Fantasy Karmyudh ( Completed )

[gOlDy]

jald hi mitra, antim do ya teen update baaki hain is story ke....

 

[misstress4uslut]

Nice

 

[gOlDy]

Starting new story A K the don

Dosto meri new story pe dekho aur btao , should i continue....

 

[ragish7357]

superbb update bro

 

[Bilal jan]

Waiting for next update

 

[akashx11]

UPDATE 16

Shehar se bahar ekant me ek picnic spot sa tha jahan is samay jyada bheed nahi thi. Main mehak ko wahi le gaya.

Wahan pahunchkar main mehak ko car se bahar lekar thoda aage aa gya.

Me- mehak main… main seedhe seedhe poochta hu… what’s your problem. Matlab tumhare aise rude aur ruche behavior ka kya karan hai. Dekho agar koi aisi baat hai jo ki meri us past life se judi hai to uska mujhe kuch pta nahi, isliye agar aisi koi baat hai to I am sorry.

Mehak – nahi aisi koi baat nahi

Me – fir kya reason hai mehak.

Usne koi jawab nahi diya

Me – dekho mehak agar tum bataogi nahi to main kaise sab theek karunga.

Mehak – mai abhi is topic par koi baat nahi kar sakti ….. kya hum ghar chal sakte hain.

Maine thode talkh aur tej awaz me kaha – main aaj tumhe yahan isliye nahi laya k is topic ko chhedne k baad yu hi chhod du. Main aaj ye jaankar hi rahunga ki aisa kya hai jo tum hamesha itni ukhdi hui rehti ho.

Mehak lagbhag ruansi awaz me – PLEEEASEEE…. Main ye sab baate discuss nahi karna chahti.

Me- fir bhi… kyat um mujhe is layak bhi nahi samajhti ki apni pareshani mujhse share kar sako. Ishwar ki saugandh hai ki jitna pyaar me muskaan se karta hu utna hi tumhe bhi karta hu…

Mehak cheekh kar rote hue … PAR MAIN NAHI KARTI … SUNA TUMNE , MAIN NAHI KARTI… I HATE YOU… HATE YOU.. HATE YOU….

Aur rote hue palat kar parking ki taraf bhaag gayi.

Me (rote hue) – why mehak why….

Khair main khud ko samhaal kar parking ki taraf aaya to dekha to mehak ek taxi me baitkar ja rahi thi. Maine awaz bhi lagayi par usne ansuni kar di. Fir maine use jaane diya.

Main is waqt bahut disturbed tha, kuch bhi samajh nahi aa raha tha ki kya karu to gaadi lekar nikal pada. tabhi mere mobile ki ghanti baji. Sush ka call tha.

Me- hello

Sush- hiii jaan, kya kar rahe ho

Me- kuch nahi yaar, bas thoda busy hu

Sush – bahut strange sound kar rahe ho, kya baat hai

Me- bola na kuch nahi

Sush – tumhe meri kasam, sach sach batao.

Me- sushhhh… ok btata hu,

Aur fir maine use sab bataya, bolte hue meri awaz ruansi si ho rakhi thi, main badi mushkil se apne aansu roke hue tha.

Sush – tum seedhe mere paas aao, main batati hu tumhe kya karna hai.

Main gaadi lekar uske ghar pahuch gya par andar nahi gya balki call kar ke use gaadi me hi bula liya.

Wo bhi bahut tense dikh rahi thi. Mere haal dekhkar gaadi me baithte hi pehle mujhe hug karte hue console kiya. Aur samjhane lagi ki sab theek ho jayega.

Raat hone ko thi ghar se mom ka call bhi aaya to mai sush ko bye bolkar ghar k liye nikal gya. Ghar par sabhi ne sath dinner kiya. Dinner par bhi mehak mujhse najar milane se katra rahi thi. Main bhi kuch jyada nahi bola. (thoda bahut to jawab diya baato ka taaki mom aur papa mujhe dukhi dekh kar pareshaan na ho. Waise bhi sush se sab share kar k mai khud ko halka mehsoos kar raha tha.

