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★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

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Review by of 'Mera Hero' by Casinar

This is first time when I m reading casi bhai's story. Kafi naam suna tha casi bhai ka xossip pe yahan unki story dekhi to socha parh k review de hi deta hu. Unki writing skill to sab koi jante hain kitni achhi hai. This story is very heart touching story, Ye story ek ladki Puja ki kahani hai jiske liye uska Pita yani jisne uska pala posa vo satish uska hero hai. Satish ek sadak chhap mawali hai par jub se puja uski life me ati hai vo ek achha insaan banne lag jata hai. Puja uski sagi beti nhi hai par vo uske liye sagi beti ya bahan se kahi zyada bad k hai aur vo usko usi roop me pyaar karta hai. Par twist ye hai ki Puja ka pyar alag hai vo Ishq karti hai Satish se....bole to jaisa Premi-Premika karte hain waisa wala ishq. Par apne hero ki khushi k liye puja apne pyar ki qurbani kar dusre se shadi kar parayi ho jati hai. Khair kahani is different and I enjoyed it. Kahani flow dialogue sub kuchh achha hai. Mumbaiya prashtbhumi par adharit hai. Sub kuchh kafi realistic hai. Thanks casi bhai for this story and all the best for USC!
 
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Review by of 'Mera Hero' by Casinar

This is first time when I m reading casi bhai's story. Kafi naam suna tha casi bhai ka xossip pe yahan unki story dekhi to socha parh k review de hi deta hu. Unki writing skill to sab koi jante hain kitni achhi hai. This story is very heart touching story, Ye story ek ladki Puja ki kahani hai jiske liye uska Pita yani jisne uska pala posa vo satish uska hero hai. Satish ek sadak chhap mawali hai par jub se puja uski life me ati hai vo ek achha insaan banne lag jata hai. Puja uski sagi beti nhi hai par vo uske liye sagi beti ya bahan se kahi zyada bad k hai aur vo usko usi roop me pyaar karta hai. Par twist ye hai ki Puja ka pyar alag hai vo Ishq karti hai Satish se....bole to jaisa Premi-Premika karte hain waisa wala ishq. Par apne hero ki khushi k liye puja apne pyar ki qurbani kar dusre se shadi kar parayi ho jati hai. Khair kahani is different and I enjoyed it. Kahani flow dialogue sub kuchh achha hai. Mumbaiya prashtbhumi par adharit hai. Sub kuchh kafi realistic hai. Thanks casi bhai for this story and all the best for USC!
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Bahot shukriya bhai iss review k liye. Mujhe khushi hai k aap ko kahani achi lagi.
 
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Chutiyadr said:
REVIEW

STORY - The Devil Who Destroyed My Life

WRITER- Casinar

LINK – https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-5#post-739000

PLOT – buri adato ka shaitan kisi bhi jindagi kharab karne ke liye kaafi hota hai ,aur agar ye adat nashe ki ho to insan khud to tabah karta hi hai pure pariwar ko bhi barbad kar deta hai ,

Mujhe englis stories ki jyda samjh nhi hai to main nahi kah sakta ki narration kaisa tha ,lekin padne me flow bahut hi achcha laga ,plot bhi bahut hi achcha tha kyoki aisi stories yanha jyda likhi nahi jaati isliye ise aap unique plot kah sakte hai..

Avinash ko khud ko aur apne pariwar ko tabah karte hue dekhna sach me dukhad hai ,khaskar shanaya ke liye dukh hota hai ,ant bilkul unexpected laga,kisi maa ke liye apne bete ko maar dena itani badi bat ho sakti hai ye ham soch bhi nahi sakte ,lekin jab samne beta nhi shaitan khda ho to ek maa ka dil bhi pasij sakta hai ,khaskar uska dil apni bahu ke liye dukhta hoga jo ki avinash se itana pyar karti thi ki har jabrdasti ke bad bhi usne avinash ke sath rahne ka faisala kiya ….



