★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2020 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Damha]

Story:- Firauti


Writer:- Indian Princess


Review:- Achi storie thi bhayia ji Firauti ki maang sirf un logo se hoti hai jin ki haisiyat ho jo samajhte ho ke wo paise se kuch bhi ker sakte hai na ke atmaram jaise phatte hal admi se Waise puri storie me suspence bana raha ke akhir aage kya ho ga Aniket ne apni puri koshis ki lekin beimano ki duniya me imandaro ki sunta kon hai aisa he aniket ke saath huwa pehle laga sach me atmaram se paise mange hai lekin us ki halat daikh ker yaqeen nahi aa rha tha phir inspector ki baat sun ker samajh ayi huwa kya hai lekin end me to puri game he badal di ap ne good storie umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

story:- Barshaat ki raat


Writer:- Ayush2017


Review:- Ek saaf man ka larka Raja jis ne sache dil se dolly se pyar kia lekin dolly ne hawas ke nashe me raja ke pyar ko nahi samjha issi beech raja ko mili 2 larkiya Ruhi Aur pinky jinho ne raja se dolly se badla lene ko kaha aur pura plan bataya aur us plan ke hisaab se badla le liya gaya Storie me bohat kuch missing tha i give you just two suggestion “read a lot write a lot” umeed karta hu agli baar ap ko aur bhi achi story ke saath daikhu ga Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Story:- SHATIR KATHPUTALI


Writer:- Ankitshrivastava


Review:- Sar ghooma dene wali kahani thi Aisa lag raha tha CID ka koi episode daikh raha hu kanhi kuch bhi hint nahi mila katil kon hai End tak story ne apne saath band ker rakha character me thora confuse huwa lekin behtreen storyline ki wajha se jald he sab sahi ho gya Akhir me to dimagh ghoom gaya priya he wo katil nikli bohat maza aya ap ki story parh ker umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Story:- Ek qatil haseena



Writer:- Maq


Review:- Ek larki jis ko jab apno ki zarorat thi tab us ka koi apna us ke liye aage nahi aya balke jo kuch us ke paas tha wo bhi us se cheen liya gaya ye sach me kafi emotional scene the lekin kehte hai na upar wale k ghar der hai andher nahi iss duniya me bure log hai to ache log bhi hai aise kuch ache log us larki ki zindagi me aye jinho ne un ka apno se zada saath diya Un ko ek maksad mila un se mil ker Jahan se janm huwa katil haseena ka Us ne na sirf katil haseena ban ker Duniya me rehne wale bure logo ko un ke karam ki saza di balke apne rishtedaro se apna haq bhi wapis liya koi bhi insaan apni khusi se hathiyar nahi uthata us ke peeche koi majboori hoti hai lekin ye ap per hota hai ap hathiyar utha ker achai ki rah per chalte hai ya burai ki rah per Ek bohat achi kahnai lekin story ke start me he ap ne bohat words use ker liye jis wajha se end me wo feeling nahi ayi otherwise good story umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Story:- शहर की लड़की



Writer:- Ashokafun30



Review:- Ye ek larki ki storie thi jo apni life ko apne asoolovper jeena chahti thi apni fantasy pura karna chahti thi jis ke liye Wo durahi zindagi guzar rahi thi iss zindagi me use Mila raju jo us ki sab fantasy ko pura karne wala tha Gaon me huwe sab incidents ne Malika ki fantasies ko pura ker diya Ek sex se bharpor kahani Iss ko ss me post kia jata to behtar rehta Narration aur flow acha tha Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Story:- Kanch Ka Gharonda…… (Vayang)



