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Kahani ~ A LONER
Writer ~ Yug Purush ​

Kahani - kahani hai ek ladke ki . jiska naam hai Aakash.. akele pan se pehle se hi jujhta... kisi se zyada baat chit nahi karta.... apni maa ko khone ke baad kabhi na mita paane wali dard ke sath sath sampurn roop se akelapan ka shikar ho gaya.. uske liye sab kuch ya tak ki duniya nirah si ho gayi.. duniya ke bhid mein tanha mehsus karne laga... to usne ek decision liya ki wo ab dharti pe nahi balki space pe rahega... waise pehle se iski taiyari kar raha tha.. matlab saaf tha ki is rang birangi duniya se zyada ushe space ke andhkkaar zyada pasand aaya...
waise hota hai... kayio ke sath hota hai jab akele pan ka shikar hote hai... to bas jaise jindagi hi kaatne ko doudta hai...
ab space yani ki ISS par apne dost nic ke sath pahunch ke uski mulaakat hanshmukh, utshah se paripurn Aurora se huyi... hairani ki baat yeh hai ki uske jindagi mein uski mom k baad ek Aurora hi thi jo Akash ke bin bole uske mann ki baat samajh jaaye.. chehre ke bhav dekhke hi bol de ki kya pareshani hai usko..

Khair.. ab din gujare.. dono ke bich pehle dosti phir shayad pyar bhi ho gaya tha.. Aurora ki sang rahkar wo apni tanhaiyo ko bhool ne laga tha... ek pyaar ka ehsaas uske mann ko gudguda sa gaya tha... lekin honi ko koun taal sakta hai.... ISS pe huyi ek durghatna ke chalte aur us durghatna ke waqt apach mein huyi bahas baazi ya Aurora dwara liye galat faisla ke chalte jaha Aurora marne ki kagar tak pahunch gayi thi wohi aakash ki bhi maut nischit thi.. par aain mauke par apni jaan ka parwah na karte huye nic ne dono ko bacha liya... par us radiator - 1 pe ghate durghatna ke chalte aur helmet huyi depressurized wajah se radiation ka shikar bani wo...
uske baad to jaise uski haalat bigadti gayi udhar usko dekh aakash bhi tutta gaya andar hi andar....ishi bich waha ISS pe treatment thik se na ho pane ke wajah se Aurora ko space shuttle ke jariye wapis prithvi le aaye.. lekin afsos aate waqt shuttle mein huye bhari dabav ke kaaran maari gayi... lekin hairan kar dene wali baat yeh hai uski marne ki wajah kuch aur hi thi... pehle se ek bahot hi durlav genetic bimari se grast thi.. radiator ki dhamake aur radiation ke chalte wo bimari activate ho gayi... jo ant mein uski maut ki kaaran bani...
so Aurora k jaane ke baad phir se wohi tanhayi wali jinadgi jeene laga ISS par .. wohi akela pan wohi nirah si jivan wohi khamoshi wohi viraniya .. jaise jeeta hai A... LONER

ab aate hai sameeksha par - - sapne tut te hai to tutne do . unme se ek tukda chuno aur phir se sapne ko buno... ummid ka daaman kabhi mat chhodo aakhiri saans tak... jo ummid ki naav par savar hokar nikloge to sahil ka milna tay hai.. mushkilein kiske raashte mein nahi? pareshaniya kiske jivan ka hissa nahi akela pan se pidit sirf kiya aakash hai.. dukh kya sirf uske hisse mein hai.. dukh to sabhi ke hisse mein hota hai.. par aakash ne dukh baatne ki jagah apne andar samet rakha.... yeh ek weak point hai uske liye.. itna padha likha hai phir bhi is baat ehsaas nahi hai kya ki dukh baatne se kam hota, aur tanav bhi..
aur baant nahi paa raha hai to inse paar pa le.. kyunki dukh dard tanhaiyo pareshaniyo paar ushi ko mil sakta hai jo dar kar baitha nahi... jisne lagatar koshish ki, jisne nirasha ko, tanhaiyo ko, akele pan ko apne upor haavi hone nahi diya.. jo haar kar bhi kabhi nahi hara, saralata usiko har aurr se milti hai...
kehte hai ummid pe duniya kayam hai... yeh ummid ka hi karisma hai ki kal jo kaam asambhav lage the aaj nahi kal sakar ho sakte hai.. aasha gahri Andhri raat mein dipak ki jalti lo ki saman hai.... Agar ye sambhav hai to aakash ke liye kyun sambhav nahi akele pan ke un gehre andhkkaar galiyo se bahar nikal, apne jindagi ko ek nayi ujale ke aurr le jaane ki.. ..
har chij har baatein har mahol.. damn it.. yaha tak buri duniya hi uske duswar ho gayi... raat chaahe kitni bhi andheri ho, chaahe kitni bhi lambi kyun na ho.. lekin uske baad aisa bhi waqt aata hai jab suraj apni roushni ki kiran bikhre din ka ujala lata hai.. tufan bhi aate hai phir Tham bhi jaate hai.. lekin us waqt majboor hoke nahi balki kud ko tab tak ke liye mamboot banaye rakhe jab tak andheri raat ya tufan tal na jaaye...
kayi logo jinhe apne jivan se apne aash paas ke mahol se, paristhitiyo se, jo anchahe ghatana ghatit hua uske liye bhi hamesha se hi sikayat rahti hai.. nakaratmak un par haavi rahti hai, apni ashafalata ke haazar kaaran unke paas rehte hai.. kuch kehte hai sahi mauka na mila, kuch kehte hai unke paas sanshadhano ka kami hai.. koi kehta hai koi apna chhod gaya hamesha ke liye isliye wo akela par gaya... to koi kehta hai hai prerna dene wala protshahit karenge nahi hai, ya na mila.. Jaise ki is kahani ka nayak... mana ki Aakash ko ghum hai, dard hai lekin ye nahi ki is tarah se nirah si jindagi jiye.. tanhaiyo mein apni jindagi ko bhent de de...
wo ek baar Aurora ya nic ko kyun nahi dekhta...
unke sakaratmak dristikon ko kyun nahi mahsoos kiya ya nahi dekha.. Kya unke jindagi mein dukh nahi, pareshaniya nahi.. are Aurora ko hi dekh lijiye.. tanhai uske jivan mein aayi thi.. to kya bahana banake baith gayi thi... nahi na... Aurora wo thi jo raashte talaste nahi balki raashte taraste hai banate hai apne liye.. aur ye hunar thi usme.. Divorced ke baad bhi kya tut gayi ya wahan space mein mahino dar mahino waqt bitake tanhaiyo ka shikar huyi.. nahi na.. kya ye sab najar nahi aaya usko ya mahsoos nahi kiya.. bas jivan sathi banani hai, shaadi karni hai, pyaar karna hai kya yahi yaad raha usko.. ya phir apne tanhaiyo mein khota raha..
dusri taraf nic.... ummid tha ki bacha lega isliye usne Aurora aur aakash ko bachake le aaye sahi salamat ISS pe...itne mahine bitaye wahan kuch sikh leta nic se bhi...
aur sabse aham uski maa.... uske sapno ke duniya se andhkaar ko door karne wali roshani thi, jinka daaman pakad kar wo bada hua... unke aanchal ne jab usko thand lagi toh grami pradan ki aur jab wo khud se ya kisi baat se gussa hota toh unke aanchal ne ushe sheetalta pradan ki.... kya unki dwara di gayi prerna se bhari wo baatein bhi bhool gaya Aakash..
maybe wo har ek baat ka ehsaas tha... bas jaanke bhi nazar andaz karta raha....
thokor khake girte sabhi hai kabhi na kabhi hai par girke khada hona aana chahiye..

aapki pasandida kirdaar koun thi aur kyun?
kahani ke Nayak Aakash ki mom....
chaahe kahani ho ya vastavik jivan mein maa se anmol aur koi nahi...
jis tarah unhone aakash ko sambhaala har waqt, har bure ho ya achhe doud mein unko ek salam... yahan tak ki aakash astrond banne ke piche unki mehnat, tyaag aur balidaan hai...
kya kirdaar aapko vastavik lage?
Haan....kahani ke kirdaar space aur ISS se jude huye hai to vastavik hi lage?
aur baat aakash aur uski mom ki.... yahan pe koi do ray nahi ki vastavik lage ki nahi.... kyunki har maa ke liye uska bachha hi anmol hota hai..
nic..... duty aur dosti.... dono nibhaye aur I think agar wo ghatna real mein hoti to koi na koi nic jaisa jarur hota jo bachane jata...
Aurora... ek aham bhumika mein rahi. .. waise space shuttle ya space ISS isko leke bahot zyada jaankari to nahi hai par itna to pata hai ki aise space jo kaam ya duties hote hai wohi kahani mein Aurora bhi kar rahi thi..
waise ek baat hai writer sahab ne bahot mehnat ki hai story pe aur reaches ki hai ye space aur space shuttle aur ISS ke upor is kahani ke liye tabhi to itne vastavik lage kahani ke kirdaar ke saath saath ke har Kirdaar bhi..

sabse pasandida bhaag kya tha aur kyun...?

well sabse pasandida bhaag woh tha jab us samay barish mein muh fulake aakash bench par baitha hua tha aur Saare teachers haar maan chuke the Aakash ko andar bula-bula kar... kuch ne jabardasti pakad kar andar le jaane ka bhi prayas kiya, lekin wo wahi zameen mein lotne laga aur unke hath ko gusse se kaat bhi diya... jiske baad haarkar unhone uski Maa ko bulayaa.... jo aayi toh chhata lekar thi par mujhe bheegta dekh chhata kinare kar uske sath wahi bheegte hue us bench me uske sath baith gayi....
aur jab aakash ke mann mein base bure vichar ya dar ya asurkshit baav ko dur kar ke bol rahi thi ki
wo kamjor nahi hai, agar agli baar koi aapko kamjor bolta ya kamjor banane ki koshish kare to majbuti date rahna unke samne kabhi kamjor mat banna... aur wo bahot khas hai, shayad khas log hamesha se hi kuch alag hote hai.. isliye aise ulte sidhe vicharo ko mann mein na laye...
jis tarike samjha rahi thi, wo baatein aur wo situation wo dil ko chu gayi...

Kuch vishes prakar ke drishya - udaharan ke liye dukhad, tanavpurn drishya, rahasyamay?

sabse tanavpurn aur dukhad drishya wo jab us din uski maa Standford Center me apni aakhiri saanse le rahi thi aur fir wo pal bhi aaya jab unhone apni aakhiri saans li... jab aakash ek tak wahi unke paas baitha unhe ek tak dekhta raha...
aur jab apni maa ko pukarne par tab hamesha ki tarah dusari taraf se koyi jawab nahi aaya....
aur dusri... jab space shuttle se prithvi ki aurr jane pehle jo Aurora barbara ke bol rahi thi behoshi mein.. ki uski bhi khwahish thi aakash ke sath jindagi bitane ki lekin agle hi mod pe pata chale ki uski mrityu ho gayi.. bune huye Khwaab ye bhi adure hi reh gaye...
aur tanavpurn ki kya hoga ab.... jab Aurora ko leke Aakash ISS ki aurr aate waqt EMV - X band hone baad SAFER bhi band ho gaya tha...

Kya kahani ne hanshya ya rulaya?

hanshaya bas kuch palon ke liye jab nic ko kisi ne ek ajibo garib naam se sambodhit kiya tha... aur uska arth aakash se puch raha tha wo..
par jo drishya dikhaye gaye hai ya kirdaaro ke sath jo hua, khas aakash ki mom aur Aurora ke sath.... koi bhi reader padhke ro de......

kya kahani aapko ant tak jude rehne ke liye majboor kiya?

shat pratishat...... chaahe kitne bhi shadb jod lun sameeksha ke liye par wo bhi kam hi pade is epic story line ke liye...... jindagi ki ek karvi sachhai chupi hai.. jaha is kahani mein wohi aapko ek maa ki mamta bhi dekhne ko milegi... jahan bichhadne ka dard bhi hai.. to kisise milne ki aur ek adventure journey bhi dekhne ko milegi..jaha aapko ek akelapan se jujhta kirdaar dikhega wohi kisi tyaag aur balidaan bhi dekhne ko milengi....
naye readers se yahi request hai ki ek baar jarur padhe is kahani ko... kyunki kahani ne suruwat se hi ek gati li hai jo ant tak kayam hai....

shayad Writer sahab hume yeh batana chahte hai is kahani ke jariye ki hume paristhitiyo ko koshna nahi balki unhe swikar karna chahiye.. har haal mein mein khush rehna hai aur jo badlav jaruri hai, waha apni ummidon ke bal par, apne aatmvishvas ke bal par badlav lana hai... dukh ke kaanto ke bich hume sukh ke phool chun'ne hai . jaise Aurora ne dhund li thi .. ek raashta band ho jaaye to hume dusra rasta talashna chahiye.. jaise nic ne dhund liya tha Aurora aur Aakash ki jaan bachane ke liye.... aur chunotiya jo bhi samne chaahe akela pan aur ghor tanhayi hi kyun na aa jaaye jindagi mein unka samna saant mann aur ek sathik saant soch vichar ke sath samna karne ke liye taiyar rahna hai... jaise Aakash ki mom ne ushe sikh di thi... unki baaton ka ek arth bhi nikalta hai...upor wale ne jo aapko jindagi di hai ushe pyaar karna sikhe... yun jaya na hone de...
.... chaahe mushkilein ho tanhai ya akela pan Aakash k tarah nahi balki Aurora ki tarah muskuharaton ko lana hai apne jivan mein aur apne utshah ki kirano se hume sampurn vatavaran ko sajib aur mukorit banana hai... taaki isse na keval aap balki aapke aas paas walo ko ek nayi ummid ek nayi utshah mile...

aur akhir mein kuch shabd writer sahab ke liye.. Kahani mein kaafi mod aaye joh kahani ko dilchaspi banaye rakhi ... ek achhe writer ke gun, lakshan yeh ki kahani ki jariye, kahani ke kirdaaro ke jariye kahani ke naam ko sarthak kar de.... jisme aap pure tarike se kamyab rahe...

Really badhte update ke sath sath kahani aur bhi zyada interesting hoti jaa rahin thi...
Har ek pehlu ko aapne dhyan dete huye kahani ko aage badha rahe the ..
jindagi ki karvi sachhai ko realize kar dene wale drisya , thodi bahot suspense , heavy emotions ke sath sath thrill aur adventure ke bhi anokhi sangam hai kahani mein ... ... kahani ki ghatana karm aise ki aankho ke samne hi ghat rahi ho... aur kirdaar... jo kahani mein jahan bhi jarurat padi wahan apni bhumika sathik roop se nibha rahe the kahani ki har ek pehlu mein....

yeh bhi ek sach hai ki aapki is kahani mein har ek kirdaar ki mahattva purn hai.. I mean to say ek kirdaar bhi hata diya jaye toh kahani adhuri hai...
Hum hamesha hero heroine pe hi zyada dhyaan Kendrit karte hain... lekin yeh yaad rakhna chahiye ki baaki kirdaaro ke bina multiple ya pramukh kirdaar kuch bhi nahin.... aur aap kahani mein sabhi kirdaaro ke sath ek justify karte hain... Isliye aapki yeh kahani meri favorites kahaniyo mein se ek ho gayi hai....
aise hi likhte rahiye aur humari manoranjan karte rahiye

Oh haan...
Brilliant story line with awesome writing skills Yug Purush sahab

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Naina ji... Asha karta hoon Aap mera usc ka kahaani bhi parkey apna feedback dengey. Meri kahaani - Dosti the bonding. Asha karta hoon aapko pasand aayegi meri kahani. Thanks ❤

 

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Ek dard bhari kahani jo shuru hote hi chudai ki kahani me tabdeel ho gyi, kahani ke title se esa laga ki shayad rashmi ke baap ne rashmi ka guda dwar apne musal se khola hoga isiliye iska naam 'rashmi ka dard' rakha hoga lekin ye toh ek aam chudai gatha hi nikali jokes apart, kahani below average rahi shuru se leke end tak shayad words limit hone ki vajah se or fir kahani ka title se bilkul mel na khana overall meri taraf se is kahani ko 5 me se 1 points, extra ek point saxy gifs ke liye (5-2)

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apke 1 point ke liye dil se dhanyawaad maine ye kahani sirf or sirf wapas aane ke liye likhi thi mujhe bhi pta hai mein kuch khaas nahi likh paaya per us waqt me hospitalize tha or mujhe wapas aana tha

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Kahani ~ A LONER
Writer ~ Yug Purush ​

Kahani - kahani hai ek ladke ki . jiska naam hai Aakash.. akele pan se pehle se hi jujhta... kisi se zyada baat chit nahi karta.... apni maa ko khone ke baad kabhi na mita paane wali dard ke sath sath sampurn roop se akelapan ka shikar ho gaya.. uske liye sab kuch ya tak ki duniya nirah si ho gayi.. duniya ke bhid mein tanha mehsus karne laga... to usne ek decision liya ki wo ab dharti pe nahi balki space pe rahega... waise pehle se iski taiyari kar raha tha.. matlab saaf tha ki is rang birangi duniya se zyada ushe space ke andhkkaar zyada pasand aaya...
waise hota hai... kayio ke sath hota hai jab akele pan ka shikar hote hai... to bas jaise jindagi hi kaatne ko doudta hai...
ab space yani ki ISS par apne dost nic ke sath pahunch ke uski mulaakat hanshmukh, utshah se paripurn Aurora se huyi... hairani ki baat yeh hai ki uske jindagi mein uski mom k baad ek Aurora hi thi jo Akash ke bin bole uske mann ki baat samajh jaaye.. chehre ke bhav dekhke hi bol de ki kya pareshani hai usko..

Khair.. ab din gujare.. dono ke bich pehle dosti phir shayad pyar bhi ho gaya tha.. Aurora ki sang rahkar wo apni tanhaiyo ko bhool ne laga tha... ek pyaar ka ehsaas uske mann ko gudguda sa gaya tha... lekin honi ko koun taal sakta hai.... ISS pe huyi ek durghatna ke chalte aur us durghatna ke waqt apach mein huyi bahas baazi ya Aurora dwara liye galat faisla ke chalte jaha Aurora marne ki kagar tak pahunch gayi thi wohi aakash ki bhi maut nischit thi.. par aain mauke par apni jaan ka parwah na karte huye nic ne dono ko bacha liya... par us radiator - 1 pe ghate durghatna ke chalte aur helmet huyi depressurized wajah se radiation ka shikar bani wo...
uske baad to jaise uski haalat bigadti gayi udhar usko dekh aakash bhi tutta gaya andar hi andar....ishi bich waha ISS pe treatment thik se na ho pane ke wajah se Aurora ko space shuttle ke jariye wapis prithvi le aaye.. lekin afsos aate waqt shuttle mein huye bhari dabav ke kaaran maari gayi... lekin hairan kar dene wali baat yeh hai uski marne ki wajah kuch aur hi thi... pehle se ek bahot hi durlav genetic bimari se grast thi.. radiator ki dhamake aur radiation ke chalte wo bimari activate ho gayi... jo ant mein uski maut ki kaaran bani...
so Aurora k jaane ke baad phir se wohi tanhayi wali jinadgi jeene laga ISS par .. wohi akela pan wohi nirah si jivan wohi khamoshi wohi viraniya .. jaise jeeta hai A... LONER

ab aate hai sameeksha par - - sapne tut te hai to tutne do . unme se ek tukda chuno aur phir se sapne ko buno... ummid ka daaman kabhi mat chhodo aakhiri saans tak... jo ummid ki naav par savar hokar nikloge to sahil ka milna tay hai.. mushkilein kiske raashte mein nahi? pareshaniya kiske jivan ka hissa nahi akela pan se pidit sirf kiya aakash hai.. dukh kya sirf uske hisse mein hai.. dukh to sabhi ke hisse mein hota hai.. par aakash ne dukh baatne ki jagah apne andar samet rakha.... yeh ek weak point hai uske liye.. itna padha likha hai phir bhi is baat ehsaas nahi hai kya ki dukh baatne se kam hota, aur tanav bhi..
aur baant nahi paa raha hai to inse paar pa le.. kyunki dukh dard tanhaiyo pareshaniyo paar ushi ko mil sakta hai jo dar kar baitha nahi... jisne lagatar koshish ki, jisne nirasha ko, tanhaiyo ko, akele pan ko apne upor haavi hone nahi diya.. jo haar kar bhi kabhi nahi hara, saralata usiko har aurr se milti hai...
kehte hai ummid pe duniya kayam hai... yeh ummid ka hi karisma hai ki kal jo kaam asambhav lage the aaj nahi kal sakar ho sakte hai.. aasha gahri Andhri raat mein dipak ki jalti lo ki saman hai.... Agar ye sambhav hai to aakash ke liye kyun sambhav nahi akele pan ke un gehre andhkkaar galiyo se bahar nikal, apne jindagi ko ek nayi ujale ke aurr le jaane ki.. ..
har chij har baatein har mahol.. damn it.. yaha tak buri duniya hi uske duswar ho gayi... raat chaahe kitni bhi andheri ho, chaahe kitni bhi lambi kyun na ho.. lekin uske baad aisa bhi waqt aata hai jab suraj apni roushni ki kiran bikhre din ka ujala lata hai.. tufan bhi aate hai phir Tham bhi jaate hai.. lekin us waqt majboor hoke nahi balki kud ko tab tak ke liye mamboot banaye rakhe jab tak andheri raat ya tufan tal na jaaye...
kayi logo jinhe apne jivan se apne aash paas ke mahol se, paristhitiyo se, jo anchahe ghatana ghatit hua uske liye bhi hamesha se hi sikayat rahti hai.. nakaratmak un par haavi rahti hai, apni ashafalata ke haazar kaaran unke paas rehte hai.. kuch kehte hai sahi mauka na mila, kuch kehte hai unke paas sanshadhano ka kami hai.. koi kehta hai koi apna chhod gaya hamesha ke liye isliye wo akela par gaya... to koi kehta hai hai prerna dene wala protshahit karenge nahi hai, ya na mila.. Jaise ki is kahani ka nayak... mana ki Aakash ko ghum hai, dard hai lekin ye nahi ki is tarah se nirah si jindagi jiye.. tanhaiyo mein apni jindagi ko bhent de de...
wo ek baar Aurora ya nic ko kyun nahi dekhta...
unke sakaratmak dristikon ko kyun nahi mahsoos kiya ya nahi dekha.. Kya unke jindagi mein dukh nahi, pareshaniya nahi.. are Aurora ko hi dekh lijiye.. tanhai uske jivan mein aayi thi.. to kya bahana banake baith gayi thi... nahi na... Aurora wo thi jo raashte talaste nahi balki raashte taraste hai banate hai apne liye.. aur ye hunar thi usme.. Divorced ke baad bhi kya tut gayi ya wahan space mein mahino dar mahino waqt bitake tanhaiyo ka shikar huyi.. nahi na.. kya ye sab najar nahi aaya usko ya mahsoos nahi kiya.. bas jivan sathi banani hai, shaadi karni hai, pyaar karna hai kya yahi yaad raha usko.. ya phir apne tanhaiyo mein khota raha..
dusri taraf nic.... ummid tha ki bacha lega isliye usne Aurora aur aakash ko bachake le aaye sahi salamat ISS pe...itne mahine bitaye wahan kuch sikh leta nic se bhi...
aur sabse aham uski maa.... uske sapno ke duniya se andhkaar ko door karne wali roshani thi, jinka daaman pakad kar wo bada hua... unke aanchal ne jab usko thand lagi toh grami pradan ki aur jab wo khud se ya kisi baat se gussa hota toh unke aanchal ne ushe sheetalta pradan ki.... kya unki dwara di gayi prerna se bhari wo baatein bhi bhool gaya Aakash..
maybe wo har ek baat ka ehsaas tha... bas jaanke bhi nazar andaz karta raha....
thokor khake girte sabhi hai kabhi na kabhi hai par girke khada hona aana chahiye..

aapki pasandida kirdaar koun thi aur kyun?
kahani ke Nayak Aakash ki mom....
chaahe kahani ho ya vastavik jivan mein maa se anmol aur koi nahi...
jis tarah unhone aakash ko sambhaala har waqt, har bure ho ya achhe doud mein unko ek salam... yahan tak ki aakash astrond banne ke piche unki mehnat, tyaag aur balidaan hai...
kya kirdaar aapko vastavik lage?
Haan....kahani ke kirdaar space aur ISS se jude huye hai to vastavik hi lage?
aur baat aakash aur uski mom ki.... yahan pe koi do ray nahi ki vastavik lage ki nahi.... kyunki har maa ke liye uska bachha hi anmol hota hai..
nic..... duty aur dosti.... dono nibhaye aur I think agar wo ghatna real mein hoti to koi na koi nic jaisa jarur hota jo bachane jata...
Aurora... ek aham bhumika mein rahi. .. waise space shuttle ya space ISS isko leke bahot zyada jaankari to nahi hai par itna to pata hai ki aise space jo kaam ya duties hote hai wohi kahani mein Aurora bhi kar rahi thi..
waise ek baat hai writer sahab ne bahot mehnat ki hai story pe aur reaches ki hai ye space aur space shuttle aur ISS ke upor is kahani ke liye tabhi to itne vastavik lage kahani ke kirdaar ke saath saath ke har Kirdaar bhi..

sabse pasandida bhaag kya tha aur kyun...?

well sabse pasandida bhaag woh tha jab us samay barish mein muh fulake aakash bench par baitha hua tha aur Saare teachers haar maan chuke the Aakash ko andar bula-bula kar... kuch ne jabardasti pakad kar andar le jaane ka bhi prayas kiya, lekin wo wahi zameen mein lotne laga aur unke hath ko gusse se kaat bhi diya... jiske baad haarkar unhone uski Maa ko bulayaa.... jo aayi toh chhata lekar thi par mujhe bheegta dekh chhata kinare kar uske sath wahi bheegte hue us bench me uske sath baith gayi....
aur jab aakash ke mann mein base bure vichar ya dar ya asurkshit baav ko dur kar ke bol rahi thi ki
wo kamjor nahi hai, agar agli baar koi aapko kamjor bolta ya kamjor banane ki koshish kare to majbuti date rahna unke samne kabhi kamjor mat banna... aur wo bahot khas hai, shayad khas log hamesha se hi kuch alag hote hai.. isliye aise ulte sidhe vicharo ko mann mein na laye...
jis tarike samjha rahi thi, wo baatein aur wo situation wo dil ko chu gayi...

Kuch vishes prakar ke drishya - udaharan ke liye dukhad, tanavpurn drishya, rahasyamay?

sabse tanavpurn aur dukhad drishya wo jab us din uski maa Standford Center me apni aakhiri saanse le rahi thi aur fir wo pal bhi aaya jab unhone apni aakhiri saans li... jab aakash ek tak wahi unke paas baitha unhe ek tak dekhta raha...
aur jab apni maa ko pukarne par tab hamesha ki tarah dusari taraf se koyi jawab nahi aaya....
aur dusri... jab space shuttle se prithvi ki aurr jane pehle jo Aurora barbara ke bol rahi thi behoshi mein.. ki uski bhi khwahish thi aakash ke sath jindagi bitane ki lekin agle hi mod pe pata chale ki uski mrityu ho gayi.. bune huye Khwaab ye bhi adure hi reh gaye...
aur tanavpurn ki kya hoga ab.... jab Aurora ko leke Aakash ISS ki aurr aate waqt EMV - X band hone baad SAFER bhi band ho gaya tha...

Kya kahani ne hanshya ya rulaya?

hanshaya bas kuch palon ke liye jab nic ko kisi ne ek ajibo garib naam se sambodhit kiya tha... aur uska arth aakash se puch raha tha wo..
par jo drishya dikhaye gaye hai ya kirdaaro ke sath jo hua, khas aakash ki mom aur Aurora ke sath.... koi bhi reader padhke ro de......

kya kahani aapko ant tak jude rehne ke liye majboor kiya?

shat pratishat...... chaahe kitne bhi shadb jod lun sameeksha ke liye par wo bhi kam hi pade is epic story line ke liye...... jindagi ki ek karvi sachhai chupi hai.. jaha is kahani mein wohi aapko ek maa ki mamta bhi dekhne ko milegi... jahan bichhadne ka dard bhi hai.. to kisise milne ki aur ek adventure journey bhi dekhne ko milegi..jaha aapko ek akelapan se jujhta kirdaar dikhega wohi kisi tyaag aur balidaan bhi dekhne ko milengi....
naye readers se yahi request hai ki ek baar jarur padhe is kahani ko... kyunki kahani ne suruwat se hi ek gati li hai jo ant tak kayam hai....

shayad Writer sahab hume yeh batana chahte hai is kahani ke jariye ki hume paristhitiyo ko koshna nahi balki unhe swikar karna chahiye.. har haal mein mein khush rehna hai aur jo badlav jaruri hai, waha apni ummidon ke bal par, apne aatmvishvas ke bal par badlav lana hai... dukh ke kaanto ke bich hume sukh ke phool chun'ne hai . jaise Aurora ne dhund li thi .. ek raashta band ho jaaye to hume dusra rasta talashna chahiye.. jaise nic ne dhund liya tha Aurora aur Aakash ki jaan bachane ke liye.... aur chunotiya jo bhi samne chaahe akela pan aur ghor tanhayi hi kyun na aa jaaye jindagi mein unka samna saant mann aur ek sathik saant soch vichar ke sath samna karne ke liye taiyar rahna hai... jaise Aakash ki mom ne ushe sikh di thi... unki baaton ka ek arth bhi nikalta hai...upor wale ne jo aapko jindagi di hai ushe pyaar karna sikhe... yun jaya na hone de...
.... chaahe mushkilein ho tanhai ya akela pan Aakash k tarah nahi balki Aurora ki tarah muskuharaton ko lana hai apne jivan mein aur apne utshah ki kirano se hume sampurn vatavaran ko sajib aur mukorit banana hai... taaki isse na keval aap balki aapke aas paas walo ko ek nayi ummid ek nayi utshah mile...

aur akhir mein kuch shabd writer sahab ke liye.. Kahani mein kaafi mod aaye joh kahani ko dilchaspi banaye rakhi ... ek achhe writer ke gun, lakshan yeh ki kahani ki jariye, kahani ke kirdaaro ke jariye kahani ke naam ko sarthak kar de.... jisme aap pure tarike se kamyab rahe...

Really badhte update ke sath sath kahani aur bhi zyada interesting hoti jaa rahin thi...
Har ek pehlu ko aapne dhyan dete huye kahani ko aage badha rahe the ..
jindagi ki karvi sachhai ko realize kar dene wale drisya , thodi bahot suspense , heavy emotions ke sath sath thrill aur adventure ke bhi anokhi sangam hai kahani mein ... ... kahani ki ghatana karm aise ki aankho ke samne hi ghat rahi ho... aur kirdaar... jo kahani mein jahan bhi jarurat padi wahan apni bhumika sathik roop se nibha rahe the kahani ki har ek pehlu mein....

yeh bhi ek sach hai ki aapki is kahani mein har ek kirdaar ki mahattva purn hai.. I mean to say ek kirdaar bhi hata diya jaye toh kahani adhuri hai...
Hum hamesha hero heroine pe hi zyada dhyaan Kendrit karte hain... lekin yeh yaad rakhna chahiye ki baaki kirdaaro ke bina multiple ya pramukh kirdaar kuch bhi nahin.... aur aap kahani mein sabhi kirdaaro ke sath ek justify karte hain... Isliye aapki yeh kahani meri favorites kahaniyo mein se ek ho gayi hai....
aise hi likhte rahiye aur humari manoranjan karte rahiye

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Brilliant story line with awesome writing skills Yug Purush sahab

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The Love Story

 

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Kahani ~ A LONER
Writer ~ Yug Purush ​

Kahani - kahani hai ek ladke ki . jiska naam hai Aakash.. akele pan se pehle se hi jujhta... kisi se zyada baat chit nahi karta.... apni maa ko khone ke baad kabhi na mita paane wali dard ke sath sath sampurn roop se akelapan ka shikar ho gaya.. uske liye sab kuch ya tak ki duniya nirah si ho gayi.. duniya ke bhid mein tanha mehsus karne laga... to usne ek decision liya ki wo ab dharti pe nahi balki space pe rahega... waise pehle se iski taiyari kar raha tha.. matlab saaf tha ki is rang birangi duniya se zyada ushe space ke andhkkaar zyada pasand aaya...
waise hota hai... kayio ke sath hota hai jab akele pan ka shikar hote hai... to bas jaise jindagi hi kaatne ko doudta hai...
ab space yani ki ISS par apne dost nic ke sath pahunch ke uski mulaakat hanshmukh, utshah se paripurn Aurora se huyi... hairani ki baat yeh hai ki uske jindagi mein uski mom k baad ek Aurora hi thi jo Akash ke bin bole uske mann ki baat samajh jaaye.. chehre ke bhav dekhke hi bol de ki kya pareshani hai usko..

Khair.. ab din gujare.. dono ke bich pehle dosti phir shayad pyar bhi ho gaya tha.. Aurora ki sang rahkar wo apni tanhaiyo ko bhool ne laga tha... ek pyaar ka ehsaas uske mann ko gudguda sa gaya tha... lekin honi ko koun taal sakta hai.... ISS pe huyi ek durghatna ke chalte aur us durghatna ke waqt apach mein huyi bahas baazi ya Aurora dwara liye galat faisla ke chalte jaha Aurora marne ki kagar tak pahunch gayi thi wohi aakash ki bhi maut nischit thi.. par aain mauke par apni jaan ka parwah na karte huye nic ne dono ko bacha liya... par us radiator - 1 pe ghate durghatna ke chalte aur helmet huyi depressurized wajah se radiation ka shikar bani wo...
uske baad to jaise uski haalat bigadti gayi udhar usko dekh aakash bhi tutta gaya andar hi andar....ishi bich waha ISS pe treatment thik se na ho pane ke wajah se Aurora ko space shuttle ke jariye wapis prithvi le aaye.. lekin afsos aate waqt shuttle mein huye bhari dabav ke kaaran maari gayi... lekin hairan kar dene wali baat yeh hai uski marne ki wajah kuch aur hi thi... pehle se ek bahot hi durlav genetic bimari se grast thi.. radiator ki dhamake aur radiation ke chalte wo bimari activate ho gayi... jo ant mein uski maut ki kaaran bani...
so Aurora k jaane ke baad phir se wohi tanhayi wali jinadgi jeene laga ISS par .. wohi akela pan wohi nirah si jivan wohi khamoshi wohi viraniya .. jaise jeeta hai A... LONER

ab aate hai sameeksha par - - sapne tut te hai to tutne do . unme se ek tukda chuno aur phir se sapne ko buno... ummid ka daaman kabhi mat chhodo aakhiri saans tak... jo ummid ki naav par savar hokar nikloge to sahil ka milna tay hai.. mushkilein kiske raashte mein nahi? pareshaniya kiske jivan ka hissa nahi akela pan se pidit sirf kiya aakash hai.. dukh kya sirf uske hisse mein hai.. dukh to sabhi ke hisse mein hota hai.. par aakash ne dukh baatne ki jagah apne andar samet rakha.... yeh ek weak point hai uske liye.. itna padha likha hai phir bhi is baat ehsaas nahi hai kya ki dukh baatne se kam hota, aur tanav bhi..
aur baant nahi paa raha hai to inse paar pa le.. kyunki dukh dard tanhaiyo pareshaniyo paar ushi ko mil sakta hai jo dar kar baitha nahi... jisne lagatar koshish ki, jisne nirasha ko, tanhaiyo ko, akele pan ko apne upor haavi hone nahi diya.. jo haar kar bhi kabhi nahi hara, saralata usiko har aurr se milti hai...
kehte hai ummid pe duniya kayam hai... yeh ummid ka hi karisma hai ki kal jo kaam asambhav lage the aaj nahi kal sakar ho sakte hai.. aasha gahri Andhri raat mein dipak ki jalti lo ki saman hai.... Agar ye sambhav hai to aakash ke liye kyun sambhav nahi akele pan ke un gehre andhkkaar galiyo se bahar nikal, apne jindagi ko ek nayi ujale ke aurr le jaane ki.. ..
har chij har baatein har mahol.. damn it.. yaha tak buri duniya hi uske duswar ho gayi... raat chaahe kitni bhi andheri ho, chaahe kitni bhi lambi kyun na ho.. lekin uske baad aisa bhi waqt aata hai jab suraj apni roushni ki kiran bikhre din ka ujala lata hai.. tufan bhi aate hai phir Tham bhi jaate hai.. lekin us waqt majboor hoke nahi balki kud ko tab tak ke liye mamboot banaye rakhe jab tak andheri raat ya tufan tal na jaaye...
kayi logo jinhe apne jivan se apne aash paas ke mahol se, paristhitiyo se, jo anchahe ghatana ghatit hua uske liye bhi hamesha se hi sikayat rahti hai.. nakaratmak un par haavi rahti hai, apni ashafalata ke haazar kaaran unke paas rehte hai.. kuch kehte hai sahi mauka na mila, kuch kehte hai unke paas sanshadhano ka kami hai.. koi kehta hai koi apna chhod gaya hamesha ke liye isliye wo akela par gaya... to koi kehta hai hai prerna dene wala protshahit karenge nahi hai, ya na mila.. Jaise ki is kahani ka nayak... mana ki Aakash ko ghum hai, dard hai lekin ye nahi ki is tarah se nirah si jindagi jiye.. tanhaiyo mein apni jindagi ko bhent de de...
wo ek baar Aurora ya nic ko kyun nahi dekhta...
unke sakaratmak dristikon ko kyun nahi mahsoos kiya ya nahi dekha.. Kya unke jindagi mein dukh nahi, pareshaniya nahi.. are Aurora ko hi dekh lijiye.. tanhai uske jivan mein aayi thi.. to kya bahana banake baith gayi thi... nahi na... Aurora wo thi jo raashte talaste nahi balki raashte taraste hai banate hai apne liye.. aur ye hunar thi usme.. Divorced ke baad bhi kya tut gayi ya wahan space mein mahino dar mahino waqt bitake tanhaiyo ka shikar huyi.. nahi na.. kya ye sab najar nahi aaya usko ya mahsoos nahi kiya.. bas jivan sathi banani hai, shaadi karni hai, pyaar karna hai kya yahi yaad raha usko.. ya phir apne tanhaiyo mein khota raha..
dusri taraf nic.... ummid tha ki bacha lega isliye usne Aurora aur aakash ko bachake le aaye sahi salamat ISS pe...itne mahine bitaye wahan kuch sikh leta nic se bhi...
aur sabse aham uski maa.... uske sapno ke duniya se andhkaar ko door karne wali roshani thi, jinka daaman pakad kar wo bada hua... unke aanchal ne jab usko thand lagi toh grami pradan ki aur jab wo khud se ya kisi baat se gussa hota toh unke aanchal ne ushe sheetalta pradan ki.... kya unki dwara di gayi prerna se bhari wo baatein bhi bhool gaya Aakash..
maybe wo har ek baat ka ehsaas tha... bas jaanke bhi nazar andaz karta raha....
thokor khake girte sabhi hai kabhi na kabhi hai par girke khada hona aana chahiye..