Dinner k baad jab main apne room me ja raha tha to mehak k room me se aati siskiyo ki awaz ne mere pair thaam liye. Maine room me jhanka to wo bed par baithi ro rahi thi.

Kahani kafe khubsurat kai saath badh rahe hai bhai. Plot bahut achaa hai aur app kirdaro ko bhi aache sai chala rahe ho .bas kami mujhe lagi toh wo hai emotions ki jo ki kuch jagha sahi sai baith nahi rahe .kuch jagha natural nahi lagg rahe . Jayse ki ise update par" mahek aachank sai cheek kar rone lagi" .yea line sahi sai baitha nahi aur main kirdar bhi aachnak sai rone laga . Lakin manna padega plot dhasu hai gOldy bhai.

 

[gOlDy]

Kahani kafe khubsurat kai saath badh rahe hai bhai. Plot bahut achaa hai aur app kirdaro ko bhi aache sai chala rahe ho .bas kami mujhe lagi toh wo hai emotions ki jo ki kuch jagha sahi sai baith nahi rahe .kuch jagha natural nahi lagg rahe . Jayse ki ise update par" mahek aachank sai cheek kar rone lagi" .yea line sahi sai baitha nahi aur main kirdar bhi aachnak sai rone laga . Lakin manna padega plot dhasu hai gOldy bhai.

Yaa you are right , reason ek hi hai time ki kami, story super duper speed se bhagata hu... Ye story aaram se 100+ updates me khich sakti thi jo 40+ me khatm kar rha hoo. Ek new story bhi start ki hai jiske first two update post kar diye hn .... Wo b aise ki unse 5 -6 update ban jaate

 

[akashx11]

To dosto hazir hai Diwali special Mega Update. ab aap logo ka kya response rehta hai usi hisaab se story aage badhaunga, ummid karta hu apne usual comments se hat kar kuch sujhaav aur tareef milegi is update ko.......

UPDATE 17

Maine jhanka to mehak bed par ghutne fold kiye apna sir jhukaye ro rahi thi. Main pehle to decide nahi kar paya ki uske paas jaun ya nahi. Par jab uska yu rona mujhse bardasht nahi hua to main uske paas gya.

Me – mehak

Mehak khud ko samhalte hue – please leave me alone

Me – talk to me mehak, mujhe pta to lage ki baat kya hai.

Mehak – mai abhi koi baat nahi karna chahti

Me - dekho mehak, agar tumhe koi problem hai to hum baat kar sakte hain ki aakhir aisi kya baat hai jo tum mujhse itni nafrat karti ho, aur… aur agar… agar koi aisi badi baat hai ki tum mujhe yahan bardasht nahi kar sakti to…. To main kahin bahar shift ho jata hu par yu tumhe itne dard me nahi dekh sakta.

Wo bina koi jawab diye bas roye ja rahi thi.

Mai use itne dard me dekh kar tadap utha aur rundhi hui awaz me bola - Theek hai ya to mujhe apni problem batao ya mai kal hi wapis London ya kahin aur nikal jata hu aur jab tak tumhari shaadi nahi ho jaati main wapas yahan kisi ko apna muh bhi nahi dikhanunga.

Jab kuch palo tak koi jawab nahi mila to mai palatkar wapis jaane laga.

Abhi mai darwaje tak hi pahucha tha ki mehak ne bhaagkar aate hue mujhe pichhe se hi apni baanho me bhar liya aur rote rote boli.

Mehak – pleaseee…. Please don’t go. I can’t live without you. I… I love you…. I love you a lot.

Maine bhi palat kar uske sir hath rakhkar sehlaate hue kaha, “I love you too my dear sis”

Mehak- no…. I… I love you as… as my love

Me – kyaaa, paagal to nahi ho gayi tum. Tumhe pta bhi hai tum kya keh rahi ho. You are my sister.

Mehak – please please please…. I beg you.

Me – mehak hosh me aao, it’s not possible. Bhai hu mai tumhara.

Mehak – NAHI…. Nahi ho tum mere bhai.

