★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Notebook]

Yar aj First time koi story mere dil ko lagi hy main na apki pehli 2no stories padhi magar woh mujha kuch khas ni lagi
Magar is story na emotional hi kar diya yar kasm sa kiya story likh hy
Main apko is story ka liya 10/10 du ga

Thanks a lot bhai for reading story . Mai bhi likhte huye bhawuk ho gaya . Aap ko pasand aayi mujhe bahut khushi hai is baat ki

 

[Notebook]

REVIEW

STORY - Baba ki pahadi

WRITER- Notebook

LINK – https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-699563


shandaar plot hai bahut badhiya likha aapne bhai maja aa gawa thoda sa dukh bhi hua..log zindgi me aage badhne ki chah me pichla sab bhul baithte hain aur fir jab kuch karna chahte to time nahi hota..awesome story..mai aapko 10 me 10 deta hun

Kahani ko Pasand karne ke liye aap ka dil se dhanyawad

 

[Notebook]

REVIEW

STORY - Baba ki pahadi

WRITER- Notebook

LINK – https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-2#post-699563



PLOT – ek chij sabse pahle bolna chahunga ,bahut hi behtreen story hai….

Mahwakansha jab wakti ke sar par chad jaati hai to wo apne payar ko bhi bhool jaata hai ,jis pyar ke liye use har khusi chahiye thi wo us pyar ko hi bhool jaata hai ,

Is story me apko emotion milega sath hi suspense bhi aur thoda thrill bhi ,

Story ka follw bahuth hi achcha hai aur lambi story hone ke bad bhi padne me kahi bhi ye bor nhi karegi ,har scene ke bad apko alage pal ko janne ki utsukata hote rahegi ,

Ye story apko bandh kar rakhti hai ,jab wo adami pahadi me jaata hai fir us ladki se mulakar aur uski story sunna,yahi par reader ladki ki story me kho jaata hai lekin fir wo story adhuri rahti hai jo ki bad me puri hoti hai ,udyan ke waps dharmshala jaane aur uski asaliyat samne aane se …..

Fir ek dard aur ek emotion readers ko feel hota hai jo ki story ko mukamml bana deta hai,

Iski ending bhi bahut hi shandar ki gayi hai jo ki har suspense ko kholti hai……..

NOTE FOR WRITER- Notebook ji bahut hi behtreen story hai aapki ,gajab ka plot hai aur sath hi bahut hi badiya narration hai …

Best of luck for contest….

Thank you Dr sahab story ko pasand karne ke liye aap ke shabd mere liye bahumulya hain

 

[Damha]

TITLE - Wah Kiya
Pyar He

plot - bhai main copy nahi kaho ga but pura theme song zindgi di paudi se liya gya hai feelings bhi koi khas nai dikhi ap ne story me intro bhi theek se nahi diya i think ap ko apni ek alag soch se kahani likhni chahiye baki wording achi thi story achi thi per apni hoti to zada acha hota i give you 10/3 Rating

 

[MEHAR1234]

TITLE Wah Kiya Pyar He

Ak lerka jo subah Collage jata tha phir collage ke bad ak hotal Main Waiter ka kam bhi kerta tha qk lerka akela tha aur bhot gareeb bhu tha hotal bhot bari thi jha larke lerkiya dono waiter ka kam kerte the

Lerka Dil ka bhot acha tha her kisi se pyar se bat karta tha baro aur choto ki izzat kerta tha is wajah see hotal ma is lerke ki buot izzat thi

Wahi ak lerki bhi kam kertu thi jo bhot Khubsurat thi per lerke ki tarah hy gareeb thi

Phir ak din dono ma dosti bhi ho gay aur dono ak sath milker kam kerte the

Lerki...... Wase tum collage bhi jate ho na

Main...... Han qk main per ker khud ak achi job kerna chata hun

Lerki...... Han ma bhi collage per rahi hun per serkari collage he

Lerka..... To kiya howa dil se study karo kamiyabi khudi mile gi

Lerki..... Hmmmm

Lerka...... Ma yha kam bhi ker rha hun per apni manzil bhi dund rha hun jis ke liya ma bna hun jis see mara featur ban jay