aapki pasandida kirdaar koun thi aur kyun?
kahani ke Nayak Aakash ki mom....
chaahe kahani ho ya vastavik jivan mein maa se anmol aur koi nahi...
jis tarah unhone aakash ko sambhaala har waqt, har bure ho ya achhe doud mein unko ek salam... yahan tak ki aakash astrond banne ke piche unki mehnat, tyaag aur balidaan hai...
kya kirdaar aapko vastavik lage?
Haan....kahani ke kirdaar space aur ISS se jude huye hai to vastavik hi lage?
aur baat aakash aur uski mom ki.... yahan pe koi do ray nahi ki vastavik lage ki nahi.... kyunki har maa ke liye uska bachha hi anmol hota hai..
nic..... duty aur dosti.... dono nibhaye aur I think agar wo ghatna real mein hoti to koi na koi nic jaisa jarur hota jo bachane jata...
Aurora... ek aham bhumika mein rahi. .. waise space shuttle ya space ISS isko leke bahot zyada jaankari to nahi hai par itna to pata hai ki aise space jo kaam ya duties hote hai wohi kahani mein Aurora bhi kar rahi thi..
waise ek baat hai writer sahab ne bahot mehnat ki hai story pe aur reaches ki hai ye space aur space shuttle aur ISS ke upor is kahani ke liye tabhi to itne vastavik lage kahani ke kirdaar ke saath saath ke har Kirdaar bhi..

sabse pasandida bhaag kya tha aur kyun...?

well sabse pasandida bhaag woh tha jab us samay barish mein muh fulake aakash bench par baitha hua tha aur Saare teachers haar maan chuke the Aakash ko andar bula-bula kar... kuch ne jabardasti pakad kar andar le jaane ka bhi prayas kiya, lekin wo wahi zameen mein lotne laga aur unke hath ko gusse se kaat bhi diya... jiske baad haarkar unhone uski Maa ko bulayaa.... jo aayi toh chhata lekar thi par mujhe bheegta dekh chhata kinare kar uske sath wahi bheegte hue us bench me uske sath baith gayi....
aur jab aakash ke mann mein base bure vichar ya dar ya asurkshit baav ko dur kar ke bol rahi thi ki
wo kamjor nahi hai, agar agli baar koi aapko kamjor bolta ya kamjor banane ki koshish kare to majbuti date rahna unke samne kabhi kamjor mat banna... aur wo bahot khas hai, shayad khas log hamesha se hi kuch alag hote hai.. isliye aise ulte sidhe vicharo ko mann mein na laye...
jis tarike samjha rahi thi, wo baatein aur wo situation wo dil ko chu gayi...

Kuch vishes prakar ke drishya - udaharan ke liye dukhad, tanavpurn drishya, rahasyamay?

sabse tanavpurn aur dukhad drishya wo jab us din uski maa Standford Center me apni aakhiri saanse le rahi thi aur fir wo pal bhi aaya jab unhone apni aakhiri saans li... jab aakash ek tak wahi unke paas baitha unhe ek tak dekhta raha...
aur jab apni maa ko pukarne par tab hamesha ki tarah dusari taraf se koyi jawab nahi aaya....
aur dusri... jab space shuttle se prithvi ki aurr jane pehle jo Aurora barbara ke bol rahi thi behoshi mein.. ki uski bhi khwahish thi aakash ke sath jindagi bitane ki lekin agle hi mod pe pata chale ki uski mrityu ho gayi.. bune huye Khwaab ye bhi adure hi reh gaye...
aur tanavpurn ki kya hoga ab.... jab Aurora ko leke Aakash ISS ki aurr aate waqt EMV - X band hone baad SAFER bhi band ho gaya tha...

Kya kahani ne hanshya ya rulaya?

hanshaya bas kuch palon ke liye jab nic ko kisi ne ek ajibo garib naam se sambodhit kiya tha... aur uska arth aakash se puch raha tha wo..
par jo drishya dikhaye gaye hai ya kirdaaro ke sath jo hua, khas aakash ki mom aur Aurora ke sath.... koi bhi reader padhke ro de......

kya kahani aapko ant tak jude rehne ke liye majboor kiya?

shat pratishat...... chaahe kitne bhi shadb jod lun sameeksha ke liye par wo bhi kam hi pade is epic story line ke liye...... jindagi ki ek karvi sachhai chupi hai.. jaha is kahani mein wohi aapko ek maa ki mamta bhi dekhne ko milegi... jahan bichhadne ka dard bhi hai.. to kisise milne ki aur ek adventure journey bhi dekhne ko milegi..jaha aapko ek akelapan se jujhta kirdaar dikhega wohi kisi tyaag aur balidaan bhi dekhne ko milengi....
naye readers se yahi request hai ki ek baar jarur padhe is kahani ko... kyunki kahani ne suruwat se hi ek gati li hai jo ant tak kayam hai....

shayad Writer sahab hume yeh batana chahte hai is kahani ke jariye ki hume paristhitiyo ko koshna nahi balki unhe swikar karna chahiye.. har haal mein mein khush rehna hai aur jo badlav jaruri hai, waha apni ummidon ke bal par, apne aatmvishvas ke bal par badlav lana hai... dukh ke kaanto ke bich hume sukh ke phool chun'ne hai . jaise Aurora ne dhund li thi .. ek raashta band ho jaaye to hume dusra rasta talashna chahiye.. jaise nic ne dhund liya tha Aurora aur Aakash ki jaan bachane ke liye.... aur chunotiya jo bhi samne chaahe akela pan aur ghor tanhayi hi kyun na aa jaaye jindagi mein unka samna saant mann aur ek sathik saant soch vichar ke sath samna karne ke liye taiyar rahna hai... jaise Aakash ki mom ne ushe sikh di thi... unki baaton ka ek arth bhi nikalta hai...upor wale ne jo aapko jindagi di hai ushe pyaar karna sikhe... yun jaya na hone de...
.... chaahe mushkilein ho tanhai ya akela pan Aakash k tarah nahi balki Aurora ki tarah muskuharaton ko lana hai apne jivan mein aur apne utshah ki kirano se hume sampurn vatavaran ko sajib aur mukorit banana hai... taaki isse na keval aap balki aapke aas paas walo ko ek nayi ummid ek nayi utshah mile...

aur akhir mein kuch shabd writer sahab ke liye.. Kahani mein kaafi mod aaye joh kahani ko dilchaspi banaye rakhi ... ek achhe writer ke gun, lakshan yeh ki kahani ki jariye, kahani ke kirdaaro ke jariye kahani ke naam ko sarthak kar de.... jisme aap pure tarike se kamyab rahe...

Really badhte update ke sath sath kahani aur bhi zyada interesting hoti jaa rahin thi...
Har ek pehlu ko aapne dhyan dete huye kahani ko aage badha rahe the ..
jindagi ki karvi sachhai ko realize kar dene wale drisya , thodi bahot suspense , heavy emotions ke sath sath thrill aur adventure ke bhi anokhi sangam hai kahani mein ... ... kahani ki ghatana karm aise ki aankho ke samne hi ghat rahi ho... aur kirdaar... jo kahani mein jahan bhi jarurat padi wahan apni bhumika sathik roop se nibha rahe the kahani ki har ek pehlu mein....

yeh bhi ek sach hai ki aapki is kahani mein har ek kirdaar ki mahattva purn hai.. I mean to say ek kirdaar bhi hata diya jaye toh kahani adhuri hai...
Hum hamesha hero heroine pe hi zyada dhyaan Kendrit karte hain... lekin yeh yaad rakhna chahiye ki baaki kirdaaro ke bina multiple ya pramukh kirdaar kuch bhi nahin.... aur aap kahani mein sabhi kirdaaro ke sath ek justify karte hain... Isliye aapki yeh kahani meri favorites kahaniyo mein se ek ho gayi hai....
aise hi likhte rahiye aur humari manoranjan karte rahiye

Oh haan...
Brilliant story line with awesome writing skills Yug Purush sahab

 

[Baban]

Ek Bezuban Ki Dastaan...

First Time Is Theme Par Maine Koi Kahani Read Ki Hai..

Ek Bezuban ka Dard, Uska struggle, Uska Life... Sab Kuch Bade Achhe Se Btaya Hai Aapne..

Ye Kahani Sochne Par Majbur Karti Hai..
Aakhir Un Bezubano Ki Kya Galti Hai, Jo Hmare Aas Paas Be Sahara Ghumte hain

Naa Khane Ka Paataa, Na Pine kaa,
Na Jeewan ka Pata Na Mrityu Ka

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Kaalu Ne Bhi Bachpan Se Ab Tak Kafi kuch sikha Jindgi se,

Ek Bat isme dikhai Gayi Bahut achhi lagi wo Ye Ki Insaan Kahta to hai Sb Par Kartaa kuch nahi..

Wo Bujurg Jo Apni Batein Jhad Rahe The, Gareebo Ke Maseeha Ban Rhe the, Bhlaa Ek Bezuban Ki Halat Ko Q Na smjh Paye... Uska Bs ek Hi reason hai.. apna pet bhar jaye.. Dusre Jaye bhad me

Kher Ek Bachhi Aur Kalu Ki Dosti ant me dikhai hai...
Bachpan Kafi achha hotaa hai wese...
Uska Bchpaanaa hi tha Jo Use kalu pr daya aa gyi aur uski help ki...

Overall I'm Speechless...
Bahut Hi Bdiya kahani hai ye ​

Angel swati... Aapne mere Dosti -the bonding parkey bahut pyara feedback di thi. Agar aapko horror and thriller pasand hai toh main ek erotic horror/ thriller bhi likh raha hu normal thread mein. Story ka naam hai - MOHINI. aap pariye usko. Asha karta hu aapko interesting lagega ❤ aapke feedback ka intezar rahega

 

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The Love Story

Spoiler

Pahli mulakat….

