★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Casinar]

The Devil Who destroyed my life by Casinar
Very well written story casi bro
Langauhe is very good and narration fluent & smooth. Plot is rather simple but interesting ; it's very very relevant in contemporary society. your excellent writings skill makes it even better.
What I specifically liked about the story is it's short and crisp statements which makes story easy to read and understand.
Story carries a meaning and a lesson for us. Also a kind of sad love story which has a devil in the form of a drug addict.
Overall, story is superbly written, crisp, concise and have all the necessary ingredients of a good short story.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
All the best for the contest

thanks very much, Romeo bro
I think this is the first-ever review of yours on any of my stories?
it's a pleasure bro, thanks very very much
btw I was surprised to see your entry in Devnagri which I can't read, last VAlentine you had written in Hinglish
I am really very happy to read you review bro

 

[Romeo 22]

thanks very much, Romeo bro
I think this is the first-ever review of yours on any of my stories?
it's a pleasure bro, thanks very very much
btw I was surprised to see your entry in Devnagri which I can't read, last VAlentine you had written in Hinglish
I am really very happy to read you review bro

yes! First review. Till now read your stories as silent reader but have read most of them
I love to write in Devnagri bhai
I will send you if I could convert it into Roman.

 

[KR$NA]

AMAR-KALPANA (DEPTH OF LOVE) by The Immortal


Immo bhai sabse pahle to suno Jab maine kahani ka naam padha tha to socha tha ki koi prachin type ki story hogi like jodha - Akbar or bajirao mastani par lekin ye ek khoobsurat love story thi jisme love , emotions aur bahut sara suspence bhara hua tha .

Kahani ka plot used to nahi hone ki wajah se reader ko baandh kar rakhne me poori tarah kamyab raha Kahani me love story ke do stages hain ek bhooli huyi jis se Amar aur kalpna anjan hain aur ek Amar kalpna ki tatkalik love story.

Amar ka devotion gajab ka tha ye jante huye bhi ki kalpna ke pahle pyar ke mil jane par uska nuksan ho sakta hai phir bhi banda laga raha uske bf ko khojne me wakai aisa pyar naseebon ki baat hai warna aaj kal to seedhe "tujhe maar kar mar jaunga" wala dilougue de marte hain lovers ek doosre ke munh pe

Story ka flow aur suspence shandar hai jo ki ant tak barkaraar rahta hai, bas ek baat is pyari si kriti ko kalpnik kahani kar deti hai aur wo hai Amar aur kalpna ka after accident same bimari "
VASCULAR COGNITIVE IMPAIRMENT" ho jata aur dono ki memory lost ho jati hai, Ye rarest rare se bhi rare laga mujhe .

Aap ki bhasha par pakad shandar hai,Story ka flow gajab ka hai,Story ka plot superb hai . Thanks for posting this wonderful story bhai

 

[kamdev99008]

The Devil Who Destroyed My Life
English
Casinar
a marvelous story on a serious subject.........but i don't believe any lifeless thing can be evil.... evil resides only in the mind of a living being. i have a different theory for these occurrences to handle practically....... but let it

anyway..... your subject, narration and flow is excellent........ story is heart touching
casi bhai ..........i am fan of your command on both languages english & hindi......

my rating is 8 out of 10 for this story

 

[kamdev99008]

" Ek Mukammal Mohabbat "
Hindi
Notebook

gazab............... kahani se bhi jyada impressive aapki narration..............

apka kahani likhne ka andaj mujhe sabse jabardast laga..........khastaur se shabdon ka chayan

kahani badhiya hai................

lekin isme majhabi mudda kuchh bhi nahi tha...........ek simple love story........ status aur us status ko banaye rakhnewale maa baap ......... ye humesha hote rahe hain aur hote raheinge.............. arman aur artika ke jeevan me visham parishthiyan sirf kuchh dino ke liye ayi lekin unke beech ke communication gap ne un dino ko kheenchkar 10 saal lambe arse me badal diya..........
anyway.................. good

10 me se 7 ank...........apke likhne ke andaj ke liye

 

[Casinar]

yes! First review. Till now read your stories as silent reader but have read most of them
I love to write in Devnagri bhai
I will send you if I could convert it into Roman.

Bhai then do it fast before announcement of winner and before this thread gets closed so that i can post my review. Do just like Vijay did. You saw it I reviewed his story as he sent me the transliteration of devnagri. Tum bhi bhejo nah main zaroor review dunga.

 

[Casinar]

The Devil Who Destroyed My Life
English
Casinar
a marvelous story on a serious subject.........but i don't believe any lifeless thing can be evil.... evil resides only in the mind of a living being. i have a different theory for these occurrences to handle practically....... but let it

anyway..... your subject, narration and flow is excellent........ story is heart touching
casi bhai ..........i am fan of your command on both languages english & hindi......

my rating is 8 out of 10 for this story

Thanks very much Kaamdev bhai.
Well, its Devil as I gave it the title, but its only a title generally speaking as people tend to address to something which causes harm
Thanks very much and it pleases me to know that you liked my writing.

 

[kamdev99008]

Thanks very much Kaamdev bhai.
Well, its Devil as I gave it the title, but its only a title generally speaking as people tend to address to something which causes harm
Thanks very much and it pleases me to know that you liked my writing.

i believe "nothing can harm you and nothing can heal.... it's only you ...can" so if there is a devil or angel in your life... it's only YOU

i am die hard fan of your stories... since exbii, then xossip

 

[Notebook]

" Ek Mukammal Mohabbat "
Hindi
Notebook

gazab............... kahani se bhi jyada impressive aapki narration..............

apka kahani likhne ka andaj mujhe sabse jabardast laga..........khastaur se shabdon ka chayan

kahani badhiya hai................

lekin isme majhabi mudda kuchh bhi nahi tha...........ek simple love story........ status aur us status ko banaye rakhnewale maa baap ......... ye humesha hote rahe hain aur hote raheinge.............. arman aur artika ke jeevan me visham parishthiyan sirf kuchh dino ke liye ayi lekin unke beech ke communication gap ne un dino ko kheenchkar 10 saal lambe arse me badal diya..........
anyway.................. good

10 me se 7 ank...........apke likhne ke andaj ke liye

Sir thank you much meri writing ko pasand karne ke liye mere liye ye bahut badi baat hai .

Haan mazhabi mudda utna nahi hai kyu ki forum ke rules ne allowed nahi kiya . Story likhne se pahle maine permission mangi thi kyu ku ye religious issue ho sakta tha to mujhe sirf itna hi permission mila

Maa baap hi to beech me aate hain sir wo log ye bhool jate hain ki un logon se hi to samaj bana hai .

Thanks again for liking my writing

 

[mysteryman]

Review for - Ek ahsash jo jindgi badal de...
By mysteryman

First of all thank you for this lovely story
Kahani Ka plot Acha hai .
Is kahani ko padhte hue mujhe ae Dil hai muskil Ka ek dialogue yaad aa Gaya "ek tarfa pyar ki taakat hi Kuch aur Hoti hai " , Khair kahani Achi hai , ek ladka ek ladki ki dosti, ek tarfa pyar aur uska dard Kaisa hota hai bakhubi dikhaya Gaya hai ,
Mujhe apki ye peshkas Pasand aayi.
Best of luck for contest

THANKS BHAI REVIEW KE LIYE...

MERI STORY KO KUCHH LOGO NE PADA MUJHE BEHAD KHUSHI HE OR JYADA LOGO NE NHI PADA IS BAA Y KA GAM...

YE EK REAL LIFE STORY HAI...

JO KI ABHI BHI CONTINUE HAI OR VO LADKA US LADKI SE ROOH WALI MOHBBAT KARTA HE YE JANTE HUE BHI KI VO USE KABHI HASIL NHI KAR PAYEGA ....