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Fantasy Saurya - ek youdha (Completed)

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Chinturocky

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Behtareen update,
Bechari Shilpa Pichhale janam me yahi to thi jise sab kuchh pata tha, is janam me kya halat ho gayi hai Bechari ki. Dekhate hai kaise sab ikattha hote hai.
 

Asif khan

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Excellent brilliant fantastic good update

Hamesha ki trha behad shandar soooper lajawab
Chalo acha h k hero ko sabhi heroine ka pta chal gia
Shilpa ko us doctor ne zehr q dia
Let's see what happend
 

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jabardast superb mindblowing fantastic, lovely update................?
keep posting...................?
waiting for next update.................?
 

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Ab tak

Main Saifali se milla usne mujhe Shilpa aur Shuhani ke baare mein bataya aur saath hi meri tinno talwaron ko ek kar diya. Issi bich Jordon jo Earth ke Kawach ko dekh raha tha usko ek tej bilji ka jhatka laga jo maine hi anjaane mein maara tha. Wo Maarcuss ke paas chala jaata hai aur usko sab kuch batata hai jiske baad Maarcuss ke chahre par ek ajeeb si rahasyamayi muskan aa jaati hai.

Aage

Kahne ko to hum shoping karne gaye the par mein waha hokar bhi waha nahi tha bas dimmag mein ye chal raha tha ki kaise sabko ek jagah karu aur unki yaadast wapas laaun.

Ab mujhe jo bhi karna tha jaldi karna tha kyun ki unki kuch powers aur saath hi kuch yaadein bhi unke paas aa gayi thi. Ye ek pareshan karne wali baat thi jaisa maine Paridhi ke saath dekhatha agar waisa hi kuch baakiyon ke saath ho to ye naa to unke liye sahi hoga aur na unke aas pass walo ke liye.

Maine inhi khayalon mein gum tha ke Mohini ne mujhe hillate hue pucha.

Mohini- Tumhe sunnayi nahi de raha kya kab se puch rahi hu ye kaisi lagegi.

Wo apne haath mein ek green colour ki dress liye khadi thi.

Main- Arre acchi hai tum par khub jachegi.

Mohini ne mujhe ghurte hue dekha.

Mohini(gusse mein)- Tum meri baat nahi sun rahe the naa main ye Varsha ke liye puch rahi hu.

Main- Mohini main kuch soch raha tha iss liye aisa hua par aage se aisa nahi hoga.

Mohini - Soch rahe the kya koi pareshani ki baat hai mujhe bhi batao sayad main help kar saku.

Main- Haa baat pareshani ki hai aur tumhe meri madad bhi karni hi hogi.

Mohini- Haa to batao naa mujhe kya karna hoga.

Main- Yaha nahi jaan hum ghar par baat karenge abhi shoping kar lo.

Mohini- Nahi naa mujhe abhi jaanna hai.

Main- Arre abhi nahi jaan baad mein batata hu na.

Mohini ne mujhe ek baar dekha upar se niche aur chali gayi wapas shoping ke liye.

Main bhi iss baar Alex aur Henry ke sath shoping mein lag gaya.

Shoping karte karte hi pura waqt gujar gaya fir hum ghar gaye. Waha pahunche to Mohini mujhe khinchte hue room mein le gayi.

Main- Arre yaar aaram se.

Mohini- Chalo batao ab kyun pareshan ho rahe ho tum.

Main- Mujhe Shilpa aur Shuhani ka pata chal gaya.

Mohini- Shuhani ?? Ye kaun hai?

Main- Arre wo jo Saifali thi naa uska naam iss janam mein Shuhani hai.

Mohini- Ooh par ye to acchi baat hai naa hame sabhi ke baare mein pata chal gaya ab bas unki yaadast wapas laani hai.

Main- Jaan sabhi alag alag jagah hai aur waqt bhi jyada nahi laga sakta naa kya pata wo sab kisi ko nuksan pahucha de yaa khud ko kahi kuch kar le bas yahi baat pareshan kar rahi hai mujhe.

Mohini- Haa baat to pareshan karne wali hi hai. To iske baare mein shocha hai kya kuch tumne.

Main- Nahi naa jaan meri to ye bhi samajh nahi aa raha ki kon kon si shaktiyan unn logo ki unko milli hogi .