Lerki...... Han sab thik ho jay ab kam per diyan do werna maneger gosa ho jay ga

Lerka..... Han wo to he chalo

Phir ase hy din guzerte gay dono ak dosre ke aur qreeb a gay dono ma pyar ho gya

Lerka..... Wah yar dekho kasa dosti pyar ma badal gay mujha se kabi door mat jana mana ma gareeb hun per jo ho saka wo karo ga ji apke liya

Lerki...... Mujhe bas apka pyar chaye jiii aur kuch nhi

Lerka...... Wo to mila ga

Phir ase hy din guzer te gay dono ma pyar bhi berta gya dono ak sath gomne jate the suba collage doper kam per rat ko dono kuch time sath rah ker phir ghar chale jate the

Ase hy ak din lerka jaldi hotal a gya aur lerki ka wait kerne laga tabi wo lerki a gay

Lerka..... Yar kitna let ho tum

Larki..... Sorry jan wo mujhe bus nhi mili is liya

Larka..... Maneger ne bola tha na jaldi ana he aj meeting bhi he hum sab empoly ki

Lerki..... Han mujhe pata he ab chalo jaldi

Lerka..... Han chalo jaldi

Phir wo dono under gay kapre change kiya abi meeting ma kuch time tha lerki chali gay bahir lerka tyar ho ker jasa bahir aya to use lerki ka bag mila jo khula howa tha lerka na bag utha ya

Tabi bag ma ak dairy nazer ai jise usne nikal li aur khol ker dekhne laga to us ma kuch likha howa tha wo use parne laga

Dairy... Larki ki zubani

Mari zindagi bachban seee bhot takleef dukh aur dard se bari howi he bachpan ma maa baap ka sath choota us ke bad ma chacha chachi ke sath rahne lagi

Per wo bhi do saal pla sath chor gay ma akeli ho gay per ma khud ki life age laker chali collage ke sath kam bhi kerne lagi ase hy din guzerte gay phir mujhe ak lerke see pyar howa jo mujhse bhot pyar kerta he main bhi us se bhot ptar kerti hun

Meri zindagi us lerke ka sath achi hone lagi hum dono gareeb the per khush the apni life ma per ak din achnak mujhe khoon ki ultiya ane lagi nak see khoon kan see khoon nikal ne laga maine kisi nhi bata ya aur doctor se pata kiya to mujhe blood cainser ho gya he

Ma doctor ki bat sun ker mujhe kiya hone laga ma ghar aker rone lagi qk meri abi life bani he phir ma khud mara pyar ka sath chor ker chali jao gi doctor ne bola mera pass kitna waqt he ye kisi ko nhi pata kabi bhi kuch bhi ho sakta ma gareeb hun kuch nhi ker sakta ab mera pass jitna bhi waqt he ma apne pyar ke sath rahna chati hun

Jab lerka ne dairy per to ki ankhon ma ansoo a gay aur wahi beth ker rone laga bagir meeting shuro ho gay thi lerka jasa tasa khud ko thik ker ke meeting attand ki phir jab meeting over howi to jaker lerki ke gale lag gya aur rone laga

Lerki..... Kiya howa yar tum ro q rahe ho hm

Lerka...... Tumne mujhe se chupaya

Lerki..... Maine kiya chupa ya

Lerka..... Ke tume blood cainser he

Larki ne jab ye suna to wo bhi rone lagi

Larki ..... Ma aur kiya kertu ma tume khona nhi chati main ye soch ker nhi bata ya ke ager tume pata lag gya to tum sath na chor do mera is liya nhi bata ya

Lerka..... Ma q sath shoro ga tera ab ma her samay tera sath raho ga main tera elaj to nhi ketwa sakta qk main bhi qreeb hun per tere dil ma itna pyar berdunga ke kabi ro gi nhi bakhi jo hoga dekha jay ga

Dono gale lag ker rone lage phir ase hy din guzerte gay lerka hamesha lerki ke sath rahne laga do mahine guzer gay larka lerki ke sath rah ker to use bhi bhi blood cainser ho gya per kabi lerki ka sath nhi chora

Phir ak din lerki ka samay a gya lerki mer gay aur dosre din hy lerka bhi mer gya kiya pyar tha kiya zindagi thi dono ki bale gareeb the per bho khush the

