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[Milan2010]

Review for - Khwaab-Ek Haqiqat
By Milan2010

First of all sukriya aisi ek kahani likhne ke liye jisme ek Sandesh bhi hai .
Kahani Ka flow bohat Acha hai . Padhte padhte story kab khatam ho Gayi pata hi Nahi Chala . Title bilkul Sahi fit hota hai story par . Bas ek baat thodi ajeeb lagi , jab shreyshi ne use MAAF Kar Diya tha to Arav Apne aap ko kyu doshi maan Raha tha .
Once again thank you for this lovely story .

thanks bhai
jaankar aacha laga bhai ki aapko story pasand aayi
bhai, ab short story thi aur already words jayada ho gaye the toh fir uspar explanation nahi de paaya

 

[Milan2010]

Khwaab ek haqiqat by milan....


Bc, itni achi laundi

Bahut hee meethi story thi bhai , itni meethi ki diabetes ho gaya... Kuch jyada hee....
Dialogues were dull... Sab jo sunte aa rahe hai wahi... Scenes ka bhi yhi haal tha... Story ka plot bahut badhia tha , par execution mere khyal se utne achchhe se nhi ho paya...
Title bahut jordar tha bhai... Khwab ? Wo bhi haqiqat ? Deep one ....

gyani bhai ka review
mahan gyaani bhai paay laagu guruji
thanks gyani bhai ki aapne meri story padhi aur aapne pasand kiya
koi na, diabetes ki goli khaate raheaga
bas koshish kar raha tha ki iss bar kuch alag likhu, koshish karunga ki agli baar apne week points par aur mehnat karu
again gyani bhai

 

[Japs]

Review for ~Haunted
By humtum

The suspence,the thrill,the plot,the entertainment...hell, everything is here in this story.
Catchy build up , nice flow.
Brilliant writing tumtum.
All the very best

 

[Chutiyadr]

Ek baat to hai doctor ki aap ki likhi hui maine ab tak jitni bhi stories padi hai..wo hai bhaut hi umda wakai me aapki writing skills kamaal ki hai.

thanks bro..

 

[humtum]

My view on सातवां टोना.. written by Vijay2309

Story ka title dekh ke ye lagta hai koi jadu tona se related hai ye kahani...lekin vijay ne bahut khubsurti se kahaniko aage bhi badhaya hai aur dhasu type end bhi diya hai. Last me pata chalega sahi tone ke bare me.

badhiya selection plot ka,kuchh alag hai readers ke liye...kahani devnagri me likhi gayi hai esliye padhne me un logon ko bahut achhi lagegi jo jante hai. roman me hindi story padhne walon ke liye muskil hogi. Narration bahut shandaar hai,flow bilkul smooth hai aur bandhe rakhti hai apne suspense ki wajah se.

kul milakar ek bahut badhiya peskash USC ke hisab se,best of luck for contest

 

[Seducer1-7]

1. सातवां टोना

Writer = vijay2309

kahani ki shuruwat bahut hi sadharan tarike se hoti hai lekin kahani ko kese ghumana hai ye ek writter ke uppar hota hai jo ki yaha bakhub dikha, ek short story ke hisaab se bilkul sahi concept tha kahani kahi bor nahi karti or dhire dhire alag hi romanch peda karti hai lekin climax thora sa alag laga kehne ka matlab aadhi duniya hi goongi or behri ho gyi, ye toh esa hi ho gya ki 'thanos ne chutki bajayi or aadhi duniya ka satyanaash ho gaya' overall story ka concept bahut badiya tha, kahani ki Badhiya tarike se buna gaya or thrilling to shandhaar thi hi bas akhiri me is story ko 5 me se 3.5 sitare deta hu

 

[humtum]

Review for ~Haunted
By humtum

The suspence,the thrill,the plot,the entertainment...hell, everything is here in this story.
Catchy build up , nice flow.
Brilliant writing tumtum.
All the very best

thanks japu bhai,jaldi me finish kiya tha ese....chaliye aapko achhi lagi to mera prayash safal raha

 

[humtum]

khoobsurat kahani maza aa gaya padh ke....

Kahani ki shuruaat main mujhe laga ki ye koi family drama hoga lekin jaise jaise mai is kahani main aage badhta gaya meri utsukta badhti chali gayi...tindar pe mili us ladki se milne jab kahani ka hero jaata hai to ek baar to mujhe laga ki kahi uska beta hi waha naa pahunch jaaye....lekin aisa hua nahi or akhir main aapne life ko chuna or bacha liya khud ko or apne pariwar ko gart main jaane se.....
Bahut bahut shukriya ek behtarin kahani hum sab ke samne rakhne ke liye..
Main is kahani ko 5 m se 4.5 ank deta hu ... 0.5 ank isliye kam diya kyonki tinder ke baare main mujhe pura gyaan nahi diya

for your rebu main khud tinder ka victim hu. ek samay tha jab bahut sahi tha ,maine bhi bahut maze lute lekin aajkal to randi bazaar ban gaya hai

tips ke liye pm karo,sab bata dunga

 

[Casinar]

My review for
Golden Eagle
By
Lone_wolf

First of all I am very thankful and grateful to you for posting an English short story, for at the time I had requested you to do so we almost had no English entries. So once again accept my heartfelt thanks.
Coming to the story, well I liked it, honestly. Had not at all expected a sci-fi story from you. But it is good. A true writer must try everything. And you did it well.
Doctors normally do use animals to test many meds and products before comercialising it.
This short story makes us wonder as the future can lead men to be so greedy as to undergo such things like it happens in the story.
Narration is good, description goes well with the narration and the writer remained stuck to the subject all along the story from start to end.
Only the end part seemed to me was hurried, or ended in a rush. The end could hv been much better and grand.
Anyhow, appreciated this one.
All the best for the contest bro.

 

[The Immortal]

Review for swipe left
By humtum
First of all thank you for this lovely story.
Ek bohat hi Achi peshkas hai ye story.
Pehle to mujhe bhi laga ki ye story family drama type ki hone wali but jab story Puri padhi tab story ka motive samjh aaya, bich Mai ek Baar laga ki ye vampire Bhai ki Adultery user ID password ki Tarah hogi but Apne is story ko ek bohat pyara sa end Diya .
Narration , no doubt experience bol Raha tha yahan , awwal number tha narration . Mujhe apki ye peshkas Bohat Pasand aayi.
Once again thank you for this lovely story.