Me chaunka – matalb

Mehak – Ajay bhai ki death to usi accident me ho gayi thi jisme tumhari yaddasht gayi thi.

Me - WHAATTTT……. Matalb mai… mai… mai kaun hu fir.

Mehak - I don’t know par I love you.

Me liye ye shock jaise sir par koi bomb footne jaisa tha. mai koi jawab nahi de paya. Ladkhadate kadmo se paas padi chair par baith gya.

Me – khao meri kasam tum sach bol rahi ho.

Mehak – tumhari kasam main sach bol rahi hu

Kuch der mai waise hi baitha raha fir bola - “aur…. Aur kaun janta hai ye sach”

Mehak – m.. muskaan ke alawa baaki sab.

Mere dimag me jaise lagataar patakhe baj rahe they.

Me – mmm…. Mai tumse kal baat karunga

Ye kehkar main room se nikal gya, mehak pichhe se awaz lagati rahi par mai seedha apne room me aakar door lock kar liya.

Poori raat mere dimaag me kayi sawal ghoomte rahe par jawab koi na tha. mai bina poori baat jaane mom ya dad k samne ye baat uthana nahi chahta tha isliye subah subah mom ko ye keh kar ki sush se koi kaam hai aur mai nashta wahi kar lunga, mai dr uncle se milne nikal gya. Kyoki mere hissab se wo hi mujhe sab sach bta sakte they.

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Uncle brakefast table par baithe hue newspaper padh rahe they.

Me - Good morning uncle

Dr – are ajay beta tum, good morning.

Ajay ka naam sunkar sush kitchen se bahar aa jati hai (shayad brakefast bna rahi thi).

Sush – what a pleasant surprise, aao ajay baitho. Mai tuhare liye bhi brakefast lagati hu.

Me jakar uncle k paas baith jata hu.

Dr- aur sunao beta aaj subah subah kaise, koi outing ka program hai tum dono ka.

Me- nahi uncle mai aapse kuch poochne aaya hu.

Dr- haan bolo beta

Me- mai kaun hu uncle

Dr – matlab ye kya baat hui, tum ajay ho.

Me – mujhe pata lag gya hai ki ajay is no more, to mai kaun hu.

Dr – “dekho beta sach kahu to mai nahi janta ki tum kaun ho ya kahan se aaye ho. Mai aur bheeshm dono ko ek din ye khabar mili ki ajay padhai khatam karke London se lautne wala tha wo apni behno ko surprise dene ek hafta schedule se pehle hi aa gya tha par airport se ghar aate hue raste me ek bheeshan durghatna me wo apni jaan ganwa baitha. Hame shyad pta bhi nahi chalta wo to ajay k jis dost ne use airport par receive kiya tha usi ne hame phone karke is haadse ki ittla di. Ajay usi ki car me aa raha tha.”

Thoda ruk ke wo fir bole, “jab hum wahan pahunche to bada hi bheeshan drishya tha, aaj tak kisi ko samajh nahi aaya ki wo accident hua kaise tha. lagbhag 500 meter k daayre me sab kuch jal gya tha lagbhag 10 gaadiya wahan jali hui thi. Wahan se jab hum uski body lekar aane lage to meri najar tum par padi.”

Maine larajte lehje me poochha – “main wahan… kaise…”

Tabhi maine apne kandhe par kisi ka haath feel kiya. Ye sush thi jo hamari baate sunkar mujhe hausla dene mere paas aa gayi thi.

Dr – “ye to beta main bhi nahi janta par tumhari upar ki body lagbhag 70% jal chuki thi , tum ghayal bhi bahut they aur neeche ghisat rahe they. Chunki bheeshm ambulance me ajay ki body k sath aage ja chukka tha to maine tumhe apni gaadi me dala aur apne hospital le aaya.”

Me – fir…. fir kya hua

Dr – fir treatment k dauraan tum coma me chale gaye. Itne bade accident se bachna koi chamatkaar se kam nahi tha. tum usi awastha me heal hone lage. Par tumhara chehra bilkul pehchaan me nahi aa raha tha, humne tumhari plastic surgery karke ek naya chehra dene ka faisla kiya, par hamare paas tumhara koi foto ya face nahi tha.

