★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2024 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

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Story:- Sahajivika by hemya

ek badhiya feel good story, dhire dhire mulakato se ekdusre se milte huye badhta pyar bahut badhiya tarike se kahani me bataya hai, I am a fan of romance aur isiliye is kahani ko padha hai aur padhna sahi bhi raha, bas 2 hi kirdar aur un dono ke ird gird ghumti ye kahani bahut khubsurat hai, prem ki bhavna ko bahut bakhubi dikhaya hai bhai, jungle ka nadi ka feel, aur sahil aur mayuri ke mulakato ki prem ki wajah bana laksh kahani ko aur depth dete hai. no doubt ye ek behtarih romantic tale hai. all the best for contest.

 

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गलती किसकी by Riky007

That was a fantastic story, kabhi kabhi hum kuch bato ko lekar apne man me hi ek purvagrah bana lete hai fir bhale koi kuch bhi bole hame wahi sahi lagta hai jo hum soch rahe hai aur yahi haal kuch riya/rubi ka raha, nisha ki jabardasti shadi hote dekh aur usme bhi apne maa baap ko support karte dekh uska ye samajhna lazmi tha ke shayad ye uske sath bhi ho sakta hai wo bhi apne pyar se bichad sakti hai aur ye baat uske man me itni bas gayi ke usne aditya ke sath bhag jane ka faisla liya aur yahi uski galti rahi, kahani ka saar bas mere hisab se itna hai ke apne man me kisi baat ko maan lene se pehle hame apno se baat kar leni chahiye, bolne se har baat ka samadhan mil hi jata hai, ek galat faisle ne, ek galat fehmi ne riya aditya aur unse judi kitni hi jindagiyo ko badal ke rakh diya ab isme galti kiski thi wo kehna mushkil hai, har point pe koi na koi galat tha to koi na koi sahi ab jo jo ye kahani padhega ye faisla uska hai ke galti kiski hai, ending pe aau to us letter me kya ho sakta tha ye imagine kiya ja sakta hai, story ekdum mast thi men. All the best for contest

 

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इंदरबाग by Sanki Rajput

Kya badhiya topic uthaya tha men cannibalism ka shayad hi koi hai jo is topic pe likhta hai as ye itna dark hai ke use yadi justice de pao tab hi likho, I guess tum usme kafi had tak kamiyab bhi rahe ho but for me story hit and miss rahi. kahani ka tone sahi set hua tha mahol bhi sahi tha 1998 purani haweli gaon ka mahol ekdum perfect tha bas bahut jyada characters aur jabarpeli ke ghaccham ghacchi scenes jhol kar diye, story apne track pe hi rehti to no doubt ek slpendid kahani hoti, abhi bhi badhiya hi hai waise lekin aur badhiya hoti. maine sabhi 5 stories padhi hai tumhari ab paancho ka alag alag review nahi de raha ye kahani apun ko badhiya lagi uske alawa bure waqt ki chaap bhi sahi hai wo bhi old tone me hi set hai but badhiya world building kiya hai usme aur whisper of fate apun ko sabse behtar lagi uspe tumne thoda time dena chahiye tha usko padhke yaar ye itni jaldi kyu kar di isne aisa laga, aur baki dono stories below average thi to usme apun kuch nahi bolega. you have a great potential as a writer bas likhte time kahani ko thoda samay do. All the best.

 

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anookhi kitab by cheekku

masterpiece! ab isse jyada kya hi bolu iske liye Dude hats off man, revenge story ko sex story banane ke liye, abey dushman ki biwi ki chut maar ke kaun badla leta hai jokes apart kahani badhiya thi unique concept tha aur usko likha bhi waise hi hai, solid start tha motive bhi sahi establish kiya book ki entry us book ke sath aane wala guide/kida it was good lekin end me aate aate kahani dull si hoti gayi as merko aisa lagta hai sex note ka pura potential use nahi hua hai, aur bhi better badla ho sakta aur aur end me book fekne ka to logic hi apne ko samajh nahi aaya wo iske reply me sexplain karne ka kyuki aisa power fekne wala chomtiya hi hota men , Now talking about katputli wo isse to better hai, badhiya plot develope kiya hai uska lekin us kahani me hadbadi saaf samajh me aati hai, kayi scenes well develope nahi dikhte lekin still isko beat karti hai wo, seperate review na de ra ab uska to isi me maan lena

 

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कौमार्य (virginity) by Shetan


Aapki teeno kahaniyo me mujhe yeh kahani sabse behtarin lagi, horror likhne wali lekhika dwara ye romantic peshkash bahut khubsurat hai. maine ye aapse pehle bhi kaha hai ke writing me pichli contest ke mukable kafi sudhar hua hai aur ye baat is kahani dwara siddha ho gayi, kabhi kabhi kisi ko samajhne ke liye ek mulakat hi jaruri hoti hai jaisa yaha veer aur kavita ke sath hua ek train ke safar ne dono ko unka jivansathi de diya, mujhe is kahani ki sabse khas baat lagi isme aapne likhe samvad jo ki is kahani ki jaan hai khas taur par suhag ki sej par huyi veer aur kavita ki baatchit, kahani emdum simple thi aur dil chhune wali bhi, mujhe yadi is contest ki aapki teeno kahaniyo ko rate karna ho to sabse upar ye kahani rahegi fir khota sikka aur fir anhoni ka kissa, no doubt aap ek behtarin horror genre lekhika hai lekin aapse request hai ke kabhi kabhi aisi stories bhi likhe accha likhti hai aap.