Dono main pyar bhi bhot tha per dono apni life age nhi bara sake choti umer ma dono ko cainser ho gya per dono ne ak dosre ka sath nhi chora

Wah kiya pyar tha per aj to hawas hy sab ka pyar ameer log ro rahe he paise hone ke bawajood bhi larkio ki izzat kharab ho rahi he rape ho rahe he kiya hoga age uper wala jane

End
Zindagi bhot haseen he dosto khushi khushi nikal lo werna dukh aur dard ke elwa kuch nhi mila ga

I hope story achi lagi ho to enjoy kerna ager achi na ho to maaf kerna

Read my story

Zindagi ke ankhon rand

BHAI THEME A TO Z COPY THA FROM SONG OF ZINDGI DI PAUDI
PAR APKI WORDING BOHAT HI KAMAL KI THI APKI STORY THI BHI BOHAT CHOTI MAGAR APNE LIKHNA KI KHOSISH TO KI
AUR SATH MAIN APNE STORY MAIN EK LESSON BHI THA KA AGAR PYAAR KARO TO MAUT TAK SATH NIBHAO UNCH NICH HOTI REHTI HY ZINDAGI MAIN
WESA BAS STORY THIK THI NA HI BAKWAS KEH SAKTE HAN NA HI BOHAT ACHI

 

[Vijay2309]

BHAI THEME A TO Z COPY THA FROM SONG OF ZINDGI DI PAUDI
PAR APKI WORDING BOHAT HI KAMAL KI THI APKI STORY THI BHI BOHAT CHOTI MAGAR APNE LIKHNA KI KHOSISH TO KI
AUR SATH MAIN APNE STORY MAIN EK LESSON BHI THA KA AGAR PYAAR KARO TO MAUT TAK SATH NIBHAO UNCH NICH HOTI REHTI HY ZINDAGI MAIN
WESA BAS STORY THIK THI NA HI BAKWAS KEH SAKTE HAN NA HI BOHAT ACHI

Agar ye story kahi likhi hai to bolo ki copy hai....writer ne story gaane se uthayi ya movie se us se farak nahi padta

 

[Lucky lerka]

BHAI THEME A TO Z COPY THA FROM SONG OF ZINDGI DI PAUDI
PAR APKI WORDING BOHAT HI KAMAL KI THI APKI STORY THI BHI BOHAT CHOTI MAGAR APNE LIKHNA KI KHOSISH TO KI
AUR SATH MAIN APNE STORY MAIN EK LESSON BHI THA KA AGAR PYAAR KARO TO MAUT TAK SATH NIBHAO UNCH NICH HOTI REHTI HY ZINDAGI MAIN
WESA BAS STORY THIK THI NA HI BAKWAS KEH SAKTE HAN NA HI BOHAT ACHI

BHAI THEME A TO Z COPY THA FROM SONG OF ZINDGI DI PAUDI
PAR APKI WORDING BOHAT HI KAMAL KI THI APKI STORY THI BHI BOHAT CHOTI MAGAR APNE LIKHNA KI KHOSISH TO KI
AUR SATH MAIN APNE STORY MAIN EK LESSON BHI THA KA AGAR PYAAR KARO TO MAUT TAK SATH NIBHAO UNCH NICH HOTI REHTI HY ZINDAGI MAIN
WESA BAS STORY THIK THI NA HI BAKWAS KEH SAKTE HAN NA HI BOHAT ACHI

Wo main janta hun bhai main to bas ak baat batane ke liya ye likha take log bhi samjhe

 

[Lucky lerka]

TITLE - Wah Kiya
Pyar He

plot - bhai main copy nahi kaho ga but pura theme song zindgi di paudi se liya gya hai feelings bhi koi khas nai dikhi ap ne story me intro bhi theek se nahi diya i think ap ko apni ek alag soch se kahani likhni chahiye baki wording achi thi story achi thi per apni hoti to zada acha hota i give you 10/3 Rating

Han janta hun bhai ye maine gane se uthai he next main apni khud ki likho ga and thank you

 

[Vijay2309]

Han janta hun bhai ye maine gane se uthai he next main apni khud ki likho ga and thank you

Mast raho....theam aap kahi se bhi uthao story aapki honi chahiye

 

[Lucky lerka]

Mast raho....theam aap kahi se bhi uthao story aapki honi chahiye

Thank you