Is beech muskaan jiski bimari ki wajah se hamne use ajay ki maut k bare me nahi bataya, warna hum use bhi kho dete, wo ajay k na aane ki khabar se hi beemar pad gayi. To maine aur bheeshm ne ye faisla kiya ki tumhe ajay ka chehra de diya jaaye taaki tumhri help se hum at least muskaan ko to bacha le. Jab tumhe hosh aaya to tum bhi apni yaddasht kho chuke they. Isliye humne filhaal tumhe bhi sachhai na batane ka faisla kiya aur tumhe ajay bna kar yahan le aaye.

Me – yaani ye chehra bhi mera nahi hai…. To kya pehchann hai meri… KAUN HU MAI….

Sush – tum jo bhi ho, jaise bhi ho ab hamari jindgi ka atoot hissa ho. main, tumhare mom dad, tumhari behne tumhe isliye nahi pyaar karte ki tumhara chehra ajay ka chehra hai, balki isliye karte hain ki tumhari care tumhara pyaar hum sabhi k liye bemol hai.

Fir isi tarah dr uncle ne bhi mujhe samjhaya. Kuch der baad jab mai lautne laga to sush ne jabardasti mujhe jaane nahi diya. Dr uncle k sath hi nashta karwaya aur jab uncle hospital chale gaye wo aake mere paas baith gayi.

Sush – ab pehle ye batao tumhe ajay k bare me kaise pta chala.

Me – kal maine tumhe sab bataya hi tha fir raat dinner k baad…..

Aur maine use sab bta diya.

Sush – to ab tum mehak ko kya jawab dene wale ho

Me – I don’t know, abhi to main khud k bare me nahi soch pa raha hu, use kya jawab doonga.

Sush – don’t take so much stress. Ishwar sab theek karega.

Me – hmmmn… achha mai chalta hu dad office me wait kar rahe honge.

Sush – aaj mat jao office to shayad better feel karo.

Me – don’t worry I’ll take care

Sush gaal pe kiss karte hue, “ok bye” main bhi bye bol wahan se nikal pada.

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Bahut sundar update. Yaha sare emotion sahi baith rahe hai gOlDy bhai. Aakhir kal hero ko pata chal gaya ki wo ghar ka beta he nahi hai or uski chehera badal dia gaya hai. aage dekhte hai kya raz khulte hai ..

 

[akashx11]

UPDATE 19

Ghar par jaise hi mai pahucha to sabhi lobby me baithe tension me lag rahe they. Mujhe dekhkar maa turant bhaagkar mere paas aayi.

Maa – kahan tha tu, mobile kyu band hai tera. Office bhi nahi gaya kahan tha pura din.

Maine ek najar sabhi k chehro par daudayi. Maa ki jahan aanke nam thi to papa ki aankho me tension saaf dikh rahi thi. Mehak aur muskaan k chehro par bhi fikr dekhi ja sakti thi.

Me – kahin nahi ma, subah dr uncle k ghar gaya tha fir wahan se kisi kaam se nikal gya tha, mobile ki battery kab khatam ho gayi pta hi nahi chala. Sorry maa papa aap ko pareshaan karne k liye.

Papa – koi baat nahi beta, tumse baat nahi hui na isliye sab pareshaan ho gaye they. Chalo pehle khana kha lo fir baat karte hain, pata hai teri maa aur mehak ne din me bhi khaya kuch.

Me – ye kya baat hui maa. Aise to aap log apni tabiyat kharaab kar loge. Main kahin kaam me fas gaya tha lekin aap… aainda aisa nahi hona chahiye.

Maa – ye to mujhe kehna chahiye k aainda aisa nahi hona chahiye.

Me – I promise maa nahi hoga.

Fir sabne sath dinner kiya aur fir mai apne room me chala gya. Abhi mai change karke bed par letne hi jar aha tha ki door par knock hui. Maine darwaja khola to saamne mehak khadi thi.

