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Fantasy Saurya - ek youdha (Completed)

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Ab tak

Humne dekha kaise sabhi log gaon pahuch gaye the..aur raat rukne ko bhi maan gaye the...saath hi ye bhi ki Saurya latka hua tha rassi se....

Ab aage...

Pahle latke hue Hero ke pass hi chalte hai...

To main ek rassi se latka hua tha...

Main- Rassi upar kincho....shilpa...

Main bole jaa raha tha par sayad wo sun nahi paa rahi thi yaa uss danav se ladne mein vyast thi...haa vyast hi hogi...

Ab dekhte hai ye danav kon hai Hum yaha kaise pahuche ye sab...

Haa to hum dono hi shinghasan ke nicche banne hue khufiya jagah mein gaye...waha andera tha to maine jaadu se roshni karne ka socha....par hua hi nahi...

Maine ek baar koshish ki...do baar koshish ki par nahi hua...aur mujhe aisa karte hue dekh wo Shilpa hasse jaa rahi thi...

Main- Ye mera Jaadu kaam kyun nahi kar raha...

Shilpa- ye jagah kon si hai...bhool gaye kya..

Maine apne dimmag pe jo dalla to yaad aaya ki ye wo jagah hai jaha Jinlok ke maharaj sab apni shaktiyon ko badhane aate the...yaha hota ye tha ki ander aate waqt hi unki shaktiyan khatam ho jaati thi aur wo tabhi wapas milti hai jab Raja iss jagah ke nadi mein nahata hai....

Main- Oo to ye wo jagah hai main bhul kaise gaya...

Shilpa- Bhulakad bhulega nahi to aur kya karega...chalo side hatto..

Mujhe side karte hue usne apne magic se roshni kari har jagah...

Main- Ek minute ye kya kiya tumne...ab wo aayega yaha...

Shilpa- Wo kon....

Main- Yaha ka danav....tumne jagga diya usko...tumhe yaad nahi ki yaha pe magic karna manna hai agar kiya to wo jaag jaayega aur humara safar aur muskil ho jaayega...

Shilpa- Main bhul gayi thi...

Main- Waah abhi mujhe sunna rahi thi aur ab khud....chalo ab chup chap chalna hai koi shor nahi....

Shilpa ne Haa mein gardan hilayi aur hum dono chal pade aage ki oor....

Thodi der chalne ke baad humme ek pull milla uske nicche thi ek bahut hi gahri khayi...

Shilpa- Ye wahi hai naa jo main soch rahi hu...

Main- Hmm bilkul wahi hai...ek baar agar iske ander girre to bas gir gaye..kisi bhi tarah wapas nahi aa sakte yaha iss duniya mein..

Shilpa- Haa pata hai...humme dhyaan se pull ko paar karna hogaa...

Main- Haa ye bhi koi kahane ki baat thodi hai..chalo tum aage aage chalo main tumare picche picche aa raha hu....

Wo bhi aage aage chalne lagi..par ye pull to tha hi yaha aaye hue logo ka test lene ke liye au wahi hua wo aage badh hi rahi thi ki achanak se pull bahut hilne laga aur wo bahut dar gayi...jiski wajah se usne Flying magic ka use kar liya....aur ho gaya bantadhar....

Jaise hi usne ye kiya do chije hui ek to pull dusri taaf se toot gaya matlab ki picche se ab wo to udd rahi thi usko kuch nahi hua par main....main to binna power ka tha...Maine uss pull ko acche se pakad liya aur latak gaya...Wahi dusri chiz ye hui ki uske magic ke karan wo danav aa gaya waha pe...

Ab Shilpa ne delha wo daanav aa raha hai to wo usse ladne ko taiyaar ho gayi..

Shilpa- Jaan thodi der latke raho main isko thikane laga deti hu...

Main- Arre mujhe upar kincho...

Par wo sunne tab naa wo to lag gayi ladne mein...

Main khud hi dhire dhire upar chadhne laga...

kuch der baad mein upar pahuch hi gaya...

Waha pahucha to wo daanav aur Shilpa dono hi ladde jaa rahe the...Shilpa ne bahut hi acche tarah se handle kiya tha usko....

Main dekh hi raha tha ki Shilpa ne uss danav ke upar ek vaar kiya jisse daanav ke haath se uska talwar chut ke gir gaya.....main jaldi se uss talwar ke pass gaya aur usko utha ke usse Daanav pe vaar ki...wo picche ki oor jaa girra...kuch der baad wo fir khada hua maine fir se waise hi waar kiya aur wo fir picche Shilpa bhi waar kiye jaa rahi thi uspe....aise ki karte karte ek mauka aisa aaya ki wo Daanav uss khayi ke bil;kul paas mein tha maine aur Shilpa dono ne ek dusre ki oor dekha aur smile pass kiya aur..ek saath waar kiya jisse hua ye ki wo danav uss khayi ke ander challa gaya...uske jaate hi wo jo talwar thi uski wo chamakne lagi aur ek campass ban gayi yaani disha batane wali yantra...

Main aur Shilpa usko dekhne lage ki awaj aayi...

"mujhe aazad karane ka shukriya...ab main aapka hu...iss waqt aapko disha batane wali yantra ki hi jarurat hai to main ye banna hua hu...battaiye kaha jaana hai.."

