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[Rahul]

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[The Immortal]

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Keep reading Rahul Bhai . Aur apna dhyan rakho .

 

[The Immortal]

PAAP

28. NA JAANE KYUN .....

UPDATE 1

by the_vampire
contest ke shuruwaat se dher saari umeedein lagaiye baitha tha ki bahut si badiya love stories padhne ko milegi. lekin aakhri din aate aate maayusi chhaane lagi kyuki koi bhi story umeedo par khari nahi utari.
aur fir ek kahani padte padte yeh chand lines padi aur dil jhoom utha kyuki ek pyaari si kabhi na bhulaai jane wali kahani padne jaa raha thaa.
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Mere Humnafas, Mere Humnawa,
Mujhe Dost Ban Ke Daga Na De
Main Hoon sadma-e-Ishq Se Jaan-Valab,
Mujhe Zindagi Ki Dua Na De.
shuruwaat bahut pyari thi. ek ladki jo ek ladke ko apna best friend maanti hai, lekin ladka shayad uske best friend se kuch badke banna chahta tha. ek ek line padte hue dil mei ek hulchul si machne lagi. ek pyaari si anubhuti hone lagi, jaise har shabd mei pyaar lapetke laya ho writer.
mera maanna hai ki jo prem kahani dil ke taar chhu jaiye, jo khushi ke scene ke saath hasna, sad scene mei rula jaiye usse behtar aur koi kahani ho hi nahi sakti, aur yeh sab is kahani ke pehle part mei hi mil gaya. ek ladke ki ankahi pyaar ki daastaan, ek ladki ka anjaanapan ... ek ladki ki masumiyat aur ek ladke ki bebasi ... aisa kaunsa rang thaa pyaar ka jo is kahani mei maujud nahi thaa.
2nd part ko padte waqt aakhon se ansoo chhalak gaye.
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Aisa vo kehti hai aur aisa main samajhta hoon, manta hoon. Aur chahta hoon ke ye haq bana rahe, isi tarah, hamesha ki tarah zindagi bhar. Aur koshish karta hoon ke use bata sakun ke main yun hi uske naaz uthana chahta hoon. Jahan vo kadam rakhti hai us zameen ko chommna chahta hoon. Ke uski kadam-bosi karna chahta hoon aur apna dil uske kadamon mein rakhte hue use ye ikhtiyaar dena chahta hoon ke vo chahe toh apna le, vo chahe toh thukra de.
yeh lines kis jadugar ki kalam se hi nikal sakti hai. na jaane kya jadoo hai vampire ji ki writing mei ki jab bhi inki kahani padta hu palkein bheeg jaati hai, aur is baar bhi eyhi ho raha thaa.
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Par main use kaise samjhaoon ke meri kash-makash kya hai. Ke kaise main jab uske saath hota hoon toh mehfil mein bhi hota hoon aur tanhai bhi saath nahi chhodti. Ke kaise uske hone se duniya rangeen ho jaati hai aur lagta hai ke har taraf mehfil hai ye sochkar ke vo mere saath hai. Par is khyaal se ke vo meri mohabbat se bekhabar hai, kis qadar udaasi mere dil mein ghar kar leti hai. Kis tarah se bheed ke beech uska haath thaame bhi khud ko akela pata hoon main.
Kaise kahoon, kaise samjhaoon ke main usse zyada hoon. Ke main usse mohabbat karta. Par kambakht alfaaz hain ke na jaane kyun zubaan tak aakar hi ruk jaate hain. Ehsaas hain ke na jaane kyun dil mein dhadkan ban kar hi dhadakte reh jaate hain. Khwahish hai ke na jaane kyun aankhon se toh numaya hoti hai par lafzon ka roop lekar kabhi zubaan ki sidhiyan nahi utarti.
Na jaane kyun.
mere pass alfaaz nahi hai vampire sir. ek ek shabd jab mei pad rha thaa toh usee feel kar raha thaa. abhi bhi goonj rahe hai mere kaano mei. ek nahi 10-10 baar pada in shabdo ko, itni gehraai se kaise aap pyaar ka description kar dete ho. kaise readers ke dil mei apne shabdo se pyaar ka ehsaas jaga dete ho. aapki lekhni toh kisi patthar ke seene mei bhi pyaar bhar de. yeh shabd nahi ibaadat hai, yeh tehreer nahi jo aapne likhi hai, yeh hum readers ke liye ek aisa anmol tohfa hai jise paake hum khudko duniya ka sabse zyada khushnaseeb insaan maante hai
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"Kya hua, tum toh badhe bahane bana rahe the ke meri shaadi mein nahi aa paoge, ab kya hua?"
jis waqt lag raha thaa ki prem ki daastaan aage badegi, is ek line ko padke dil baith gaya. aankhon mei ansoo aa gaye.
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Mujhe dekh kar vo usi masoomiyat ke saath, kisi chhoti bachchi ki tarah ithlati hui aage badhi aur apne makeup se bekhabar, apne dulhan ke libaas se bekhabar, aas paas khade logon se bekhabar, aur aisi hi tamam cheezon se bekhabar hokar meri gale mein baahen daalti hui lipat gayi.
"Mujhe pata tha tum zaroor aaoge, bhale lakh kaam ho tumhein. Main bulaoon, aawaz doon aur tum na aao, aisa toh kabhi ho hi nahi sakta"
shaadi thi us sanam ki jise wo dil-o-jaan se chahta thaa. kitni saralta se aapne us ladki ki masumiyat ko ek baar fir shabdo mei bayaan kar diya. aapke dil mei sach-much dher saara pyar aur shayad gham bhara hoga jo wo kalam se nikalke kaagaz par likh paate hai aap. padte hue lag raha thaa, kya bina is dard ko mehsoos kiye usee likh paana mumkin hai
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Aur kisi aur ne haath badha hi diya. Main kinare khada dekhta hi reh gaya, sochta hi reh gaya aur meri kashti ko nakhuda ban kar dariya mein koi aur le gaya. Mere jazbaat zubaan tak aa hi na sake aur kisi aur ne unka mazak bhi bana diya. Mera dil uske naam par dhadakta hi reh gaya aur kisi aur ne apna naam uske saath jod bhi liya. Meri aankhen uske ehsaas se nam hi reh gayi aur koi aur uski aankhon ka kajal ban gaya....

