Adultery छुटकी - होली दीदी की ससुराल में

[komaalrani]

भाग ९६

ननद की सास, और सास का प्लान

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[motaalund]

Yeh hui na baat. Renu ka juban khul gyi ab

हाँ ... अब कुछ करार आया...

 

[motaalund]

Renu ki sharam abhi bhi nhi khuli, chup chap sun rhi h, bolegi kab

एक बार जब खुल जाएगी तो.. इश्किया फ़िल्म की तरह गरिया के बोलेगी "चूतियम सल्फेट"

 

[motaalund]

Renu to jese mooh me fevicol laga kar bethi hai, sirf chup chap maje lena chahti hai

नीचे वाला मुँह जो खुल गया...

 

[motaalund]

सच चुदाई पूरी देह की जाती है.... ये नहीं कि लहंगा उठाया, चड्ढी सरकाई और चढ़ गये सांड की तरह..... आजकल लौंडो को बड़ी जल्दी रहती है.... एक नया शब्द अंग्रेजी का निकाला है, "चल बहना टाइम कम है तो एक quicky कर लेते हैं"
का मजा ई quicky में जब भाई और बहन, दो नंगे बदन आपस में रगड़कर कामुकता की चिंगारी ना भड़कायें..... 5-10 मिनट चढ़कर हिलने को चुदाई नहीं कहते

अंग-प्रत्यंग ... गालियों की बौछार... नजरों के भाव...
अदाएं .. नखरे... इत्यादि मिल कर एक पूर्ण सेक्स का रूप धरते हैं...

 

[motaalund]

Bechari renu, dono side ka udghatan ek hi din ho gya

बेचारी... अरे वो तो कब हो गया होता...
लेकिन अब दिलेरी से सामना करेगी...

 

[motaalund]

Bahut achhe se piche kaa baja bajaya hai kamal ne. No doubt bahut hot update hai, but direct speech ki kami rahi bhai behan me. Kuchh baaten to honi chahiye thi dono ke bich or jo laliya ke raaj bhi btane chahiye rhe. Pls bura mt manna komal ji. Or ek advice yeh bhi ki thoda bahut nkhre bhi dikhane do ldki ko baton se jese " bus karo ab nhi" mood nhi hai "or bhi bahut kuchh

हाँ.. ललिया को गरियाते हुए उलाहना तो बनता है...

 

[motaalund]

Yeh hui naa baat. Leena nhi sharmati renu ki trh or khul ke baat krti hai. Bahut badhiya

बिट्टू कमल जैसा खतरनाक जो नहीं है...

 

[motaalund]

Is baar aya na maja, jo khul kar renu ne baat ki. Bus isi tarah ki baten sex ke doran bhi hona chahiye

अब नीचे वाला मुँह खुल गया तो ऊपर वाला भी सरपट चलने लगेगा...

 

[motaalund]

The purpose of the story is to document the change. Change comes differently to different persons under different situations. Now for Renu, it was a hard battle and inner conflict. She was not only afraid of sex with his brother because of what Lalia had talked about his brutal behavior but also because she had seen Lallia getting spanked, blood tricking down.

Thus although she did enjoy the physical sensation of sex, the touch of her brother, and the deep penetration, she must have had. a conflict in her mind. She showed everybody that she loathed her brother, so how could she suddenly change? Secondly, enjoyment was more at the physical level, and she was enjoying every bit without being vocal about it. After two or three rounds of coitus, she was all for it, but what created a sense of guilt and changed her external behavior was watching, Leena a much younger girl enjoying her brother.

I can understand how readers relate to the erotic scenes. when both partners enjoy, make sounds, and talk.

But I was also visualizing the behavior of a girl who was in a sort of trauma, and trying to document the process of change.

If you compare the sex scene of Bela and Lena you can appreciate how differently it was crafted. Maybe I was wrong but that is how i perceived it.

Thanks for sticking with the story and clearly expressing your views.

To me ' Why' in a story is equally important and secondly I enjoy the exchange of Ideas as much as writing Thanks again.

You are master in presenting the emotions of each character.
Making characterization of each character and their persona differently so as to avoid repetition..
You are fantastic story writer.
Hats off to you.

 

[motaalund]

I agree with you komal Ji. Me to bus yeh chahta the ki renu apna dard or sharm baaton se express hare thoda. Jab story ka character bolta hai to uska impact jyada hota hai. Baaki aap bhi sahi ho

Variety is the spice of life.