“abbe wo hot maal kon hai….pahle dekha nahi kabhi….”
“Ma’am aaj hi join kiya hai…”
“bhej usko mere office mein…aur tu…jaa ek cigratte leke aa paise khate mein… accha sun….dekh ke to lagta hai ye coffee material hai….coffee bhi lete aiyo…aur jaldi aana nahi to naukri….”
“Samajh gaya Ma’am”
Peon ne pahle jaake uss ladki ko Sunidhi ke pass jaane ko bola….usne socha ki aajj Madam ko thoda impress kiya jaaye…jaate jaate usne uss ladki se ye bhi puch liya ki wo chai legi yaa coffee…Jawab sun eke baad wok hush hoke waha se niche gaya aur Sunidhi ki pasandeeda brand ki ciggerate le aaya…saath hi mein 1 cup chai bhi…..
Peon jab wapas Sunidhi ke cabin mein pahucha to Sunidhi gusse mein lag rahi thi….pata nahi kyun aur iss baar peon ne door knock nahi kiya tha …. Sunidhi ko to bas koi chahiye tha jispe wo chilla sakkke…aur abhi to uske saamne ek aadmi tha isse accha aur kya hi hoga….
Sunidhi- dimmag nahi hai kya…binna pucche ander kyun aa gaye…hum baatein kar rahe the naa…
Peon jaanta tha abhi Ma’am gusse mein hai naukri bhi jaa sakti hai….aur uski halat kuch sahi nahi thi to usne bas sunne ka socha….aur Sunidhi ne bh usko mann bhar sunaya…pahle door naa knock karne ke liye fir chai ke liye…aur to aur kuch aisi baton ke liye bhi jo usne kari bhi nahi thi…wahi wo ladki waha baithi hui thi…apni hi duniya mein koyi hui…usko jaise pata hi naa ho ki wo kaha hai….bas such ke samundra mein wo dubti jaa rahi thi…aur fir wo waha se uthi aur apna samman liya aur nikal gayi waha se……wahi karib 5 minute baad Sunidhi ka dhyaan uss oor gaya…
Sunidhi – Ye kaha gayi…Jao usko dhundho….
Peon waha se nikal gaya uss ladki ko dhundhne….aur wahi Sunidhi bhi nikal gayi…
Sunidhi waha se shidha police station pahucha gayi…Tabhi uska phone bajja…
Peon – Ma’am wo mil gayi hai par ye roye jaa rahi hai…
Sunidhi – kaha ho tum dono…main aa rahi hu waha…usko jaane mat dena….
Sunidhi – Richa tumhe ab chalna hi hoga….usko maarta hai wo aadmi….usko arrest karo…
Wo Inspector Richa ko leke pahuch jaati hai ek café mein jaha pe Peon tha aur wo ladki bhi…Peon pareshan tha kyun ki wo kisi bhi waqt peet sakta tha….ab aisa hai koi ladki aapke pass baithi ho aur wo ro rahi ho….to koi bhi kabhi bhi aake koot jaayega,….
Inspector Richa waha pahuchi Sunidhi ke saath…
Sunidhi – sab batao inko ye meri friend hai…
“mujhe kuch nahi batana sab theek hai…”
“tum….tumko dimmag hai yaa nahi….wo tumhe maarta hai aur tum….”
Richa – ek minute Shunidhi….main baat karti hu….usne koi dhamki di hai kya…..agar aisa hai bhi to darne ki baat nahi…tum bas ek baar mujhe batao…wo jail mein hoga..
“nahi aisa kuch nahi hai main theek hu…”
“yahi…yahi sahi hai….Richa rahne do isko…maine socha madad kar dungi par ye uss kaabil hi nahi….marne do isko….ye issi jindgi ke kaabil hai…jo khud ke liye bhi lad naa sake wo kis liye jinda hai..mar jaana chahiye tumhe…”
Gusse mein naa jaane kya kya bol gayi Sunidhi aur waha se nikal gayi…saath mein peon ko bhi leke gayi…
Sunidhi – tu bhi maarta hai apni biwi ko….
Peon – nahi ma’am main kaha ye sab….main sareef hu…
Sunidhi – aadmi sareef nahi hote…par tujhe jaanti hu main tu aisa to nahi karta hoga kyunki tu mujhe jaanta hai..
Peon kuch nahi bola wo dono waha se chale gaye…
Kareeb 8 din baad office mein wo ladki wapas aayi…aur aate hi Sunidhi ke cabin ki oor chali gayi….
“May I come in “
Sunidhi ne binna dekhe hi aane ke liye kaha wo kisi kaam mein lagi hui thi…aur kaam pucha…
“thank you aapne mujhe samjhaya ki main kya ban gayi thi…aur mujhe badalne mein madad ki…”
Sunidhi – Tum…kya bola abhi maine madad ki…
“haa aapne…aapki kahi gayi batton ko sun ke maine complaint kiya…ab wo aadmi jail mein hai…..”
Sunidhi – hmm to…usse mujhe kya…ye batao yaha wapas kyun aayi ho…
“ wo main wapas se…join karna chahiti hu….aap agar help kar do to….”
Sunidhi ne usko upar se niche tak dekha….
Sunidhi – hmm theek hai main baat kar lungi…..abhi jao aur jo file main bhej rahi hu usko padho….
Wo ladki file leke chali gayi aur usko padhne lagi….Sunidhi waqt waqt pe uski oor dekh leti thi…aise hi usne dekha wo ladki peon se baat kar rahi thi…
Thodi der baad usne peon ko bulaya aur puccha kya baat hai…
Peon – Wo ma’am unke pass rahne ke liye room nahi hai abhi wo ek friend ke pass rukki hai mujhse puch rahi thi koi sasti jagah ho rahne ke liye to….waise bhi inn sab mein uske bahut paise kharch ho gaye hai…
Sunidhi – Usko mere flat pe ke bare mein batao…waise bhi main akeli rahti hu…par rent nahi lungi…
Peon ne ladki ko bataya sab…aur Ladki ne bhi Sunidhi se baat ki aur tay hua ki wo aaj hi shift karegi…
Roommates

Ek week se jyada waqt ho gaya tha uss Ladki ko Sunidhi ke flat mein aaye….par wo thodi dari hui rahti thi usse….Sayad pahli mulakat ki wajah se…yaa ye ki wo usko boss hai…wo khul nahi paa rahi thi…..
Sunidhi ne ye baat notice ki to usne usko comfortable karne ke liye…usko sharab pilane ka socha…
Sunidhi – Vidya tu daaru pitti hai kya…
Vidya – Daru… nahi main nahi peeti…
Sunidhi – hmm tab to aur acchi baat hai tum mujhe sambhal logi… Maine kuch mangwaya hai aaye to bata dena…
Itna bolke wo bathroom mein chali gayi…jab wo bath leke bahar aayi to table pe wine ki bottle rakhi hui thi aur Vidya khane ki chizzon ko plate mein rakh rahi thi…..

Sunidhi – kitchen se glass bhi le aao wo kaanch wale lane…
Vidya waha se wo bhi le aayi..tab tak Sunidhi ne bottle khol diya tha…
Sunidhi – 2 glass to leke aa jaati…. Pinna mat bas pakad ke to rakh sakti ho naa…
Vidya ne waisa hi kiya jyada kuch bola nahi….
Sunidhi ne dono glasses mein wine bhari aur ek uski oor badhaya….Vidya ne bas haath mein pakda glass ko….wahi Sunidhi pinne lagi…1…2….3…
Sunidhi – yaar tu mujhse darti haai kya…
Vidya kuch nahi boli usko laga nashe mein hai ye pata nahi kaise react karegi…upar se uske apne past ki bhi yaad aa rahi thi jab uska so called pati uske saamne sarab pitta aur fir usko marta tha….padhi likhi thi Vidya par uske chacha ne usse piccha chudane ke liye ek nasedi se shadi kara di…haa wo kama leta tha…par baad mein naukri bhi chali gayi…bahut minnatein karne ke baad usne Vidya ko naukri karne ke liye haa kaha…
Sunidhi – sunna nahi maine puccha tujhse kuch….
Par Vidya ko kaha sunayi de raha tha wo to apni yaadon mein khoyi hui thi purani yaadien dardnaak yaadein kaise uske Maa Baap ka accident ho gaya tha jab wo collage mein thi….aur uske Chacha ne uski shadi karadi…aur fir baaki sab kuch….ye sab yaad karke usko rona aa raha tha…
Sunidhi – Dawa haath mein hai isko datak jaa aur bhul jaa sab kuch…ab nayi suruwat karte hai naa sath mein…..
Sunidhi ki iss tarah baat karne se ek baar to Vidya thodi chauki….abhi tak ye bilkul talli hone ka natak kar rahi thi aur ab….
Sunidhi – Dekh kya rahi hai…arre ye wine hai isse koi problem nahi hoti limit mein pinne se….haa dard dukh ye sab naa thode samay ke liye chale jaate hai chal pile….
Vidya ne ek baar aur dekha uski oor fir apne haath mein glass ko dekha….aur gatak gayi….
Swad ajeeb thoda kadwa tha uske liye par utna bhi nahi jitni kadwi uski jindgi ho gayi thi….usne puri glass hi gatak lii….
Sunidhi – Arre wine hai ye….aaram se…..
Vidya – ek aur milegi…
Sunidhi – Haa haa par aaram se…
Sunidhi ne uska glass wapas se bhara…iss baar Vidya dhere dhere pi rahi thi…
Sunidhi – kaisa laga….
Vidya – acchi hai…pata hai maine ne bahut kuch saha hai…aapko to pata hi hoga kuch kuch….par sirf utna hi nahi hai…aur bhi bahut kuch saha hai maine…maine naa bahut saha hao..
Sunidhi – bas iska to game ho gaya…. Vidya aaj jo bhi hua hai naa sab bata…sab kuch bata de….main sunungi tujhe…
Vidya – Haa sab bataungi…aap naa aap wo ho jiski wajah se thodi himmat milli mujhe aur main usse bach paayi warna main to….
Fir Vidya ne rote hue apni puri kahani hi bata dali….Sunidhi bhi sab sunti rahi dhyaan se….aur sath hi apna aur uska glass bharti rahi…jarib raat ke 2 baje tak ye sab chala aur uss waqt tak Vidya ki halat bahut buri ho gayi thi…wo puri talli thi bas…ab to baat tak nahi ki jaa rahi thi usse….wahi Sunidhi uski life ko apni life se compare kar rahi thi….aur issi tarah dono ke dono wahi sofe pe hi so gaye the….subah Sunidhi ki neend pahle khuli…usne sabse pahle to nimbu paani banayi….khud ke liye aur Vidya ke liye chai…fir wo bathroom gayi taiyaar hui aur fir usne Vidya ko jagaya…

Vidya apni aakhen malti hui jaagi aur yaha waha dekhne lagi…uske sar mein dard ho raha tha to Sunidhi ne usko uski chai garam karke di….ye pahli baar tha jab Sunidhi ne uske liye kuch banaya ho…
Sunidhi – Isko khatam karo aur ready ho jao hum shopping pe jaa rahe hai….
Vidya – Shopping ???
Sunidhi – Haa shopping….aur uske baad movie….tumne pichli baar kab movie dekhi thi…
Vidya sochne lagi….usko yaad bhi nahi tha kab usne movie dekha tha….sayad apni kisi dost ke saath collage ke waqt jab uske parents the…
Sunidhi – Arre chodo ab sochna jaldi se ready ho jaao aur main kapde nikal deti hu….
Vidya – nahi main kar lungi aap wai….
Sunidhi – Ye aap aap kya laga rakha hai ab aap bola naa ghar se nikal dungi samjhi….aap aap…budhi lagti hu tujhe mein…
Vidya – nahi wo to bas….
Sunidhi- haa to ab aap nahi kahna ….we are friends samjhi….ab jaa jaldi late ho jaayenge…
Vidya ko Dhaka deke bathroom mein bheja usne aur fir uske kapde nikalne lagi wo….
“ye kaise kapde hai iske pass….bas 2 dress hai sahi si….par ye bhi shopping pe jaane layak nahi hai….apne de deti hu…aaj iski shopping karaungi to le lenge kapde dhang ke….36 B hmm shape bhi accha hai iska… inerwaers ki bhi halat sahi nahi iski…ye bhi lene honge…”
Usne apne kuch kapde nikale ji usko aa jaane chahiye the….innerwears bhi…aur wahi rakh ke wait karne lagi…
Thodi der baad wo Vidya bahar aayi towel mein…kapde leke nahi gayi thi wo bathroom mein…
SUnidhi – aa gayi tum….chalo ab jaldi se ye kapde pehno….maine soch liya hai kya kya kharidna hai…
Vidya ne kapde dekhe….
Vidya – par ye mere nahi hai….
Sunidhi – jaanti hu…par tumhare pass aise kapde bhi nahi hai jo pahen ke shopping pe jaa sake…ab ye pehno…
Vidya ne pahle manna kiya par Sunidhi ne uski ek nahi sunni….aur usko wo sab pehenne ke liye manna hi liya….
Wo dono shopping pe gayi aur Sunidhi ne jam ke shopping karayi uski…Vidya manna karti rahi apne paiso ke bare mein sochti rahi batati rahi par usse koi khass fark nahi pada Sunidhi ko…fir movie dekhne gaye….aur raat ko ghar aate waqt waine ki bottles bhi leli…

It’s Strange
Aaj karib 2 mahine ho gaye the dono ko saath rahte rahte….VIdya kaafi change ho gyi thi…aur saath hi kuch changes Sunidhi mein bhi aayi thi….Sunidhi aaj kal Vidya ko bas dekhti rahti…usko chute rahti…
Vidya ko ye sab pahle thoda ajeeb to laga par usko laga Sunidhi aise hi baatein karti hai…aur usne isko ignore kar diya…
Par Sunidhi…wo to kahi aur hi koyi hui thi….Sunidhi ne naa jaane kya kya soch rakha tha…par darne lagi thi wo…bahut samay ke baad koi milla tha usko…jisko khona nahi chahti thi…aur inhi wajahon se uski harkatein ajeeb hone lagi…bahut jyada ajeeb….
Ab wo aur Vidya dono hi din raat saath raha karti thi…Sunidhi..yun to usko batana chahti thi par…khair abhi usko jitna mil raha tha wo utne mein khush thi…lekin kab tak…ek raat Vidya ne wine peete hue Sunidhi se puch hi liya…uske bare mein uske past ke bare mein…
Sunidhi – yaar mera past… waise to main batati nahi kisi ko par tu…tu naa tujhe to batana hi hai….tunne unn baccho ke bare mein sunna hai jinke saath dhinaune kaam hote hai…mujhse bataya nahi jaa raha….main unhi mein se ek hu….ek harami ne mujhe….use kiya tha…tab se mujhe mardonn se nafrat hi ho gayi hai…ginne chunne log hai jinpe naa main yakkin karti hu…safe feel karti hu unke saath..
Vidya – kya…ye sab hua tha tumhare saath mujhe maaf kar dena mujhe nahi puchna chahiye tha
Sunidhi – yaar tu maafi naa maanga kar…tu acchi nahi lagti aise…
Vidya - Ab main kabhi tujhe wo sab yaad nahi karne dungi….hum bahno ki tarah rahenge…
Sunidhi – Kya…bahen….nahi…bahen nahi hum dost hai dost hi sahi hai koi bahen nahi chahiye…aur tum mujhe bahen mat kahna nahi to…
Vidya – arre bahen hi to kaha hai thodi gaali di hai….aur ab naa ghar se nikalne ki dhamki mat diya kar samjhi..boss hogi office mein tu yaha nahi..
Sunidhi – haa to bahen bola naa to yaha bhi boss hi ban jaungi….I don’t like this bhai bahen wala concept humme ye accha hai hi nahi….we are good…aise hi…
Vidya – haa haa thik hai…chal sote hai kal meeting bhi hai naa…
Dono chale gaye bed pe apne resses change karne ke baad…..Vidya to so gayi par Sunidhi ka to saara nasha hi utar gaya tha ye bahen wali baat sun ke..wo to so hi nahi paa rahi thi…
Sunidhi – Kya karu…kaise bataun isko ki I like her…I love her….main ye soch rahi hu aur ye mujhe aoni bahen banana pe tulli hai…kuch karna hoga…main naa kal hi isko sab bata dungi apni feeling sab kuch….waise bhi bahut wait kar liya ab aur nahi…

