★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2020 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Damha]

Story:- unfaithful And alcoholic

Writer:- The Blue Prince


Review:- Ek short aur simple story jis ko bohat ache se narrate kia gaya hai aur flow bhi bohat acha tha Puri story me koi fazool dailouge nahi the Na story ko zada lamba kheencha gaya kuch cheeze Readers ke upar chor deni chahiye Ek biwi jo apne pati ko dokha de rahi thi Aur bohat chalaki se ek din us ne Apne pati ka kaam tamam ker dia apne boyfriend ke saath mil ker lekin kehte hai na Gunah chupaye nahi chupta Ek na ek din bahir aa he jata Bohat dafa waqt lagta hai kuch baar jaldi khul jata hai lekin gunah kabhi chupa nahi reh sakta Mujhe ap ki story achi lagi umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

 

[Naina]

Story = Wasl’e Yar ke din
Writer = Prince Sahil

aaj kal life mein itne vyastata ke chalte apne priyajano ka khabar bhi aise lete hai jaise kabar lete huye aur thodi der ruke toh jaise train hi chhuth jayegi.... ishi vyastata
ki bich corona ki wajah se lockdown ghostit kiya gaya ..lekin ek good effect bhi hua... ab ghar baithe waqt hi waqt mil gaye sabhi ko apne pariwar walo ke sath bharpur samay bitane ke liye... lekin joh log dur rahte hain unka kya.... toh uske liye Internet aur mobile ke sevaye hain na... jiske jariye ghar baithe hi kisi ka bhi haal chaal jaan sakte phone karke ya social sites se.. jaise is kahani ke indono premi jode ne bhi kiya.. waise video call isliye kiya taki aawaz ki sath sath apne priyatam ko dekh sake mahsoos kar sake....
romance se bharpur kahani rahi sath hi narrations aur language ki kaafi acchi thi....
Prince Sahil ji Brilliant story line with awesome writing skill

 

[Chutiyadr]

Story - शहर की लड़की



Link- https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...test-2020-entry-thread-★☆★.16291/post-1590254



Writer- Ashokafun30



About story-

Ashok bhai ki story bole to full

Ye ek ladki ki story hai jise ka nasha rahta hai , use jivan me bahut hi maje karne hai ,,

Shahar se maje karke uska pala ganw ke gabruo ke sath ho jata hai aur fir use apne jivan ka wo maja milta hai jiske liye wo taras rahi thi ..

No doute sex wale plot par ashokh bhai ka narration ..

Note for writer –
kya ashok bhai yanha bhi sex story pel diye

Padhkar maja aaya lekin ye long story rahti to jyda maja aata

Ab aapki story hai to main kuchh bol bhi nahi sakta, devnagri me aapki writing matlab bawal to machna hi hai

Best of luck for contest ?

 

[Ankitshrivastava]

Usc ke baad start karna

Aapne read ki....???

Well....USC ke baad hi start hogi....kyoki filhaal to main apni running story ke climax par kaam kar raha hu.....

Uske complete hote hi ye wali start hogi...

Thanks buddy......

 

[Fighter]

Story =Mere Humsafar (Aawara)
Writer = Fighter
sachha pyar kise kahte hai ushi ke adhar pe yeh kahani hai... alia pehle dur bhagti thi prince se...awara tha par sachha aashiq aur deewana.. prince pehle se ant uski har kadam par suraksha karta raha alia ki ...alia ko ish baat ki malumat nahi thi par ushe sana ne saari baat batake ehsaas karavaya ki prince mein sach mein jivan sathi banne ke liye joh khubiya honi chahiye woh sabhi hai... aur phir alia ne khud pratakchya roop se dekh liya ki kaise uski samman ke liye prince jakhmi hote huye bhi ravi jaise logo se bhid gaya.... kahani ki ant sukhad rahin dono ek ho gaye... humsafar ban gaye...
Bahot achhi aur dilachasp kahani thi...
Fighter ji Brilliant update with awesome writing skill

Thanks dear for liking & comment

Naina acha lga story aapko pasand aayi & y 2nd comment h meri story to mujhe lga story tik nhi h

 

[Damha]

Aapne read ki....???

Well....USC ke baad hi start hogi....kyoki filhaal to main apni running story ke climax par kaam kar raha hu.....

Uske complete hote hi ye wali start hogi...

