Fantasy Shiva the common man

[sonukale]

Very nice update Bhai

 

[Avir]

Nice update

 

[Secretshiva1]

Bhai

Bhai kahani ka plot to kafi acha h but aap usko thek s likh Ni pa rahe.. aap kafi jagah mistake Kar rahe h words m aur is update m Kon hospital Gaya aur shera Kahan s aaya , ye sab jumble hogaya ..
Aap space deke koi nayi baat likha Kare isse aap khud bi confuse Ni hoge.

Also aapne pichli baar ki tarah yahan bi gayab hone ka time kuch jagah p 4 likha h ar kuch jagaho p 6 saal.. last k paragraph m bi same cheez h..

So frnd post karne k baad aap recheck karke galtiyo ko edit kardia Kare ..isse apki mehnat waste Ni jaegi bcoz I know likhna kitna difficult hota h pr agar hamara likha hua kisi ko confuse karde ya samajh m na aaye to wo bi ek tarah s waste hi h..


Baki story k content sahi ja rahe h.. suspense bi badh Raha h . Pehel to kidnap kisne Kia.. uske baad kidnap karke to maar dia tha phir hero island p kaise pahuch gaya... Agar hero ko maar dia Gaya tha to ab uske ye dushmann Kahan s aagae kyuki ye to purane hi malum padte h aur kafi powerful bi like minister wagrah ...

Filahal to hero n apne MAA baap s pichle 4 saalo k bare m na puchne ka acha bahana bana dia h but shayad jitna abtk bataya Gaya h wo sav pura Sach Ni h..



Well Let's see Kya hota h aage.

Best of luck...

4saal pehle hero kidnape hua aur
6saal pehle Bo bilkul tut Gaya tha
Baaki apke suggestions ke liye thanks.
mujhe bhi Kai jagah aisa lagta hai ki me story ko confuse toh Nahi Kar Raha, but Kami ko dhoondh Nahi pa Raha tha Apne madad ki aage aur achha karoonga
Aise hi review Kar le apna opinion dete rahe.

 

[TheMysterious_Ng]

Bhai

4saal pehle hero kidnape hua aur
6saal pehle Bo bilkul tut Gaya tha
Baaki apke suggestions ke liye thanks.
mujhe bhi Kai jagah aisa lagta hai ki me story ko confuse toh Nahi Kar Raha, but Kami ko dhoondh Nahi pa Raha tha Apne madad ki aage aur achha karoonga
Aise hi review Kar le apna opinion dete rahe.

Iska mltb 2 alag alag time k bare m hero baat Kar Raha h..
Uske sath kch 6 saal pehle hua tha aur wo kidhnap 4 saal pehle..

Samjha ab thoda.. Baki dekhte h story m

 

[Secretshiva1]

Iska mltb 2 alag alag time k bare m hero baat Kar Raha h..
Uske sath kch 6 saal pehle hua tha aur wo kidhnap 4 saal pehle..

Samjha ab thoda.. Baki dekhte h story m

Bilkul bhai aur aagar aage bhi kahi kuch galat lage toh jaroor bataya kijiga

 

[crazyrex]

Very nice and fantastic update

 

[Kalyansurya]

Bhai aap story continue rakho suno sabki par kro apne dil ki yaha pe story red karne wale bhut hai our sabka opinion alag alag ho sakta
Sochna aapko hai aapko story lekhne me maza aata hai to continue kro jab tak aapko ek be comment mele story band mat karna our ho paye to thoda bhut romance our incest story me dalo aapki story se ye to pta chal gaya esme supernatural powers hai to action be khub hoga bas incest our romance ka thoda tadka laga do to super dupur story ho jayegi mujhe jo thik laga maine suggest kar diya ...apple karna ya na karna aap pe depend karta apne dil ki suno our story continue rakho ...all the verry best bro your first story




Sorry ager khuh galat suggest kiya ya aapko bhura laga to

 

[Shahrukh]

Bahtareen update bro

 

[Secretshiva1]

Bhai aap story continue rakho suno sabki par kro apne dil ki yaha pe story red karne wale bhut hai our sabka opinion alag alag ho sakta
Sochna aapko hai aapko story lekhne me maza aata hai to continue kro jab tak aapko ek be comment mele story band mat karna our ho paye to thoda bhut romance our incest story me dalo aapki story se ye to pta chal gaya esme supernatural powers hai to action be khub hoga bas incest our romance ka thoda tadka laga do to super dupur story ho jayegi mujhe jo thik laga maine suggest kar diya ...apple karna ya na karna aap pe depend karta apne dil ki suno our story continue rakho ...all the verry best bro your first story




Sorry ager khuh galat suggest kiya ya aapko bhura laga to

Kabhi bhi apne sujhaav/gyaan ke liye maafi mat magna....

 

[Arjun Singh 72]

awesome update