hota hai jinn logon ke saath eise mental imbalance hote hein, aur sach mein eisa hota hai seinkron logon ke saath.
English word mein issko Hallucination kehte hein, unn sab chizon ka nazar aana jo hakikat mein hote hi nahin hein.
kabhi drug addicts ko eise chizein ya aadmi nazar aate hein to kabhi, iss haalat mein aadmi khud ko nuksaan bhi panhchaate hein.
ye ek bimaari hai jo sirf psychiatrist hi treat kar sakte hein
lekhak ne iss kahani ko baakhubi pesh kiya hai aur har ek pal ko bahot hi achi tarah se darshaya hai jo kaabil e taarif hai.
buss mujhe personally ek chiz bilkool passand nahin wo hai abreviation mein shabdon ko likhna jeise sms mein likha jata hai, yeh ek CONTEST hai, iss mein pure shabd ko sahi tarike se likhna chahiye sms form mein nahin
jeise ke inn shabdon ko likha gaia hai; "nhi, (nahin) , rha (raha) gyi (gayi) rhe (rahe) yha (yaha) lga (laga) agr (agar) .... aur bhi hein
baaki isske ilawa kahani mast hai, dumdaar hai.
in general beautiful story which is written very well and very well executed.
all the best for the contest Niks

 

[Casinar]

My review for
JAD
by Niks96
Ye kahani mujhe bahot hi passand aayi.
Ek budhe aadmi ne ek naujawaan ke dil mein wo baat bitha diya ke wo naujawaan
ab har saal keise bhi karke apne gaon jata hai taake wo bhi apne jadon se juda rahe.
Sirf ek train ke safar ko ek kahani banake likhna bahot badi baat hai.
Sweet and simple.
very well written and described.
Assal mein jab umar ho jaati hai tab log apne uss jagah ke taraf khud ba khud khinche jaate hein yeh sahi baat hai aur wohi uss uncle ne dikhaya aur kaha.
Lekhak ne issko baakhubi likha aur pesh kiya hai.
all the best for this lovely story.