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Fantasy Saurya - ek youdha (Completed)

Kya mujhe mere likhne ka tarika change karna chahiye

  • nahi aise hi sahi hai

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Hi friend maine xforum pr kafi stories padi hai aur ab mai bhi apni ek story post karne ja raha hu ab jyada wakt na lete huye
story p chalte h jaise jaise log milte rahenge unke bare m batata jaunga .
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Nice update bro
 

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UPDATE - 99

Ab tak

To humne Villain ji ke darshan kar liye the saath hi uski mansa bhi jaani thi...Sath hi...Time shield ka nirman hona aur bhi kuch ghatnaye dekhi thi....

Ab aage...

To jaise humne dekha tha apna Hero chala gaya tha Earth pe to hum bhi wahi chalenge....

Saurya yaani main abhi R.G ke aasram mein khada tha ji haa wahi aashram jaha Deep aur Shuhani behosh pade the...

Main- Chalo wo waqt aa hi gaya....mujhe pura bharosha hai ki iss baar sab sahi hi hoga...

Itna bol main aage badha aur uss aashram mein chala gaya...

Aasham mein meri mulakat hui R.G yaani Rishi Gautam se...unko maine sab kuch bataya.....apna saara plan saath hi usme unka kya role hoga...

Main- To aap taiyaar ho...

R.G - Samrath main puri tarah se taiyaar hu...apke iss kaam mein saath dene ko....par...

Main- Par kya R.G apko mere plan mein koi kammi nazar aa rahi hai kya...

R.G- Kammi....nahi nahi aisa nahi hai bas ye pahli baar hone wala hai to thodi si chinta hai maan mein baaki kuch nahi...aap jaaye main apke Mata Pita ko le aaunga waha uss gaon mein....nirdharit samay pe...

Fir hamari kuch au bhi baatein hui aur main waha se chala aaya....

Ab baari thi meri Raniyon se baat karne ki unko samjhane ki ke kya karna hai....

Plan simple sa tha mera ki R.G Maa Papa ko lekar aayenge aur ye pancho milker Manjulika ko kisi jagah pe pakad ke rakhegi apni powers se aur main waha aaunga Jwala ke saath aur uske powers matlab wo pavitra agni ki madad se Manjulika aur Maa dono ko ek karr dunga....par yaha par ek dikkat thi...aur wo ye ki Manjulika ki body ko kamjor karna jo bahut hi muskil tha...par mujhe lagta hai ye pancho wo kaam kar lengi...

Main plan ke baae mein sochta hua uss RAW wale flat mein chala gaya aur waha jaa kar unn sab ko bulaya...wo sab bhi aa gayi kuch der mein...

Maine apna plan unko samjhaya...

Shilpa- Isme koi khatra to nahi hai naa.....

Main- Nahi tumhe kuch bhi nahi hoga....

Shilpa- Main apni nahi Shuhani ki baat kar rahi hu...aisa kuch bhi pahhle kabhi nahi hua hai...

Main- Hmm pata hai par yahi ek rasta hai aur yakkin karo kisi ko kuch nahi hoga....

Sabne haa mein saar hilaya....hum sab baatein karne lage detail mein plan ke baare mein....

Jyada der nahi hui baatein karte ki mujhe Margret ki aawaj sunnayi di....

Margret- Bansoa khali ho chuka hai hum sab bhi nikalne wale hai....

Main- Haa thik hai...par wo taikhana jaise hai waise hi rahne dene ko bolo tum sab yaha aa jao...

Margret- Thik hai hum bas nikal hi rahe hai...

uske baad aawaj aani band ho gayi...

Sabko maine ye baat bata di...

Abhi hum kuch aur bolte ki Alex ki aawaj aayi mujhe....

Alex- Ye Dristi waha aayi hai kya....

Main- Nahi to wo yaha nahi aayi hai...kya baat hai...

Alex- Arre abhi yahi thi wo mere saath khel rahi thi acchanak se wo ek portal khol usme chali gayi....mujhe laga tumhare paas gayi hogi...

Main- Nahi aisa to nahi hai....main bhi usk.....

Baat puri hoti usse pahle Dristi Kiran aur Pradeep dono ko lekar mere pass pahuch gayi thi....aur unn dono ke chahre ko dekh saaf pata chal raha tha ki unko yaha Dristi acchanak se le aayi hai..

Main- Haa wo yahi hai Alex abhi aayi hai tum bhi aa jao...

Pradeep- Yaar ye kya hai ye to humme kahi se bhi utha laati hai...

Main-Ab isme main kya bolu...ye sabke saath yahi karti hai...

Dristi udte hue mere pass aayi aur mere goad mein aaa gayi...

Main- Aur badmash inhe kyun laayi hai yaha ab....

Mera itna bolna tha ki dimmag mein pictures chalne lage jisme....Pradeep Mom se mil raha tha saath hi aur bhi bahut saari tasweerien family drama ke saath...

Main- ye sab kya hai..tum chahti ho main ye sab naa hone du...

