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Ye ek koshis thi! Bohat samay baad Kuch likhne ki koshis ki hai, Jaise main ne kaha tha, Ek simple plot ko ache se dikhane ki koshis ki hai, Umeed hai usme kamyab ho gaya ho ga 
★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2024 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★
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Ye ek koshis thi! Bohat samay baad Kuch likhne ki koshis ki hai, Jaise main ne kaha tha, Ek simple plot ko ache se dikhane ki koshis ki hai, Umeed hai usme kamyab ho gaya ho ga 
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Review for the story: Lakshy
Writer: rusty blade
Buddy, I really wanna know what this story's central theme was. I mean you started with very sensitive and important topics such as Martial rape, LGBT society, and self-acceptance, but then as it progressed storyline gets completely changed. You showed a few incestuous feelings between Brother Sister and father-daughter in two scenes. I was literally praying that the story shouldn't move towards that. But, alas! Even though you have not shown any incest sex your story's theme looks completely based on it.
I don't know how you started to write this, but to me, It looked like you started a serious topic to write then you decided to drop it and move towards a sexual and incest theme. I mean the first part of the story was damn engaging where you showed two lives of girls, one facing marital rape and the other facing problems with her life as a Lesbian. My first thought was that you would show their issues and maybe you would reconnect them as Misha loses interest in men and then meets Riya who has her issues.
But, what you wrote was unexpectedly divergent and I am not saying this in a positive manner. You blew up a damn amazing theme, specifically on an adult forum where humor and satire are typically embraced on these topics. I am genuinely taken aback by this, my friend.
Let's shift our focus away from discussing the story's theme and instead delve into your remarkable writing skills, which truly captivated me. Your ability to intricately detail each scene and evoke the emotions of every character was truly impressive. The flow of your writing was seamless, showcasing a high level of fluency. You have an excellent writing skill, but you need to work on the theme you choose to write. This particular story seemed a mixup of various elements without a clear central focus.
Best wishes for the contest!
Writer: rusty blade
Buddy, I really wanna know what this story's central theme was. I mean you started with very sensitive and important topics such as Martial rape, LGBT society, and self-acceptance, but then as it progressed storyline gets completely changed. You showed a few incestuous feelings between Brother Sister and father-daughter in two scenes. I was literally praying that the story shouldn't move towards that. But, alas! Even though you have not shown any incest sex your story's theme looks completely based on it.
I don't know how you started to write this, but to me, It looked like you started a serious topic to write then you decided to drop it and move towards a sexual and incest theme. I mean the first part of the story was damn engaging where you showed two lives of girls, one facing marital rape and the other facing problems with her life as a Lesbian. My first thought was that you would show their issues and maybe you would reconnect them as Misha loses interest in men and then meets Riya who has her issues.
But, what you wrote was unexpectedly divergent and I am not saying this in a positive manner. You blew up a damn amazing theme, specifically on an adult forum where humor and satire are typically embraced on these topics. I am genuinely taken aback by this, my friend.
Let's shift our focus away from discussing the story's theme and instead delve into your remarkable writing skills, which truly captivated me. Your ability to intricately detail each scene and evoke the emotions of every character was truly impressive. The flow of your writing was seamless, showcasing a high level of fluency. You have an excellent writing skill, but you need to work on the theme you choose to write. This particular story seemed a mixup of various elements without a clear central focus.
Best wishes for the contest!
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Review for the story: An Artist
Writer: fountain_pen
The theme of the story is quite amazing. But, It felt a bit confusing while reading and so many characters and abbreviations used in the story made it more complicated to understand. The progression you have shown of an Army officer falsely accused and discharged dishonorably from his post to become an Artist was quite a journey itself, despite that the central theme of the story was Tulika mam and Ekam's romantic angle. The way you portrayed the respect between them was also damn amazing and I liked that.
You are a pretty good writer buddy. Keep at it and best wishes for the contest.
Writer: fountain_pen
The theme of the story is quite amazing. But, It felt a bit confusing while reading and so many characters and abbreviations used in the story made it more complicated to understand. The progression you have shown of an Army officer falsely accused and discharged dishonorably from his post to become an Artist was quite a journey itself, despite that the central theme of the story was Tulika mam and Ekam's romantic angle. The way you portrayed the respect between them was also damn amazing and I liked that.
You are a pretty good writer buddy. Keep at it and best wishes for the contest.
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Story: Mandir ka Rahyaash..
Writer: JOKER.
Again, like your first story, This also needed more words and time to flourish. Odisha's background give credibility to your idea as it is quite famous of mystical tales. Anyway, please give more time when writing, because these are damn good themes to explore.
Writer: JOKER.
Again, like your first story, This also needed more words and time to flourish. Odisha's background give credibility to your idea as it is quite famous of mystical tales. Anyway, please give more time when writing, because these are damn good themes to explore.
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Story: A Tale of Romance in the City of Taj
Writer: Euphoria
Both of your stories exude an essence of historical places, Have you had the chance to visit these places yourself? If so, you got some serious wanderlust buddy. Visiting such monuments is a dream for many, myself included, and it's likely to remain just that—a dream. As for the story, I thoroughly enjoyed it. It had a soothing feel, and just a pure love tale. Even though being a plain and simple story it manages to keep you engaged throughout.
Keep writing my friend and best wishes for contest.
Writer: Euphoria
Both of your stories exude an essence of historical places, Have you had the chance to visit these places yourself? If so, you got some serious wanderlust buddy. Visiting such monuments is a dream for many, myself included, and it's likely to remain just that—a dream. As for the story, I thoroughly enjoyed it. It had a soothing feel, and just a pure love tale. Even though being a plain and simple story it manages to keep you engaged throughout.
Keep writing my friend and best wishes for contest.
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Review for the story: RAAZ
Writer: Black
Damn! That was some story telling. Really loved it buddy!
I will not talk about the plot much as it's a thriller but, ending of the story has left everyone hanging and kept thinking. Nonetheless, You wrote this in hurry so I have no complaints. The most amazing part of this story was it's easy flow. I mean reader gets carried away with it and don't even realize when it ended. Amazing narration and flow.
Keep writing my friend.
Writer: Black
Damn! That was some story telling. Really loved it buddy!
I will not talk about the plot much as it's a thriller but, ending of the story has left everyone hanging and kept thinking. Nonetheless, You wrote this in hurry so I have no complaints. The most amazing part of this story was it's easy flow. I mean reader gets carried away with it and don't even realize when it ended. Amazing narration and flow.
Keep writing my friend.
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Review for the story: Internet Wala Love..
Writer: Hunter1920
The story resonated deeply with me, feeling like a heartfelt expression of the harsh realities faced by our generation. I've encountered similar situations myself, where one feels powerless to change the outcome. My advice to you would be to let go and move forward. I won't delve into the plot details or question the character's actions, as you've only presented one side of the story, which you're familiar with.
Now, let's talk about your writing, it was quite commendable. As I mentioned earlier, it felt like a sincere outpouring of emotions, So, I can feel the essence of your emotions within the story.
I have given the above review assuming that this was a personal experience for you. However, If this was just a story you crafted with your imagination then there are many things to be pointed out.
Keep writing and keep reading more stories, You have a good hand in it and it will improve with time. Best wishes for the contest.
Writer: Hunter1920
The story resonated deeply with me, feeling like a heartfelt expression of the harsh realities faced by our generation. I've encountered similar situations myself, where one feels powerless to change the outcome. My advice to you would be to let go and move forward. I won't delve into the plot details or question the character's actions, as you've only presented one side of the story, which you're familiar with.
Now, let's talk about your writing, it was quite commendable. As I mentioned earlier, it felt like a sincere outpouring of emotions, So, I can feel the essence of your emotions within the story.
I have given the above review assuming that this was a personal experience for you. However, If this was just a story you crafted with your imagination then there are many things to be pointed out.
Keep writing and keep reading more stories, You have a good hand in it and it will improve with time. Best wishes for the contest.
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Review for the story: ~ Queen ~
Writer: Damha
Fuck me! What a goddamn amazing story. Tell me the truth how long have you been writing stories? Because It's impossible to believe that this was your first attempt. Every aspect of the story is meticulously crafted, with every detail perfectly placed. You had shown the emotions/sounds in different line just like it's been written in a script of any drama or play. That was really good touch.
I'm at a loss for words to adequately praise your writing, buddy. It must have taken considerable time and effort to organize this story so masterfully. The presentation is flawless, with each element seamlessly woven together like different threads in a tapestry. It incorporates elements of horror, suspense, and romance, all cleverly intertwined.
Brother, You have shown your talent brilliantly through every word. The way you've crafted this story is nothing short of brilliant, keeping readers on the edge of their seats from start to finish. Your skill in building tension and weaving together all the different scenes is truly commendable. I really don't know what else to say. Just that I really loved the story and thoroughly enjoyed it.
I wish to read more stories from you. Lemme know if you decide to write, whether in next contest or in story section.
Writer: Damha
Fuck me! What a goddamn amazing story. Tell me the truth how long have you been writing stories? Because It's impossible to believe that this was your first attempt. Every aspect of the story is meticulously crafted, with every detail perfectly placed. You had shown the emotions/sounds in different line just like it's been written in a script of any drama or play. That was really good touch.
I'm at a loss for words to adequately praise your writing, buddy. It must have taken considerable time and effort to organize this story so masterfully. The presentation is flawless, with each element seamlessly woven together like different threads in a tapestry. It incorporates elements of horror, suspense, and romance, all cleverly intertwined.
Brother, You have shown your talent brilliantly through every word. The way you've crafted this story is nothing short of brilliant, keeping readers on the edge of their seats from start to finish. Your skill in building tension and weaving together all the different scenes is truly commendable. I really don't know what else to say. Just that I really loved the story and thoroughly enjoyed it.
I wish to read more stories from you. Lemme know if you decide to write, whether in next contest or in story section.
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Honestly, this wasn't my first try at writing stories
I actually wrote some stories back in 2019 or so, but it's been a long time since then.My stories were more like beginner stuff back then, you know?
But this time around, I decided to put in a bit more effort.I did some research and asked for tips from some awesome writers like Qaatil Salty~Otaku and Werewolf
it means a lot to me
That's exactly what I had in mind! Seriously, everyone was like, “Horror writing is a total nightmare” and they weren't kidding
I mean, it was tough as hell! I quickly figured out that horror alone wasn't gonna cut it, you know? So, I decided to get crafty and play some mind games
I mixed in elements of suspense and even a bit of romance to spice things up. It was all about finding that perfect combo
I'm beyond happy that you loved the story and had a great time reading it.
Sure! I got some ideas in my head, and I even wrote down the plots for a few of 'em. But, man, finding the time is a pain in the ass
My personal life's been crazy busy lately
But I'm gonna start writing short stories for contests So, yeah, I'll do my best to whip up one for the next contest 
Thanks for being awesome and supporting, bro!
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