★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2020 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Damha]

Story:- रंगीन रातों का हसीन सफर


Writer:- Mr Sexy Webee


Review:- Kahani vishnu nami larke ki hai jis ka man bilkul saaf tha us ko kisi galat cheez ka pata he naui tha lekin phir us ki zindagi me shamoo ayi jis ne us ko hawas ke khel me daal diya jis ke chalte Vishnu ne apni maa ke saath sambhog kia aur ye khel aage chalta raha jis ki wajha se vishnu Ek ameer admi ban gaya Aur sidhe apni malik ki beti se shadi ker li phir malik aur baap ki moat ke baad wo apni zindagi me magan ho ker jeene laga Achi kahani thi Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Story:- Mere Humsafar (Aawara)



Writer:- Fighter



Review:- Sweet Cute Aur action wali Storie likhe ho bhayia ji Shuru me Aliya prince ko Ek Awara samajh ker us ke pyar ko serious nahi leti kiu ke wo sirf prince ke negative points daikh rahi thi Lekin jab Sana ke dawara Prince ke positive points ka Aliya ko oata chala prince ki achai ke saamne us ke negative points koi Hasiyat he nahi rakhte phir kya tha Kuch gunde hero ki entry Aur ap ke naan ki tarha Prince fighter ban ke lar para Kahani ko thora aur ache se likha ja sakta tha I hope next time main ap ko is se bhi behtar story ke saath daikhu ga Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Story:- Apna Naseeb


Writer:- Lucky lerka



Review:- Ek achi kahani jo Ek gareeb larki per thi jis ne apne pita ki maut ke baad ghar ko sambhala Lekin kabhi gakat raasta nahi liya har insaan ki tarha anjli ke paas bhi 2 raaste the sahi ka aur galat ka Angli ne sahi raasta chuna Aur us raaste me mila use ek insaan jo Apni daulat ke liye Utaradikari dhoond raha tha jis ki khubiya use angli me mili us ne roz angli ko baate sunai lekin angli ne uff tak nahi kia aur apne kaamo me lagi rahi Jis wajha se us admi ko apna utadakari mil gaya Aur us ne marne se pehle Apni property angli ke naam ker di bohat achi kahani thi ap waqt ke saath behtar ho rahe ho bus spelling mistake hai thori c us per thora dhayan dena next otherwise good story Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Story:- ~~~~~ गहरा राज ~~~~~



Writer:- Sweet_Sinner



Review:- Bohat romanchak story thi pehle to main confuse ho gya ye kya likh raha hai Fazool story hai lekin jaise jaise story parta raha Main khud galat sabit hota raha Ek perfect story thi jis me Romance incest thrill sab daikhne ko mila Narration Aur flow bhi acha tha Akhir me jo ap ne Riya ka pura plan khola hai I was shoked mujhe us ki bilkul bhi umeed nahi thi Ap ne title ko pura justify kia Narration aur flow per ap ki pakar bohat achi hai umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

 

[Fighter]

Story:- Mere Humsafar (Aawara)



Writer:- Fighter



Review:- Sweet Cute Aur action wali Storie likhe ho bhayia ji Shuru me Aliya prince ko Ek Awara samajh ker us ke pyar ko serious nahi leti kiu ke wo sirf prince ke negative points daikh rahi thi Lekin jab Sana ke dawara Prince ke positive points ka Aliya ko oata chala prince ki achai ke saamne us ke negative points koi Hasiyat he nahi rakhte phir kya tha Kuch gunde hero ki entry Aur ap ke naan ki tarha Prince fighter ban ke lar para Kahani ko thora aur ache se likha ja sakta tha I hope next time main ap ko is se bhi behtar story ke saath daikhu ga Best of luck for contest

Thanks bro liking & comment
bilkul agli bar kuch acha likhane ki kosis hogi

 

[Lucky lerka]

Story:- Apna Naseeb


Writer:- Lucky lerka



Review:- Ek achi kahani jo Ek gareeb larki per thi jis ne apne pita ki maut ke baad ghar ko sambhala Lekin kabhi gakat raasta nahi liya har insaan ki tarha anjli ke paas bhi 2 raaste the sahi ka aur galat ka Angli ne sahi raasta chuna Aur us raaste me mila use ek insaan jo Apni daulat ke liye Utaradikari dhoond raha tha jis ki khubiya use angli me mili us ne roz angli ko baate sunai lekin angli ne uff tak nahi kia aur apne kaamo me lagi rahi Jis wajha se us admi ko apna utadakari mil gaya Aur us ne marne se pehle Apni property angli ke naam ker di bohat achi kahani thi ap waqt ke saath behtar ho rahe ho bus spelling mistake hai thori c us per thora dhayan dena next otherwise good story Best of luck for contest