Me – mehak tum…. is waqt…

Mekak – kya mai andar aa sakti hu

Me – haa haa kyu nahi…

Me ek side ho gya to wo andar aakar khadi ho gayi. Maine use chair ki taraf ishara karte hue bola, please baitho.

Wo kuch kehna to chaah rahi thi par shasyad samajh nahi aa raha tha ki baat kaise shuru karu

“sorry”

Me – sorry for what

Mehak – mai ye sab … matlab main ye nahi chahti thi ki sach tumhe aise pta chale… par… par mai kya karti mai bhi ab apni feelings ko aur nahi daba sakti thi, isliye….

Me- look mehak, jo bhi hua mujhe dr uncle se sab pta lag gya hai. Par abhi mai apni identity ko lekar khud itna puzzled hu ki kuch aur nahi soch pa raha hu. Aur mai ye sach muskaan k aage bhi nahi aane de sakta, wo ye bardasht shayad na kar paaye.

Mehak – mai samajh sakti hu par…… ok take your time but please don’t break heart. I love you.

Apni ankho ki nami ko chhipate hue wo apne room me chali gayi. Mai kuch der wahi baitha sab sochta raha fir so gaya.

Subah neend me mujhe aisa laga ki koi mera sir sehla raha hai, maine aankhe kholi to deakha maa mere sirhaane baithi thi.

Me – maa aap yahan

Maa – beta kaise ho

Me – aap mere room me, koi baat hai kya.

Maa – pehle tum fresh ho jao fir batati hu.

Me fresh hone bathroom me ghus gaya.

Mujhe mahek ka kuch samajh me nahi aaya ,usko aachanak sai itna gahra pyaar kayse ho gaya ? Sayad samay ki kami kai karan yea ho raha hai lakin bonding missing hai

 

[gOlDy]

UPDATE 38

Aage badhne se pehle clear kar du ki dosto pichhle update me jin baba ka jikra hua ye wahi aghori baba they jo mujhe swapn me dikhe they. Haan baad me jab inka krodh shant hua to ye apne saumya roop me aa gye….

Mai wapas resorts tak pahuchato wahan police wagerah sabko dekh ke maine bahar se hi kiran ko call ki aur use sab bta kar aur Virat ko samhalne ka kehkar bahar se hi nikal liya taki police roke na. aur viase bhi time kam tha mere paas. 24 ghante me aashram tak pahuchna tha.

Maine puri jaan laga di wahan pahuchne ke liye, pehle by car fir by air aura b taxi me tha. abhi mai airport se nikal kar 8-10 km aage hi aaya honga ki achanak ek blast ki wajah se sab gaadiya ruk gayi. Maine ghadi ki aur dekha abhi 1 ghanta baaki tha shraap ka asar shuru hone me to maine ye rasta apni shaktiyo ke dam par tay karne ki sochi, jaise hi mai taxi se bahar nikla mujhse aage wali car ek blast ke sath ud gayi. Whan kisi ki cheekh goonji.

Mai daudkar us palti hui car ke paas pahucha, to usme ek aadmi fasa hua jakhmi halat me dard se karah raha tha. maine jaise taise use bahar nikala (dosto ye koi aur nahi Ajay tha thakur bheeshm paratap ka beta jo airport se apne ghar ja raha tha. mai use side me lejakar bith diya tabhi ek hasi sunayi di, ye awaaz mai kaise bhool sakta tha.

Me – “ROCKY”

R – HAHAHA

Me – mai tujhe chhodunga nahi kamine

Rocky ne aura age wali ek bus par apni laal kali beam chhodi jisse bus uchhalkar side me giri, usme cheekh pukar mach gayi.

Maine ek golden beam uski tarf chhodi to wo gayab ho gya, mujhe laga abhi kuch der to shaktiyaa mere paas hai to mai inhe bachakar Rocky ka khel aaj hi khatam kar dunga. Aur mai bus me se logo ko nikalwane laga.

