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Story:- Agnipariksha
Writer:- Adirshi
Review:- Ek sachai per likhi gayi kahani lekin lahani ke kirdar mujhe thore kamzoor lage matlab Aisa laga jaise un me dimagh ki kami hai Zulm karne wale se galat Zulm sehne wala hota hai Manisha ne bohat jaldi har man li aur Manish ko bhi majboor ker dia Mana manisha ke saath galat huwa lekin wo chahti to ye galat dusro ke saath hone se rok sakti is burai ke khilaf lar sakti thi lekin us ne kisi buzdil insaan ki tarha apni takleefo se bhagna chaha aur apni jaan de di aj duniya me 70% rape iss liye rukte nahi hai kiu ke aam insaan iss ke khilaf awaz nahi uthate lekin iss me un ki bhi galti nahi kiu ke un ke paas koi support nahi hota un ka adha honsla yanhi toot jata hai un ki sune ga kon kon madad kare ga un ki taklif samjhe ga anyways storie achi thi Lafzo per ap ki pakar achi thi bus kuch words the jo samajhne me mushkil huwi narration aur flow acha tha Umeed karta hu aage ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest
Writer:- Adirshi
Review:- Ek sachai per likhi gayi kahani lekin lahani ke kirdar mujhe thore kamzoor lage matlab Aisa laga jaise un me dimagh ki kami hai Zulm karne wale se galat Zulm sehne wala hota hai Manisha ne bohat jaldi har man li aur Manish ko bhi majboor ker dia Mana manisha ke saath galat huwa lekin wo chahti to ye galat dusro ke saath hone se rok sakti is burai ke khilaf lar sakti thi lekin us ne kisi buzdil insaan ki tarha apni takleefo se bhagna chaha aur apni jaan de di aj duniya me 70% rape iss liye rukte nahi hai kiu ke aam insaan iss ke khilaf awaz nahi uthate lekin iss me un ki bhi galti nahi kiu ke un ke paas koi support nahi hota un ka adha honsla yanhi toot jata hai un ki sune ga kon kon madad kare ga un ki taklif samjhe ga anyways storie achi thi Lafzo per ap ki pakar achi thi bus kuch words the jo samajhne me mushkil huwi narration aur flow acha tha Umeed karta hu aage ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest