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Erotica जोरू का गुलाम उर्फ़ जे के जी
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The Last page covers the essence of this story, my world view, when the story was conceived, and it becomes more relevant even today, when some of my readers hurt by or i should not say, goaded by homophobia, (even when Art.377 is no longer in the statue books) gets totally obsessed by one scene and try to berate, belittle and compress the entire story into one isolated casual incidence ( which I had to excise, because of the rules of the forum, but deftly kept the references so that the flow does not break). The entire essence and rationale of story i repeated in the closing post and added ' make poverty history' for one simple reason that Bono (U-2) was (and remains) my favorite band and this movement was buzzword. I gave it a feminist twist, with the concerns of environment.
However, in Hindi version i refrained from these monologues for two reasons. First, may be to respect feeling of my readers, who wanted or at least i understood, a softer feminist approach and secondly in the Hindi version there came a twist in the tale ( or tail of tale), but it required that in place of me he should have relations with the MNC's Headquarters. I also felt that it looks nice as the closing words, but when the story is going to move ahead with more focus on erotic fantasies, i should cut it down, so with a heavy heart i did.
one more thing, i am always against the objectification or commodification of female, even at the cost of sacrificing a few views, a few likes or comments, but I feel i must portray their sensuality, (which is more open and expressive in rural background) and led me to abjure some very good stories in this forum, written very well but where I feel writer has crossed a line. I know porn by its very nature does it, does not indulge in subtle shades but even while writing, i do try,... so these posts also convey my feeling, however, contradictory or fallacious or it may seem to some or they may dub as hypocrite,..
But again i must thank my friends who still remembered it after a yawning gap of so many years, and i took a plunge and sharing those posts,
There are friends who would like me to translate it and post it in Hindi, which i will refrain from doing again for two reasons. I feel it is hard to translate at least for me, without sacrificing its cadence, nuances and shades. It is my limit. Secondly, it's more a journey into past, story of the story,... which has survived closure of fora, change in attitude and a lot of censorious posts.
I now normally post in Hindi, studded with the choicest ' those' words and a lot of folksy background, folk songs and rituals. But when it came to a story with urabn ro semi -urabn background, I prefer to stick to it However, in Hindi version, my love for village background, and Holi crept back through a very long flash back of Jethani in the village and Holi of course.
Very soon Hindi story will resume its course, Guddi will reach her brother's house, join the coaching, Manju, Geeta, Ms Moitra and her daughters, Ms. Khanna will come back in the story to reclaim their places but at this junction, please do indulge me, dabble in the background of this story and do share your views about JKG, in its original form.
Please do go back to Page 444.
However, in Hindi version i refrained from these monologues for two reasons. First, may be to respect feeling of my readers, who wanted or at least i understood, a softer feminist approach and secondly in the Hindi version there came a twist in the tale ( or tail of tale), but it required that in place of me he should have relations with the MNC's Headquarters. I also felt that it looks nice as the closing words, but when the story is going to move ahead with more focus on erotic fantasies, i should cut it down, so with a heavy heart i did.
one more thing, i am always against the objectification or commodification of female, even at the cost of sacrificing a few views, a few likes or comments, but I feel i must portray their sensuality, (which is more open and expressive in rural background) and led me to abjure some very good stories in this forum, written very well but where I feel writer has crossed a line. I know porn by its very nature does it, does not indulge in subtle shades but even while writing, i do try,... so these posts also convey my feeling, however, contradictory or fallacious or it may seem to some or they may dub as hypocrite,..
But again i must thank my friends who still remembered it after a yawning gap of so many years, and i took a plunge and sharing those posts,
There are friends who would like me to translate it and post it in Hindi, which i will refrain from doing again for two reasons. I feel it is hard to translate at least for me, without sacrificing its cadence, nuances and shades. It is my limit. Secondly, it's more a journey into past, story of the story,... which has survived closure of fora, change in attitude and a lot of censorious posts.
I now normally post in Hindi, studded with the choicest ' those' words and a lot of folksy background, folk songs and rituals. But when it came to a story with urabn ro semi -urabn background, I prefer to stick to it However, in Hindi version, my love for village background, and Holi crept back through a very long flash back of Jethani in the village and Holi of course.
