"Xforum Valentine Story Contest - 2019 :- Reviews Thread"

[anandsngh12]

Suprb bhai

Thanks Bro for Liking my story
And also thanks for reading & supporting

 

[anandsngh12]

Is pyaar ko kya naam dun

NO words
Brilliant story
Waise to is pyaar vyaar main maanta nhi
Yhan ladke ne apna sab kuch kho diya
Acha laga ye dekh kar

Thanks Bro for Reading & Supporting
Also thanks for Liking my contest story
''Iss Pyar Ko Main......Kya Naam Du''

 

[anandsngh12]

Iss pyar ko main kia naam dun
Kahani mein wohi jab kissi ladki ke taraf khichaav hota hai to ladka apne taraf kia feel karta hai, isska ziada tar zikr hu hai, aur behtareen tarike se kiya gaya hai.
magar kahani ki shuruwaat hone se pehle woh hissa jahan ladke ne ladki ko train mein latakte hue bachaya wo bahot mazedaar laga mujhe khass kar yeh jaante hue ke yeh hakikat mein hua tha. main iss kahani ko padhte waqt uss manzar ko yaad kar raha tha ke kia aalam hua hoga jab yeh sach mein uss platform par guzra hoga. kyun ke lekhak ne pehle hi bata diya ke yeh ek hakikat mein beeti hui kahani hai to main uss nazarye se kahani ko padhta raha aur har ek drisht ko sach maan kar aguey badha padte hue.
jab koyi insaan bimaar aur hospital mein hota hai uss waqt, uss dauraan ek ajeeb si aalam hoti hai aur dil ke kissi kone mein ek tadap hoti hai chaahe wo insaan pyar mein ho ya nahin.
ab uss dauraan agar pyar ho jaaye to samajh lo double dose ki bimaari ho jata hai.
to iss kahani mein main ne Gaurav ko uss angle se dekha. main samajh gaya ke usske dil ke andar keisa toofan pal raha tha aur wo kinn haalaton se guzar rahe the.
aaguey ki kahani ki baayan normal hai jo aam pyar karne walon ke beech hota hai aur jo aaj kal ke zamane ke naujawaanon ke saath aksar hota rehta hai khaas kar mobile ke zarye. to uss hisaab se kuch ziada khaas nahin dikhe mujhe, magar fir bhi main uss hakikat mein hone wale logon par bite hue haadsawon ko soch kar issko ek behtareen aur hatke kahani maanta hoon.
very well written Anand bhai.
Aap ne mujhko 10 out of 10 diya to main kyun kum points doon bhala? mere taraf se bhi aap ko 10 on 10 iss kahani ke liye.

Thanks Bro for Reading & Supporting
Also thanks for Liking my contest story
Aapne bilkul sahi anuman lagaya hai bhai
Bahut bahut shukriya is khubsurat prati kriya ke liye
''Iss Pyar Ko Main......Kya Naam Du''

 

[anandsngh12]

Bahut hii badiya hai bhai ..... Ek update ki ki jitni word me sab kuch dalna aur behtar banana me koi kasar nahi chora .... Mast story bhai

Thanks Bro for Reading & Supporting
Also thanks for Liking my contest story
Aapne bilkul sahi anuman lagaya hai bhai
Bahut bahut shukriya is khubsurat prati kriya ke liye
''Iss Pyar Ko Main......Kya Naam Du''

 

[anandsngh12]

Bahut Shandar ...