Mohini- Hmm Paridhi ka to pata hai naa wo elements ko kaabu kar rahi hai bas.

Main- Elements ?? Usne to bas aag ko kaabu kiya hai naa.

Mohini- Mujhe nahi lagta wo bas aag ko hi control kar sakti pakka uske pass baaki elements wale powers bhi aa chuke honge.

Main- Tum ye kaise kah sakti ho?

Mohini- Aap dekh lena kal jab wo aayegi aur waise bhi wo pari hai pari unko naa bachpan....ek min sayad main jaanti hu unki kaun kaun si powers aayi hai unke pass.

Main- Kya ?? Par kaise ??

Mohini- Paridhi pari hai pariyon mein janam se hi 5 elements control karne ki power hoti hai agar issi tarah dekhe to Shilpa didi Jinn hai to unke pass dusron ki maan ki baat sunne ki aur unko apne vash mein karne ki power honi chahiye waise hi Priya Didi jo....

Main- Oo meri James Bond kuch soch kar bola karo yaar abhi tak Paridhi ke pass sirf aag ko control karne ki power hai.

Mohini- (Chidte hue) Dekho maine jo bola hai naa wahi hoga tum dekh lena haa.

Main- Thik hai yaar gussa kyun hoti ho chalo ab late ho raha hai tum jao.

Mohini- Kyun mera yaaha rukna tumhe accha nahi lagta.

Main- Arre nahi aisa kab kaha maine wo to main iss liye bol raha tha ki.....

Mohini- Sab pata hai mujhe tum chahte hi nahi ke main ruku yaha. Thik hai main ja rahi hu.

Main- Arre jaan tum bhi naa binna baat ke gussa ho jaati ho.

Mohini- Waah ab main gussail bhi ho gayi thik hai...

Maine uska haath pakda aur apni oor khincha.

Main- Maine aisa to nahi kaha naa jaan ab agar tum chahogi bhi naa tab bhi jaane nahi dunga tumhe main.

Mohini- Chodo mujhe jaane do chodo.

Main- Sach mein chod du.

Mohini ne naa mein gardan hilla di.

Chaliye inko yaha rahne dete hum chalte hai Girl's hotel mein. Yaha par ek ladki baithi hui hai apne room mein apne kaano ko takkiyon se dakke hue.

Uss ladki ko kuch bhi samajh nahi aa raha ke uske saath ho kya raha hai. Usko bahut saari aawajeen sunnayi de rahi hai alag alag aawajein. Jab usse raha nahi gaya to usne apna phone nikaala aur kisi ko phone kiya.

Call pick hua.

Phone se- Haa Shilpa beta bolo iss waqt kaise call kiya.

Shilpa- Doctor uncle mujhe aawajein sunnayi de rahi hai alag alag logo ki pata nahi kya ho raha hai mujhe.

Doctor- Beta aapne medicines li thi ke nahi.

Shilpa- Li thi uncle li thi par koi asar nahi ho raha kya ye mere dipression ki waj...

Doctor- Saayad ho sakta hai ek kaam karo wo jo nayi dawayi di thi naa maine uska ek tablet kha lo sab thik ho jaayega tum bilkul thik ho jaogi.

Shilpa- Ji uncle

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Shilpa ne apna bag khola jisme uski dawayi rakhi hui thi usse apni dawayi nikali aur ek goli khaa gayi.
Yahi koi aadha ghanta hua tha ke usko aur ajeeb lagne laga usko saans lene mein dikkat hone lagi aur dekhte hi dekhte usko chakar sa aane laga. Wo to accha hua wo apne room ke gate ke pass hi thi aur usne apna darwaja khol diya aur fir wo gir gayi uske muh se jhaag nikalne laga. Ye accha isliye hua kyun ki usko turant hi uske bagal wale room ki ladki ne dekh liya uss halat mein aur jaldi se hospital mein le gayi.

Ye baat turant hi pure collage hostle ko pata chal gayi aur waise hi Saifali ko bhi. Saifali jaldi se apne ghar se nikli aur chal padi uss hospital jaha Shilpa ko bharti kiya gaya tha.

Wahi dusri taraf iss baat ka pata Shilpa ki Maa( iss janam ki) ko bhi pata chala par unki oor se koi aisa reaction nahi aaya jisse pata chale ki wo chintit hai.

Hospital mein pahuch kar Saifali ne pahle pata kiya ki Shilpa ko kaha rakha gaya hai. Staff se patta chala ki jahar khane se ye sab hua hai. Saifali ko kuch samajh mein nahi aaya ki Shilpa jahar kyun khaayegi aur abhi wo ye sab samajhna bhi nahi chahti thi wo turant O.T ke baahar pahuchi aur fir kuch mantra padhe jiske baad O.T se ek doctor baahar aaya aur Saifali ko ander jaane ko bola uss baat ko dekh waha khade baki saare log hairan rah gaye par Saifali sabko ignore karti hui ander chali gayi aur jaate hi Shilpa ke pass pahuch aur uske sar par haath rakh kar kuch budbudane lagi. 2 sec bhi nahi laga hoga Shilpa uth kar baith gayi bed par saare doctors aur nurse to pahle se hi Saifali ke control mein the waha unko koi fark naa pada.

Shilpa apne aas pass dekhne lagi to usko bas Saifali hi dikhi jo jaani pahchani thi.

Shilpa- Ma'm main yaha kaise aur ye...

Saifali- Baad mein batati hu abhi ruko tum. (Doctors se) Bahar jao aur bolo food poisoning tha bas.

Doctors bhi bahar chale gaye aur wahi bola jo Saifali ne bolne ko kaha tha. Shilpa bas dekhe jaa rqhi thi ye sab.

Saifali- Chalo ab batao kyq hua tha tumko aur ye jahar ye sab kya hai.

Shilpa(Shocked)- Jahar ??

Saifali- Haa jahar wahi jahar jo tumne khaya tha ab batao kyun.

Shilpa- Ma'm maine koi jahar nahi khaya maine to bas daway.... Kya uss dawayi mein jahar tha par wo to doctor uncle ne diya tha mujhe.

Saifali- Chalo ab shuru se batao ye dawayi ka kya chakar hai.

Shilpa- Ma'm main apne Papa ke death ke baad se dipressed thi. Mera ilaz bhi chal raha hai 3 saal se...

Saifali- jab tumhara treatment chal raha to tum ye hostle mein kyun rahti ho apni Mom ke saath raho apne ghar mein issi sahar mein hai naa wo.

Shilpa- Wo meri Mom nahi hai wo mere Papa ki dusri wife hai jisko main bilkul pasand nahi karti aur ussi ke wajah se to main yaha aa gayi wo characterless hai uska chakar chal raha hai kayi logo ke saath.

Saifali- Aisa nahi bolte accha wo chodo aur batao ye dawayi wala kya kissa hai.

Shilpa- Kal se mujhe logo ki awajein sunnayi de rahi hai wo bhi binna unke bolle. Mujhe laga ye mere dipression ki wajah se hai kal to maine kisi tarah khud ko sambhal liya tha par aaj nahi sambhal paayi maine apne doctor uncle ko phone kiya aur unse iss baare mein baat ki. Unhone kuch din pahle hi nayi dawayi bheji thi mujhe aur phone par wahi dawayi lene ko bola jisko lene ke baad mujhe koi hosh nahi raha aur jab hosh aaya hai to aap mere saamne ho.

Saifali-Hmm to ye baat hai. Jarra apne unn Doctor uncle ka naam patta batana mujhe

Shilpa ne Saifali ko sab kuch bataya wahi Saifali ne usko ye bola ki wo abhi hospital mein hi rukke ek din baaki wo sambhal legi. Shilpa ke maan mein hazaron sawal the par koi jawab nahi milla usko. Wahi Saifali ne usko kuch pinne ke liye de diya jisse usko logo ki aawajein aani band ho gayi.

Saifali waha se nikli aur pahle to Shilpa ke upar kuch aur jaadu kar diya fir ghar chali gayi.
Nice update bro
 

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AB TAK
Main apne room m neend k injection ki wajah s sooya hua tha .

AAGE


Ye baat jab Dad ,Bobby uncle aur Fufa ji ko pata chali to aapne saare kaam chod kr wo sabhi ghar aa gaye.Shilpa Didi bhi bade gusse m ghar aa rhi thi pr achanak wo kahi gayab ho gayi . Tiya , Tanya aur Saifali(isko ab m gudiya likhunga taki kisi ko confusion na ho )
ko kuch bhi bataya nahi gaya mere iss halat ka.Sabhi ghar pahuche to unhe mere aise roone k baare m bataya.