Wo ye sab sochte hue so gayi…subah hui sab pahle jaisa tha dono taiyaar hui office gayi aur sab sahi hua…par Sunidhi ke liye nahi…wo had se jyada nervous thi….samajh nahi paa rahi thi…kaise kare…waise to usne socha tha kahi bahar jaayegi waha batayegi….par log bhi hote hai bahar…aur jo isko batana tha wo aise logo ke saamne batana sahi nahi tha…. Sunidhi ne fir socha ghar mein hi karte hai jo karna hai…wo jab ghar pahuchi pahle fresh hui aur sab sahi kiya….aur fir wine pinna shuru….nashe mein hi sayad wo ye baat kah paati usko….thoda pinne ke baad…..jab usko laga ki ab sahi time hai batane ka…to usne shuru kiya…
Suniya – Vidhu tujhe pata hai mujhe naa tu bahut pasand hai….
Vidya – Mujhe bhi tu bahut pasand hai….
Sunidhi – Par mujhe tu waise bhi pasand hai….matlab jyada pasand hai…
Vidya – mujhe tu jyada pasand hai…
Sunidhi – Maine kaha naa mujhe jyada pasand hai tu….aur tu usse jyada mujhe pasand nahi kar sakti abhi to bilkul nahi….
Vidya – Kaise…aur kyun…
Sunidhi – wo naa aise….
Baat karte waqt hi Sunidhi Vidya ke pass jaati ja rahi thi…aur iss baat ko kahne ke baad usne uske lips pe kiss kar diya….isse hua ye ki Vidya jaise pause si ho gayi….ye out of syllabus wala question tha…usne aisa kabhi socha hi nahi tha…wo jhaat se usse dur ho gayi….nasha to saara utar gaya tha uska…saath hi Sunidhi ka bhi…
Vidya – tujhe naa chadh gayi hai….chal sote hai…
Sunidhi – Nahi…..main sach mein tujhe pasand karti hu…..
Vidya – Arre par ye kaise ho sakta hai…hum dono ladki hai….
Sunidhi – To….isse kya…
Vidya – Ye sahi nahi hai…
Sunidhi – Tunne ek aadmi se shadi ki naa…..dekha naa kya hua….wo to sahi tha….fir bhi kya hua….
Vidya – tu samajh nahi rahi….dekho abhi naaa so jaate hai kal baat karenge….
Sunidhi – Main kal bhi yahi kahungi tum batao….tum kya kahogi…
Vidya – Main kya kahu…mujhe waqt chahiye…
Sunidhi – matlab haa hai naa…..tu waqt le jitna lena hai le…
Vidya – Haa kab kaha maine…mujhe pahle sochna hai ki tumhe kya hua hai….aur kaise theek karu tumhe….
Sunidhi ne ye sunna aur Vidya ko dekha….fir wo apna takiya leke chal di apne room mein aur darwaja band kar diya…Vidya gayi uske picche…par usne darwaja khola hi nahi….
Kuch din fir baatein kam hui….bas utni hi jitney se kaam chal jaaye….Vidya ko ye sab bilkul accha nahi lag raha tha…wo samjhana chahti thi Sunidhi ko par wo sunne tab naa….1 week issi tarah nikal gaya…Vidya ne soch liya aaj yaa to iss paar yaa uss parr..pahle to usne apna saman pack kiya….aur fir Sunidhi ka bathroom se nikalne ka wait karne lagi….wo jaise hi bahar aayi usne ek nazar uski oor dekha…aur fir apni mundi ghumma li…
“main jaa rahi hu…”
Sunidhi ne koi jawab nahi diya…
“Sunidhi main jaa rahi hu…:
Iss baar bhi waise hi..to Vidya ne apna saaman utaya aur gate ki oor jaane lagi….
“bahar nikli naa to apna haath kaat lungi samjhi…chup chap saman ander rakho…”Sunidhi ki baat jab Vidya ne sunni aur uski oor dekha to Sunidhi apne kalayi pe ek chaku lagaye khadi thi…aur hath kuch kuch kat bhi gaya tha…VIdya ne ye dekha aur daud ke uske pass gayi aur pahle chaku china aur 2 thappad mare…..
“kya chahiye tujhe…main…main chahiye naa..thik hai…” itna bol ke wo usko kiss karne lagi jabardasti…
“yahi chahiye thaa naa….ab khush ab baith yaha pe main first aid leke aati hu…dekho kat gaya hai ye…” wo usko bithati hai aur jaake first-aid box laati hai aur patti karti hai….wahi Sunidhi usko hi dekhe jaa rahi thi….

“matlab tum maan gayi….”
“aur koi rasta choda hai tumne…..batao… main kaise tumhe kuch hone du….mera kya hai main to pahle bhi aise thi…ab aage bhi rah lungi…haa bas pahle wo aadmi tha ab tum hogi….”
“tum mujhe usse compare kar rahi ho….main tumse pyaar karti hu…”
“To mujhe waqt do….aise dhamki dene se pyaar nahi milta….”
Dono mein baatein ho rahi thi ki Sunidhi ka phone bajta hai…pahle to wo kaat deti hai par wapas se bajta hai wo fir katti hai par wapas se….iss baar wo utha leti hai..call office se tha….uska transfer kiya gaya tha naa sirf uska balki Vidya ka bhi…dono ko ek project ke silsille mein gaon jaana tha….Tarapur
Ek chota sa gaon jaha pe jyada kuch nahi hai bas 2-3 badi badi haweliyan hai jinko ab tod ke waha hotel banne wale the….sunne mein aaya tha yaha pe Government koi bada kaam karne wali thi…jisse ye tourist spot mein badal jaata….bas issi ko dekh ke companies ne jammen kharidna shuru kar diya tha….
8 din baad dono uss jagah par pahuchi….apni puri team ke saath…..inko 3 haweliyan dekhni thi….waha kya kya hai…wo sab…aur kya kya chahiye hotel ke liye….ye sab…sabhi team ne dekhi teeno haweliyan par….aate waqt unko ek aur Haweli dikhi….thodi purani par unn tinno se jyada acchi….guide se puccha to pata chala wo Raj mahel hai aur haunted hai waha koi nahi jaata….
Sunidhi aur uske team ko ye sab mazak laga to unhone wo dekhne ka socha….aur guide ko paise diye aur nikal pade uss oor….waise kuch log manna kar rahe the par nahi manna koi…..aur wo sab chale gaye ander….sabse pahle Vidya ke pair ander gaye the…aur ussi waqt kuch hua….par kisi ne notice nahi kiya…sabne pura mahel gumma darte hue….excited hoke par kuch nahi milla….
Sunidhi – Mujhe lagta hai ye bhi kharid leni chahiye…..
VIdya – Haa haa kharid lo….kharid hi lo….acchi banayi hai…
Sunidhi – Haa main iske bare mein mail karti hu…chalo chalte hai sab..wapas waise bhi ab late hone laga hai….guide sahab rahne ka intezam kya hai….
Guide- Madam lounge hai….par waha kamre kam pad jaayenge….aap kahe to kisi Haweli mein rahne ka bandobast kara deta hu…waha sab kuch hoga…aur bijli bhi kal tak lagwa denge….
Vidya – ye to aur accha hai….main to yahi rahunga…
Sunidhi – tumko kya hua hai…waise baat to sahi hai…yaha rahne mein mazza aayega….Guide yaha rah sakte hai kya….
Guide – iss wale mein nahi yaha saaf safayi nahi hai…aur yaha log aate bhi nahi…
Sunidhi – Vidya chal kahi aur dekh lenge…dusri haweli mein chalte hai naa….
Vidya – haweli mein…kya yaar waha light bhi nahi hogi….lounge hi sahi hoga hum kar lenge naa adjust..
Vidya ne jab aisa bola to sab usko hi dekhne lage….sabko laga ye thak gayi hai….Guide ne bhi jaldi se unko waha se nikala aur lounge mein hi chod diya….team mein 3 ladkiyan aur 2 ladke the...aur room bas 2 the waha aur har room mein 2 bed…raat hui sab khana khaake pahuch gaye sonne….