Ek paal ke liye hum dono hi shocked rah gaye...fir Shilpa ne usko uss Nadi ke baare mein bataya...

Campass ne turant hi humme waha tak jaane ka rasta dikhana shuru kar diyaa....par...yaha pe main aur saath hi Shilpa bhi ye bhul gaye ki yaha magic ka use hote hi waqt bahut dhime chalne lagta hai....ye bhi iss mayavi jagah ki khasiyat thi ki agar koi Raja aise hi jaldi mein takat badhana chahta ho aur uske liye koi anuchit tarika apnaye to yahi hoga....Hum dono hi chalte gaye...dhire dhire aur pahuch gaye uss naddi ke pass...par jaisa humne sunna tha ye jagah badal gayi thi...pata nah kaise Paani ka sthar bahut kam tha...

Shilpa- Jaao apni shaktiyan wapas lao aur fir unn chizon ko dhundhte hai....

Main gaya uss nadi mein aur ussi ke saath jhatka laga mujhe...har taraf dhuwa hi dhuwa fail gaya tha...mein girra pada tha...Shilpa to jaise ruk gayi thi...wo jaisi ki taisi khadi thi...

Dhuwa hatne laga aur mere saamne mera hi sharir pada hua tha jiske paas meri dhanush talwar kavach..khanjar...ye sab tha aur saath hi bagal mein saari kitabein aur baasuri bhi thi...matlab wo har chiz jiski talash thi mujhe...

Main jaha sab chizon ko dekh khush tha wahi apni body ko dekh pareshan...main bhala apni hi body ko kaise dekh paa raha hu....

Main uss oor badhne laga to samne Mother Elika....haa wahi wo mere saamne aa gayi...main unhe dekkhta rah gaya...

Mother Elika- Saurya...Samrath Saurya..lagta hai tumpe kuch nahi bahut jyada bharosha kiya maine...haar baar koi naa koi gadbad...upar se tumhari sangniya bhi waisi hi hai...

Main chup tha kya bolta...

M.E- ye ek mauka hai aakhri mauka iss baar to tumhe tumhare saari shaktiyan bhi milni hai...agar iss baar galti hui to shudhar nahi kiya jaa sakta...waqt kaam hai warna main aur bolti...jao uss sharir mein aur bahar niklo yaha se waha pe saare intezam ho chuklke hai...

Main- Kaha pe intezam....

Wo kuch naa boli wo chali gayi aur main khud uss body mein chala gaya aur dhuwa hat gaya... Sab kuch normal ho gaya tha..Shilpa bhi ab aankhen faade mujhe dekhe jaa rahi thi...

Shilpa- to tumhe sab kuch mill gaya....

Main-Haa chalo ab jaldi se bahar chalte hai bahut waqt beet chukka hai...humme gaon pahuchna hoga jaldi se...

Chaliye inko chodte hai aur hum chalte hai gaom mein jaha bahut kuch ho chuka tha...ye dono to yaha the aur yaha ka waqt dhemme chal raha tha.....

Gaon mein hua ye ki sabhi logo jo aaye the unko shubah gaon ke baare mein sab kuch bataya gaya ....par kisi ko yakkin hi nahi hua wo shrap ki baat aur aise hi sab kuch...

Ab gaon walo ne to puri koshish ki samjhane ki par ye naa mane...par gaon walo ki ek baat sabhi bado ne maan li ki unhe wahi rukna hoga....

Ab jab rukne ka tay ho hi gaya to sab ek baar ko nikal liye gaon ke shair ke liye...ye plan tha Pradeep ka taaki wo aur baaki ke log jo abhi waha the wo mil sakke aur jagah ka jaayeja le saake...

Wahi hua....Pradeep Kiran aur baaki sab mille ek jagah aur sabhi pahuche Manjulika ke uss kutiya mein jaha uski body hoti thi shubah ke waqt...par ander koi nahi jaa sakta kyunki wo ek adrishya kawach se dhakka hua hai jiske paar bas Manjulika ka koi apna hi jaa sakta hai aur koi nahi....

Sab log pahuche waha aur aur uss jagah ko dekh sab wapas...

Jab tak ye ho raha tha Ghar mein tapman badh chuka tha kaaran thi Saifali yaani Poonam maasi ki beti...waise karan usko kahna sahi nahi hoga usne to kuch kiya bhi nahi aur karti bhi kya abhi to uske magic powers active hi nahi the...

Ab hua ye ki Saifali Poonam maasi ko upar shidhiyon se bulla rahi thi...jab wo nahi aayi to wo nicche aane lagi aur gir gayi....nicche ke uss waqt Nani aur Dadi the..jab unhone dekha usnko girte hue to usko uthaya...par

Tabhi poonam maasi aur Divya bua aa gayi waha...dono ne bahut kuch sunaya apni apni Maa ko aur waha se Saifali ko le gayi...aur chod gayi unn dono ko aashuon mein...

Ponam maasi ne to yaha tak kah dala tha ki tumhari beti kahlana hi mere liye sabse bada durbhagya hai...aur bhi naa jaane kitne hi baate...

Raat hui...ye raat sabko shock dene wali thi...

Poonam maasi ko pyaas lagi raat ko par room mein paani nahi tha..to wo kitchen mein chali gayi....kitchen mein ek khidki thi jiske bahar usko ek aurat dikhayi di aise hi chalte hue...Poonam maasi ko laga ki wo wahi chorni hai jo sabko daati hai gaon mein ....Poonam maasi ke dimmag mein pata nahi kya aaya ki wo chor chor chilate hue bahar chal padi....

Par chillane ki wajah se log uth gaye...wo abhi darwaje se bahar jaati usse pahle B.Nani ne unko rok liya...

B.nani- Bola tha naa iss waqt bahar nahi jaana hai...

Poonam maasi- Chachi wo dekho wo chor hai wahi hai jo sabko darati hai main abhi sabak shikhati hu usko...

B.Nana- Wo chor nahi hai...

Mom- Arre wo dekho wo jaa raahi hai...

B.nani ne sabko rukne ko bola...aur khud kichen mein gayi waha se ek chaku layi aur apni ek anguli pe ek cut maara jo khoon nikla usko gate ke bahar ki oor fenka...jaise hi khoon gate ke bahar gaya...Manjulika ki body waha pe aa gayi...

Sabke hosh udd gaye uska chahera dekh ke...B.Nana ne jaldi se gate band kiya uar sabko soone jaane ko kaha.....par ab neend kisko aaye....sabne ye tay kiya ki wo kal yaha se nikal lenge...

Raat kat gayi subah hui....Aaj hi ka plan tha....Sab log pahuch gaye gaon mein....Kaal sarp se lekar Dristi tak....Margret se lekar Headmaster tak.....R.G bhi pahuch gaye...Maa aur Papa ke saath....Haa unhe kal hi hosh aa gaya tha...hosh aane ke baad unhe R.G ne wo sab bataya jo maine batane ko bola tha...

Ab Maa aayi to bhukamp bhi aaya waha jaisa ki aana tha...isse sabhi ko pata chal gaya ki Masheeha aa gayi hai..

Par koi bhi apne gharon se bahar nahi nikal paa raha tha wajah thi....Jwala ki shield...usne sabhi ke gharon ke bahar ek adrisya diwar bana rakhi thi....jiske aar paar bhi nahi dekh sakte the log...wo wahi dekh sakte the jo Jwala unhe dikhayega...

Thodi hi der mein Main aur Shilpa bhi pahuch gaye waha...hum sab jaldi se Manjulika ke kutiya ke pass pahuche....Ab ander bas mein hi jaa sakta tha....Main gaya ander aur Manjulika ko utha ya aur bahar le aaya..bahar aate hi uski aankhen khul gayi.....aur mujhpe humla kar diya...par ye sab planned tha sayad issi wajah se jyada waqt nahi laga aur wo kamjor ho gayi thi....

Ab main sabko position lene ko bola kyunki jaise hi Manjulika aur Maa ek hoti waise hi Maarcuss bahar aata....ussi waqt usko rokne ke liye sabko ready rahna tha...

Sab chale gaye apne apne jagah pe....Maine apne ek haath mein Manjulika ka haath pakda aur dusre mein Maa ka aur Jwala ko aawaj di....wo turant hi mere upar aaya aur...hum tinno pe pavitra agni se waar karne laga...isse hua ye ki Manjulika ki jo body thi wo pighalne lagi moom ki tarah aur mere through hote hue wo Maa ke body mein jaane lagi..isse bahut hi jyada energy fail raha tha charo oor......Ye hota raha aur kuch hi der mein Manjulika gayab ho gayi...Maa wahi pe behosh ho gayi...

Jaise hi ye hua ek baar aur Dharti hilli aur humare saamne Maarcuss aa gaya....takatwar maarcuss....par wo hum sabko dekh kar shocked tha.....

Usne socha hi nahi tha ki hum sab hinge waha

Main apni talwar upar ki aur ussi waqt Shilpa and party ko talwar pe apni shaktiyon se waar karne ko bola....Talwar ne unn sabke waar rook liye...par abhi bhi talwar puri tarah se ready nahi thi....Issi waqt Dristi ne kuch aisa kiya jisse hum sab shocked rah gaye....2 aur waar hue talwar pe par kisi ko pata nahi chala kaha se hue aur kisne kiye...yaha tak ki jinhone kiya tha unko bhi pata nahi chala...aur uss talwar se....maine ek waar kiya Maarcuss pe jisse wo wahi pe gir gaya...ek to banda shocked tha upar se acchanak se ye waar....maana Maarcuss takatwar tha par aise mein koi bhi haar sakta hai...main waar pe waar karta gaya uske upar aur wo waise hi chot khata raha....Ajeeb tha naa usne ek waar bhi nahi kiya tha....

Maine aakhri waar kiya aur wo khatam wo maar gaya...wahi pe gir gaya...par uske girte hi ek hassi phail gayi charo taraf....wo thi Zorawar ki....Haa yahi naam hai naye villain la Zorawar....

Wo aa chuka tha future se yaha par...lekin kaise....humne to Time shield bhi lagaya tha fir ye kaise aa gaya yaha....

Hum sab ek dusre ko bas dekhte rahe...

Zorawar- Abhi adhura hu main par pura ho jaaunga...dekhta hu kaise rokte ho mujhe tum sab.....hahahahahahaa

Issi awaj ke saath uski awaj aani band ho gayi aur....shiway mere isske baare mein kisi ko kuch yaad hi nahi baccha naa Shilpa naa Margret...kisi ko bhi nahi...sayad Drishti ko yaad rahe ye baatein yaaa kisi aur ko...

Insab mein ek baat aur hui thi Niharika ne wo Jordon ko bhi aazad kara diya....ye usne koi jaan bhujh ke nahi kiya tha ye ussi energy ke karan hua...jo nikal raha tha jab Manjulika aur Maa ek ho rahi thi...

Bahut se sawal chutte hue hai jinka jawab agle part mein hi milega...

Writer- Agla part aane mein waqt lag sakta hai kyunki usse pahle "R.D" ko complete karna hai aur "Immortals" naam ke story ki shuruat...par agla part aayega aur aasha hai usko bhi aisa hi support mille....

Jaate jaate ek aur baat Mera naam Harsh hai...isliye bataya ki koi kabhi Saurya bulata hai kabhi Samrath....waise fark nahi padta....

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Ab tak

Humne dekha kaise sabhi log gaon pahuch gaye the..aur raat rukne ko bhi maan gaye the...saath hi ye bhi ki Saurya latka hua tha rassi se....

Ab aage...

Pahle latke hue Hero ke pass hi chalte hai...

To main ek rassi se latka hua tha...

Main- Rassi upar kincho....shilpa...

Main bole jaa raha tha par sayad wo sun nahi paa rahi thi yaa uss danav se ladne mein vyast thi...haa vyast hi hogi...

Ab dekhte hai ye danav kon hai Hum yaha kaise pahuche ye sab...

Haa to hum dono hi shinghasan ke nicche banne hue khufiya jagah mein gaye...waha andera tha to maine jaadu se roshni karne ka socha....par hua hi nahi...

Maine ek baar koshish ki...do baar koshish ki par nahi hua...aur mujhe aisa karte hue dekh wo Shilpa hasse jaa rahi thi...

Main- Ye mera Jaadu kaam kyun nahi kar raha...

Shilpa- ye jagah kon si hai...bhool gaye kya..

Maine apne dimmag pe jo dalla to yaad aaya ki ye wo jagah hai jaha Jinlok ke maharaj sab apni shaktiyon ko badhane aate the...yaha hota ye tha ki ander aate waqt hi unki shaktiyan khatam ho jaati thi aur wo tabhi wapas milti hai jab Raja iss jagah ke nadi mein nahata hai....

Main- Oo to ye wo jagah hai main bhul kaise gaya...

Shilpa- Bhulakad bhulega nahi to aur kya karega...chalo side hatto..

Mujhe side karte hue usne apne magic se roshni kari har jagah...

Main- Ek minute ye kya kiya tumne...ab wo aayega yaha...

Shilpa- Wo kon....

Main- Yaha ka danav....tumne jagga diya usko...tumhe yaad nahi ki yaha pe magic karna manna hai agar kiya to wo jaag jaayega aur humara safar aur muskil ho jaayega...

Shilpa- Main bhul gayi thi...

Main- Waah abhi mujhe sunna rahi thi aur ab khud....chalo ab chup chap chalna hai koi shor nahi....

Shilpa ne Haa mein gardan hilayi aur hum dono chal pade aage ki oor....

Thodi der chalne ke baad humme ek pull milla uske nicche thi ek bahut hi gahri khayi...

Shilpa- Ye wahi hai naa jo main soch rahi hu...

Main- Hmm bilkul wahi hai...ek baar agar iske ander girre to bas gir gaye..kisi bhi tarah wapas nahi aa sakte yaha iss duniya mein..

Shilpa- Haa pata hai...humme dhyaan se pull ko paar karna hogaa...

Main- Haa ye bhi koi kahane ki baat thodi hai..chalo tum aage aage chalo main tumare picche picche aa raha hu....

Wo bhi aage aage chalne lagi..par ye pull to tha hi yaha aaye hue logo ka test lene ke liye au wahi hua wo aage badh hi rahi thi ki achanak se pull bahut hilne laga aur wo bahut dar gayi...jiski wajah se usne Flying magic ka use kar liya....aur ho gaya bantadhar....

Jaise hi usne ye kiya do chije hui ek to pull dusri taaf se toot gaya matlab ki picche se ab wo to udd rahi thi usko kuch nahi hua par main....main to binna power ka tha...Maine uss pull ko acche se pakad liya aur latak gaya...Wahi dusri chiz ye hui ki uske magic ke karan wo danav aa gaya waha pe...

Ab Shilpa ne delha wo daanav aa raha hai to wo usse ladne ko taiyaar ho gayi..

Shilpa- Jaan thodi der latke raho main isko thikane laga deti hu...

Main- Arre mujhe upar kincho...

Par wo sunne tab naa wo to lag gayi ladne mein...

Main khud hi dhire dhire upar chadhne laga...

kuch der baad mein upar pahuch hi gaya...

Waha pahucha to wo daanav aur Shilpa dono hi ladde jaa rahe the...Shilpa ne bahut hi acche tarah se handle kiya tha usko....