Writer:- nain11ster


Review:- Bohat Alag kahani thi bohat rare topic choose kia hai apne likhne ko Story me sikhne ko bohat kuch tha Ek hisaab se iss me duniya ka majooda haal hai like news paper ho jis me halato ke bare me likha gaya ho Ye ek karwi sachai hai ke Aj kal hum apni language ko bhool gaye hai Aur English bhi culture ko accept karne lage hai Koi desi gali de to Anpar gawar hum us se bhir pare gye Wanhi koi English me gali de to sensible talk Aj kal sach me bache Apne maa baap ko sirf iss liye time dete hai ke us ki selfie le ker Best moment likh ker post ker ke apne kaam me lag jaye Har insaan apne point off view ko sahi sabit karna chahta hai Agar koi dusra use sahi samjhaye to wo us ko apni galat baato ki dalele dene lag jata hai Lekin in me chand log aise bhi hote hai jo social life Aur personal life ko balance jarna jante hai har cheez ko pura time dete hai perfect nahi hote lekin ache hote hai dusro ke dukh ko samajhne wale hote hai wo log lekin din per din aise log kam hote ja rahe Reason social life Ek bohat acha topich ap ne choose kia alfaz ap ke bohat mushkil the samajhne me time lag gaya otherwise good story Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Storie:- THE ROUTINE - A “SIMPLE” LIFE



Writer:- Niks96



Review:- Kahani ka title parh ker laga tha Koi aam si day routine story ho gi lekin Andar to pura scene he alag tha Jahan aj ki duniya me log apne maa baap ko bojh mante hai unhe old age home chor ate hai wanhi kuch aise log bhi hai jo sab kuch apne maa baap ko mante hai un ki Seva ker ke swarg kamate hai Mohan Aur kishori lal ka bond parh ker bohat sakoon mila ye kahani un bacho ke muh per ek tamacha hai jo un maa baap ko bhool jate hai jin ki wajha se wo duniya me aye hote hai Un ko iss kabil banate hai ke aj wo duniya ke saamne fakhar se khare hote hai Bohat sakoon wali storie thi ek ek lafz sidhe dil me utra hai umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

 

[Damha]

Story:- फक्त एक ख्वाहिश



Writer:- fountain_pen


Review:- Achi kahani thi Mujhe parhne me problem to huwi lekin i manage lekin bohat kuch uljha huwa tha kahani ko bohat jaldi me likh gaya hai iss ko thora detail se likha jata to acha rehta Narration aur flow bhi itna acha nahi tha lekin content acha tha keep it up Best of luck for contest

 

[Ankitshrivastava]

Story:- SHATIR KATHPUTALI


Writer:- Ankitshrivastava


Review:- Sar ghooma dene wali kahani thi Aisa lag raha tha CID ka koi episode daikh raha hu kanhi kuch bhi hint nahi mila katil kon hai End tak story ne apne saath band ker rakha character me thora confuse huwa lekin behtreen storyline ki wajha se jald he sab sahi ho gya Akhir me to dimagh ghoom gaya priya he wo katil nikli bohat maza aya ap ki story parh ker umeed karta hu aage bhi ap ki stories parhne ko milti rahe gi Best of luck for contest

Good to see dat u like d story.....

Thanks buddy.....

 

[Geralt of Rivia]

Story:- खोया हुआ प्यार

Writer:- Geralt of Rivia

Title se to story romantic laga...Aur kuch paragraph padhne ke baad bhi story romantic hi tha but incest genre bhi touch kar gaya.

Incest reader naa hone ki vajah se story utna enjoy to nahi kar paaya.

Abb aate hai story par...Best part story ka narration laga...Ek hi flow mein story aage badhta raha.. Aur aapne emotion bhibacche se dikhaya especially Amit ka...Uska pyar, uska jalan aur uska gham bhi.

Kaise usko apne pyaar ka ehsaas hua aur uske baad ka wo reaction jo ki logical bhi tha...Naa bataa paa raha tha aur naa hi ishara...Bas khud mein hi ghut raha tha...Aise mein uska dono se dur jaana hi sahi tha apne jindagi ko nayi tarah ae suruwaat karna.

Ek love story mein aapne pyaar ki feelings ko acche se dikhaya.

Haan agar aap Amit ke Australia ke jaane ke baad uska emotions ko aur explain karte to shayad aur accha rehta...Aur ending thoda aur detailed ho sakta tha.

Overall, story accha laga padh kar on basis of romantic theme.

All the best for contest.

Meri story parhne aur review likhne ke liye shukriya. Apko incest pasand nahi hone k bawajood apne meri story parhi aur iskti tareef k liye shukriya.