Jab se dono ko yaha aane ka pata chala tha tab se hi kuch nahi hua tha inn dono ke bich waise bhi kaha hua tha kuch pahle….khair….raat hui aur ladkiyon ke room mein tinno ne dono bed ko jod diya…taaki tinno hi uspe aa jaaye….
Bhoooooooooooooooott……..
Karib 2 baj rahe honge raat ke sab so rahe the…ki achanak se kutton ki roone ki aawajein aane lagi….Vidya jo bich mein so rahi thi….wo cheekhne laggi….
“Vidya kya hua….Vidya tu theek hai naa…” Pareshan Sunidhi usse puch rahi thi….par wo to waha thi hi nahi waha to koi aur hi tha….koi aisa jisko Sunidhi nahi jaanti thi….
Usne Sunidhi ki oor dekha….aur chahra dekh ke Sunidhi ki bhi cheekh nikal gayi…Vidya ke chahre pe ek khanjar ka ghaw tha…aur saath hi uske aankhon se khoon nikal raha tha aur uske daan sadee hue the….
“Vidya nahi….Sameer Singh…..Raja Sameer Singh….ab se ye sarir aur iss sarir ki aatma meri hai….hihihhhiiii…”
Usne utna kaha aur fir bed pe se pata nahi kaise chat pe latak gaya…aur waha se chipkali ki tarah nikal gaya…khidki se hote hue….
Sunidhi ko aur dusri ladki ko samajh nahi aa raha tha kuch wo dari hui the….aawajein sunke aur bhi log aa gaye the par darwaja ander se band tha….aur laakh koshish karne pe bhi toot nahi raha tha…par jaise hi Vidya ki body waha se gayi darwaja bhi toot gaya…..aur ussi ke saath Sunidhi aur dusri ladki dono ke hi chikhen nikalne lage…aur dono behosh ho gaye….Doctor ko ussi waqt bulaya gaya aur unka checkup hua….Vidya ke bare mein kisi ko koi khabar hi nahi thi…
Subah hosh aaya dono ko….Hosh mein aate hi Sunidhi ne Vidya ko dhundhna shuru kar diya wahi dusri ladki…wo sabko bata rahi thi ki kya hua unke saath….bahar se aaye logo ko yakkin nahi ho raha tha par waha ke locals unko yakin ho gaya…..wo jaante the ab Vidya wapas nahi aane wali…..akeli to bilkul nahi….
Sunidhi ka burra haal ho chukka tha wo bas kisi bhi tarah dhundhna chahti thi usko….usne gaon walo ki baatein sunni jisse pata chala ki wo Mahel mein hi hogi…Raja ke kamre mein….
Sunidhi ne ye sunna aur nikal gayi waha usko wapas lane….par wo nahi jaanti thi ki wo kaha jaa rahi thi aur kiske pass jaa rahi thi…
Wo uss mahel ke pass pahuchi akeli….darwaje pe talla laga hua tha usne…tala pather se todd diya…aur darwaja khola…..wahi paas mein ek band pada hua tha jo usne Vidya ko diya tha…usne wo band uthaya….
“Vidya….Vidya kaha ho tum…..”
“hmmmm……koi aaaya hai….sach mein aaya hai….ladki ne sahi kaha tha….wo aayegi….hihihihiiii…..ek ko padka dusri khud chali aayi….ye sabse acccha hai….”
“kon ho tum…meri Vidya ko chod do warna accha nahi hoga….” Sunidhi ne aisa kaha aur ussi waqt Mahel ka darwaja khud band ho gaya…aur 1st floor se Vidya ki body niche farsh pe aa giri…. Sunidhi ne jaise hi ye dekha wo daudh ke uske pass gayi aur usko dekhne lagi….uska sar apni goad mein rakh ke usko uthane ki koshish karne lagi….
“Mazza aayega khelne mein…” Vidya ke muh se ye aawaj nikli…
“Vidhu..utth naa tu theek hai naa tu chal yaha se….hum door chale jaayege aur sab pahle jaisa ho jaayega….”
“khel to khel le….tu apni dost ke haaton se hi maregi hihiiihihihi….”
Ye aawaj wapas se Vidya ke muh se aayi aur wo khadi ho gayi….hawa mein jhool rahi thi wo….aur ussi tarah se uska chahra jispe ek ajeeb si muskan thi wo Sunidhi ki oor gayi aur usne apni aakhen bhi kholi…jo bilkul kaali thi….
“tum bhago main pakdunga….”
“Vidyaaaaaaaaa….meri Vidya ko chod do chaho to mujhe rakh lo apne pass isko jaane do…”
“Jab ek saath 2 mil rahe hai to kyun chode…”
Itna bolke wo uski taraf badha hawa mein hi….par wow aha se nahi hilli….usko Vidya chahiye thi bas Vidya aur wo uske liye marne ko bhi taiyaar thi….
Vidya ka haath seedha uske…gale pe gaya….aur usko deewar pe pass leke chala gaya…..
“tu to bhagi hi nahi….isme mazza nahi aaya…..tujhe aise hi maarna hoga….”
Itna bol usne Vidya ke haath se Sunidhi ka gala ghootna shuru kiya…par Sunidhi bas aise hi khadi thi….wo bas dekhe jaa rahi thi Vidya ke aankhon mein…..aur tabhi kuch hua…Vidya ki aankhon se aashu girne lage…..aur jo haath Sunidhi ka gala daba rahe the wo thoda halka padne laga…..aur dekhte hi dekhte Vidya ka chahra wapas pahle jaisa ho gaya aur wo niche jammin pe behosh hoke gir gayi….Sunidhi ne uska sar wapas se apni goad mein liya aur usko jagane lagi….
Vidya ko hosh aaya….
Vidya – Tum jao yaha se…ye tumhe maar dega…
Sunidhi – Nahi tumhe chod ke nahi jaogi….main nahi jaungi….
Vidya – tumhe jaana hoga main jyada der nahi rik paungi isko tum jao…jao…
Sayad abhi bhi wo aatma uske ander hi thi….aur sayad wo uski powers use kar paa rahi thi jiss tarah wo aatma ab tak Vidya ki body use kar raha tha…wo khadi hui….sunidhi ko bhi khada kiya aur usko gate ki oor dacha diya…aur gate khulla aur Sunidhi bahar chali gayi…aur gate wapas se lag gaya…..aur gate lagte hi Vidya ki cheekhein sunayi dene lagi….
Iss waqt tak aadha gaon uss mahel kea age khada hua tha…Sunidhi ko dekhe jaa rahe the sab…..unko yakkin nahi ho raha tha ye bacchi kaise…..tabhi waha pe ek aurat aayi….
Aurat – tumne dekhaa usko….aur usne tumhe chod diya kaise….
Sunidhi kuch bolne ke hosh mein nahi thi…wo to bas roye jaa rahi thi….par uss aurat ko usse baat karni thi….usne uska haath padka aur usko baaki sab se durr leke gayi…..waise to sabhi ussi ko dekh rahe the par ab aapas mein baatein kar rahe the….
Aurat – kya dekha tumne ander….aur bahar kaise aayi….
Sunidhi – usko bacha lo…wo usko maar dega….
Aurat – maar dega…wo abhi bhi jinda hai….
Sunidhi – baccha lo meri Viddhu ko wo please bacha lo….
Aurat – Ladki…hosh mein aa ladki…agar tu sab bataye to main madad kar sakti hu teri…
Sunidhi ne rote hue sab bataya usko kaise Vidya ne usko bahar nikala….jab ye baat uss aurat ne sunnni to wo shocked rah gayi…..
Wo jaldi se khadi hui aur usne Sunidhi ki bhi khada kiya aur usko apne saath leke chali gayi…apne ghar…waha pe usne usko sab kuch fir se batane ko kaha….apne pita ko….uss aurat ke pitta ne sab sunna aur wo bimar aadmi utt ke baith gaya ye sab sunn ke….
Aadmi – Beta tum wapas se waha jaa paaogi…main wada karta hu tumhari dost wapas aa jaayegi….
Sunidhi ne jaise hi ye sunna usne haa kar diya….
Aadmi – muskil hoga ab wo kisi ko ander nahi aane dega…uska raaz khulne wala hai….
Sunidhi – main jaungi ander aap bas Meri Vidhu ko wapas le aao….
Aadmi ne apni beti ki oor dekha….wo apna saman taiyaar kar chukka thi….
Aadmi – To chalo fir….aaj main wo kaam purra kar hi lunga….
Wo tinno hi Mahel ke pass pahuche….sham ka waqt ho gaya tha ab saare log jaa chukke the..wahi Sunidhi ke team wale unka to pata hi nahi tha ki wo hai kaha….
Tinno mahel ke darwaje pe aake khade ho gaye….aadmi ne apni bti ki ooor dekha….usne apni jholi mein se ek bottle nikala aur aadmi ko de diya…aadmi ne usko haath mein leke kuch mantra padhe aur uspe phoonk maari….aur fir wo bottle mein bhara paani usne mahel ke darwaje pe daal diya…..isse hua ye ki darwaja khud se khul gaya…..
Aadmi – Ab aage ka tumhe khud dekhna hoga beta…yaad rahe usko kisi bhi tarah se mahel se bahar leke aao…..baaki hum dekh lenge…..itna bolke Sunidhi ko ek dhaga baandh diya uss aurat ne…
Aurat – rakhsa karega tumhari…
Sunidhi ander chali jaati hai….aur Vidya ko aawaj lagane lag jaati hai….
“wapas aa gayi…..iss baar nahi bachegi….”
Aur fir se wo aatma Vidya ki body ke saath niche aa jata hai…iss baar Vidya ki body ki halat aur kharab thi…
Wo niche aaya aur usne darwaja band karne ki koshish ki par kar nahi paya…..
“akeli nahi aayi hai iss baar…..kya lagta hai baccha legi isko….baccha legi…”
Wo haw mein tairta hua aata hai uske pass….aur fir se deeewar pe le jaake patak deta hai…..aur uska gala dabane lagta hai…iss baar Vidya kis hakti khatam hone pe thi…pichli baar to kisi tarah bacha liya tha par iss baar nahi…Wahi Sunidhi ne sayad kuch soch liya tha….usne apne haath mein abndhe hue dhage ko…..Vidya ki anguli mein fansa diya…..jisse wo aatma kamzor ho gayi….aur sath hi pagal bhi….theek ussi waqt Sunidhi ne Vidya ki body ko padka aur usko khinchte hue bahar leke aa gayi…bahar wo aadmi aur uski beti taiyaar the pahle se hi…unn dono ne socha nahi tha Sunidhi aisa kuch karegi….isse unka kaam bahut aasan ho gaya tha…aur unn dono ne milke uss bhoot ko ussi dhaage mein baandh diya….aur uss dhage ko uss aadmi ne ek paani se bhare hue bottle mein rakh diya…
Vidya wahi behosh ho gayi thi…..Sunidhi usko hosh mein leke aati hai….
Dono uss jagah se bahut door chale jaate hai…desh hi chod dete hai dono…par jaate jaate unn dono ka number le liya tha uss aurat ne…..taaki kabhi jarurat pade to baat hi sake…..ye dono ab London mein rahti thi….ek saath….
Inn dono ne bahut kuch aage bhi saha jaise logo ke taane…wagera wagera….par bhoot wale kisse ke samane ye kuch nahi tha…
40 saal saath rahne ke baad…. Ek din Vidya ka phone baja….phone ussi aurat ka tha jinhone inki madad ki thi….Vidya ne unse baat kari…..fir usne phone niche rakh diya….usne ek kagaz uthaya aur fir ek letter likha Sunidhi ke naam pe…..Sunidhi abhi inki beti ke saath bahar gayi hui thi….inn dono ne yaha shadi kar li thi aur ek bacchi ko adopt bhi kar liya tha…ye dono bahut khush the….

Sunidhi main jaa rahi hu…mera waqt aa gaya hai…..maine bataya nahi tha tumhe ki uss aatma ke saath saath main bhi badhi hui thi….mujhe ye baat baad mein pata chali….ab agar main yaha rahi to tumhare liye….aur saath hi hamari Bacchi ke liye khatra ban sakti hu…humne bahut accha waqt bitaya hai…milna ho to main wahi rahungi jaha ye sab shuru hua tha…par iss baar tumhe pareshan nahi karungi….kabhi kabhi aa jaana milne….aur hamari bacchi ko bhi laana….aur uska dhyaan rakhna…..
Tumhari Vidya…

best kahani hai ..
do ladkiyo ki ..vidya jiska pati usko torcher karta tha ,aur sunidhi ke hausla dene par vidya ne apne pati ko jail bhej diya ..

par sunidhi ke saath exact kya hua tha pata nahi chala ..
kisi aadmi ne usko use kiya par kaise ? ..

us thakur ke bhoot se bachane ke liye jo kiya sunidhi ne wo ek sachche prem ki nishani hai ..
wo thakur ka bhoot vidya se jud gaya tha aur 40 saal tak dono bahar rahe aur ek beti ko adopt bhi kiya ..

aur last me us aurat ka phone aaya aur vidya dobara wahi chali gayi ..par sunidhi aur apni bachchi ka bhala socha ,,ki waha aane par wo sunidhi ko nuksaan nahi pahuchayegi ..
par wo bhut kyu pareshan kar raha tha ye bataya nahi ..
aur us baba ke ilaaj ke baad bhi vidya kaise judi rahi us aatma se ..

2 mardo se nafarat karnewali aurto ka prem mast dikhaya hai is kahani me ..

shayad last me bhi dono saath rehti ..
par end kuch bhi ho emotions aise behatareen tarike se dikhaye hai ki dil ko chhu gayi kahani ...

emotions har kahani me hote hai par writer kaise usko dikhata hai ye maayne rakhta hai ..

 

[Naina]

The Inner Love
Writer - mohit98075 ​

Kahani- - ek alhad si ladki apni jawani mein kadam rakhte hi pritam naam ke ladke se pyar kar baithi.. dono ke bich nazdikiya aur gahri huyi lekin pritam flirty type ka ladka tha, jise ek hi ladki se jude rahne se ya wafa karne se aitraz tha.. kamvasna ke chalte kayi ladkiyon ke sath sambandh bhi banane ki koshish ki... is bich kisi ladki sang aapattijanak avastha mein usko dekh liya tha naina ne bhi... tab to usne kuch na boli.. lekin shayad us baat leke jo gussa tha usko mann hi mann dabake baithi thi... lekin ek aisa bhi waqt aaya jab pritam aur naina jab chumban mein lipt the to naina ko wo baat yaad aa gayi jab us ladki ke sath pritam ko apattijanak avastha mein dekh li thi.. ab gussa to futna hi tha isliye pritam dhakka de diya.. pritam gambhir roop se jakhmi bhi hua.. . uske baad unke rishte mein jaise ek karwahat si aa gayi ho... haalaki naina ne apni taraf se pur jor koshish ki is riste ko bachane ke liye... khud aage aake maafi bhi maangi... par pritam tas se mas na hua aur ek dukhad ant ke sath dono alag ho gaye..
kahani ne karwat badli ab naina wo wali naina nahi rahi shayad... shayad wo bhi jawani ki aag mein jalne lagi.. iske chalte ushne ek raah chun li.. gigolo ke jariye jism mein uth rahi aag sant karne ke liye..
par afsos jisko paise deke bhare mein jishm ki aag bujhane bulaya wo pritam nikla.... jism ki aag to bujh gayi par uske baad ushe lagne laga ki pritam hi wajah uski is haalat ke liye.. ushi ne usko ganda kiya ... wohi dusri taraf ushe yeh bhi lage ki nahi actually jo chaah thi uski ugra sambhog ko leke wohi ichha puri ki hai pritam ne.. mann aur jameer ki jung mein mann ki jeet huyi aur naina ne berahami se bade hi khaufnaak tarike se pritam ko maar diya... aur ant mein shareer aur aatma ko usake sath aatm-samarpan ke liye, svayam ke liye, hamesha ke liye aatmasamarpan kar liya...

ab aate hai sameeksha par - - galti kiski thi.. ye tay kar pana thodi muskil hai par.. meri nazar mein galti dono ki hi thi... Agar pritam pyaar wafadar rahta to uske sath ant mein jo hua us baat ki nauvat hi nahi aati... wohi dusri taraf naina... thik hai school time par pritam ne galti ki, mana ki bina pehchaan bataye uske sath ugro sambhog mein lipt hua... lekin iske badle bina uchit soch vichar ke hi jaan se hi maar dena ye to sarasar nainsafi huyi... kyunki is point pe agar readers ke point of view se dekhe to naina ne khood bhara deke ek gigolo ko bulati hai aur khwahish bhi jatati hai ki ushe ugra sambhog chahiye..yahin pe usne galti kar di.. jiske sath us karya mein lipt hone jaa rahi thi, kam se kam ye to jaan leti ki wo koun hai.. uski pehchaan kya hai . pritam shayad bas uske mann ki ichha puri Karne ke liye ushi tarah se sambhog mein lipt hua... jiske liye ushe paise mile.... yahan pe do baatein chupi reh gayi... ek kya pritam badla lene ke chakkar mein ye sab kiya ya sachme sirf paise ke liye ye kaam karta tha..... ant mein yahi kahu ki jo bhi hua bahot dukhad raha... haan daant fatkad ya jalil karke ghar se nikal deti ya phir dusre tarike badla bhi le sakti thi.. lekin agar aise galti mein khud bhi lipt ho to..ekdum se jaan se hi maar dena.. is baat thodi atpati si hai.. ... ..
Jaise koi thos wajah ya aatmsuraksha ki baat na aaye to.... waise dusre options bhi the pritam ke hath per baandh ke puch leti ki akhir bina pehchaan mein aaye ye kyun kiya... kis wajah se usne naina sang ye sab kya... maana ki us samay uski manshik stithi thik na thi par itna to malum hona chahiye ki pritam koi ajnabee nahi tha ... ab kya kare mask nikalane ke baad apni hosh-o-hawas kho baithi aur parinam bhayanakar... dono ke liye hi...

aapki pasandida kirdaar koun aur kyun?

of course naina... isme do ray nahi... bas agar apni kamvasna se zyada sathik sujh bujh ke sath vichar karke se kabam badhati to uske sath aisi ghatana kabhi na ghat ti...

kya kirdaar aapko vastavik lage..?

Haan kuch mamlo mein... bas yeh ant ki kuch baatein atpati si lagi...

kahani ko leke koi anuman ya koi sandesh hai kahani mein pathakon ke liye..?
Koi bhi faisla karne pehle ek baari soch vichar kar lijiye.... aur koi chij ya insaan dekh parakh ke hi vishvas kijiye... kyunki janab ye kalyug hai...
Kuch vishesh prakar ke drisya - udaharan ke liye dukhad drisya, tanav purn drisya...?
sabse dukhad aur tanav purn drishya jo ant mein naina ne shareer aur aatma ko usake sath aatm-samarpan ke liye, svayam ke liye, hamesha ke liye aatmasamarpan kar liya...
... actually pehle hi pehchaan ho jaati to is baat ki nauvat nahi aati... par afsos honi ko koun taal sakta hai...

Kahani ka koi pasandida bhag.. romance, suspense, thrill ect aur kyun?

bura na maaniyo jhuth na balu par naina ne jab apne purv premik ko jaan se hi maar diya... actually mohit98075 ji.. is drishya ko aur vistar roop ek explanation ke sath dikhate to maza hi kuch aur hota
Actually mujhe brutality se bharpur thriller, suspense aur murder mystery wali stories zyada pasand hai... waise jis tarike se suruwat mein romance se leke phir kahani ki madhya mein bichhadne ki tragedy phir ant jo thodi bahot revenge wali murder situation , thrill aur suspense paida kiya kahani mein writer sahab ne wo kabile tarif hai.. bas ant mein jo bhi hua wo thoda aur vistar likhte to.. Khair koi na...

Kya aapko ye kahani hanshaya ya rulaya..?

sidhi si baat hai kahani aur kahani mein chupi sandesh sampurn roop se manoranjan ke sath sath ek acchi sikh bhi de gayi hai....

kya kahani ne ant tak jure rahne ke liye majboor kiya?

Ji bilkul.... naye readers se yahi request hai ki is kahani ko jarur padhe... kahani aapko suruwat se leke ant tak boring hone nahi degi...

Kuch mann ki baatein kahani ko leke - waise pyar wafa bewafa badle ko lekar bahot si story read ki hai par ye story thodi hat ke hai.... khas kar galti wali drisya ko leke... galti dono ki thi lekin kahani ki dusri pehlu pe jo anjane mein bina pehchaan kiye hi galti ho gayi... us situation ko pesh karne ka andaz kuch hatke tha writer sahab ka..

ant mein writer sahab ke liye kuch shabd.... mohit98075 saheb ki kahani matlab meri nazar mein writing jagat mein master stroke... jo facts kahani mein hone chahiye jo agle pichle pehlu se connected ho, un sabhi ko mohit saheb ullekh karte hai... . na kam, na zyada, bilkul perfect tarike se...
usse bhi badi baat, readers ka manoranjan ho is baat ko leke kash khayal rakhte hai.... aur unki har ek kahani aisi ki jaise subhah ki khilti dhoop ho... barish ki pehli bunde ho...
ek reader ko isse zyada kya chahiye..
aur mohit ji Aapne kahani ke jariye hi kahani ke naam ko sarthak kar diya hai...
jis udasya se kahani ko humare samaks pesh kiye as a reader main yahi bolu ki aap us udasya ko leke kamyab rahe..

Brilliant story line with awesome writing skills mohit98075 sahab

 

[Moon Light]

BALATKARI SE MOHABBAT- EK CHHOTI SI PREM KAHANI

WRITTEN BY- MAHI MAURYAKALIN

Hmm.. Sochaa tha nam ke hisab se kahani hogi... pr kafi different thi... ya yu kahe Naam Match nahi kr rhaa kahani se.... Raja Ek achha ladkaa thaa wo to halato ne use blatkarvkarne par majbur kar diyaa jiskaa reason bhi Hayaa hi thi....

Kafi twist hai kahani me... km shbdo me shayad ye kahani utna empactfull naa bn payi.... Something missing as i think.... Hope ise deatail ke sath ap likhoge...

Kher kahte hai naa ant bhlaa to sb bhalaa... Haayaa ko uski galti ka ehsas ho jata hai aur fir dono khushi khushi jeewan yapan karne lgte hai...

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[Naina]

Dosti- The Bonding
Writer - Baban ​

Kahani - Yeh kahani ek bezuvan janwar aur uske sath ghati kuch khatti mithi yaadein apni maa bahan sang, kuch dardnaak ghatanaye jo ghati bachpan se leke aaj tak aur kuch anubhav do per walo ko lekar.. inhi baaton ke lekar yeh kahani adharit hai...
wo jahan bhi jaaye do per wale insaano dwara dhutkar hi mila hai ushe... Kya bade bade gyan ki baatein bolne wale ho ya phir amir gharane ki wo aurat hi ho.... sabhi ne usko is nazar se hi dekha jaise uska is duniya mein rehna bhi unke liye gawara nahi... unsab ke liye wo bas mahaz ek galiyo mein, rasto pe bhatakne wala ek janwar... aise hi karvi anubhavo se grast Kalu ko ek dost mili... ek sachi dost.. jiski ankhon mein masoomiyat aur mann se nischal, chal kapat se pade.... pehle Kalu bhi hairan tha ki aise swarth, chal kapat se bhare duniya mein ye masoom kahan se aa gayi.. ushe to shaq tha ki wo ladki insaan bhi hai ki nahi.. par jab uske indriyo ne bataya haan ye bhi do pero wali insaan hi hai par baakiyo ki tarah nahi.. tab Kalu bahot khush hua... itna khush ki din bhar bhukhe pet rehne ke baad bhi uski saari bhukh mit gayi kyunki usko aaj pehli baar kisi insaan mein insaaniyat dekhne ko mila ..
aur pe ek sukad ant hua is kahani ki ek niswarth dosti ke sath...

ab aate hai sameeksha par - - wah reh insaani fitarat tera bhi kya kehna.. bolna asan par jab khud pe aaye baat ya dhutkar do ya phir us paristhiti se hi pade hoke bhaag jao...
to kabhi insaan to insaan, log to janwar pe bhi lagu karne lag jaaye uchh nich ved bhaav..
To kabhi apne maze ke liye apne se kamjoro ke upor chaahe wo insaan ho ya chaahe bezubaan janwar hi kyun na ho unpar atyachar karo unka mazak banao.. aur apne aapko jivo mein sarvshreshth hone ka pradashan karo ...
asal is kahani ne tin mul baaton pe zyada dhyan kendrit ki hai... ek chaahe duniya saath de ya na de par ek maa kabhi apne baccho ka sath nahi chhodti aakhiri saans tak...
dusri bahot se log aise hote hai jo gyaan ki baatein batate phirte hai hai .. yeh karna chahiye, wo karna chahiye, wo nahi karna chahiye par aise log ke liye kahna aasan hai.. lekin jab wohi karne baari inpar aaye to uspe amal nahi karte balki ulat hi dekhne ko milti hai.... jaise wo bujurg admi ne kiya...
teesri bahot se log aise manshikta ke bhi hote hai jo na keval insaano mein balki bezuvaan janwaro ko leke bhi uch nich ki ved bhaav karte hai...
aur chauthi sabse aham aaj bhi sachhe mann se niswarth roop se madad karne wale bhi hote hai.. jinke dil mein daya hai, ek mamta hai... ye log yeh nahi sochte ki duniya kya bolenge.. ye log bas apne Karam karte jaate hai bina phal ke chinta kiye bina kisi lalach niswarth roop se... jaise wo ladki.... uske liye yehi sabse badi baat hai ki ek bezuvan janwar bhukha hai.. ushe kuch khilana chahiye... usne ye nahi socha ki gharwale ya aas pados wale kya kahenge... uski nazariye se sarv pratham pehli jaruri baat yeh thi ki bas us bezuvan ki bhukh kaise mitayi jaaye.. uski cycle ki wajah se jo chhot lagi Kalu ko, uska dard kaise khatam ki jaaye...

aapki pasandida kirdaar koun thi aur kyun?

wo ladki... uski masoomiyat, saralata..
aur sabse badi baat niswarth roop se ek bhookhe ko khana khilana, chahe wo insaan ho ya ek bezuvan jaanwar... uske dard ko batna.. yeh baatein dil ko chu gayi... abhi wo bachhi hai, badi hone ke baad bhi hope usme ye gun aage bhi barkarar rahe..

kya kirdaar aapko vastavik lage..?

Haan... kyunki kahani mein jo ghatnaye ghati yeh aam jindagi mein bhi har kahin dekhne ko mil jaati hai.. bas nazar bhar ki jarurat hai aapko aise drisya dekhne ko mil hi jayenge... writer sahab ne inhi ghatanao ko ek kahani roop mein sonjoya hai jisme wo purn roop se kamyab rahe..

kahani ko leke koi anuman?

ek sandesh hai is kahani mein... sabhi ko samman ki nazar se dekho... aur agar aap mein itni kabiliyat hai ki aap kisi jarurat mand ki madad kar sakte hai to jarur madad karna chahiye .. aur agar aap sochte hai ki badle mein kya milega to us kahawat ko hamesha yaad kariyega ki kar bhala to ho bhala.. aaj nahi to kal uska achha phal aapko bhi milega..

Kahani ka koi pasandida bhag aur kyun?

sabse pasandida bhag jab Kalu aur us masoom si ladki ki mulakat... kyunki jis chij ko puri story mein talash ki wo mili kahani ke ant mein.... ek bezuvan ke prati insaaniyat ladki ki..

Kuch vishesh prakar ke drisya - udaharan ke liye dukhad drisya, tanav purn drisya...?

sabse tanav purn aur dukhad drisya.. jab Kalu ki maa ki mrityu huyi thi ek durghatana ke chalte jab wo aur uski bahan akele par gaye the is duniya ki bhir mein... aur usse bhi dukhad aur tanav purn jab un school ke bachho ne jo atyachar kiya tha ek asahay aur bezuvan janwar ke sath..

Kya aapko ye kahani hanshaya ya rulaya..?

kahani ke kayi pehlu hote hai aur kayi mod aur drisya bhi... Khair.. do aise pehlu aur mod the sabse zyada hanshi aur dusre mod ko padh ke rone ko dil kare..
hanshne ko jee kare jab ek gyan baatne wala bujurg jab sadharan si biscuits baatne ki baat aayi to uski wohi saari gyan ki baatein kahi hawa mein chu mantar ho gayi . ushe bas apne hisse ki biscuits hi nazar aayi..
rula de wo drisya jab un school ke bachho ne Kalu ka taang tod diya patthar maarke.. Kalu ki galti kya thi wo bas prativad hi kar raha tha ki ushe pareshan na karo.. prativad karne par bhi saza mile ye to anyaay hai na...

kya kahani ne ant tak Jude rahne ke liye majboor kiya?

shat pratishat... aur naye readers ko bhi yahi kahu ki is mein koi do ray nahi hai... ek baar agar aap is kahani ko padhna suru karenge to kahani ke ant tak jude rakhne ko majboor kar degi... padhne ke baad aap bhi kahenge ki wah kahani ho to aisi....

story ko leke Kuch mann ki baatein - - bahot si kahaniya read ki hai par lekin ek bezuban ke nazariye se ek sikh de jaaye, is prakar ki ye pehli kahani hai....
aur jis udasya se ye kahani likhe the usme writer sahab sarthak rahe.... sath mein unki mehnat bhi..

ant mein kuch shabd writer sahab ke liye - - koun kehta hai sirf Nayak nayika hone se hi kahani banti hai... are ek bezuban ke nazariye ko lekar bhi aisi uttam kahani bhi sanjoyi jaa sakti hai... jis tarike se writer sahab ne ek bezuvan janwar ke nazariye se kuch drisyo ko aur kuch ghatanao ko jo vastav mein ek sachhai hai, unhe kahani roop mein ham readers ke samne pesh ki hai, wo apne apme bemisaal hai ..

har shabd, har pahlu, har panktiya, har mod jo dil ko chu jaaye... Kash kar us ladki ki masoomiyat aur udarta aur Kalu ki jivan sanghash kahani ko kaafi arthpurn aur mahattvapoorn bana diya...
aise hi likhte rahiye aur readers ka manoranjan karte rahiye...

Brilliant story line with awesome writing skills Baban sahab...