Thank you so much bhai apka bhot bhot shukriya meri hindi kamzor he to jis waja se spelling mistake ho jati hee next time diyan rakho ga

 

[Chutiyadr]

Story:- हवस से प्रेम तक


Writer:- Chutiyadr


Review:- Iss story me mujhe bohat cheeze daikhne ko mili Kaise ek behan Apne maa baap ki maut ke baad Halato se larte huwe Zindagi guzarti hai Aur apne bhai ko palti hai Halat kitne bhi bure ho lekin Wo himmat ke saath khari rahi Jaise ke main ne baban bhai ko story per review dete huwe kaha tha “zindagi hamesha 2 raaste deti hai ek sahi aur ek galat Galat raasta Asan zaroor hota hai Aur sahi raasta mushkil hota hai but its just you ke kya tum Sahi raaste per chal sako gye” iss story me suneeta ne Sahi wala raasta chuna Aur dati rahi Aur phir hume daikhne ko milta hai Saith ka beta Jis ko us ke dosto Aur daulat ke nashe ne bigar diya tha Aisa he hai bhai ke ek insaan ka kirdar hamesha us ke dosto se pehchana jata hai Kiu ke ek kharab phal puri phal ki paiti ko kharab ker deta hai Iss Dosti Aur Nashe ki wajha se us ne Suneeta per galat nazar daali aur us ke saath galat karne ki Chingari us ke andar aa gayi Aur iss chingari ko hawa di Mangloo ne jis wajha se Anand wo karne chal para jo uss ke liye Umar bhar ki saza ban sakta tha Wo apne dosto ke saath Suneeta ki izat lutne chal para lekin Suneeta ne tab bhi apni izaat ko lutne nahi diya jis ke liye wo Anaand Aur magloo se bhir gayi Lekin jab bhai ko pitte daikha to wo kamzoor per gayi lekin ap ne yahan bhi bohat maharat se dikhaya ke rishte insaan ki Kamzoori nahi Us ki taqat hote hai jis taqat ki wajha se Suneeta me ek josh aya aur us ne bure logo ko un ke karm ki saza de di Lekin us ne Anand ko chor diya kiu ke wo janti thi Anand bura insaan nahi tha us ke andar achai thi lekin logo ne us ko bura bana diya tha aur us ki achai ko us je andar he kanhi daba diya tha Saith ne Suneeta ko murder case se bachaya jo us ke bacho ki galtiyo ki maafi thi Aur aith ne suneeta ki ek ache ghar shadi ker di Jis ki wajha se se hariya bhi khush tha aur suneeta bhi Anand sudhar gaya us ko ek dusra moka mila jis ka us ne pura faida uthaya aur apne ap ko sudhar liya us ne Mujhe ap ki kahani bohat achi lagi umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

bahut bahut dhanywad damha bhai
aapne devnagri wali story padh li jankar khushi hui

 

[Damha]

Story:- AJAB CORONA MEIN GHAJAB SHADI


Writer:- manikmittalme07


Review:- Kahani kafi dilchasp thi Kahani 2 logo ke gird ghoomti hai dipak Aur shruti ke gird ho Shadi se pehle apne pairo per khare ho ker kuch banna chahte the jin me un ki umar zada ho gayi lekin Gana to suna ho ga kehte hai khuda ne is jahan me sabhi ke liye kisi na kisi ko hai banaya har kisi ke liye Aise in dono ko ek dusre ke liye banaya gaya tha dono ne ek dusre ko pasand kia aur dono me ek understanding ho gayi ya shayad pyaar ho gya ye kehna theek rahe ga Sach me aj kal shadi koi fashion ban gaya hai jahan sab ek dusre se khud ko bara banane ke liye paisa lagate hai shadi to do dilo ke milne se hoti hai 2 khandano ke milne se hoti hai Shadi thori alag lekin ache tareeke se huwi sab safety ko nazar me rakhte huwe Mujhe ap ki kahani pasand ayi umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

 

[Rockstar_Rocky]

bhai bhohit sahi likhe ho

बहुत-बहुत धन्यवाद मित्र!

 

[Damha]

Story:- Balidaan



Writer:- ＤＥＸＳＴＥＲ



review:- Kahani kafi dilchasp thi Ye kahani ek bhai ki hai jo hamesha apni behan ka bhala chahta tha chahe us ke liye use duniya ki nazar me bura he kiu na banna pare us ne akhir tak apni behan ko support kia jis ke chalte fagun ne apni parhai ko serious kia aur anjam Fagun ek achi post per job ker rahi hai harsh ne apna farz nibhaya aur sath diya rakesh aur priti ne bhi unko dukh toh bahot hua dono santano ke bich yeh duriyan dekhke, lekin yeh jaruri tha ye balidan zaroori tha umeed karta hu aage bhi ap kis stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest