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[The Immortal]

Review for - Love at it's purest form
By zopion Bhai

First of all thank you for this wonderful story
Again a great story , great plot , narration too good , flow .
Like your Hindi story I mentioned one thing that , mom's love is unconditional , they give their life for Thier childrens like your this story .
I was flowing in your story , you have such great writer skill Zopi Bhai .
I liked your story very much .
Once again thank you for this wonderful story
Best of luck for contest

 

[zopion]

Review for - Love at it's purest form
By zopion Bhai

First of all thank you for this wonderful story
Again a great story , great plot , narration too good , flow .
Like your Hindi story I mentioned one thing that , mom's love is unconditional , they give their life for Thier childrens like your this story .
I was flowing in your story , you have such great writer skill Zopi Bhai .
I liked your story very much .
Once again thank you for this wonderful story
Best of luck for contest

thanks a lot for your beautiful review The Immortal bhai
parents are just next to g@d for their children & maa to bas maa hoti hai
thanks once again bhai

 

[zopion]

Story Title - AMAR-KALPANA (DEPTH OF LOVE)

Writer - The Immortal

wonderful love story bhai
Amar aur kalpana ke pyar ki kahani immortal bhai ki jubani

wonderful plot & superb narration with great flow .... Every word in story was suitable for the story ... Apne story ka suspense ending tak barkarar rakha hai jo acha laga aur ek ache writer ki nisani hai .... I hope ki story section ko apki taraf se aur bhi dilchasp kahaniya milengi padhne ke liye ....

All the best for the contest bro

 

[The Immortal]

Story Title - AMAR-KALPANA (DEPTH OF LOVE)

Writer - The Immortal

wonderful love story bhai
Amar aur kalpana ke pyar ki kahani immortal bhai ki jubani

wonderful plot & superb narration with great flow .... Every word in story was suitable for the story ... Apne story ka suspense ending tak barkarar rakha hai jo acha laga aur ek ache writer ki nisani hai .... I hope ki story section ko apki taraf se aur bhi dilchasp kahaniya milengi padhne ke liye ....

All the best for the contest bro

zopion Bhai Ka review
Sukriya Bhai for your wonderful review
Apka ye review bohat mayne rakhta hai , apke Jaise ache writer se review milna hi badi baat hai .
Ss Mai jaldi hi story likhunga Zopi Bhai ,

 

[Champ_AK_81]

Story:- Ehsaas

Writer:- mohit98075

Superb story Mohit...Acchi tarah tumne dikhaya life aur usme aane wale changes ko.

Story me sabse accha role agar kisi ka laga toh wo hai Neha...Anu aur Mohit...Jinke bich ki daraar kaafi badh gaya tha usko usne bahut hi pyar se bhar diya.

Aur story me sabse jyada pasand ye aaya ki...Ek bacche ki acche parwarsish me uske Maa aur Baap dono ka jarurat hota hai...Aur Maa Baap ko bhi apne bacche ki khaatir aur unpar parne wali asar ko soch apna man mutaaw ya fir jhagada kam karna chahiye.

All the best for contest.

 

[Champ_AK_81]

Story:- Mamta ki ek murat - MAA

Writer:- zopion

A Story Dedicated to Mother!!!

Theme and plot of story was nice Zopion bhai...Bahut acche se ek Maa ki mamta aur uski dard ko aapne dikhaya.

Maa aur uski mamta...Jitna bhi taarif karo kam hai...Ek Maa apne baccho ki parwarish me, unhe kisi laayak banane me kitna kasht uthaati hai, kurbaani deti hai, sirf apne baccho ki fikar karte hue aur bina bina apne faaidaa dekhe ki bade ho kar bacche uski khayal rakhenge ya nahi yeh aapne bahut acche se dikhaya.

Aur kahani me aage jaa kar bacche badal gaye...Agar kisi ke pyar par ham shak karte hai kisi ki bhi baaton me aa kar toh aisa hi hota hai...Unhone ek aisi anmol cheej khoya hai jiske liye hamesha sirf paschataap hi rahega.

Air itna sab hone ke baawjud...Maa ka apne bacchon ke liye pyar...Fir bhi unke liye hi dua karna

Maa ka likha hua wo letter dil ko chhu gaya.

It was a great emotional story to read.

All the best for contest.

 

[Champ_AK_81]

Story:- Mera Hero

Writer:- Casinar

It is always great to read your Casi sir.

Bahut acche se aapne Hero ka matlab bataya...Koi bhi insaan hero ho sakta hai...Insaan bas apne karm se hero hote hai...Looks, body, paise se nahi.

Aapne story ek aise Ladka ke upar likha...Jo Hero toh bilkul bhi nahi tha...Lekin jindagi ne usse ek mauka diya...Aur mauka ka sahi istemaal karke wo hero ban gaya.

Usne sirf hero banne ke liye ye sab nahi kiya...Apna galti aur realization hone ke baad kiya.

Baaki story me aapne Satish, uske life aur condition ko kaafi acchi tarah se dikhaya...Aur saath hi Pooja ki bhi, uska soch uska feeling apne Hero ke liye.

Har ek line har ek baat ko aapne bahut acche se dikhaya...Especially wo Satish ka jawaab Pooja ke proposal par.

It was a great story to read with a message that anyone can be hero if they do heroic works.

All the best for contest.

 

[Mak]

Wah Kiya Pyar He
By: Lucky lerka
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Brother, You need to improve a lot. Mujhe samajh nahi aa raha main kya kahun.. Ye story se jyada short message laga mujhe. Conversations were very weak then all of the sudden love happened. Uske baad apne likha Ladka ladki ke saath rahne lagna iski wajah se use bhi Blood Cancer ho gaya? Ye bilkul bhi pachane wali baat nahi hai.. Blood Cancer doesn't spread like that. Anyways, Aapne koshish ki uski main sarahna karta hun.. But bahut improvement ki jaroorat hai.

Best of luck.
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[Casinar]

Story:- Mera Hero

Writer:- Casinar

It is always great to read your Casi sir.

Bahut acche se aapne Hero ka matlab bataya...Koi bhi insaan hero ho sakta hai...Insaan bas apne karm se hero hote hai...Looks, body, paise se nahi.

Aapne story ek aise Ladka ke upar likha...Jo Hero toh bilkul bhi nahi tha...Lekin jindagi ne usse ek mauka diya...Aur mauka ka sahi istemaal karke wo hero ban gaya.

Usne sirf hero banne ke liye ye sab nahi kiya...Apna galti aur realization hone ke baad kiya.

Baaki story me aapne Satish, uske life aur condition ko kaafi acchi tarah se dikhaya...Aur saath hi Pooja ki bhi, uska soch uska feeling apne Hero ke liye.

Har ek line har ek baat ko aapne bahut acche se dikhaya...Especially wo Satish ka jawaab Pooja ke proposal par.

It was a great story to read with a message that anyone can be hero if they do heroic works.

All the best for contest.

Bahot shukriya Champ bhai. Khushi hai k aap ko kahani achi lagi

 

[Geralt of Rivia]

Review of Delusion by harshit1890

Mystery aka harshit bhai ki kuchh stories maine xp me parhi thi and i know he is very good writer to unki yahan story dekh k main khud ko rok nahi paya parhne se. Mujhe pata nahi thi ki ye id harshit bhai ki hai warna pahle hi review chhap deta. To kahani iss prakar hai ki Protogonist Sakham pareshan hai. Job nhi mil rahi hai. Fir ek din ek accident hota hai. Fir lagta hai uske paas calculation ki superpower aa gayi hai. Arti mujhe pahle laga shayad uski gf vf hogi but vo usko apne ghar me panah deti hai bcoz usi ki wajah se saksham ka accident hua tha. Sakaham calculation power ki wajah se office ka hero ban jata hai. Har koi usse impressed hai MILF rekha bhi jo uske office me hi kaam karti hai jisko vo thokta bhi hai.
End me Pata chalta hai everything is delusion except saksham vo accident jiski wajah se vo uss delusion me pahuncha. End me ek twist hai... Doctor saksham k bill ka amount exact wahi likhta hai jitni salary ki demand saksham ne delusion me ki thi. To kya real me uske paas vo calculation power aa gayi thi and delusion me hone k bawajood bhi he was doing calculation of his hospital expenses too that were in his mind? Tabhi usne itni salary demand ki?
Anyway jo bhi ho it is very interesting story. And i enjoyed it (even though sex scene didnt make me hard ) Good luck for contest.