 

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वफ़ा का वादा by Rekha rani

kya gajab khubsurat kahani hai, ekdum outstanding story hai rekha ji, maine aapka work nahi padha hai lekin is kahani ko padh kar keh sakta hu ke aap ek behad hi manjhi huyi lekhika hai, jis tarah se ek shadi shuda stri ko, uski uljhano ko, kamjor karne wale palo ko stri ki maryadao ko aapne kahani me piroya hai wo bahut hi sarahniya hai, ye meri padhi is contest ki one of the best story hai, vikas ka kirdar aapne bahut behtarin dhang se likha hai, rekha ki uljhane atmaglani ke bhav, kahani me jaruri emotions, required emothional touch sab kuch ekdum perfect hai. adultery, cheating ke theme ko lekar itni powerfull story likhna is a splendid job. Amezing story. All the best for contest.

 

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SAAJAN by Shahenshah.

Yo Black garu apun finally tumhari sabhi paancho stories padh liya hai apart from the masterpiece battle of the earth mujhe ye kahani sabse jyada pasand aayi isiliye sabka to main review nahi likh raha , what I liked about this story is jis tarike se tumne apne style se hatke is old school romance ko likha hai wo gajab hai bole to kahani ko padhte huye tum us jamane ko imagine karte ho purani filmo ki kahani ki yaad dila di bhai ekdum aur sabse badhiya apne ko ye laga ke tumne dono point of view se kahani batayi hai isse dono main kirdaro ko unki bhavnao ko samajhna aasan hua, shadi ko uske prem ko kahani me bahut achi tarah bataya hai, agar paancho kahaniyo ko quality ke nisab se lagau to saajaan uske baad battle of earth uske baad jaanwar fir suraj aur end me raaz ka number ayega. Noice story men all the best for contest.

 

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मोह by Kdry9

insan khud hi apne iye galat faislo se apne aap ko us situation me le aata hai jaha use pashchhatap ke alawa aur kuch nahi milta, shilpa ke paas sab kuch tha ek pyara pariwar pati baccha life aaram se chal rahi thi lekin uske moh ne use aise nark me dhakela jaha se uski mukti bas maut ka daman tham kar hi huyi, adultery ke theme par likhi ye bewafayi ki kahani hila ke rakh deti hai aur ye bhi batati hai ke bagair soche liye faislo ka parinam kabhi kabhi kitna ghatak ho sakta hai, shilpa chahti to ranvijay se duri bana sakti thi lekin uske mohpash me usne use apna sab kuch saup diya aur yahi uske patan ka karam bana, Nice story kiara ji all the best for the contest.

 

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कामावतर by manu@84

kahani apne janardan urf johnny bhaiya ke johnny singh se leke madhya aur uttar bharat ke johnny sins banne tak ki hai jisme uski madad karta hai KD, kayi baar hum paiso ke chakkar me halato se haar ke us raah pe nikal jate hai jise samaj me utna accha nahi mana jata aur wahi is kahani me manu bhai ne sahi se dikhaya hai, story ki baat karu to kahani start se leke end tak interesting hai, usme itna sahi tarike se likha hai jo language use ki hai wo samajh ne me ekdum easy hai upar se you have an ease in writing puns jo is story me dikhta hai aur kahani ko interesting banaye rakhta hai, kahani badhiya hi hai bas itna bolunga ke ho sake to jabarpeli ki religious commentry ko story se avoid kiya karo bhai jaise isme johnny aur rizwan ka hamare me tumhare me baat ko tala ja sakta tha, all the best for contest!

 

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The last apology a tale of friendship and regrets by Aagasyta (Y. A.)

Bhai tumhari sabhi stories padh li hai all 4 lekin sabka review na de ra mai you know aalas ye apun ko sabse badhiya lagi isiliye review bhi isi ka de raha hu aur badhiya isiliye lagi ke ye kahani instant connect kar gayi men aur tune likha bhi utne hi acche se hai ke story ekdum dil me ghusi hai siway end ke kyuki abhi to apne sabhi dost salamat hai, on a serious note nostalgic feel kara diya men tu, is kahani ko padhne wala har dusra launda rayensh aur rajveer se connect kar jayega, the story captures the essence of most of the boys jo kabhi apne ghar se dur rahe ho aur baad me apne career ke liye high education ke liye apne dosto se bichde ho, it is written so well that you feel totally connected to it. on an emotional point of view bhi kahani bahut umda tarike se readers se connect karti hai aap rayansh aur rajveer ke liye feel karte ho ke yaar is dosti ka ant aisa nahi hona tha, unke aur kisse janne ko man karta hai aur likha kar men you have a spark writing bhi sahi hai teri dialogues scenes connect kar jate hai tere, try writing a long one dude, baki kahaniyo ki baat karu to iske alawa mujhe yeh baarishe badhiya lagi mast likha hai usko, maine jab dekha tha tujhko bhi sahi thi wahi rage to tune kyu hi likhi, below average thi wo
kahani mast hai aur apne ko aisi hi kahaniya aur chahiye