Thanks Bro for Reading & Supporting
Also thanks for Liking my contest story
Aapne bilkul sahi anuman lagaya hai bhai
Bahut bahut shukriya is khubsurat prati kriya ke liye
''Iss Pyar Ko Main......Kya Naam Du''

 

[anandsngh12]

IS PYAR KO MAIN KYA NAAM DU

Marvelous Story
Awesome writing skills, Behad shandar and interesting love story hai
Kahani ka har ek shabd sidhe dil me utar gaya
Wakayi me aap shabdo ke bahut bade jadugar ho
Story aur bhi interesting ho jati hai jab ye real incident par based hai
Train wala scene bahut beautiful laga
Story padhte padhte to main bhi rone lagi thi
Lekin story adhuri si lagi ending me, means aisa laga jaise bahut kuch chhodkar direct climax likh diya ho aapne
But Gaurav ka love jaisa aapne dikhaya hai, that was fantastic & mind blowing
Bilkul ek mature writer ki tarah story hai, Jo ki aap already hain
Meri taraf se story ko 10 out of 10 marks

Thanks Dear for Reading & Supporting
Also thanks for Liking my contest story
Aapne bilkul sahi anuman lagaya hai bhai
Bahut bahut shukriya is khubsurat prati kriya ke liye
''Iss Pyar Ko Main......Kya Naam Du''

 

[anandsngh12]

Iss pyar ko main.... kya naam du,

Awesome story bhai,
behad hi shandaar, lajawab aur amazing story bhai,
iss kahani ke madhyam se aapne prem ka itna adbhut udaharan prastut kiya hai ki shabdo se hote hue dil tak utar jati hai,
bhai iss kahani ke madhyam se aapne dikhaya hai ki prem ka arth sirf dena hai, prem me krodh, ghrina, irshya, dwesh aur moh ke liye koi sthan nahi hai, aisi hi prem kahani gaurav aur aarti ki hai,
prem me khushiya duguni ho jati hai aur gum aadhe ho jate hai, aisa hi gaurav aur aarti ke sath hua hai,
bhai train se latakane wale scene ka varnan aapne itna marmik dikhaya hai ki rongate khade ho jate hai,
aapki shayari hamesha kamal ki hoti hai,
hospital me Raj ne gaurav ke family ke baare me jis andaaj me aarti ko bataya vo kamaal ka tha,
bhai aapne iss chhoti si kahani me hi jeevan ke har pahlu ko dikha diya hai,
gaurav ka struggle se lekar uski sauteli maa ke swarthi vyavahar tak aur aarti gaurav ke pyar se lekar gaurav ka aarti ke liye tyag tak, itna adbhut varnan aapne kiya hai ki mai bata nhi sakta,
aarti ko massage bhejane ke baad ke gaurav ke manodasha ka jo varnan aapne kiya hai vo adbhut hai,
aarti ne to apni bimari ke baare me gaurav ko kuchh nhi bataya tha lekin gaurav ko jab jyoti ke madhyam se pata chala ki aarti ki ghutno ki katori ko transplant karne ki jarurat hai to usne bagair ek chhan gavaye turant hi
apni ghutno ki katori transplant ke liye de diya,
Overall behad hi amazing story hai bhai,
Meri taraf se story ko 10 me se 10 marks hai

Thanks Bro for Reading & Supporting
Also thanks for Liking my contest story
Aapne bilkul sahi anuman lagaya hai bhai
Bahut bahut shukriya is khubsurat prati kriya ke liye
Kahani Likhte huye mujhe word limit ka dhyan hi nahi tha main apne me hi khoya hua 7000 words se upar likh chuka tha
Baad me dhyan aaya to last ki lines delete karke jitni limit valid thi utni post kar diya
Yeh ek real story hai, bas isme shabdo me meri kalpana hai baki ghatna true hai
''Iss Pyar Ko Main......Kya Naam Du''

 

[anandsngh12]