Main dekh hi raha tha ki Shilpa ne uss danav ke upar ek vaar kiya jisse daanav ke haath se uska talwar chut ke gir gaya.....main jaldi se uss talwar ke pass gaya aur usko utha ke usse Daanav pe vaar ki...wo picche ki oor jaa girra...kuch der baad wo fir khada hua maine fir se waise hi waar kiya aur wo fir picche Shilpa bhi waar kiye jaa rahi thi uspe....aise ki karte karte ek mauka aisa aaya ki wo Daanav uss khayi ke bil;kul paas mein tha maine aur Shilpa dono ne ek dusre ki oor dekha aur smile pass kiya aur..ek saath waar kiya jisse hua ye ki wo danav uss khayi ke ander challa gaya...uske jaate hi wo jo talwar thi uski wo chamakne lagi aur ek campass ban gayi yaani disha batane wali yantra...

Main aur Shilpa usko dekhne lage ki awaj aayi...

"mujhe aazad karane ka shukriya...ab main aapka hu...iss waqt aapko disha batane wali yantra ki hi jarurat hai to main ye banna hua hu...battaiye kaha jaana hai.."

Ek paal ke liye hum dono hi shocked rah gaye...fir Shilpa ne usko uss Nadi ke baare mein bataya...

Campass ne turant hi humme waha tak jaane ka rasta dikhana shuru kar diyaa....par...yaha pe main aur saath hi Shilpa bhi ye bhul gaye ki yaha magic ka use hote hi waqt bahut dhime chalne lagta hai....ye bhi iss mayavi jagah ki khasiyat thi ki agar koi Raja aise hi jaldi mein takat badhana chahta ho aur uske liye koi anuchit tarika apnaye to yahi hoga....Hum dono hi chalte gaye...dhire dhire aur pahuch gaye uss naddi ke pass...par jaisa humne sunna tha ye jagah badal gayi thi...pata nah kaise Paani ka sthar bahut kam tha...

Shilpa- Jaao apni shaktiyan wapas lao aur fir unn chizon ko dhundhte hai....

Main gaya uss nadi mein aur ussi ke saath jhatka laga mujhe...har taraf dhuwa hi dhuwa fail gaya tha...mein girra pada tha...Shilpa to jaise ruk gayi thi...wo jaisi ki taisi khadi thi...

Dhuwa hatne laga aur mere saamne mera hi sharir pada hua tha jiske paas meri dhanush talwar kavach..khanjar...ye sab tha aur saath hi bagal mein saari kitabein aur baasuri bhi thi...matlab wo har chiz jiski talash thi mujhe...

Main jaha sab chizon ko dekh khush tha wahi apni body ko dekh pareshan...main bhala apni hi body ko kaise dekh paa raha hu....

Main uss oor badhne laga to samne Mother Elika....haa wahi wo mere saamne aa gayi...main unhe dekkhta rah gaya...

Mother Elika- Saurya...Samrath Saurya..lagta hai tumpe kuch nahi bahut jyada bharosha kiya maine...haar baar koi naa koi gadbad...upar se tumhari sangniya bhi waisi hi hai...

Main chup tha kya bolta...

M.E- ye ek mauka hai aakhri mauka iss baar to tumhe tumhare saari shaktiyan bhi milni hai...agar iss baar galti hui to shudhar nahi kiya jaa sakta...waqt kaam hai warna main aur bolti...jao uss sharir mein aur bahar niklo yaha se waha pe saare intezam ho chuklke hai...

Main- Kaha pe intezam....

Wo kuch naa boli wo chali gayi aur main khud uss body mein chala gaya aur dhuwa hat gaya... Sab kuch normal ho gaya tha..Shilpa bhi ab aankhen faade mujhe dekhe jaa rahi thi...

Shilpa- to tumhe sab kuch mill gaya....

Main-Haa chalo ab jaldi se bahar chalte hai bahut waqt beet chukka hai...humme gaon pahuchna hoga jaldi se...

Chaliye inko chodte hai aur hum chalte hai gaom mein jaha bahut kuch ho chuka tha...ye dono to yaha the aur yaha ka waqt dhemme chal raha tha.....

Gaon mein hua ye ki sabhi logo jo aaye the unko shubah gaon ke baare mein sab kuch bataya gaya ....par kisi ko yakkin hi nahi hua wo shrap ki baat aur aise hi sab kuch...

Ab gaon walo ne to puri koshish ki samjhane ki par ye naa mane...par gaon walo ki ek baat sabhi bado ne maan li ki unhe wahi rukna hoga....

Ab jab rukne ka tay ho hi gaya to sab ek baar ko nikal liye gaon ke shair ke liye...ye plan tha Pradeep ka taaki wo aur baaki ke log jo abhi waha the wo mil sakke aur jagah ka jaayeja le saake...

Wahi hua....Pradeep Kiran aur baaki sab mille ek jagah aur sabhi pahuche Manjulika ke uss kutiya mein jaha uski body hoti thi shubah ke waqt...par ander koi nahi jaa sakta kyunki wo ek adrishya kawach se dhakka hua hai jiske paar bas Manjulika ka koi apna hi jaa sakta hai aur koi nahi....