Mere aisa bolne pe wo rone lagi matlab main galat tha...

Main- Arre arre accha to tum chahti ho ye sab karwa du...

Iss baar uske chahre pe khushi thi...samajh mein aa gaya muijhe kya baat hai....

Maine phone nikala aur call lagaya Mohit mamu ko...

Mohit- Kya bhanje kaha hai tu...

Main- Mama ek bahut badi baat pata chali hai mujhe...

Mohit- Kya...

Main- Pradeep jinda hai....aur wo badi maaasi ke saath rahta hai...

Mohit mama ek baar to chup hi ho gaye koi bhi ho jaata....

Main- Mamu mamu...

Mohit- Tu sach bol raha hai naa....

Main - Haa mamu sach bol raha hu...

Mohit- Main abhi Sanjna didi ko batata hu...

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Main - Chalo ye kaam ho gaya....

Ye baat khatam bhi nahi hui thi meri ki fir se kuch tasveerein aa gayi jisko dekh main shocked rah gaya...

Itne mein waha Alex aa gaya...

Alex ke aate hi Dristi uske paas chali gayi...

Alex- Kya hua Saurya sab theek to hai naa....

Main - Nahi kuch bhi theek nahi hai jo karna hai jaldi karna hoga......ye Maarcuss jald hi aazad hone wala hai aur uske jariye wo yaha aa sakta hai....humara time shield bekar ho jaayega....

Shilpa- Nahi aisa nahi hoga hum uss Marcuss ko dekh lenge....

Main- Hmm par ek bhi galti bahut bhai pad sakti hai...chalo ab sab jaao humme bahut kuch karna hai....

Maine sabko waha se bhej diya....Ab main akela tha aur sochne laga tasveeron ke baare mein ki phone baja mera...

Call Mom ka tha....

Main- Haa Mom

Sanjna-(rote hue) Beta kaha hai tu....yaha aa jaa jaldi tera tera bhai aaya hai...

Mujhe pata tha ye sab par ab bata to sakta nahi to...

Main- Kiski baat kar rahi ho aap Mom

Mom- Pradeep wo mere pass hai abhi wo teri badi maasi ke saath rahta tha aur humme pata nahi tha...tu aa jaa yaha sab tujhse milna chahte hai...

Main- Aapne sabko mere baare mein bata diya...

Mom- Haa sab kuch...chal ab jaldi se aa

Main- Hmm thik hai main aa raha hu...

Call cut...

Main- Kappa ye sab kaise ho sakta hai....

Kappa- Ye marcuss pahle bhi time ko control karne ke pichhe pada tha issbaa bhi wo aisa kuch karega hi jiske jariye wo yaha aa jaayega....

Main - Ab ye khatam Marcuss ki maut se hi hoga naa...

Kappa- Haa

Main - hmm samajh gaya....

Main bhi taiyaa hua aur chal diya mom ke pass jaane ko....

Jab waha pahucha to pahle se hi log the waha sabhi log saare maasi mausa sab aur saath hi bua aur fufa bhi pahle to sabne Pradeep ko ghere rakha tha wahi jaise hi main pahucha mere saath bhi wahi hua....

Kuch der ka wahi family drama hua sabko sabki kahaniyan sunayi gayi....Issi bich pata nahi iss Pradeep ko kya shujha usne Kiran ke baare mein sabko bata diya...

Badi massi- Arre mujhe to nahi bataya kabhi...

Pradeep- Wo Main wo batane wala tha...

Poonam maasi- Waah didi bete ke saath bahu free...sahi scheme hai ye...

Unki iss baat pe sab ek baar unko ghurne lage...

Poonam- Arre main to bas....

issi baat pe sab hasne lage....

Aise hi waqt gujra aur tay ye hua ki kal hi Kiran ko bulaya jaayega...

Fir kya tha sabne khana khaya aur fir soone ke liye nikal gaye....insab mein Paridhi aur Shilpa jyada khush the kyunki main wahi rahne wala tha aaj..

Abhi main mere diye hue room mein pahucha hi tha ki Margret ki awaj aayi...

Margret- Hum aa chuke hai...

Main room ke ander gaya gate lock kiya portal khola aur sidha pahuch gaya unsab ke pass jaha....Headmaster,Sangeeta,Rita,Henry aur Margret the....unme se jinko jinko sab yaad aa gaya tha wo to normal the par baaki ke nahi...

Waha pahuchte hi maine fir se ek portal khola aur unn sab ko use hote hue le gaya uss RAW ke diye hue flat mein...

Main- Aaj to yahi rah lo kal koi aur bandobast karta hu...

Sab maan gaye...maine bhi unke khane pinne ka intezam kiya aur waha se nikal aaya wapas....

Wapas aate hi main dhyaan mein baith gaya...

Aaj ke liye itna hi agle update mein dekhte hai Kiran ka family se milna aur saath mein bade Dada aur bade Nana ka aana saher mein aur apne bhaiyon se milna....saath hi bhut kuch aur....
nice update
 

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