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Fantasy Saurya - ek youdha (Completed)

Kya mujhe mere likhne ka tarika change karna chahiye

  • nahi aise hi sahi hai

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Hi friend maine xforum pr kafi stories padi hai aur ab mai bhi apni ek story post karne ja raha hu ab jyada wakt na lete huye
story p chalte h jaise jaise log milte rahenge unke bare m batata jaunga .
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Agle update ka intjaar rahega dost
bhai update kab aayga ya to bata do yr
Kal dopahar tak update post ho jaayenge dosto yaha kuch ajeeb problems aa gayi thi bas ussi ko solve kar raha tha
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Story to both hi vadiya Hy par hero chutiya Bana DIA Hy vesy naraz na Hona
 

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UPDATE - 94

Ab tak

Main Parilok se Rani Pari se ek kitab le kar Earth par aa gaya tha....usko padhne ki soch raha tha ki dimmag mein kisi ka khyal aaya aur main dhyaan mein baith gaya...

Ab aage

Next morning

Main utha sabse pahle wo kitab li aur usko padhne laga bahut si baatein pata chala uss kitab se...Usme jwala ke baare mein bhi likha tha..sath hi kuch aur tarike time travel ke...saath mein kaise kisi ko ek waqt pe aane se rooka jaaye uske liye time shield ka jikar kiya hua tha

Time shield iske baare mein ye likha tha ki jis time period mein bhi ye lagaya jaaye yaa isko lagane wala ho waha koi bhi dusra time travel ke through nahi aa sakta aur agar kisi tarah aa bhi gaya to wo uska sharir yaa to kaafi jyada umar ka ho jaayega yaa to bahut kaam umar kaa....usko banane ka tarika kuch aisa tha jisme Jwala ki jarurat padni thi saath hi Kaal sarp ki bhi....

iss kitab ko padhne mein hi mujhe bahut waqt lag gaya tha...karib 11 baj gaye the din ke jab main kitab padh ke taiyaar hua aur itne der mein sabhi ne mujhse contact karne ki koshish ki thi par main ignore kar raha tha...

Ab pahla target tha mujhe Jwala ko yaha laana Kaal sarp to yahi tha...

Main waha se nikla aur sheedha pahuch gaya Niharika ke planet pe...aur waha se kaal sarp ke pass jo abhi Dristi ke saaath khel raha tha...

Main- Baat hui kya kuch..

Kaal sarp- Haa baat ki maine par....

Main- Ab kya par kar rahe ho...batao

Kaal sarp- Alex aur Varsha dono ready the ki Varsha jaayegi par tabhi ye...

Main- Tabhi ye kya..

Usne Dristi ki taraf dekha...

Main- Dristi isne kya kiya..

Kaal sarp-ye unn dono ke goad mein gayi aur fir wo dono chale gaye isko mere pass chod kar main to abhi tak intezar kar raha hu unke aane ka..

Main- kya....wo kaha gaye honge...

Kaal sarp- Pata nahi...

Main- accha aap yahi ruko main dekh kar aata hu unko..

Main waha se pure planet pe unn dono ko dhundhne laga par wo nahi mille...aur isme maine bahut time waste kar liya tha...ahut gussa aa raha tha mujhe iss waqt...

Main seedha waha se Earth pe aa gaya aur....abhi aaya hi tha ki Mohini aur baaki sab mere pass aa gayi...

Shilpa- Kaha the kab se sampark banane ki koshish kar rahe hai aur aap...

Main- Busy tha bolo kya baat hai...

Paridhi- Busy the itna kya busy ho gaye ki humko bhi bhul gaye....

Main- Arre kaam tha bola naa....

Priya- To batao naa kya kaam tha jo humse bhi baat nahi ki...

Ab yaha pe mujhe gussa aa gaya...

Main- batana jaruri hai...kya dimmag kharab kar rakha hai jab waqt aayega batla dunga abhi jaao yaha se...

Shilpa- Saurya ye kya tarika hai..

Main- Dekho abhi jao yaha se mera mood nahi hai kisi se baat karne kaa...

Binna kuch kahe wo sabhi chale gaye waha se....wahi main sochne laga ki ab kya karu kaha dhundhu unn dono ko aur ye time shield kaise banau...