 

[The Immortal]

PAAP

28. NA JAANE KYUN .....

UPDATE 2

ek premi ki tadap ka isse shandaar description koi kar hi nahi sakta. majboor, laachaar khada reh gaya wo, jiski duniya uski aankhon ke saamne ujad gayi. ek baar fir mann mei udaasi chha gayi padte hue. kalam ke jadugar ka ek ek shand hathoda banke dil-o-dimag pe baj raha thaa.
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Saalon se badi khwahish thi ke uske dulhan ke roop mein dekhun. Dekhun ke kaise laal rang uske gore rang par phabta hai. Dekhun ke vo chamak jo log kehte hain ke ladkiyon par shaadi ke waqt aa jaati hai vo uske chehre par kaisi lagegi. Dekhun ke jab vo ban than kar aaye toh kaise mehfil ki har ladki uske saamne mamooli ho jaaye.
dulhan ki khubsurati aur ladke ki bebasi darshaati ek shandaar tehreer. aisa lag raha thaa sab kuch aankhon ke samne chal raha hai. jaise us taqleef ko mehsoos kar sakta hu jisse wo hero guzar raha thaa. yehi ek mahaan writer ki pehchaan hoti hai, us dard ko mehsoos karwana, jise ap bakhubi karwa rahe thee. kisi sapno ki duniya mei khoya hua thaa padte waqt. is prem kahani mei ab tak kai rang dikh gaye thee pyaar ke. umeed, khushi, gham, balidaan, khamoshi, bebasi, masumiyat... kaunsa rang tha jo nahi thaa
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Kaise kahoon, kaise samjhaoon ke main usse zyada hoon. Ke main usse mohabbat karta. Par kambakht alfaaz hain ke na jaane kyun zubaan tak aakar hi ruk jaate hain. Ehsaas hain ke na jaane kyun dil mein dhadkan ban kar hi dhadakte reh jaate hain. Khwahish hai ke na jaane kyun aankhon se toh numaya hoti hai par lafzon ka roop lekar kabhi zubaan ki sidhiyan nahi utarti.
kahani ka ek bhi aisa shabd nahi jo dil mei naa utar gaya ho. contest ki baaki stories padke aisa lag hi nahi raha ki yeh kahani bhi un sab se hi competition karne aai hai. yeh alag hi caliber ki kahani hai. bahut upar uth chuka hai iska level. iska muqabla kisi aur se karna iski tauheen jaan padta hai mujhe. iske ek ek shabd mei jo nasha hai, usee lafzon mei bayaan nahi kar sakta hu. jo dil har ek line padte hue dhadakta hai usee bayaan karna naamumkin hai. yeh kahani nahi ishq ki ibaadat hai. baar baar is kahani aur iske writer ke saamne sajda karne ko dil chaah raha hai. vampire bhai ka naam bahut suna tha, unki kuch short stories padi bhi hai, lekin aaj jo nasha is kahani mei hai padte waqt, wo kuch alag hi hai.
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Aakhri baar use dekha tha to voh laal rang mein thi. Bahut khoobsurat lag rahi thi.
Aaj use dekh raha hoon toh vo safed rang mein, bahut khoobsurat lag rahi hai.
Aakhri baar use dekha tha toh vo mehfil mein thi, bahut khoobsurat lag rahi thi.
Aaj use dekh raha hoon toh vo ab bhi logon se ghiri hui hai, bahut khoobsurat lag rahi hai.
Aakhri baar use dekha tha to vo ghar se vidai le rahi thi, bahut khoobsurat lag rahi thi.
Aaj use dekh raha hoon toh vo phir vidaai le rahi hai, bahut khoobsurat lag rahi hai.
Aakhri baar use dekha tha to log use ghere aansoo baha rahe the, aur vo bahut khoobsurat lag rahi thi.
Aaj bhi log use ghere zaar zaar ro rahe hain, aur vo ek baar phir bahut khoobsurat lag rahi hai.
isee padte hue apni shirt bhigo chuka hu. pata hai aage kya hone wala hai, lekin himmat nahi ho rahi aage padne ki. ek sannaata pasar gaya hai padne ke baad. aisa kyu hai ki ek ek shabd mei chhupe dard ko mehsoos kar raha hu. kaise us judai, tadap, maayusi aur dard ko bahar dikha paa rahe hai aap. aap koi writer hai ya jadugar nahi jaanta. lekin mei khushnaseeb hu isee pade ko mila yeh pata hai