Sab log pahuche waha aur aur uss jagah ko dekh sab wapas...

Jab tak ye ho raha tha Ghar mein tapman badh chuka tha kaaran thi Saifali yaani Poonam maasi ki beti...waise karan usko kahna sahi nahi hoga usne to kuch kiya bhi nahi aur karti bhi kya abhi to uske magic powers active hi nahi the...

Ab hua ye ki Saifali Poonam maasi ko upar shidhiyon se bulla rahi thi...jab wo nahi aayi to wo nicche aane lagi aur gir gayi....nicche ke uss waqt Nani aur Dadi the..jab unhone dekha usnko girte hue to usko uthaya...par

Tabhi poonam maasi aur Divya bua aa gayi waha...dono ne bahut kuch sunaya apni apni Maa ko aur waha se Saifali ko le gayi...aur chod gayi unn dono ko aashuon mein...

Ponam maasi ne to yaha tak kah dala tha ki tumhari beti kahlana hi mere liye sabse bada durbhagya hai...aur bhi naa jaane kitne hi baate...

Raat hui...ye raat sabko shock dene wali thi...

Poonam maasi ko pyaas lagi raat ko par room mein paani nahi tha..to wo kitchen mein chali gayi....kitchen mein ek khidki thi jiske bahar usko ek aurat dikhayi di aise hi chalte hue...Poonam maasi ko laga ki wo wahi chorni hai jo sabko daati hai gaon mein ....Poonam maasi ke dimmag mein pata nahi kya aaya ki wo chor chor chilate hue bahar chal padi....

Par chillane ki wajah se log uth gaye...wo abhi darwaje se bahar jaati usse pahle B.Nani ne unko rok liya...

B.nani- Bola tha naa iss waqt bahar nahi jaana hai...

Poonam maasi- Chachi wo dekho wo chor hai wahi hai jo sabko darati hai main abhi sabak shikhati hu usko...

B.Nana- Wo chor nahi hai...

Mom- Arre wo dekho wo jaa raahi hai...

B.nani ne sabko rukne ko bola...aur khud kichen mein gayi waha se ek chaku layi aur apni ek anguli pe ek cut maara jo khoon nikla usko gate ke bahar ki oor fenka...jaise hi khoon gate ke bahar gaya...Manjulika ki body waha pe aa gayi...

Sabke hosh udd gaye uska chahera dekh ke...B.Nana ne jaldi se gate band kiya uar sabko soone jaane ko kaha.....par ab neend kisko aaye....sabne ye tay kiya ki wo kal yaha se nikal lenge...

Raat kat gayi subah hui....Aaj hi ka plan tha....Sab log pahuch gaye gaon mein....Kaal sarp se lekar Dristi tak....Margret se lekar Headmaster tak.....R.G bhi pahuch gaye...Maa aur Papa ke saath....Haa unhe kal hi hosh aa gaya tha...hosh aane ke baad unhe R.G ne wo sab bataya jo maine batane ko bola tha...

Ab Maa aayi to bhukamp bhi aaya waha jaisa ki aana tha...isse sabhi ko pata chal gaya ki Masheeha aa gayi hai..

Par koi bhi apne gharon se bahar nahi nikal paa raha tha wajah thi....Jwala ki shield...usne sabhi ke gharon ke bahar ek adrisya diwar bana rakhi thi....jiske aar paar bhi nahi dekh sakte the log...wo wahi dekh sakte the jo Jwala unhe dikhayega...

Thodi hi der mein Main aur Shilpa bhi pahuch gaye waha...hum sab jaldi se Manjulika ke kutiya ke pass pahuche....Ab ander bas mein hi jaa sakta tha....Main gaya ander aur Manjulika ko utha ya aur bahar le aaya..bahar aate hi uski aankhen khul gayi.....aur mujhpe humla kar diya...par ye sab planned tha sayad issi wajah se jyada waqt nahi laga aur wo kamjor ho gayi thi....

Ab main sabko position lene ko bola kyunki jaise hi Manjulika aur Maa ek hoti waise hi Maarcuss bahar aata....ussi waqt usko rokne ke liye sabko ready rahna tha...

Sab chale gaye apne apne jagah pe....Maine apne ek haath mein Manjulika ka haath pakda aur dusre mein Maa ka aur Jwala ko aawaj di....wo turant hi mere upar aaya aur...hum tinno pe pavitra agni se waar karne laga...isse hua ye ki Manjulika ki jo body thi wo pighalne lagi moom ki tarah aur mere through hote hue wo Maa ke body mein jaane lagi..isse bahut hi jyada energy fail raha tha charo oor......Ye hota raha aur kuch hi der mein Manjulika gayab ho gayi...Maa wahi pe behosh ho gayi...

Jaise hi ye hua ek baar aur Dharti hilli aur humare saamne Maarcuss aa gaya....takatwar maarcuss....par wo hum sabko dekh kar shocked tha.....