Bahut se sawal the par jawab kuch bhi nahi....

Main wahi baith gaya aur sochta raha inn sab ke baare mein aur pata nahi kaise par neend aa gayi mujhe...

"Saurya bacchao Saurya bachao"

"kon hai kon hai waha "

"Saurya bachao mujhe ye maar dega mujhe"

"kon hai kon hai waha mujhe kuch dikhayi kyun nahi de raha"

"Sauryaaaaaaa"

bas meri aankh khul gayi main wahi sofe pe baitha hua soo gaya tha....aur sayad ye koi sapna tha...Haa sapna hi hoga...par pata nahi kyun asli saa lag raha tha aur wo awaj wo bhi pahchani hui thi...

Time dekha to raat ke 7 baj rahe the aaj ka pura din hi bekar hgaya tha mera kaha maine socha tha Jwala ko laane ke baare mein aur kaha....

Kappa- abhi kya hua tha..

Main- Kya kya hua tha salla din barbad challa gaya...socha tha Kuch karunga par...

Kappa- Nahi kuch aur hua tha main bata nahi sakta aisa laga main kahi kho sa gaya tha..

Main- Kya tu bhi...waham hoga tera bas aur kuch nahi...Accha main soch raha hu dono ko dekh aau...

Kappa- Hmm thik hai aaj to dono mil gaye honge..

Main- Haa yaar wahi dekhna hai chalo...

Maine portal khola aur ek jagah chala gaya waha dekha to ek ladka aur ek ladki thi waha pe...dono galle lage hue the ladki roye jaa rahi thi...

Main- Ye roo kyun rahi h....ye yaha bhi waah iss chote se packet ne kaam aasan kar diya apna..

Kappa- Arre par ye yaha kaise...

Main- Kaise kya bhag aayi hogi ussi din ki tarah...aur Wo Varsha aur Alex dono isko Kaal sarp ke pass chod kar chale gaye the...

Main unn dono ki oor badha dhire dhire...dono nahi tinno Dristi thi naa goad mein Kiran ke...

Main untak pahuchta usse pahle hi Dristi udti hui aayi aur mere goad mein aa gayi...Waha utne log nahi the jo ye sab dekh paate...

Mere paas aate hi wo hasne lagi...ab baccho ki muskan ka to pata hi hai naa koi kitni bhi badi pareshani mein ho sab kuch bhul jaata hai isko dekh kar...

Abhi main uske muskurate hue chote se chahre ko dekh hi raha tha ki...hum waha se Nihari ke planet pe pahuch gaye aur mujhe pata bhi nahi chala...

Waha pahucha to wo udti hui apni Maa yaani Varsha ke goad mein chali gayi...

Varsha- Ye tumhare pass thi main kab se dhundh rahi thi iss shaitan ko....

Main- Haa wo...Accha ye Alex kaha gaya usse kuch baat karni thi mujhe...

Varsha- Wo tumhare pass hi gaye the wo permission lene...

Main- Permission??...kis baat ki

Varsha- Wo Wo shadi ke liye..

Main- Kya...accha main chalta hu...

Main waha se jaldi Earth pe aaya wahi RAW ke flat mein waha pahucha to pahle se hi Alex waha baitha tha...

Main- Kaha the aaj din bhar se kab se dhundh raha tha main...

Alex- Wo kuch discuss karna tha...

Main- kya hame bhi batao hum bhi to jaane...

Alex- Arre wo Jwala ko lane ke liye....wahi sab...

Main- Haa kaal sarp se baat ho gayi hai meri usne bola ki Varsha ke saath main chala jaun fir Niharika to manna karegi nahi...

Alex- kya...par main to...

Main- ha batao tum to kya...


Alex- Arre main to wo shadi ki baat soch raha tha..

Main- Shadi wo kyun bhala

Alex- Arre hum aise hi thodi....aur ab to Dristi bhi hai naa.

Main- Haa Dristi bhi hai to usse aur shadi se kya lena dena....

Alex - Arre wo badi hogi to...

Main- Haa badi to....

Main abhi bol hi raha tha ki Pradeep aur Kiran waha aa gaye...

Pradeep- Kya kiya tunne meri bahno ke saath...

Main- Arre Pradeep tujhe sab yaad aa gaya naa...aur Kiran tum thik ho naa...

Pradeep- Tunne meri bahno ko kyun rulaya..

Main- Main kyun rulaunga kisi ko yaar aur kya baatein kar raha hai tu....

Kiran- Wo sab roo rahi thi aur gusse mein bhi hai...

Main- tum sab Shilpa aur baakiyon ki baat kar rahe ho kya...

Pradeep- Haa unhi ki baat kar rahe hai hum...ab bata kya kiya tunne...

Main- Yaar maine kuch bhi nahi kiya sach bol raha hu...

Pradeep - Kiran chalo yaha se Alex tum bhi jaao isko akela chod do kya pata galti yaad aa jaaye...

Alex- par wo main....

Main- Haa permission hai ab jao yaha se aur sochne do ki maine aisa kon sa kaam kar diya ki wo sab roo rahi hai...

Alex chala gaya Kiran aur Pradeep bhi chale gaye baccha ab sirf main...

Chaliye Saurya ko chod hum chalte hai Bansoa mein...

Yaha pe lagbhag aadha planet khali kiya jaa chuka tha Headmaster ne logo se bola tha ki ye jagah ab shurakshit nahi rahi aur bhi saath mein kahi saare reasons de diye the...

Margret- Dadu bas kuch din aur fir hum yaha se chale jaayenge naa..

Headmaster- Haa beta hum chale jaayenge...tumne library ki chizze ikatha karni shuru kar di hai naa..

Margret - Hmm Dadu kar di hai waise ek baat kahni thi mujhe...

Headmaster- Haa bolo kya baat hai...

Margret- Main soch rahi thi jaa kar dekh aauss jagako jaha hummw jaana hao kya pata wahavkaise log ho..

Headmaster- Baat to sah hai aur tumhri aur tumhe jaana bhi chahiye par akele nahi.... Henry aur Rita saath jayenge tumhare..

Margret- Thik hai Dadu to main aaj hi nikalna chahungi...

Headmaster- Beta aaj nahi aaj to bas unn dono ko batna hai kal chale jaana....


Aaj ke liye itna hi agle update mein Margret ka Earth daura aur Alex ki shadi saath mein Saurya ka baaki sabhi ko manana ye sab hoga...


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UPDATE - 94

Ab tak

Main Parilok se Rani Pari se ek kitab le kar Earth par aa gaya tha....usko padhne ki soch raha tha ki dimmag mein kisi ka khyal aaya aur main dhyaan mein baith gaya...

Ab aage

Next morning

Main utha sabse pahle wo kitab li aur usko padhne laga bahut si baatein pata chala uss kitab se...Usme jwala ke baare mein bhi likha tha..sath hi kuch aur tarike time travel ke...saath mein kaise kisi ko ek waqt pe aane se rooka jaaye uske liye time shield ka jikar kiya hua tha

Time shield iske baare mein ye likha tha ki jis time period mein bhi ye lagaya jaaye yaa isko lagane wala ho waha koi bhi dusra time travel ke through nahi aa sakta aur agar kisi tarah aa bhi gaya to wo uska sharir yaa to kaafi jyada umar ka ho jaayega yaa to bahut kaam umar kaa....usko banane ka tarika kuch aisa tha jisme Jwala ki jarurat padni thi saath hi Kaal sarp ki bhi....

iss kitab ko padhne mein hi mujhe bahut waqt lag gaya tha...karib 11 baj gaye the din ke jab main kitab padh ke taiyaar hua aur itne der mein sabhi ne mujhse contact karne ki koshish ki thi par main ignore kar raha tha...

Ab pahla target tha mujhe Jwala ko yaha laana Kaal sarp to yahi tha...

Main waha se nikla aur sheedha pahuch gaya Niharika ke planet pe...aur waha se kaal sarp ke pass jo abhi Dristi ke saaath khel raha tha...

Main- Baat hui kya kuch..

Kaal sarp- Haa baat ki maine par....

Main- Ab kya par kar rahe ho...batao

Kaal sarp- Alex aur Varsha dono ready the ki Varsha jaayegi par tabhi ye...

Main- Tabhi ye kya..

Usne Dristi ki taraf dekha...

Main- Dristi isne kya kiya..

Kaal sarp-ye unn dono ke goad mein gayi aur fir wo dono chale gaye isko mere pass chod kar main to abhi tak intezar kar raha hu unke aane ka..

Main- kya....wo kaha gaye honge...

Kaal sarp- Pata nahi...

Main- accha aap yahi ruko main dekh kar aata hu unko..

Main waha se pure planet pe unn dono ko dhundhne laga par wo nahi mille...aur isme maine bahut time waste kar liya tha...ahut gussa aa raha tha mujhe iss waqt...

Main seedha waha se Earth pe aa gaya aur....abhi aaya hi tha ki Mohini aur baaki sab mere pass aa gayi...

Shilpa- Kaha the kab se sampark banane ki koshish kar rahe hai aur aap...

Main- Busy tha bolo kya baat hai...

Paridhi- Busy the itna kya busy ho gaye ki humko bhi bhul gaye....

Main- Arre kaam tha bola naa....

Priya- To batao naa kya kaam tha jo humse bhi baat nahi ki...

Ab yaha pe mujhe gussa aa gaya...

Main- batana jaruri hai...kya dimmag kharab kar rakha hai jab waqt aayega batla dunga abhi jaao yaha se...

Shilpa- Saurya ye kya tarika hai..

Main- Dekho abhi jao yaha se mera mood nahi hai kisi se baat karne kaa...

Binna kuch kahe wo sabhi chale gaye waha se....wahi main sochne laga ki ab kya karu kaha dhundhu unn dono ko aur ye time shield kaise banau...

Bahut se sawal the par jawab kuch bhi nahi....

Main wahi baith gaya aur sochta raha inn sab ke baare mein aur pata nahi kaise par neend aa gayi mujhe...

"Saurya bacchao Saurya bachao"

"kon hai kon hai waha "

"Saurya bachao mujhe ye maar dega mujhe"

"kon hai kon hai waha mujhe kuch dikhayi kyun nahi de raha"

"Sauryaaaaaaa"

bas meri aankh khul gayi main wahi sofe pe baitha hua soo gaya tha....aur sayad ye koi sapna tha...Haa sapna hi hoga...par pata nahi kyun asli saa lag raha tha aur wo awaj wo bhi pahchani hui thi...

Time dekha to raat ke 7 baj rahe the aaj ka pura din hi bekar hgaya tha mera kaha maine socha tha Jwala ko laane ke baare mein aur kaha....

Kappa- abhi kya hua tha..

Main- Kya kya hua tha salla din barbad challa gaya...socha tha Kuch karunga par...

Kappa- Nahi kuch aur hua tha main bata nahi sakta aisa laga main kahi kho sa gaya tha..

Main- Kya tu bhi...waham hoga tera bas aur kuch nahi...Accha main soch raha hu dono ko dekh aau...

Kappa- Hmm thik hai aaj to dono mil gaye honge..

Main- Haa yaar wahi dekhna hai chalo...

Maine portal khola aur ek jagah chala gaya waha dekha to ek ladka aur ek ladki thi waha pe...dono galle lage hue the ladki roye jaa rahi thi...

Main- Ye roo kyun rahi h....ye yaha bhi waah iss chote se packet ne kaam aasan kar diya apna..

Kappa- Arre par ye yaha kaise...

Main- Kaise kya bhag aayi hogi ussi din ki tarah...aur Wo Varsha aur Alex dono isko Kaal sarp ke pass chod kar chale gaye the...

Main unn dono ki oor badha dhire dhire...dono nahi tinno Dristi thi naa goad mein Kiran ke...

Main untak pahuchta usse pahle hi Dristi udti hui aayi aur mere goad mein aa gayi...Waha utne log nahi the jo ye sab dekh paate...

Mere paas aate hi wo hasne lagi...ab baccho ki muskan ka to pata hi hai naa koi kitni bhi badi pareshani mein ho sab kuch bhul jaata hai isko dekh kar...

Abhi main uske muskurate hue chote se chahre ko dekh hi raha tha ki...hum waha se Nihari ke planet pe pahuch gaye aur mujhe pata bhi nahi chala...

Waha pahucha to wo udti hui apni Maa yaani Varsha ke goad mein chali gayi...

Varsha- Ye tumhare pass thi main kab se dhundh rahi thi iss shaitan ko....

Main- Haa wo...Accha ye Alex kaha gaya usse kuch baat karni thi mujhe...

Varsha- Wo tumhare pass hi gaye the wo permission lene...

Main- Permission??...kis baat ki

Varsha- Wo Wo shadi ke liye..

Main- Kya...accha main chalta hu...

Main waha se jaldi Earth pe aaya wahi RAW ke flat mein waha pahucha to pahle se hi Alex waha baitha tha...

Main- Kaha the aaj din bhar se kab se dhundh raha tha main...

Alex- Wo kuch discuss karna tha...

Main- kya hame bhi batao hum bhi to jaane...

Alex- Arre wo Jwala ko lane ke liye....wahi sab...

Main- Haa kaal sarp se baat ho gayi hai meri usne bola ki Varsha ke saath main chala jaun fir Niharika to manna karegi nahi...

Alex- kya...par main to...

Main- ha batao tum to kya...


Alex- Arre main to wo shadi ki baat soch raha tha..

Main- Shadi wo kyun bhala

Alex- Arre hum aise hi thodi....aur ab to Dristi bhi hai naa.

Main- Haa Dristi bhi hai to usse aur shadi se kya lena dena....

Alex - Arre wo badi hogi to...

Main- Haa badi to....

Main abhi bol hi raha tha ki Pradeep aur Kiran waha aa gaye...

Pradeep- Kya kiya tunne meri bahno ke saath...

Main- Arre Pradeep tujhe sab yaad aa gaya naa...aur Kiran tum thik ho naa...

Pradeep- Tunne meri bahno ko kyun rulaya..

Main- Main kyun rulaunga kisi ko yaar aur kya baatein kar raha hai tu....

Kiran- Wo sab roo rahi thi aur gusse mein bhi hai...

Main- tum sab Shilpa aur baakiyon ki baat kar rahe ho kya...

Pradeep- Haa unhi ki baat kar rahe hai hum...ab bata kya kiya tunne...

Main- Yaar maine kuch bhi nahi kiya sach bol raha hu...

Pradeep - Kiran chalo yaha se Alex tum bhi jaao isko akela chod do kya pata galti yaad aa jaaye...

Alex- par wo main....

Main- Haa permission hai ab jao yaha se aur sochne do ki maine aisa kon sa kaam kar diya ki wo sab roo rahi hai...

Alex chala gaya Kiran aur Pradeep bhi chale gaye baccha ab sirf main...

Chaliye Saurya ko chod hum chalte hai Bansoa mein...

Yaha pe lagbhag aadha planet khali kiya jaa chuka tha Headmaster ne logo se bola tha ki ye jagah ab shurakshit nahi rahi aur bhi saath mein kahi saare reasons de diye the...

Margret- Dadu bas kuch din aur fir hum yaha se chale jaayenge naa..

Headmaster- Haa beta hum chale jaayenge...tumne library ki chizze ikatha karni shuru kar di hai naa..

Margret - Hmm Dadu kar di hai waise ek baat kahni thi mujhe...

Headmaster- Haa bolo kya baat hai...

Margret- Main soch rahi thi jaa kar dekh aauss jagako jaha hummw jaana hao kya pata wahavkaise log ho..

Headmaster- Baat to sah hai aur tumhri aur tumhe jaana bhi chahiye par akele nahi.... Henry aur Rita saath jayenge tumhare..

Margret- Thik hai Dadu to main aaj hi nikalna chahungi...

Headmaster- Beta aaj nahi aaj to bas unn dono ko batna hai kal chale jaana....


Aaj ke liye itna hi agle update mein Margret ka Earth daura aur Alex ki shadi saath mein Saurya ka baaki sabhi ko manana ye sab hoga...


To banne rahiye
Bhai ek ko hi manana mushkil ho jata hai yahan toh fouj bhethi hai apne jubani ashtro se susajjit ab to Samarth bhai bhi Ashmarth se mahshush kar rahe hai sawyam ko.
zamana toh hai nouker biwi ka.
Bahut behtreen update hai mitr.
 
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