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Dar-e-yaar par badi dhoom hai,
vahi aashiqon ka hujoom hai,
Abhi neend aayi hai husn ko,
koi shor karke jaga na de.
nahi hai, iske liye shabd nahi hai
bus itna pata hai aaj isee naa padta toh kuch kho deta, kuch anmol kho deta. yeh sirf ek kahani hai hi nahi. sirf ek kahani kehna iski tauheen hogi, isee sirf kuch shabd kehna iski tauheen hogi.
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Par aisa lagta hai ke maut sirf itna hi kar saki ke jism se rooh ko nikal le gayi. Isse zyada shayad maut ke bas mein bhi nahi tha. Vo aaj safed chadar mein lipti jin logon ke beech hai, unmein se har kisi ke chehre par gham hai par jiske liye zamana ghamzada hai vo khud kitni pur-sukoon hai. Vahi raunak jisne zindagi bhar saath diya vo aaj aakhri lamho mein bhi chehre ka saath chhod na saki.
Aur un sab logon ke beech betha main abhaga ye tay hi nahi kar pa raha hoon ke meri duniya aur kitni baar lutegi. Kabhi laal rang mein toh kabhi safed rang mein waqt aur kitni baar mere saath mazak karega. Main jiska haath thaam kar sapne sajana chahta tha, aak vo khud ek khwab bankar maut ka haath thaame jaane kahan chali gayi.
kya in shabdo ki taarif bayaan karna mumkin hai? kya is shabdo ko likhne wale writer ki taarif shabdo mei kar paana mumkin hai? mere liye toh bilkul nahi hai! is kahani ko jitni baar pado kamm hai. mei har line ko 10 baar padke, mehsoos karke fir likh raha hu yeh sab, isliye nahi jaanta kya likh raha hu, abhi bhi is kahani ke nashe se bahar nahi nikal paya hu
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Khyaal aata hai ke jo kabhi masoomiyat ki tarah baar baar chhoti bachchi ki tarah mujhse lipat jaati thi, aaj main uske murda jism se lipat jaoon. Jo baat zindagi bhar usse na keh saka, aaj use apni zubaan tak le aaon. Bethun uske sirahne, rakh loon uska bejaan sar apni god mein, thaam loon uske thande pad chuke haath aur bataoon use ke kaise main apni zindagi ka har pal uske naam kar chuka hoon. Kaise uske dam se meri zinadgi ka dam tha.
yeh dard padte hue aankhen bheegne se khudko nahi rok paa rahi hai. kitne shandaar shabdo mei ek premi ki tadap ko likha gaya hai. ek reader agar inhe padte hue mehsoos nahi kar sakta toh zaroor wo patthar dil hoga.
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Main gham-e-jahan se nidhal hoon,
Ke sarapa dard-o-malal hoon,
Jo likhe hain mere nasbeen mein,
vo alam kisi ko khuda na de.
yeh kya likh diya aapne.. aapne toh ishq ki geeta-quraan likh di. aakhri part padne baitha toh hosh naa raha.. abhi apne dil pe jo beeti wo likh raha hu, iske baad tasalli se aur kai baar padunga is kahani ko. kin shabdo mei aapka shukriyaada karu, samajh nahi aa raha is kahani ke liye
ek hi guzaarish hai, aisi ishq ki tehreere aap likhte rehna. jo dard aaj aapne undela hai shabdo se apne, wo ek jaadu hai. mei kya kahu pata nahi, mei koi expert reviewer nahi hu. waise bhi ishq ki is anmol tehreer ko mei toh kya koi bhi review nahi kar sakta. yeh gustaakhi hogi, yeh paap hoga.
anth mei ek ladki ki zindagi bhar ki khamoshi ufff uska apne pyaar ka izhaar naa kar paana, zindagi bhar ladke ka kadam badaake haath thaam lene ka intezaar karna. khuda kisiko bhi aisi tadap naa de. mei isse pehle sirf ek kahani ko padte hue roya thaa, aaaj dusri baar roya hu. bata nahi sakta yeh kitni anmol kahani ban gayi hai mere liye. please aap aise hi shandaar kahaniya likhte rehna vampire bhai.
_______________________ THE END