Usne socha hi nahi tha ki hum sab hinge waha

Main apni talwar upar ki aur ussi waqt Shilpa and party ko talwar pe apni shaktiyon se waar karne ko bola....Talwar ne unn sabke waar rook liye...par abhi bhi talwar puri tarah se ready nahi thi....Issi waqt Dristi ne kuch aisa kiya jisse hum sab shocked rah gaye....2 aur waar hue talwar pe par kisi ko pata nahi chala kaha se hue aur kisne kiye...yaha tak ki jinhone kiya tha unko bhi pata nahi chala...aur uss talwar se....maine ek waar kiya Maarcuss pe jisse wo wahi pe gir gaya...ek to banda shocked tha upar se acchanak se ye waar....maana Maarcuss takatwar tha par aise mein koi bhi haar sakta hai...main waar pe waar karta gaya uske upar aur wo waise hi chot khata raha....Ajeeb tha naa usne ek waar bhi nahi kiya tha....

Maine aakhri waar kiya aur wo khatam wo maar gaya...wahi pe gir gaya...par uske girte hi ek hassi phail gayi charo taraf....wo thi Zorawar ki....Haa yahi naam hai naye villain la Zorawar....

Wo aa chuka tha future se yaha par...lekin kaise....humne to Time shield bhi lagaya tha fir ye kaise aa gaya yaha....

Hum sab ek dusre ko bas dekhte rahe...

Zorawar- Abhi adhura hu main par pura ho jaaunga...dekhta hu kaise rokte ho mujhe tum sab.....hahahahahahaa

Issi awaj ke saath uski awaj aani band ho gayi aur....shiway mere isske baare mein kisi ko kuch yaad hi nahi baccha naa Shilpa naa Margret...kisi ko bhi nahi...sayad Drishti ko yaad rahe ye baatein yaaa kisi aur ko...

Insab mein ek baat aur hui thi Niharika ne wo Jordon ko bhi aazad kara diya....ye usne koi jaan bhujh ke nahi kiya tha ye ussi energy ke karan hua...jo nikal raha tha jab Manjulika aur Maa ek ho rahi thi...

Bahut se sawal chutte hue hai jinka jawab agle part mein hi milega...

Writer- Agla part aane mein waqt lag sakta hai kyunki usse pahle "R.D" ko complete karna hai aur "Immortals" naam ke story ki shuruat...par agla part aayega aur aasha hai usko bhi aisa hi support mille....

Jaate jaate ek aur baat Mera naam Harsh hai...isliye bataya ki koi kabhi Saurya bulata hai kabhi Samrath....waise fark nahi padta....

The End
bahut hi khubsurat tarike se end kiya hai aapne story ka
 

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UPDATE- 98

Ab Tak

Jwala aa chuka tha wahi Varsha ko uske room mein chod diya gaya tha wo soo gayi ti...wahi Alex main aur baaki sab Jwala ke pass aa gaye the....

Ab aage

Jwala- Saurya time shield ka sab kuch pata lagaya abhi tak yaa nahi....

Main- Haa laga liya hai maine...ab bas spiritking ko bulana hai (Spiritking yaani Saurya ka animal spirit jo ki ek lion eagle tha...ek aisa mayavi prani jiska body lion ki thi magar eagle jaise pank the uske.....)

Alex- Bulao usko jaldi se.....

Maine apni aankhen band ki aur jor se chillaya....spiritking.....agle hi pal wo mere saamne tha par akela nahi uske bagal mein hi Unicorn jo ki Niharika ka spiritanimal tha wo bhi aaya tha...

Lion Eagle mere saamne wahi Unicorn Niharika ke samne jaake jhuk gaya....

Main - Utho hume kuch kaam karna hai.....

Mera bas itna bolna tha wo jor se dahada.....uski dahad khatam hote hi waha pe ek blackhole saa kuch khul gaya par wo kisi ko khinch nahi raha tha apni oor...

Main- Kaal sarp...

Kaal sarp ne meri oor dekha aur uss blackhole ke samne khada ho gaya.....

Main- Jwala....

Thik waisa hi Jwala ne bhi kiya.....

Lion eagle bhi ussi ke saath waha chala gaya...ye hue the 3 par ek aur ki jarurat thi wo tha kappa par wo to jaa nahi sakta tha kyunki mere ander tha wo....to mujhe bhi wahi jaaana pada uss blackhole ke samne.....

Abhi main kuch karta usse pahle Alex bhi aaa gaya waha....

Main- Alex tumhari jarurat nahi hai dost tum jaao....

Alex- Jarurat hogi yaha Solar dragon ki jarurat hoti hai mujhe pata hai....aur yakkin maano agar Varsha theek hoti to wo bhi aati mere saath....

Main- ye batane ki koi jarurat nahi hai dost mujhe pata hai.....

Maine apna haath aage kiya....Main kuch bolu usse pahle hi baaki ke saare bhi apna haath aage kar liye...aur hum sabhi ke hatho se roshni nikalne lagi.....jo uss blackhole mein jaa raha tha...

Mere haath se green colour jo kappa ka tha....Alex ke haath se yellow colour...solar dragon ka colour.....Lion eagle se white colour jo....spirits ka tha...Kaal sarp se black colour jo ki uska tha....wahi Jwala se red colour jo ki Pheonix ka ths....wo saari roshiyan uss black hole mein jaa rahe the....par kuch ho nahi raha tha.....

