Erotica फागुन के दिन चार

[komaalrani]

फागुन के दिन चार भाग २७

मैं, गुड्डी और होटल

is on Page 325, please do read, enjoy, like and comment.

 

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Aap ke Previous 2 post frustration jahir kar rahe hai . Komal ji ke liye bhi aapne kuchh sahi nahi likha. Mere bare me bhi aapke shabd sahi nahi the lekin phir bhi maine ignore kiya Aur laughing emoji post kiya.
Aakhir baat kya hai Sir ? Achanak se ye frustration kyun ?

Frustration
aayein
Sanju bhaiya maine galat bola aapko
Mai aap ko apna bada bhai maanta hoon
Aapki story padhke mujhe ehsaas hua ki main apni writing mein kitna sudhaar kar sakta hoon aur aap kehte hain main frustrate hoon
Ab agar aapko aisa Hi lagta hai
Toh ab aapko mention nahi karunga...

 

[SANJU ( V. R. )]

Frustration
aayein
Sanju bhaiya maine galat bola aapko
Mai aap ko apna bada bhai maanta hoon
Aapki story padhke mujhe ehsaas hua ki main apni writing mein kitna sudhaar kar sakta hoon aur aap kehte hain main frustrate hoon
Ab agar aapko aisa Hi lagta hai
Toh ab aapko mention nahi karunga...

भाई , यह स्टोरी थ्रीड है । यहां पर सिर्फ स्टोरी सम्बंधित चर्चाएँ ही होती है । हंसी-मजाक के लिए लाउंज सेक्शन है । और उस जगह पर मुझे जाना पसंद नही ।
यहां जब भी टाइम मिलता है तो कुछ स्टोरी पढ़ने आ जाता हूं । कभी-कभार स्पोर्ट्स थ्रीड पर तब जाता हूं जब कोई कांटेस्ट चल रहा होता है ।
चैटिंग करना तो मुझे बिल्कुल पसंद नही ।

शायद हमारी अंडरस्टेंडिंग सही नही थी । ogle शब्द से मुझे परहेज हुआ था । आप स्वयं एक अच्छे लेखक है और इस शब्द के मायने समझ सकते हे । खासकर तब जब राइटर एक महिला हो और कई राइटर्स के लिए प्रेरणास्रोत हो ।

और जहां तक उम्र की बात है , सिर्फ हम दोनो ही हैं जिन्होंने अपने उम्र के बारे मे झूठ नही कहा । इसके लिए बुरा मानने वाली कोई बात ही नही है । लेकिन बड़े भाई को सम्बोधित करने के लिए शब्दों मे गरिमा होनी चाहिए ।

मैने पहले ही कहा - फोरम का चैटिंग लेंग्वेज , हंसी-मजाक मेरे समझ के बाहर की चीज है । लेंग्वेज , इमोजी तक समझ मे नही आती ।
इसलिए मै अक्सर ऐसी चीजों से दूर ही रहता हूं ।
मेरी वजह से आपको दुख हुआ इसके लिए मूझे खेद है ।

 

[komaalrani]

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[komaalrani]

Congratulations Madam...update ke ek part ke liye aapne itna research kiya
Similarly, I think in one of the earlier episodes, you researched and posted a photo of a dant manjan..a very old brand which most of us dont know
Shows the efforts you take to make situations that much more authentic (where ever possible).with relatable facts and figures. Well done. And much thanks also for your support on my story.

komaalrani

Thanks so much.

Your are correct about the Dant Manjan tooth powders that were commonly used at one time.

I try to focus on two factors in most of the stories, one is locale and the second is time. The purpose is that I feel readers can better visualize and relate. This is especially true for this story. The location of this part is Banaras and it is clearly mentioned in the opening paragraph of the story,

"आओगे तो तुम बनारस के ही रास्ते। रुक कर भाभी के यहाँ चले जाना"

The same post also mentions the journey to Banaras with names of various places en route

बनारस के लिए कोई सीधी गाड़ी नहीं थी इसलिए अगस्त क्रान्ति से मथुरा वहां से एक दूसरी ट्रेन से आगरा वहां से बस और फिर ट्रेन से मुगलसराय और आटो से बनारस।

Now the place of events is established naturally at Banaras, There is further mention of various locations of Banaras. Like Laksa

“अरे वही जो लक्सा पे है ना। जहां एक बार आप मुझे ले गई थी ना…” गुड्डी बोली।

“वही दो जोड़ी स्पेशल पान ले लेना और अपने लिए एक मीठा पान…”

There is mention of गोदौलिया, दालमंडी, सिगरा, औरंगाबाद. And with special features like Dalmndi used to be the place of Kothevaalis of Banars .

The simple purpose is to establish the feel of the place.

The second part is time, Story is based in the second decade of the 21st Century 2011-2012, therefore one can see the mobile, video calls etc. Holi is still a few days away so one can presume it to be March or Phagun. Similarly, day, morning, evening and night are also clearly distinguished.

One tricky question was what train hero should pick up, from Vadodara, with no direct train to Banaras or Mughlsarai. The fastest train is Rajdhani but it reaches Delhi around 9 and after that there is no train by which one can reach Banaras or Mughal Sarai in the evening. So Augst Kranti was specifically picked as is as fast as Rajdhani but has a stoppage at Mathura.

 

[komaalrani]

Congratulations Madam...update ke ek part ke liye aapne itna research kiya
Similarly, I think in one of the earlier episodes, you researched and posted a photo of a dant manjan..a very old brand which most of us dont know
Shows the efforts you take to make situations that much more authentic (where ever possible).with relatable facts and figures. Well done. And much thanks also for your support on my story.

komaalrani

And I am sure like you were able to enjoy the picture of tooth powder, you will surely enjoy all the finer details. And being not a writer but a very adept and popular writer from the very first story, you can appreciate the travails and tribulations a writer passes through. This story will be replete with, folk songs, poetry, folklore and many things more.

I turned towards erotica writing and started enjoying it for one particular reason. I realized that a good number of stories (even in this forum) follow the template of English stories, and sometimes only names are changed, and they are not even good transcraetions.

What I was missing was the feel and flavour of Indian Ethos and Social milieu. And it was particularly jarring when we have such a rich source of erotic poetry both in Sanskrit and Dravdian languages. And it led to that a good number of my stories have Phagun and Saawan two most erotic seasons.

Thanks again for supporting, me I will let the story speak.

 

[Mass]

Thanks so much.

Your are correct about the Dant Manjan tooth powders that were commonly used at one time.

I try to focus on two factors in most of the stories, one is locale and the second is time. The purpose is that I feel readers can better visualize and relate. This is especially true for this story. The location of this part is Banaras and it is clearly mentioned in the opening paragraph of the story,

"आओगे तो तुम बनारस के ही रास्ते। रुक कर भाभी के यहाँ चले जाना"

The same post also mentions the journey to Banaras with names of various places en route

बनारस के लिए कोई सीधी गाड़ी नहीं थी इसलिए अगस्त क्रान्ति से मथुरा वहां से एक दूसरी ट्रेन से आगरा वहां से बस और फिर ट्रेन से मुगलसराय और आटो से बनारस।

Now the place of events is established naturally at Banaras, There is further mention of various locations of Banaras. Like Laksa

“अरे वही जो लक्सा पे है ना। जहां एक बार आप मुझे ले गई थी ना…” गुड्डी बोली।

“वही दो जोड़ी स्पेशल पान ले लेना और अपने लिए एक मीठा पान…”

There is mention of गोदौलिया, दालमंडी, सिगरा, औरंगाबाद. And with special features like Dalmndi used to be the place of Kothevaalis of Banars .

The simple purpose is to establish the feel of the place.

The second part is time, Story is based in the second decade of the 21st Century 2011-2012, therefore one can see the mobile, video calls etc. Holi is still a few days away so one can presume it to be March or Phagun. Similarly, day, morning, evening and night are also clearly distinguished.

One tricky question was what train hero should pick up, from Vadodara, with no direct train to Banaras or Mughlsarai. The fastest train is Rajdhani but it reaches Delhi around 9 and after that there is no train by which one can reach Banaras or Mughal Sarai in the evening. So Augst Kranti was specifically picked as is as fast as Rajdhani but has a stoppage at Mathura.

And I am sure like you were able to enjoy the picture of tooth powder, you will surely enjoy all the finer details. And being not a writer but a very adept and popular writer from the very first story, you can appreciate the travails and tribulations a writer passes through. This story will be replete with, folk songs, poetry, folklore and many things more.

I turned towards erotica writing and started enjoying it for one particular reason. I realized that a good number of stories (even in this forum) follow the template of English stories, and sometimes only names are changed, and they are not even good transcraetions.

What I was missing was the feel and flavour of Indian Ethos and Social milieu. And it was particularly jarring when we have such a rich source of erotic poetry both in Sanskrit and Dravdian languages. And it led to that a good number of my stories have Phagun and Saawan two most erotic seasons.

Thanks again for supporting, me I will let the story speak.

Wow Madam..such minute detailing is what makes this story a true masterpiece. No doubt about it. Even I did not think so much in depth about the trains..thats why you are so special.. and a dedicated fan following that your story commands..Bravo!!

komaalrani

 

[komaalrani]

Wow Madam..such minute detailing is what makes this story a true masterpiece. No doubt about it. Even I did not think so much in depth about the trains..thats why you are so special.. and a dedicated fan following that your story commands..Bravo!!

komaalrani

Thanks so much, You are a pillar of strength,

 

[komaalrani]

Awesome super duper gazab updates dear Komal didi



sorry for delay didi,couldn't track

Thanks so much, but index hai naa pahle page pe

koyi baat nahi aapke aane ki khushi men next page thodi der men aur abki no delay.

 

[komaalrani]

Bohot badiya shuruaat.

Bahoot bahoot dhanyvaad, aage ki posts par bhi aapke comments ka intezaar rahega

 

[komaalrani]

फागुन के दिन चार भाग ९
रीत की रीत रीत ही जाने


soon.