 

[The Immortal]

PAAP

29. EK CHHOTI SI LOVE STORY

UPDATE 1

Maine apni ghadi ki taraf dekha, dopahar ke 2 baj rahe the aur meri palken neend se bhaari ho rahi thi. I havent slept the night before and now my eyes were starting to feel a burning sensation.
"Lets have a smoke and i will sleep" I thought to myself
"God damn it man, you spent the entire last year without a single cigarette and now you are getting back at it again. Dont you remember what you had to go through the last time you quit" Was my second thought.
"Lets have a last one and thats it, no more" A third thought followed.
Main apne bed se utha aur sidhiyan utar kar ghar ke saamne, sadak ke doosri taraf bani dukaan ki taraf chala. Subah se hi main ghar ke saare khidki darwaze band kiye andhere mein betha tha isliye yun achanak bahar aane par meri already neend se jal rahi aankehn dhoop bardasht nahi kar saki.
Ek pal ke liye main ghar ke darwaze ke paas hi ruk gaya so that my eyes could get used to the bright light.
And thats when i saw them.
Vo dono vahin sadak ke kinare khade the. Maine pehle kabhi unhen yahan dekha nahi tha. What caught my interest was the nature of their conversation.
The boy was persuading the girl to marry him and the girl was saying no.
"Mujhe nahi karni tere se shaadi. Tu toh nahata bhi nahi hai" Was girl's answer.
"Main roz nahata hoon, vo bhi thande pani se. Sardi mein bhi. Tu toh aisa kar bhi nahi sakti" The boy was persistant.
"Jhooth bolta hai. Mujhe pata hai tu nahi nahata" Girl was quite adamant too.
"Achha ab roz nahaya karunga, kar le na pls"
"Nahi mujhe nahi karni"
"Kar le" He had his heart at her feet.
"Nahi na .. Main chali jaoongi yahan se"
This thread worked. The boy was scared that she might just leave so he didnt say anything for a few minutes but was back to his original question after a while.
"Tu bol toh main abhi nahake aa jata hoon, phir karegi?" He pleaded again.
"Nahi phir bhi nahi" She still refused.
"Kar le na pls ..... "He was almost in his tears.
"Main ja rahi hoon ghar" And with this the girl started walking away.
He just stood there for a few minutes, almost in tears, with his heart broken and confidence shattered. But then he thought to give it a last try, ek aakhri koshish and with this he pulled himself together and shouted after her ....
"Kar le na pls ... Behen nahi hai?"