Hum sab ek dusre ko dekhne lage iss ummid se ki kisi je paas to jawab hoga par nahi.....Jaha tak kitab mein maine padha tha yahi tarika tha Time shield banane ka par ye kaam nahi aa raha tha....sayad koi galti ho gayi thi humse....Abhi inhi khayalon ke saath main dusron ko dekh hi raha tha ki Dristi aayi aur uss blackhole ke pass chali gayi.....ye baat humme se kisi ko pata bhi naa chali thi...wo bilkul ussi jagah pe pahuch gayi jaha pe hum sab ke haathon se nikalne wali oshni mil rahi thi......jisse hua ye ki wo saari roshniyan uske upar padne lagi.....hum ye dekh paate usse pahle der ho chuki thi....sari roshni uske ander jaa chuki thi...aur wo ek energy ke golle mein badal gayi thi.....

Alex-(chillate hue) Dristiiii

Hum sab bhi chilate hue uske paas jaane lage par hum jaa nahi paa rahe the.....Dristi ussi tarah se uss black hole mein chali gayi.....uska ander jaan atha aur hum sab uski oor puri takat se daude aur iss baar hum waha tak pahuchne wale the...par tabhi uss blackhole mein ek dhamaka hua.....dhamaka jisse uss blakhole se roshni aane lagi....ye bahut hi bada dhamaka tha jiski wajah se......hum sab picche ki oor gir gaye.....aur wo blackhole band ho gaya....saath hi uske ander se Dristi bhi bahar ki oor aa gayi....

Wo girri nahi thi...wo to mazze mein udd rahi thi....hum sab uthe aur ek dusre ko dekhne lage....

Alex ko bahut gussa aa raha tha usko kya sabhi ko aa raha tha ye choti si ladki har baar kuch aisa kar jaati hai jisse humlog dang rah jate hai...par ek baat ye bhi thi ki uski pyaari si muskan se sab ke gusse ko wo dular mein badal deti thi...

Iss baar bhi bilkul aisa hi hua....aur hum sab jo usko dantne wale the wo sab bhul gaye....

Lion Eagle - Ab jaane ka waqt aa gaya malik mera....

Main- Hmm thik hai jao aur dhyaan rakhna spiritworld ka...

Uske saath chala gaya unicorn bhi....

Jwala ko maine kuch bola jisko sunne ke baad wo chala gaya waha se wahi Alex aur baaki sab bhi chal diye Mahel ki oor aur main jaldi se Earth ki oor kyunki waha mera kaam aane wala tha...

Arre jaldi jaldi mein wo Time shiled kaise bana kya hua ye samjhana bhul gaaya....

Chaliye Hero ko jaane dete hai aur hum baatein karte hai iss Time shield ki....

To jab Dristi bich mein aayi thi to hua ye ki hum sabki powers yaani wo roshniya jo thi usko usne absorb karna shuru kar diya....aur purra absorb karne ke baad uska energy level yaa kahu to uss power ko jyada badha diya....aur khud uss blackhole....mein jaa kar uss energy ko waha chod diya jisse uska nishana aur accha ho gaya tha...jis wajah se uss blackhole mein ek safed rang ki chadar fail gayi jo ki wo shield thi....ab ye kaam Saurya aur uske shathiyon se kyun nahi hua uska bhi karan hai....par abhi uss karan ki koi jarurat nahi hai......

Chaliye ab chalte hai ek baar future mein jaha par hamare naye villain ko iss baat ka pata chalta hai ki ek time shield ka nirman hua hai jiske baare mein pata chalte hi wo pagal ho jaata hai....wo turant Jordon ko bulata hai....

Villain - Kaise hua ye sab...

Jordon- Pata nahi malik...par aap chinta naa kare hum jaane ka koi bandobast karte hai....

Villain- Jo bhi karna hai jaldi karo mujhe pure universe pe raaj karna hai aur mera dusman mujhse chip raha hai....main jaldi se usko khatam karna chahta hu...

Jordon- Malik burra naa lage to ek baa.....

Villain- Jab wo chup.raha hai to kyun hamla karna yahi naa.....arre bewakoof itni bhi akal nahi kya tumme waqt rahte hi dusman ko tod do taaki wo khada hi naa ho sakke kabhi tumhare khilaf ...

Jordon- Samajh gaya malik.....

Villain- Kya samjhe mujhe bhi batao....

Jordon- Yahi ki aap bhi Marcuss ki tarah usko todna chahte hai...

Villain- Tu nahi samjega kabhi....agar samajh jaata to meri jagah pe hota....jaa tu aur mere jaaane ka koi intezam kar aur haa jaldi karna....

Jordon- Ji malik...

Villain- Inn sab ki powers main le lunga uss saurya ki uss Pheonix ki sabki bas wo waqt aa jaaye jiska intezar hai mujhe uske baad sabse saktishali main hi rahunga....koi bhi koi bhi chu tak nahi paayega mujhe....kisi ke pass koi sakti nahi bachegi main...main pure universe pe raaj karunga akela.....

Aise hi bolte bolte wo hasne lagta hai.....zor zor se...

Chaliye aaj ka yahi khatam karte hai....ab agle update mein dekhte hai thoda sa Earth ka drama jaha Marcus ke khatme ka khel shuru hone wala hai...saath hi dekhenge Jwala kaha gaya...
Mast update bro
 
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