Very soon Hindi story will resume its course, Guddi will reach her brother's house, join the coaching, Manju, Geeta, Ms Moitra and her daughters, Ms. Khanna will come back in the story to reclaim their places but at this junction, please do indulge me, dabble in the background of this story and do share your views about JKG, in its original form.
Please do go back to Page 444.
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Posted on page 444 please read again and share your views ( also on my views on this page, page 445)
Going through your post in English, it striked me immediately that you have equal command over both the languages.
Your vocablury is vast and suitable usage of words/phrases at appropriate places mesmerizes me.
Also for many words in your English I have to seek online dictionay help to know the exact meaning which suits in that context.
This infers that you have vast experience, in high pedestal and are in touch with many knowledgble persons apart from handling many scenarios of real world very efficiently.
I believe that every individual have different traits and personality.
So you have yours. Your thinking, narration and presentation of various situation and handling them so deftly and professionally always enthral me.
The dialogues were not only between the persons but what is running inside their minds, feelings and 'what is not said' was understood by the other person, creates a charisma in the story telling.
In my all previous post always admired your this quality.
But I want to quote Amish words from one of his novel that excess of one characteristics(feminine) over a period of time, diminishes societal structure and defeat of the character in one of his four part series. So a balanced approach is needed between feminine/masculine characteristics for well-balanced society. Yes... excess of one is bad whether it is feminine or masculine(You mentioned, Enron,...).
On your word "I am female...the last creation of God" I only want to say that the best creation by God was left to last so that any deficiency in earlier creation were adequately managed.
Q & A have some missing serial number.
There are diverse nature/opinion/percerption among men as well as women folk also. No two persons can have same views on every topic. Some are more vocal, abusive and enforce his/her views that he/she is right.
You might have mentioned this in your last post but it should not deter you from posting such a fantastic story to your fan who loves these stories. Adverse comment from one or two persons may be ignored and this is the best to give them a befitting reply.
Your vocablury is vast and suitable usage of words/phrases at appropriate places mesmerizes me.
Also for many words in your English I have to seek online dictionay help to know the exact meaning which suits in that context.
This infers that you have vast experience, in high pedestal and are in touch with many knowledgble persons apart from handling many scenarios of real world very efficiently.
I believe that every individual have different traits and personality.
So you have yours. Your thinking, narration and presentation of various situation and handling them so deftly and professionally always enthral me.
The dialogues were not only between the persons but what is running inside their minds, feelings and 'what is not said' was understood by the other person, creates a charisma in the story telling.
In my all previous post always admired your this quality.
But I want to quote Amish words from one of his novel that excess of one characteristics(feminine) over a period of time, diminishes societal structure and defeat of the character in one of his four part series. So a balanced approach is needed between feminine/masculine characteristics for well-balanced society. Yes... excess of one is bad whether it is feminine or masculine(You mentioned, Enron,...).
On your word "I am female...the last creation of God" I only want to say that the best creation by God was left to last so that any deficiency in earlier creation were adequately managed.
Q & A have some missing serial number.
There are diverse nature/opinion/percerption among men as well as women folk also. No two persons can have same views on every topic. Some are more vocal, abusive and enforce his/her views that he/she is right.
You might have mentioned this in your last post but it should not deter you from posting such a fantastic story to your fan who loves these stories. Adverse comment from one or two persons may be ignored and this is the best to give them a befitting reply.
This monologue was the best part of english version I liked it very much.Its first time komal openely expressed her views as author as well as her character.This monologue is the essence of the story.
And the way jkg English version eneded I was eager to know what's going to happen next??will your husband enjoy fresh teen fruit or any there is another twist in it??how guddi will react about her pregnency??and you teased about those in short updates in fagun ke din chaar which raised curiosity more.
Ab story hindi main to comment bhi Hindi main Dena chahunga, monologue ki khas baat ye hain ke komal as character apne Mann ki saare baate khul ke batati hain,kyun wo guddi ko le jana chati hain,usake sath kya karegi aur uske sath hi uske pati ki jo kaise taboos main reh Chuka hain jisase wo use Azad karna chahti hain aur khul ke pyar karna sikha rahi hain.Aur as women komal ko maja Dena nahi hain maja lena bhi hain as in her words 'main chodungi'.aur aise hi guddi kobhi asali jawani ka maja Dena hain.