NOTE FOR WRITER – casi bhai English story thi isliye thode late se padha,aur ek hi sans me pura padh bhi liya ,ye story mujhe ek alag hi zone me le gayi,jo ek achchi story ki asali nishani hai ..thanks for this type ki story ,jo jivan ke jamini hakikat ko baya karti hai ...:superb:

Best of luck for contest….
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Tehe dil se shukriya bhai iss review k liye. Mujhe laga tha aap nahin padhoge, magar bahut khushi hui aap ki review padh kar. Aur bhi acha laga k aap ko kahani passand aayi.
 
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Review for - " Ek Mukammal Mohabbat "
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First of all thank you for this wonderful story :dost:
Kahani Ka plot , narration, flow , dialogue sab Kuch fabulous hai :bow:.
Actually Mai mujhe samjh hi Nahi aa Raha kya likhu, dil ki gehraiyo Mai utar Gayi apki lekhniy , dimak Mai abhi abhi ghum rahi hai story.
I just hate religious thing , lekin baat sirf religion ki Nahi hai , Kabhi Kabhi bade Apne ego, shaan Mai bachho ki ichaayo ko bilkul najar-andaz Kar dete hai ,
Kahani hai Arman or artika ki , ek meethe tarike se suru Hoti hui jis Tarah mukammal hui hai ya yun kahu ki jis Tarah se Apne Likha hai wo bohat kamaal Ka hai . Everything is just wow :bow:.
Mujhe apki ye peshkas Bohat Pasand aayi .
Once again thank you for this wonderful story :hug:
Best of luck for contest :thumbup:
 
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kahani bahut achchhi hai......... narration aisi hai ki bandhe rakhti hai....
lekin aise sanyog ....sanyog se hi hote hain ....ya kahaniyon me hote hain.... :D
aarohi ki yaaddast ane ke bad kahani ko thoda age lejakar happy ending dikhate to jyada behtar hota.....
is ending me pata nahi chalta... ki aarohi ke maa-baap ka kya reaction raha...aur aage unki jindgi me kya hua
yani....ek adhurapan sa rah gaya

is kahani ko 10 me se 7 ank
 
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Review for - Mamta ki ek murat - MAA
By zopion Bhai

First of all thank you for this lovely story.
Kahani bohat Achi hai aur utni hi Achi hai apki lekhniy :bow:
Plot Acha hai , narration kamaal Ka hai , flow saandaar Hai , ek Baar padhna suru Kiya to ant kab hua pata hi Nahi Chala , Jaise Jaise kahani padhta Gaya waise waise ye kahani dil Mai utarti Gayi , topic hi Aisa hai jitna likha Jaya ya jitna padha Jaye sab Kam hi lagta hai.
Mujhe khusi hui ki apne is topic par ek pyari si kahani likhi.
Mujhe apki ye peshkas Bohat Pasand aayi :dost:
Once again thank you for this wonderful story.
Best of luck for contest :thumbup:
 
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Review for -KALA BHENSA .
By Lovegaand

Pehle toh sukriya Bhai contest Mai story post Karne ke liye .
Story ke baare ek cheez Achi hai ki ise padhane Mai mujhe dikkat nahi aayi.
Bas writer se ek request hai ki UCS ki Kuch stories ko padhe , taki next contest Mai writer ko idea mil jaaye ki kis type ki story contest Mai log jyada padhte hai .
Baki apke efforts ke sukriya :dost:
 
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The Immortal said:
Review for - Mamta ki ek murat - MAA
By zopion Bhai

First of all thank you for this lovely story.
Kahani bohat Achi hai aur utni hi Achi hai apki lekhniy :bow:
Plot Acha hai , narration kamaal Ka hai , flow saandaar Hai , ek Baar padhna suru Kiya to ant kab hua pata hi Nahi Chala , Jaise Jaise kahani padhta Gaya waise waise ye kahani dil Mai utarti Gayi , topic hi Aisa hai jitna likha Jaya ya jitna padha Jaye sab Kam hi lagta hai.
Mujhe khusi hui ki apne is topic par ek pyari si kahani likhi.
Mujhe apki ye peshkas Bohat Pasand aayi :dost:
Once again thank you for this wonderful story.
Best of luck for contest :thumbup:
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thanks a lot The Immortal bhai
bhai maine dono stories contest ke final date par likhi hai aur plot bhi sudden jo dimag me aaya likhta chala gaya
mujhe bahut khushi huyi ki apko ye pasand aayi
thanks once again bhai :hug:
 
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