THE END

 

[sasta insan]

pepal nai peepad city naam hai jodhpur se bas ek ghanta lagta hai jane me aur ye pandito kee shandilya gotra kee kuldevi maa pipla devi ke naam par ganv bana hai jis jamane kee baat ho rahi hai wo bahot sal gujar gaye ab ye ganv sach me city se kam nai aur naam ke sath city hee lagta hai papad city search on google

 

[The Immortal]

pepal nai peepad city naam hai jodhpur se bas ek ghanta lagta hai jane me aur ye pandito kee shandilya gotra kee kuldevi maa pipla devi ke naam par ganv bana hai jis jamane kee baat ho rahi hai wo bahot sal gujar gaye ab ye ganv sach me city se kam nai aur naam ke sath city hee lagta hai papad city search on google

Sukriya for information . Now tell me Baki ki stories kaisi lagi apko .

 

[Casinar]

Started reading this now

 

[The Immortal]

pepal nai peepad city naam hai jodhpur se bas ek ghanta lagta hai jane me aur ye pandito kee shandilya gotra kee kuldevi maa pipla devi ke naam par ganv bana hai jis jamane kee baat ho rahi hai wo bahot sal gujar gaye ab ye ganv sach me city se kam nai aur naam ke sath city hee lagta hai papad city search on google

Sir ji bataya Nahi Apne ki Baki ki story kaisi lagi apko ya fir sirf isliye comment Kiya ki bato sako ki kya galat tha PEEPAL wali story mai .

 

[Casinar]