Bobby uncle - hame jaldi s pata karna hoga ki ye us formula k wajah s hai ya kuch aur .
Dad -ha tumhari baat bilkul sahi hai hame jaldi s us device ka use karna hoga.
Mausa - kaun sa device
Fufa- Vikram ye Deep aur Saifali n us formula ko aur uske effects ko cheak karne k liye ek device banaya tha ye dono ussi ki baat kar rahe hai.
Mausa- ok toh us device ko use karo
Bobvy uncle apne room ki taraf nikal gaye device lane ke liye.
Karib 20 minute baad wo wapas aaye par unke haath m kuch bhi nahi tha bas hootho p ek muskan liye wo Saurya k paas gaye aur Saurya k baal pyar s sahlane lage.
Kisi ko yeh dekh kuch samaj nahi aaya .
Mausa - arre Bobby kya hua cheak kr na isse kahi wo formula koi nuksan na pahucha de.
Bobby - Isse kuch nahi hua h aap log (ladies ko ) kuch jyada hi soch rahe the pr fir bhi Shudda tumne thik kiya jo isse neend k dawa de di warna pata nhi ye kitni der roota rahta.

Sab- Matlab ?

Bobby- Abhi mujhe iske dost ka phone aaya tha wo bata raha tha ki jab ye dono car drive krna sikh rahe the to galti s inki kisi dusre car k sath takkar ho gayi . Wo car koi ladki chala rahi thi usne in dono ko khub khari khoti sunnai aur police complain ki dhamki bhi di bas fir kya dono dar gaye aur pata nhi kya - kya soch liya sayad issi karan ye ghar aate hi roone laga. Mujhe nhi pata tha ki ye police ki bast sun itna dar jata hai.

Yeh baat sun sabhi ko hairan ho gaye q ki aisa kabhi hua hi nhi k Saurya itna dar gaya fir bhi sabhi ne iss baat ko maan liya par sabhi ko ab gussa aa raha tha ki ek ladki ki wajah s Saurya itna rooya.
Mom- pata nahi kon hogi wo kamini jiski wajah s mera beta itna roya m to ghabra hi gayi thi.
Maasi - mera bhi yahi haal tha didi agar kabhi wo chudail mujhe mil jaye to uski taange tod dungi.

Abhi ye log baate kar hi rahe the k room m Saifali didi aati hai wo badi hi khush nazar aa rahi thi aate hi.
Didi- arre ab kya aap log yahi rahoge dinner ki tayari bhi karo main iske paas rukti hu jab ye jaage ga to main isse sab samjha dungi.
Fufa - kya samjha dogi Saifali isse.
Didi- arre wahi ki ab isse driving m sikhaungi aur kisi s bhi itna nhi darna chahiye.
Bua- tujhe kaise pata in sab k baare m
Didi- wo.. wo... ha mom aap jab aap log baat kr rahe the to main bahar hi thi maine sab sun liya ab aap sab jao main iska khayal rakhti hu.
Bua- pahle aapna to khayal rakhna shikh itti badi ho gayi hai abhi tak chai bannani bhi nahi aati.
Didi-Moooommm ! main shikh lungi aap log jaao .
Didi ne sabhi ko jabardasti room s bahar kar diya aur fir gate laga k mere bed p aa gayi.
Didi- ab aaye hain aap haath main aur aaj to main aapko chodungi nahi.
Itna bol wo mere upar chad gayi aur dhere dhere apna chahra mere chahre k karib lane lagi aur mere hoothon ko kiss kiya.
Didi - aese to mazza nhi aaya ek baar bas inhe meri yaad aa jaye fir to aapse pura hisab vasulungi.
Fir wo mere bed p baith k mere baalon ko sahlane lagi.


Chaliye hum bhi dekhte hai jo itne gusse m thi wo ab itna khush kaise ho gai h.

Flash back
(Shilpa didi k respect main)

Jab mujhe Saurya k iss halat ka pata chala main car drive kr rahi thi.Mujhe bahut gussa aaya khud p unke iss halat k baare m sun kar. Maine turant hi gaadi ko side m kiya aur ghar aane k liye apne jaadu ka istemal kiya pr main ghar m na aakar jungle m pahuch gayi janha Baba baithe the.
Baba - Rani shahiba apne gusse p kaabu rakhiye isme aapka koi dosh nahi ye to bus ek choti si sachhayi k karan Samrath ki essi halat ho gayi.
Main- kaun sa sach Baba.
Baba ne apna hath mere sir p rakh diya. Unke hath rakhte hi mujhe bhi Sanjay aur Lucky dwara jo baat Saurya ko pata chali thi wo pata lag gaya. Mere bhi aashu girne lage.
Baba - Agar aap bhi kamjor pad jaaogi to Samrath ko kaun sambhalega abhi aapke alawa koi nahi jo usko sambhal sake.
Main(apne aashu pochte hue)- Baba aap bataiye m kya karu .
Baba- Pahle to apne ghar walo ko iss baat ka yakin dilwao ki ye sab jo bhi hua hai ye us rashayan(formula) k karan nahi hua hai.Agar unlogo n us yantra(device) ka upyog Samrath p karenge to un logo ko Samrath k shaktiyon ka oata chal jayega. Aap shigra hi kuch kare taki wo essa kuch bhi na ho.
Main-Thik hai Baba pr main inko(Saurya) kaise sambhalungi.
Baba - Sayad unko ab thoda sa sach batane ka samay aa gaya hai.
Main- main samjhi nahi Baba.
Baba- aapko unhe aapne shaktiyo k baare m batana hoga.
Ye sun main to jaise khusi s pagal hi ho gai.
Baba- Aap shigra jaaye warna der na ho jaye.
Main unki baat sun jaldi s gayab ho ghar m pahuch gayi jab m aayi to dekha Bobby uncle kahi apne room m jaa rahe the. Maine apne power s unke mind control kar liya aur fir unke dimag m wo dost wali kahani set kardi.

Fir kya hua ye to aapko pata hi hai.

Back to Present
(Hero k respect m)

Meri neend karib 8 baje k aas paas khuli. Didi abhi bhi mere baal sahla rhi thi.M
ain uth k baithne laga to Didi n mujhe rok diya aur boli
Didi - Maine king ko itna kamjor to nahi samjha tha pr aap to bade hi kamjor nikle.

Ye baate to mere liye jaise koi bomb tha.
Main-kk..kk...king kon king main koi king wing nahi hu main to aapka bhai hu.
Didi- Ha bhai to hai hi aap mere par aap king bhi ho
Main - Aap ye kaise kah sakte ho ki main king hu .
Didi- hmmm Acha agar main ye batau ki aap aaj Nirupa Roy ban k roo kyun rahe the to manoge.
Main(maan m) - yaar inko kaise malum ki main king hu aur ab ye mere ko mere roone ki wajah bhi baatane wali hai pr inhe ye pata kaise chala ki
Didi-(mere maan m ) aap na sochte bahut ho ab jo bhi main bolu usko dhyan s sunna.
Main to sann rah gaya Didi n na sirf meri maan ki bate sunni balki unhone mere maan m mujhse baat bhi ki yaani telepathy.
Main- aa...aap ye kaise kar rahe ho.
Didi- arre powers sirf aapke paas hi nahi hai samjhe mere paas bhi powers h aur hum dono ka mind ab s hamesha connected rahega ab hum jab chahe tab ek dusre s baat kr sakte hai.
Main - aapko powers kaha s mille aur kaun kaun s powers hai aapke paas au....
Didi - Bas bhi karo ab main ye sab aapko baad m bataungi pahle jo main batane jaa rahi hu wo suno.
Fir Didi n mujhe wo nakli story(car wali) batayi aur fir kaha ki hume hi ab pure pariwar ko saath m laana hoga aur apne emotions p bhi control karna hoga.Last m unhone bataya ki agar ghar m koi uss car wali ladki k baare m puchhe to kuch bhi galat salat info de dena.
Kuch der aur aise hi baate karne k baad mom ne hame niche bula liaya sabhi n mil ke dinner kiya us waqt sabhi n fir mujhe samjaya kisi s darna nahi chahiya... bla...bla...bla...

Fir sab apne apne room m soone chale gaye.
Soote hi main jungle pahuch gaya aur apni 5 th chakra ko jagane k liye dhyan m baith gaya.
nice update ?
 
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