Tabhi Rocky ne kich aage khade ek tanker me aag laga di. Isse pehle ki wo fate maine apni power se poora tanker hawa me uda kar door fek diya…

Maine Rocky ki tarf ek golden kiran chhodi usne apni tamsik shakti se bani laal kali beam se use kaat diya. Isse pehle ki mai apni poori shakti se us par prahaar karta wo fir gayab ho gya. Baar baar isi tarah wo waha maujood nirdosho ko target kar raha tha aur mai jitna ho sake utne logo ko bachane ki koshish kar raha tha. kaafi der is luka chhipi ke beech time kab nikal gya pta hi nahi chala.

R – mujhse kuch doori se prakat hoke – tu kya soch raha hai murkh mai kyo tujhpar sidha prahaar nahi kar rha kyoki kuch jhi der me mai tera ant karne ja raha hoon. Jara samay dekh apni ghadi ka.

Maine chaunk kar dekha to sirf 3 minute bache they mere paas.

Maine bina kuch soche samjhe apni poori taqat se ek sunehri beam se us par prahaar kiya , jawaab me is baar usne ek syaah kali beam se meri shakti ko roka. Dono shaktiyo ke aapas me takraane se ek bada dhamaka hua , jisse wahan maujood sabhi log thode bahut jakhmi ho gaye, mai bhi us dhamake ke veg se uchhalkar pichhe ko gira. Shock to rocky ko bhi laga par wo samhal gya.

R – “Bas ab bahut hua khel, ab marne ke liye taiyaar hoja. Ye dekh”

Uske hath me ek divyastra aa gya. Jo teevra prakash se

R – ye hai amogh shakti jo khud ma patal bhairvi se paayi hai maine. Ab de ke dikha jawab de sakta hai to.

Maine uski aur apni sunehri urja se hamla karna chaha par kuch nahi hua shayad shraap ka asar shuru ho gya tha.

Tabhi jaise waqt tham gaya, wahan mere paas hi baba prakat hue.

B – putra wahi hua jiska hame sandeh tha, ki ye shaitaan tumhe aashram tak nahi pahuchne dega. In halato ke liye kahi na kahi mai bhi doshi hu. Tap bhang hone se mai krodh me aa gya tha, prabhu meri bhool ko kshama kare.

Me – aap swayam ko dosh na de maharaj, niyati ne jot ay kar rakha hai hoga wahi.

B – par ab bina madad ke tumhara bachna sambhav nahi. Dekho tumhari madad karne kaun aaya hai.

Baba ke pichhe se Virat samne aaya.

Me- nam aankho se – virat mere dost , mujhe maaf karna tere is bure waqt me mai tera sath nahi de paya aur kayar ki tarah jaan bachane yahan bhaag aaya

Virat ne aage badhkar mujhe gale laga liya

V – nahi dost tumhara uddeshya to mere dard se kahin bada hai, mujhe baba ne sab bta diya hai. Ab tu is kamine ke samne se hat aur mujhe iski is amogh shakti se nipatne de.

Me – jahan mai bebas hu tu kya karega.

Wo muskraya - bas tu side me hat ke dekh

Mujhe baba ne ek tarf aad me kar diya, fir virat ki tarf dekha, achanak virat badalne laga. Wo hubahu meri tarah dikhne laga kapde aur yahan tak ki jakhm bhi.

Wo jo karne wala tha uska bhaan hote hi main kaanp utha

Tabhi waqt punah shuru ho gya aur Rocky ne Virat ki aur amogh shakti chala di. Wo shakti bijli ki gati se aakar jaise hi virat se takrayi. Uski urja se takreeban 500 m ke daayre me sab dhadhak utha. Charon taraf se cheekhe sunayi de rahi thi kayi nirdosh us urja ki bhent chadh gaye, jinme ajay bhi ek tha. aur mujhe baba ki shaktiyo ke kawach ne bacha awashya liya par wo lagbhag 70% jal gaya tha aur Is hadse ke karan mai apni yadasht bhi kho baitha.

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VIRAAAAAT……………. Chillate hue mera dhyaan bhang hua, aur meri aankho se aansu beh rahe they aur mere saamne kiran baithi ro rahi thi.