Is Pyar Ko Main.......Kya Naam Du

Great Real Incident Based Love Story
Story ki starting se hi jo shabdo ka shama bandha hai kahani ke ant tak uska asar barkarar raha
Kahani padhte huye meri bhi ankhe chhalak aayi thi
Shayad ye apke kisi ko bhi mantra mugdh kar dene wale shabdo ka maya jaal hai
Gaurav ka Arti ke prati prem ko bahut hi shandar tarike se describe kiya hai aapne
Apki Lekhan shailly adbhut hai
Kahani ka pratyek shabd ankho se hokar sidhe dil me utar jata hai
Kahani ka mahatva isliye bhi adhik ho jata hai kyon ki ye satya ghatna par adharit hai
Gaurav ka prem vastav me sachcha prem hai, jiske andar sirf dene ki khwahish hai, apne mahboob ko khush dekhne ki tamanna hai, Pyar rang roop dekh kar nahi hota vo to kisi bhi khubi ke karan ho sakta hai
Mai Gaurav aur Arti ke sachche prem ko salute karta hu
Meri taraf se kahani ko 10 me se 10 marks hain

Thanks Bro for Reading & Supporting
Also thanks for Liking my contest story
Aapne bilkul sahi anuman lagaya hai bhai
Bahut bahut shukriya is khubsurat prati kriya ke liye
Sachche prem ka dastoor hi aisa hota hai bhai ki usme sirf dene ki chah hoti hai badle me kuch pane ki lalsa nahi hoti
''Iss Pyar Ko Main......Kya Naam Du''

 

[Romeo 22]

Review: Door bell of Tears by rishabh


"I am writing this is to just check am I capable enough to shake the ground here."
Hey Bro rather than posting my review as review, I would like to communicate this to you. As I quoted You above , well, definitely Yes to this query of yours. You seem to have good grip over language and narration. superb skill, just hone it a bit and select a good plot n we are in for some excellent piece of stories on Xforum.

Coming to the story, i can actually feel the pain in all those hearts who lost their loved ones.
Nalini's emotions and description are very well handled. Story's flow is as smooth as it can be.

One dimension that could have been explored is lil more build up of romance or even few cosy moments , but nonetheless, story is very much complete in itself .
(Sorry for late review, Sitting beside a family member in hospital and writing this review, as everything under control now.)
Best wishes for future writing.
All the best for contest

 

[Casinar]

My review for Dad and Son
A short story which makes us plunged in deep thought. An intense story regarding a dad and his beloved son the father raised with such love and care after his mother's death that the father did not look around his own life forgetting that he may also have a feeling for another woman.
Not wishing his son to be illtreated by another woman he preferred to stay alone rather than having another mother for him.
The son falls in love with a mature young girl who is a few years older than him and he surprises his dad by announcing it to him since the dad considered him still a child. this is natural to most of the dads for whom a child always remains a child however old he may grow. This is why the dad choked sipping his beer when the son said he had a girlfriend.
But for a man who spent his last 15 years without a woman, a man who devoted all his time in raising his son, who never got time to look at another woman will naturally feel attracted and desire a young woman who starts flirting with him, a young woman who has interest in him will no doubt become his priority.
this is what you brought to us Casi bro which is just splendid.
Your narrative descriptions just like all your story threads I have been replying past few months are wonderful and without a match. You never miss a single second to let us stay away from the subject; you always keep us glued to your script which is always delightful to read.
This story is a sort of love triangle which has a tragic unexpected end. And in short stories, Unexpected ends are very common and most welcomed by readers of great literature. It proves that the girl who was in fact never interested with the son even showed that she neither needed the dad after the accident. you described her behaviour within very least words just by her expressions and her walk away after the accident took place. it's at the end the reader understands that she was the type of a woman who can destroy any other family. The devil type of a woman, commonly said the vamp, the slut. She was, in fact, using both dad and son. She lured the son and when she came to know the dad she entangled him in her web for his personal pleasure, to quench her own thirst. And it made no difference to her either one lives or dies she walks away quietly.
Wonderful, strong story Casi bro which has your magical touch, your special descriptive narrations of each and every scene which enhances the beauty of the read.
Thank you, bro, for this lovely tale which I thoroughly enjoyed. You amply deserve my appreciation for this unique tale.

Dear Rowdy bro, you left me speechless with this wonderful review of appreciation for which I am very grateful to you.
I have no other words to say than a mere 'thank you very much'