Thanks buddy......

nahi abhi parhni hai

 

[Damha]

Story:- Behan ki nath ki thirkan


Writee:- Rebel.desi


Review:- Ek Bhai jo Khud ko apni behan ka rakhwala manta tha usi bhai ne apni behan ki izzat luti iss ko kis tarha bhi parha jaye ye rape he tha Ap ne bohat kuch jaldi karwa dia i think ye story contest ke liye sahi nahi thi Ap ko ye story ss me sahi se post karni chahiye thi jis me ap sab kuch details se likhte main chahta hu ke ap ye story baad me ss me post kare ek long story ke roop me Umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Ap ki koshis ki main qadar karta hu Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Story:- jehad

Writer:- DiNu DraCula


Review:- i request to my respected mods for remove this story Bhai ne jo baate beech me likhi hai iss ke jawab to main bohat ache se likh sakta hu lekin phir wohi Ek larai yahan shuru ho jaye gi Dinu Dracula bhai ap jo message dena chahte the wo ap alag tareeke se bhi de sakte the lekin ap ka message dene ka tareeka galat tha Iss story me religion base cheeze thi under age tha jis me age mention huwi thi Aur bhi bohat kuch galat likha gaya hai again i request for remove this story


Thank you

 

[Damha]

Story:- हवस से प्रेम तक


Writer:- Chutiyadr


Review:- Iss story me mujhe bohat cheeze daikhne ko mili Kaise ek behan Apne maa baap ki maut ke baad Halato se larte huwe Zindagi guzarti hai Aur apne bhai ko palti hai Halat kitne bhi bure ho lekin Wo himmat ke saath khari rahi Jaise ke main ne baban bhai ko story per review dete huwe kaha tha “zindagi hamesha 2 raaste deti hai ek sahi aur ek galat Galat raasta Asan zaroor hota hai Aur sahi raasta mushkil hota hai but its just you ke kya tum Sahi raaste per chal sako gye” iss story me suneeta ne Sahi wala raasta chuna Aur dati rahi Aur phir hume daikhne ko milta hai Saith ka beta Jis ko us ke dosto Aur daulat ke nashe ne bigar diya tha Aisa he hai bhai ke ek insaan ka kirdar hamesha us ke dosto se pehchana jata hai Kiu ke ek kharab phal puri phal ki paiti ko kharab ker deta hai Iss Dosti Aur Nashe ki wajha se us ne Suneeta per galat nazar daali aur us ke saath galat karne ki Chingari us ke andar aa gayi Aur iss chingari ko hawa di Mangloo ne jis wajha se Anand wo karne chal para jo uss ke liye Umar bhar ki saza ban sakta tha Wo apne dosto ke saath Suneeta ki izat lutne chal para lekin Suneeta ne tab bhi apni izaat ko lutne nahi diya jis ke liye wo Anaand Aur magloo se bhir gayi Lekin jab bhai ko pitte daikha to wo kamzoor per gayi lekin ap ne yahan bhi bohat maharat se dikhaya ke rishte insaan ki Kamzoori nahi Us ki taqat hote hai jis taqat ki wajha se Suneeta me ek josh aya aur us ne bure logo ko un ke karm ki saza de di Lekin us ne Anand ko chor diya kiu ke wo janti thi Anand bura insaan nahi tha us ke andar achai thi lekin logo ne us ko bura bana diya tha aur us ki achai ko us je andar he kanhi daba diya tha Saith ne Suneeta ko murder case se bachaya jo us ke bacho ki galtiyo ki maafi thi Aur aith ne suneeta ki ek ache ghar shadi ker di Jis ki wajha se se hariya bhi khush tha aur suneeta bhi Anand sudhar gaya us ko ek dusra moka mila jis ka us ne pura faida uthaya aur apne ap ko sudhar liya us ne Mujhe ap ki kahani bohat achi lagi umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

 

[Baban]

Story =RESPECT- THE CRUEL TRUTH
Writer = Baban

kahani ke jariye angel bahot badi sikh deke gayi hain.. angel joh bhi karti hai usse itni kama le taki do waqt ki roti se pait ki bhukh mita sake aur apne pariwar ko bhi paal sake.. lekin joh woh karti samaaj ke log ushe grina bhari nazaron se dekhti hai par woh bhul jate hai unme se kuch log naam bade aur darshan chhote jaise bhi hote hai... angel jaisi ladki chehre pe joh muskurahat leke jindagi jiti hai uske piche ki dukh dard kya kisi ne mahsoos ki hai... kin hataaton mein majoor hoke yeh kaam karti hai is baat ko shayad kabhi kisi ne mahsoos ki ho ..aur angel ki khudari toh dekho bina kaam ke mile paiso ko woh chu ti bhi nahi.. Kahani ki jariye yeh ek karara jawab diya hai un logo ke liye joh khane daant alag aur dikhane ke alag kism ke hote hai... writer sahab ne ishi baat ko dikhane ki koshish ki hain jishme puri tarike se saksham rahe... haan bas kuch jagah ho pe ek do spelling mistakes thi par koi baat nahi..
Kahani kaafi arthpurn aur dilchasp thi...
Baban ji Brilliant story line with awesome writing skill

Thank you Naina..... bahut khusi mili yeh jaanke ke aapko aur bahut readers ko meri story pasand ayi. Aap Sabhi ne story ke inner meaning and main point ko samajh paye. Hum sab bari bari gyaan dete hai par uska kitna percent khud palaan karte hai? Chahe woh society ke liye duty ho ya kisiki Respect.