Erotica जोरू का गुलाम उर्फ़ जे के जी

[anvesharonny]

इस रोड जर्नी के बाद तो गुड्डी... नंगे हीं घर में घुसेगी....

Haa wo to hain apne birthday ki dress main apne sajan ki baho main apna badan chupate hua.

 

[anvesharonny]

ये तो मेरा भी अनुरोध है....

Haa shadi jaisi koi kamuk rasam dekhne milegi to maja aayega.

 

[komaalrani]

Going through your post in English, it striked me immediately that you have equal command over both the languages.
Your vocablury is vast and suitable usage of words/phrases at appropriate places mesmerizes me.

Also for many words in your English I have to seek online dictionay help to know the exact meaning which suits in that context.

This infers that you have vast experience, in high pedestal and are in touch with many knowledgble persons apart from handling many scenarios of real world very efficiently.

I believe that every individual have different traits and personality.
So you have yours. Your thinking, narration and presentation of various situation and handling them so deftly and professionally always enthral me.

The dialogues were not only between the persons but what is running inside their minds, feelings and 'what is not said' was understood by the other person, creates a charisma in the story telling.
In my all previous post always admired your this quality.

But I want to quote Amish words from one of his novel that excess of one characteristics(feminine) over a period of time, diminishes societal structure and defeat of the character in one of his four part series. So a balanced approach is needed between feminine/masculine characteristics for well-balanced society. Yes... excess of one is bad whether it is feminine or masculine(You mentioned, Enron,...).

On your word "I am female...the last creation of God" I only want to say that the best creation by God was left to last so that any deficiency in earlier creation were adequately managed.

Q & A have some missing serial number.

There are diverse nature/opinion/percerption among men as well as women folk also. No two persons can have same views on every topic. Some are more vocal, abusive and enforce his/her views that he/she is right.
You might have mentioned this in your last post but it should not deter you from posting such a fantastic story to your fan who loves these stories. Adverse comment from one or two persons may be ignored and this is the best to give them a befitting reply.

I always hanker for your comments as soon as I finish my post.

But now, I am finding myself, bereft of words, at a loss, what to say. I and most of readers will say in unison that I don't deserve such accolades, a pen pusher, a purveyor of porn.

And for one charge I do accept my guilt, search for appropriate words, either in Hindi or in English,...

सुवरन को खोजत फिरत, कवि,व्यभिचारी, चोर,...

( an example of Shlesh)

so I too look for a word which should convey the feelings of the characters.

Now about the world view and I agree with you that a balance is required. When the narrator in the story says, female or feminine, it only means a world view ( and you have perfectly understood it) and let me quote the relevant lines,

"
"My focus was not on gender issues, but attitudes and value systems which define its organizational culture. It was typically Athenian vs Spartan,

Athenian loved to love, enjoy and discuss poetry, focused on softer aspects of life and in Sparta; they knew how to fight and liked to fight. My contention was that in post competitive, post modern world, War is obsolete. We should show care, cooperation and instead of wasting time in fighting, we must learn to show compassion, karuna."

This is the view of the narrator, protagonist of the story, Like in Greek Theatre sometimes Narrator or orchestra says a few pithy lines to bring the issues to the forefront,... and as the story is ending here, bring it to, what i a thought was fitting finale.

List yes has numbers not quite in serial and one reason was it was copied from Eise Sutton, but not the entire list.

For writing this story I read many books on the female domination and one which enthralled me most,... was

Elise, Sutton, Female domination and I will be sharing a link on a separate a post for downloading the book ( separate post so that if mods delete it, it does not delete my comments )

There was a lot of demand for translation but I failed and I thought to almost rewrite the story in Hindi ( with some part of structure and most of concept )

but let me reteraite I agree with you about the harmony, a balance of forces, Yin and Yang, Ardhnarishwar.

 

[komaalrani]

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[komaalrani]

just awesome

Thanks so much

 

[komaalrani]

Updates studded with knowledge,vision.
.Marvelous story.Can't find suitable words to describe your skills and abilities.
Gazab,jandar, shandar, jabardast r a few words I know & hence putting it here for ur updates.

Thanks so much, sis you just make me aap itani humble hai, such a great and popular writer uttering such words, it only shows your humility, i am just a pen pusher, a purveyor of porn

 

[komaalrani]

Ab story hindi main to comment bhi Hindi main Dena chahunga, monologue ki khas baat ye hain ke komal as character apne Mann ki saare baate khul ke batati hain,kyun wo guddi ko le jana chati hain,usake sath kya karegi aur uske sath hi uske pati ki jo kaise taboos main reh Chuka hain jisase wo use Azad karna chahti hain aur khul ke pyar karna sikha rahi hain.Aur as women komal ko maja Dena nahi hain maja lena bhi hain as in her words 'main chodungi'.aur aise hi guddi kobhi asali jawani ka maja Dena hain.

Thanks so much for goading me to re-post those last pages,

I actually tried to translate but i realized i will lose the flow and cadence of original so decided to re-write the story in Hindi, which kept on growing but nice for you to remember the original version.

 

[komaalrani]

And the way jkg English version eneded I was eager to know what's going to happen next??will your husband enjoy fresh teen fruit or any there is another twist in it??how guddi will react about her pregnency??and you teased about those in short updates in fagun ke din chaar which raised curiosity more.

Yes and You were not alone, I too was thinking on those lines, so in Hindi version departure of Guddi was only a coma, may be a semi-colon not a full stop. Bur the tough problem before any writer is not to push the story but how to end the story so that it reaches a logical end. Most of the time story keeps on drifting, meandering meaninglessly, degenerate into a serial sex saga, where a man behaves like a bull in heat and will copulate with all and sundry, without rhyme or reason, and postcard thin characters will emerge from the wings, get f***ed by the male and take a bow and some new female will come. a drudgery i want to avoid.

so, what happened to Guddi, you and other readers will come to know in the coming pages, her blooming, her education and many things more , one post more and she will reach her destination.

 

[komaalrani]

I will request readers of this story to go back to page 444, read the last pages of Original English versions of JKG and share comments. next part in HIINDI, will be posted soon, and Hindi story will continue its onward journey. English was only an interruption, a pause.

 

[komaalrani]

Update Posted in INCEST SAGA


https://exforum.live/threads/छुटकी-होली-दीदी-की-ससुराल-में.77508/page-178

भाग ३२ - इन्सेस्ट गाथा अरविन्द और गीता,

सुबह सबेरे

2. नया दिन, नयी बात, नए रिश्ते

3. बारिश में भैया प्यारा लगे

4.ऊपर चढ़ा भैया, लुटे मजा सावन का,

बहिन के जोबन का

5. " हे देगी "



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