★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[kavya verma]

Love at it's purest form
by zopion

ye story suru hoti hai ek ladke se jiske father aur brother usse nafrat karte hain aur story ka turning point tab aata hai jab usko apne 21st birthday par uski maa ka likha letter milta hai jisme usne bataya ki uske father garbh me hi uska abortion karwana chahte the par uski maa ne usko defend kiya aur usko jindagi dete huye khud ko sacrifice kar diya

uski maid ne usko paal posh kar bada kiya tha apni sari khusiya kurban karke isliye usne usko bhi maa ka darja diya & in final usne hi sabko ek sath kar maa ka promise pura kiya ....

Really heart touching story
Abortion is really a crime & is one of the reason of gender difference

All the best for your beautiful creation
my rating 10 out of 10

 

[Damha]

Review - mera hero


Writer - Casinar



Link - https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xfo...2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-5#post-746447



Plot- bhai bohat he umda story hai ap ki bohat he alag style ye pehli story thi jis ko parh ker main ne enjoy kia hai Nahi to main zada tar time pass ke liye parhta hu great story satish ka role jo ap ne set kia hai great


Bohat kam lafzo me bohat kuch sikha diya hai kuch log he aisa ker pate hai


Sab se acha scene mujhe wo laga jab satish ne poja ko samjhaya yaqeen mano dil to para tha


Aur ap ka likhne ka style aisa tha jis se lag raha tha saamne koi film chal rahi ho imagination ki had par thi



Ek ek cracter samjh Aya sab ko imagine kia



Raghu ka role kuch kam laga lekin wo bhi acha tha


End me to ruka ke rakh diye bhai dil ker raha tha ke ye story aur lambi ho jaye khatam he na ho


End me ye he kahu ga speech less story

 

[Rahul]

Love at it's purest form
by zopion

nice story bhai aur is story ka jo hero hai puri tarah se sakaratmak sonch rakhta hai tabhi sabko maaf kar paya wo..aage sab log itne bade dil wale nahi hote mujhe nafrat hai un logon se jo chote bachchon ko manhus samjhte aur buri tarah se pesh aate hain jo uski badi badi ullabdhiyon ko ingnor karte hain..aapko bahut badi khusi mile aur koi sath na ho to bekaar hai sab..jo bhi ho bahut badhiya likha aapne aur mai aapko 10 me 10 deta hun

 

[zopion]

Love at it's purest form
by zopion

ye story suru hoti hai ek ladke se jiske father aur brother usse nafrat karte hain aur story ka turning point tab aata hai jab usko apne 21st birthday par uski maa ka likha letter milta hai jisme usne bataya ki uske father garbh me hi uska abortion karwana chahte the par uski maa ne usko defend kiya aur usko jindagi dete huye khud ko sacrifice kar diya

uski maid ne usko paal posh kar bada kiya tha apni sari khusiya kurban karke isliye usne usko bhi maa ka darja diya & in final usne hi sabko ek sath kar maa ka promise pura kiya ....

Really heart touching story
Abortion is really a crime & is one of the reason of gender difference

All the best for your beautiful creation
my rating 10 out of 10

thanks a lot kavya ji
ye meri pahli kosis thi english me koi story likhne ki mujhe bahut khushi huyi ki apko ye pasand aayi ....
abortion is just like killing your own son/daughter from your own hand so indirectly it's a murder

 

[zopion]

Love at it's purest form
by zopion

nice story bhai aur is story ka jo hero hai puri tarah se sakaratmak sonch rakhta hai abhi sabko maaf kar paya wo..sage sab log itne bade dil wale nahi hote mujhe nafrat hai un logon se jo chote bachchon ko manhus samjhte aur buri tarah se pesh aate hain jo uski badi badi ullabdhiyon ko ingnor karte hain..aapko bahut badi khusi mile aur koi sath na ho to bekaar hai sab..no bhi ho bahut badhiya likha aapne aur mai aapko 10 me 10 deta hun

thanks Rahul bhai apki behtarin pratikriya ke liye
bhai duniya me sirf 2 tarah ke log hote hain ek wo jo kisi bhi chiz me negativity dhund lete hain aur jindagi bhar rona rote hain aur dusre wo log jo kisi bhi situation ko positively lete hain aur sabhi disastrous situation ka dat kar samna karte hain

 

[Rahul]

thanks Rahul bhai apki behtarin pratikriya ke liye
bhai duniya me sirf 2 tarah ke log hote hain ek wo jo kisi bhi chiz me negativity dhund lete hain aur jindagi bhar rona rote hain aur dusre wo log jo kisi bhi situation ko positively lete hain aur sabhi disastrous situation ka dat kar samna karte hain

zopi bhai agar aapki baat mani Jaye to qatl ki saja fulon ka guldasta ho

 

[zopion]

zopi bhai agar aapki baat mani Jaye to qatl ki saja fulon ka guldasta ho

bhai maine aisa kab kaha

 

[Casinar]

REVIEW


STORY - Mera Hero


WRITER- @Casinar




LINK – https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-5#post-746447


PLOT – is story ko dekhte hi jis chij ne mujhe apni or akarshit kar liya wo tha iska presentation,kis font me likha jayega aur kis size me ye bhi aapki story ko akarshk bana deta hai ye maine abhi abhi sikha hai…to pahle to main is khoj me lag gaya ki isme kya upyog me laaya gaya hai aur ye secret mil gaya …


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Font style – Georgia


To ab main bhi review isi me likhunga ..


