★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[kamdev99008]

Yahi galt karte ho kyoki compitition morality ki nhi story ki hai,yanha shabdo ka jal jyada mayne rakhta hai...Khair saka apna tarika hai...

shabdon ke jaal bunne wale to ap hain, bhaiya ji hai, rajesh bhai aur casinar ji hai...... aur bhi bahut se bade bade writers hain.......me thehra ek chhota sa reader..........reader ki tarah hi review dunga na..........

 

[Damha]

Bhai g bhawna dikhana morality dikhana hamara kam tha ap ko wahan shabdon ka jal he bunna chahiye

bhai yehi mera tareeka hai.....sochne ka......... me shabdon ke jaal ko nahi uski bhawna ko samajhta hu

 

[Chutiyadr]

shabdon ke jaal bunne wale to ap hain, bhaiya ji hai, rajesh bhai aur casinar ji hai...... aur bhi bahut se bade bade writers hain.......me thehra ek chhota sa reader..........reader ki tarah hi review dunga na..........

Chalo meri dusari story par bhi to review de do, subah subah gali sunne ka man kar raha hai mujhe
Aur reader kabhi chhota nahi hota kyoki wo ek writer ko bada bana deta hai

 

[Chutiyadr]

Review on story वो कोन थीं
Written by Chutiyadr

Mene pehle bhi aapki bahut si story padi hai or sabhi bahut badhiya likhi thi apne, is lekhni me suspense or thrill dono hi tha magar har mansik roop se bimar vyakti ki kahani ka ant ek jesa hi hota hai, khair agar koi vyakti mansik bimari ka shikaar hai toh us ka ilaaj bhi hospital me reh kar hi hona chahiye, yaha sagar ko samajna chahiye tha ki madhu ki haalat behad kharab hai or situation toh pehle se out of control thi, yaha dil se nahi dimaag se kaam lena jaruri tha par sagar se esa nahi kiya, use ghar pe reh kar ilaaj karwane ka decision galat saabit hua or usi ke chalte usne apni jaan or apni ijjat dono gawa di, kahani bahut badhiya thi or apne readers ko akhiri tak baand ke rakhe hue thi, best of luck for contest

Seducer1-7 bhai itne pyare review ke liye bahut bahut dhanyawad..
Bhai wo sager nahi tha uska nam akash tha...Aur madhu ko sirf paise ke khatir apne sath rakha tha...

 

[The Immortal]

Review for - LOVE WITH FIXERR
By Damha

First of all thanx is story ke liye
Ek Achi peshkas hai ye story, kahani Ka flow Acha hai aur narration bhi acha hai , language par Mai Nahi bolunga kyuki sayad Hindi apki shaily Nahi hai , kahani ki ending thodi filmy thi par mujhe Pasand aayi kafi, bich Mai ek jagah thoda ajeeb laga tha soniya ki age ko leke but end hote hote wo bhi clear ho Gaya , kahani ko Acha piroya hai sabdo mai suru se end tak .
Mujhe kafi pasnd aayi apki ye peshkas .
Once again thank you for this lovely story.
Best of luck for contest

 

[Casinar]

My Review for
Haunted
by humtum
HT bhai aap ki hinglish Entry pehla padha aur usske comparison mein yeh wala mujhe bahot ziada weak laga
plot achi hai, story ki narration achi hai,
Something which I did not understand is what had Varma aunty's fruit laden van which disappeared from outside the bungalow had to do with the story?!!
story to ghost ki belief par hai nah? to yeh pehla paragraph ka hona nah hona kuch atpata laga, weise pegla para padhkar mujhe laga koyi chorr ki kahani hai aur chorr ko dhunda jaega puri kahani mein
the first para of this story is very very interesting, the way the description of the colony and all events are told are really too good which made me read ahead with eager but to see all changing in the next para.
I felt that the first para is from another story not related to the actual story.
Well after that the whole narration and description about sanju going into the haunted house one year earlier and a second time were all well written.
the collective belief that the house was haunted was just people thought and finally Sanju succeeded to know that there was nothing inside the house.
in the whole good narration and good build up.
al the best HT bro.

 

[Casinar]

My review for
My Sweet sister
by bondjamesbond09
First of all, I thank James bro for taking part by posting a story in English, as I requested him to do so.
my sweet sister relates the very first encounter of a brother with his young sister.
incest story which many youngs would have fantasized many a time in their life.
It's like a dream come true for a youngster who desired his sister and that night she was all his as she agreed to please him.
Incest readers would certainly have loved this particular short story.
thanks James bro and all the best my friend.

 

[Casinar]

Review on : Mera Hero..

Writer : Casinar

Dear Casinar bhai

Well the story made me really emotional Its very rare to find these type of souls nowadays. Really one do not need six pack abs , dashing or extraordinary super powers . Only need is pure ( Reality check - Money too ) like satish. I really loved the story very much


PLOT: The story revolves around two main characters a sweet girl and her hero ( ) satish. The "Mera Hero " find little girl (illegitimate) lying on roadside dumped by her prostitute mom. I would not give further spoilers but will say that the story really worked due to bucket-full emotions poured by casinar bhai into its narration . Be sure to read till the end or you will miss the emotional-painful pinch by casinar on the cheeks of every reader .

VERDICT: The writer has done commendable job in building the character of pooja and satish. The emotions are of the story and they are dipped in full innocence with lavishing coating. . The flow of the story tastes like sweet butter . I read it in one go , thats the reason I feel it finishes very early btw was hoping for " Yeh maange more" . Only minor complaint is that I wanted to dig more story to get an Idea that how come satish easily change from being Sadakshaap into a mature responsible person for pooja.


Kudos to the lovely casinar bhai and for giving us such a sweet story.

The story is 10/10

REGARDS

THE BLUE PRINCE

Thanks very very much for the beautiful review bro. Loved it.
U asked how Satish changed from sadakchaap to a responsible person?
Bro that is the whole story itself isnt it? The only naby he took fr8m the street changed him to b responsible to look after her and raise her. Thats it.
Thanks again bro. And I have an English entry as well, will wait for your review on that too.

 

[bondjamesbond09]

My review for
My Sweet sister
by bondjamesbond09
First of all, I thank James bro for taking part by posting a story in English, as I requested him to do so.
my sweet sister relates the very first encounter of a brother with his young sister.
incest story which many youngs would have fantasized many a time in their life.
It's like a dream come true for a youngster who desired his sister and that night she was all his as she agreed to please him.
Incest readers would certainly have loved this particular short story.
thanks James bro and all the best my friend.

Thank you very much brother for the lovely review

 

[kamdev99008]

Chalo meri dusari story par bhi to review de do, subah subah gali sunne ka man kar raha hai mujhe
Aur reader kabhi chhota nahi hota kyoki wo ek writer ko bada bana deta hai

dr sahab serial no. se review de raha hu...........
aj agar update se mafi mil jaye to baki ki sari stories ke review de dunga
........................

aur gaali nahi deta............ apko criticize karta hu........... tabhi to ap har agli update ko aur bhi khatarnak banate ho

tab tak time pas karo..........kam shuru kar raha hu