PAAP

1. SAFED LIBAAS

UPDATE 2


"Aap aaram kariye saahab" Caretaker ne mere cottage ka darwaza khola aur saman andar rakhte hue kaha "Vaise toh yahan har cheez ka intezaam hai, baaki aur kuchh chahiye ho toh mujhe bataiyega"
Kehkar usne haath jode aur vaapis guest house ki taraf chala gaya. Par vo ladki vahin khadi rahi.
Main cottage ke andar aaya toh vo bhi mere saath saath hi andar aa gayi.
"Kya hua?" Maine usko yun andar aate dekha toh puchha
Jawab mein usne sirf cottage ka darwaza band kar diya aur palatkar meri taraf dekha. Isse pehle ki main kuchh aur samajh pata, usne apne gale se dupatta nikal kar ek taraf phenk diya.
"oho ho ho " Main uski is harkat par ekdam ghabra kar pichhe ko hat gaya "Kya kar rahi ho?"
Tabhi mujhe caretaker ki 2 min pehle kahi baat yaad aayi ke yun toh yahan sab intezaam hai, par kuchh aur chahiye ho toh main usko bata doon.
"Dekho apna dupatta please utha lo. Meri is tarah ki koi zaroorat nahi hai. Agar tum paiso ke liye ye sab kar rahi ho toh vo main tumhein aise hi de doonga"
Vo mere saamne ek safed rang ki kameez mein bina dupatte ke khadi thi. Kameez ke pichhe se safed bra bra ki straps nazar aa rahi thi. Jaise hi maine phir paise ki baat ki, uski vo neeli aankhen phir se udaas ho chali.
"Aapko lagta hai ye main paise ke liye kar rahi hoon? Kis tarah ki ladki samajh rahe hain aap mujhe?"
Kehte hue uski aankhon mein pani bhar aaya. Mera dil achanak aise udaas hua jaise mera jaane kya kho gaya ho, dil kiya ke chhati peetkar, dahade maarkar ro padun, apne kapde phaad doon, is pahad se kood kar apni jaan de doon.
"Nahi mera vo matlab nahi tha" Maine fauran baat sambhalte hue kaha "Mujeh samajh nahi aaya ke tum aisa kyun kar rahi ho. Mera matalb....."
Main keh hi raha tha ke vo dheere dheere chalti mere nazdeek aa gayi.
"Shhhhhh" Kehte hue usne apni anguli mere honthon par rakh di "Yun kahiye ke ye main sirf isliye kar rahi hoon kyunki aap pasand hain mujhe"
Bahar halka halka andhera ho chala tha. Kamre ke andar bhi koi light nahi thi. Us halke andhere mein maine ek nazar us par daali toh mujhe ehsaas hua ke vo gandi si dikhne wali ladki asal mein kitni sundar thi.
Vo duniya ki sabse sundar ladki thi.
Maine bekarak hokar apne honth aage kiye aur uske honthon par rakh diye. Un honthon ki narmahat jaise mere honthon se hoti mere jism ke rom rom mein utar gayi. Ham dono deewana-saar ek doosre ko choom rahe the. Vo kabhi mere
chehre ko sehlati toh kabhi mere baalon mein ungliyan phirati. Kad mein mujhse kaafi chhoti hone ke karan usko shayad mujhe choomne ke liye apne panjon par uthna pad raha tha aur mujhko kaafi neech jhukna pad raha tha. Apne
haathon se maine uski kamar ko pakad rakha tha aur usko uper ki taraf utha raha tha.
Aur tab mujhe ehsaas hua ke usko choomte choomte ab main poori tarah sidha khada tha. Uska chehra ab bilkul mere chehre ke saamne tha aur uski baahen mere gale mein thi. Maine hairat mein ek nazar uske pairon ki taraf daali toh
pata chala ke maine usko kamar se pakad kar uper ko utha liya tha aur uski paon hawa mein jhool rahe the.
Vo kisi phool ki tarah halki thi. Mujhe ehsaas hi nahi ho raha tha ke maine ek jawan ladki ko yun apne haathon ke bal hawa mein pakad rakha hai. Zara bhi thakaan nahi. Agar vo us waqt na bolti toh pata nahi main kab tak usko yun hi hawa mein uthaye choomta rehta.
"Bistar" Usne mujhe choomte choomte apne honth pal bhar ke liye alag kiye aur ukhadti saanson ke beech boli.
Ishara samajh kar main fauran usko yun uthaye uthaye room ke ek one mein bane bed tak laya aur usko neeche letakar khud uske uper aa gaya.
Main isse pehle bhi kai baar kai alag alag ladkiyon ke saath bistar par ja chuka tha isliye anjaan khiladi toh nahi tha. Janta tha ke kya karna hai par us waqt jaise dimag ne kaam karna hi band kar diya tha. Jitna maza mujhe us waqt usko choomne mein aa raha tha utha toh kabhi kisi ladki ko chod kar bhi nahi aaya tha.
"Ek min" Main ek pal ke liye alag hota hua bola "Kis had tak tumhare liye theek hai"
Aakhir vo ek chhote se gaon ki ladki thi. Pehli baar mein sab kuchh shayad usko theek na lage.
"Main poori tarah se aapki hoon" Usne halki si aawaz mein kaha aur phir mujhe apne uper khinch liya.
Kamre mein ab poori tarah andhera tha. Bas ham dono ke choomne ki aawaz, kapdo ki sarsarahat aur bhaari saanson ke alawa aur koi aawaz nahi thi.
Pahadon mein shaam dhal jaane ke baad ek ajeeb sa sannata phel jata hai. Door door tak sirf hawa aur kisi janwar ke chillane ki aawaz ko chhodkar aur kuchh sunai nahi padta. Kuchh ko ye sannata bada aaramdeh lagta hai aur kuchh ko
ye sannata rulane ki taaqat bhi rakhta hai. Us waqt bhi yahi aalam tha. Bahar poori tarah ajeeb si khamoshi thi.
Jaise poori qaaynat khamosh khadi ham dono ke milan ki gawah ban rahi ho. Dil ki dhadkan is tarah tez ho chali thi ke mujhe lag raha tha ke kahin koi shor na sun le....

Amazing narrative description yaar. Maza agaya. Issko exbii par padh chuka hoon 9 saal pehle, magar aah bhi padh kar lagta hai pehli baar padh raha hoon