Hero… ye ek aisa shabd hai jiske mayane hamare liye bas film ke parde par acting kar rha ek insan hokar rah gaya hai ,koi apne jism ki numais kar rha hota hai to koi apne chahre ki ranginiyo ki ,lekin ye samaj asali heroes ko ki kadra hi nhi karta,asal me unhe kabhi samjh hi nhi aata ki asali hero to wo aam insan hai jo apni majburiyo aur behaal jiwan ke bawjud bhi kisi ki madad ke liye taiyar rahta hai,


Is story me hero ko isi paribahsha me dekha gaya hai jaisa use hona chahiye,ek nawjaat shishu ka palan poshan karne wala,use har musibat se bachane wala,uski achchi jindagi ke liye wachanbaddh ,aur apni lakho majburiyo aur kamjoriyo ke bawjud use har khusi dene wala hi us ladki ka asali hero hai ,


Story shuru me dramatic hoti hai fir emotionl fir lagta hai ki ye adultery ki or turn legi lekin tab asali hero ka uday hota hai,


Asali hero wo nhi jo logo ki madad karta hai use ham hero kahte hai lekin asali ya khalish hero wo hai jo kisi ki madad unconditionally karta hai jisme uske khud ka koi bhi swarth nhi hota ……..


NOTE FOR WRITER – casi bhai aap itane senior writer ho ki ham jaise naye writers ke liye aapke story ko review dena ek tarh ki gustakhi hi hogi,maine ye gustakhi ki hai isliye mujhe maaf kare..


Main bas aapse itana kahna chahunga ki is story ko aap ager ek long aur episodic story ke rup me banaye to ye kaamal ki story banegi ,isme naa sirf romance ka balki action ,emotion,aur adultery ka bhi achcha scope hai ,short story ke rup me kahi kahi ye dil ko touch to karti hai lekin jitna emotion isme aana chahiye wanha par thoda kam lag rha hai ,long story me ye ek behtreen story banegi…….fir se ghustakhi maaf


Story ka plot bahut hi achcha tha aur aisi story dene ke liye bahut bahut sukriya ..


Best of luck for contest….

Bahot shukriya bhai. Aap ko plot aur kahani passand aayi mere liye kaafi hai bhai
Rahi baat issko full story updates ke saath likhne ki to haan bilkool ho sakta hai. Sochunga kabhi.

 

[Casinar]

Review - mera hero


Writer - Casinar



Link - https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-5#post-746447



Plot- bhai bohat he umda story hai ap ki bohat he alag style ye pehli story thi jis ko parh ker main ne enjoy kia hai Nahi to main zada tar time pass ke liye parhta hu great story satish ka role jo ap ne set kia hai great


Bohat kam lafzo me bohat kuch sikha diya hai kuch log he aisa ker pate hai


Sab se acha scene mujhe wo laga jab satish ne poja ko samjhaya yaqeen mano dil to para tha


Aur ap ka likhne ka style aisa tha jis se lag raha tha saamne koi film chal rahi ho imagination ki had par thi



Ek ek cracter samjh Aya sab ko imagine kia



Raghu ka role kuch kam laga lekin wo bhi acha tha


End me to ruka ke rakh diye bhai dil ker raha tha ke ye story aur lambi ho jaye khatam he na ho


End me ye he kahu ga speech less story

Aap ko kahani passand aayi bhai yehi nere liye bahot hai. Iss pyari review k liye tehe dil se shukriya aap ka.

 

[AkashVani]

REVIEW

STORY - Swipe Left

WRITER- humtum

LINK – https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-5#post-743487

Hamesha ki tarah contest me dhamaka karne ki aadat hai aapko, lekin abki baar to bahut hi shandaar story post kiye ho HT bhai kahan se nikal ke late ho naye concept. bahut hi naya aur fresh concept tha.

Tinder ke bare me bahut se logon ko pata bhi nahi hoga lekin aapke story ke jariye unhe pata chal jayega, aapne steps bata diye hai sabko one of the best and fresh plot with moral values. Aapke narration ke bare me kya kahe, silky smooth. dialogues filmy nahi lagte , real life se jure lagte hai aur aapne short story ke hisab se flow ko achhe se maintain kiya hua hai ant tak.

Best part hai message jo aap dena chahte hai yahan pe logon ko , suru me kisi ne socha nahi hoga eska ...out of the box way me aapne kahani ko end liya hai...hum to soch rahe the ki nisha ka nasha utar ke hi manenge lekin aapne use waise hi rahne diya aur apne family ko value diya.

Aapki writing one of the best hai short story ke liye aur main dua karunga ki aapko abki baar first prize mile, bahut salon se ye milna baki hai aapko. Best of luck but meri taraf se you are winner