★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[AkashVani]

REVIEW

STORY - haunted

WRITER- humtum

Meri english utni achhi hai nahi lekin padhna aata hai, aur aapki ye story excellent hai. short story ke hisab se es se behtar nahi ho sakta kuchh...ek simple si baat ko aapne aise darsaya hai apne story me ki kya kahe.

haunted house ka ek ek scene aise likha ki padhte huye lagta hai hum khud us ghar me ja rahe hai ball khojne.

excellent narration , plot simple hote huye bhi aapne use best bana diya apne lekhni se....situation ko bahut achhe se likha hai aapne ....kamaal hai aapki lekhni short story ke hisab se.language pe bahut command hai aapka, chahe vo english ho ya hindi.

best of luck for contest .

 

[AkashVani]

Review for कलंक
By Romeo 22

Main aapke lekhni ka kayal hu xp se hi, aapse hamesha behtar ki ummed hoti hai lekin yahan kuchh kami reh gayi. aapne shayad story puri nahi ki aur questions readers ke liye rakh diye.

agar ye puri hoti to bahut achha rehta shayad contest me top three me rehti aapki story. plot sahi tha, jitna likha hai usme aapka narration and language bahut hi shandaar hai.

aage VSC me kisi dhamake ki umeed kar rahe hai aapse.

best of luck for contest

 

[Aakash.]

Mera Hero
First of all I want to thank you for writing the story. Your story is different.
One thing I do not understand is how any person can throw away their child. Does he not love his child, I do not think there will be any compulsion due to which people take this step.
The title of the story is perfect for the story. Satish helps a girl, which means that Satish was a good-hearted boy. Despite Satish's condition deteriorating, he looked after Pooja like a father. Perhaps it is called humanity.
The ending of the story was heartbreaking. People like Satish are not available today.
Casinar Ji, I liked your story very much. You have written every word of the story very beautifully. I sincerely hope you win this story competition.
Thank You...

 

[Aakash.]

Love at it's purest form
First of all I want to thank you for writing the story. I liked the way the story started.
The story is of a boy named Dev Chawla. There is hardly any beautiful word like mother. A mother can also die happily for her child. Mother loves her children selflessly.
Everyone's behavior in the house was wrong towards Dev, but it was not his fault. Pooja was not Dev's real mother, yet she took care of Dev like a mother. Today, 21 years later, Dev came to know the truth. Seeing Gauri's love brought tears to my eyes.
Gauri's love power made Dev a good and successful person and the power of love united the whole family. Everything happened as Gauri wanted.
You have shown the love of mother through this story. This is your first story in English and you have written a very good story. I did not see any mistake from you.
zopion Ji, I liked your story very much. The title of the story is perfect for the story. You have written each and every word of the story very beautifully. I sincerely hope you win this story competition.
Thank You...

 

[Vijay2309]

Satwa Tona by Vijay2309
Wow what a story vj bhai
Mujhe pata hai aapka narration aur language par excellent command hai.. Flow ekdam jabardast... Kam shabdon me ek bandhi huyi shandar kahani..
Ek Baat batao usne apni book kyu kharid
Mast story hai, ekdam unique.. Aisi stories hoti hain jinke liye hamara forum pe aana saarthak hota hai.. Aur aisi kahaniya is contest ko safal banati hain. Maine abhi sari stories nahi padhi hain par jitni padhi hain unme se top 3 me jarur ho abhi tak..
All the best

Mai tere se isi liye kah raha tha ki padh story....jisne book platform par bechi usne wo khud likhi thi....uske baad train main bethe hue shaksh ne apne saath jo kuch bhi hua usko ek kahani ka roop dekar online bechne ke liye rakh diya....kaafi der tak wo sirf is liye nahi biki kyonki is online store pe ek bhi book aisi nahi thi jo wah apni likhi gayi book se kharid sake....isliye usne online hi apni ek pasand ki book kharidi lekin sirf part payment karke chhod diya....jaise hi uske wallet main uski likhi hui book ke bikne ke paise aaye usko apni pasand ki book mil gayi....ek baat or jo yaha kisi ne bhi notice nahi kari......jab wo banda ghar jakar news dekhta hai to wo tona phir se uske uper chadh jaata hai kyonki news ke paise wo advance main de chuka tha or news ancor ne bhi tv pe ek kahani sunayi or tona phir se us pe chadh gaya.....


"" किया कराया अब सब मुझ पर ""

 

[DevD]

Review for swipe left
By humtum
First of all thank you for this lovely story. Bilkul naya aur contest ke najariye se behtrin peshkash.
ye kahani wife husband ke jhamele se nikalkar mauj masti ki chah rakhne wale logon ke karname ko darshate huye ant hoti hai aise mor pe jahan sab sochne pe majboor honge asal me hume chahiye kya life se? hamara main maksad kya hai?

excellent Narration , smooth flow , dialogues were perfect as per requirement...aap ne kahi pe koi kami nahi rahne di hai story me ..bilkul winner story hai ye...ek nayepan ke saath likhi huyi shandaar story.
Once again thank you for this lovely story. Best of luck for winner trophy

 

[DevD]

Story = mera hero
Written by Casinar

Aap ko kya review du main aap to apne aap me pillar ho forum ke, story koi bhi likhe aap aapke followers apne aap uske pichhe aa jayenge...lekin aapne bahut sundar tarike se ye story likhi hai..bhavnao se bharpur lekin aapki ye kahani winner banne ke liye likhi huyi nahi lagti hai mujhe , aisa laga ki aapne kisi ka man rakhne ke liye likhi hai ye story.

Plot thoda sa purana laga mujhe lekin aapki jo language pe command hai aur aapka writing style usne esko behtar bana diya aapne agar kuchh naye concept liye hote to aag laga dete contest me. koi na agle contest me bhi aapki story ka wait rahega.
Best of luck for contest kuchh galat likh diya ho to maaf kar dijiyega

 

[humtum]

REVIEW

STORY - Swipe Left

WRITER- humtum

LINK – https://xforum.live/threads/★☆★-xforum-ultimate-story-contest-2019-entry-thread-★☆★.6804/page-5#post-743487

Hamesha ki tarah contest me dhamaka karne ki aadat hai aapko, lekin abki baar to bahut hi shandaar story post kiye ho HT bhai kahan se nikal ke late ho naye concept. bahut hi naya aur fresh concept tha.

Tinder ke bare me bahut se logon ko pata bhi nahi hoga lekin aapke story ke jariye unhe pata chal jayega, aapne steps bata diye hai sabko one of the best and fresh plot with moral values. Aapke narration ke bare me kya kahe, silky smooth. dialogues filmy nahi lagte , real life se jure lagte hai aur aapne short story ke hisab se flow ko achhe se maintain kiya hua hai ant tak.

Best part hai message jo aap dena chahte hai yahan pe logon ko , suru me kisi ne socha nahi hoga eska ...out of the box way me aapne kahani ko end liya hai...hum to soch rahe the ki nisha ka nasha utar ke hi manenge lekin aapne use waise hi rahne diya aur apne family ko value diya.

Aapki writing one of the best hai short story ke liye aur main dua karunga ki aapko abki baar first prize mile, bahut salon se ye milna baki hai aapko. Best of luck but meri taraf se you are winner

Thanks bhai review dene ke liye sabko story achhi lage yehi writer ke liye sabse badi baat hoti hai.

Bas mere other stories pe bhi reply karte raho , pichhle kuchh time se nahi aa rahe. once again

 

[zopion]

Love at it's purest form
First of all I want to thank you for writing the story. I liked the way the story started.
The story is of a boy named Dev Chawla. There is hardly any beautiful word like mother. A mother can also die happily for her child. Mother loves her children selflessly.
Everyone's behavior in the house was wrong towards Dev, but it was not his fault. Pooja was not Dev's real mother, yet she took care of Dev like a mother. Today, 21 years later, Dev came to know the truth. Seeing Gauri's love brought tears to my eyes.
Gauri's love power made Dev a good and successful person and the power of love united the whole family. Everything happened as Gauri wanted.
You have shown the love of mother through this story. This is your first story in English and you have written a very good story. I did not see any mistake from you.
zopion Ji, I liked your story very much. The title of the story is perfect for the story. You have written each and every word of the story very beautifully. I sincerely hope you win this story competition.
Thank You...

thanks a lot Aakash. bhai for your beautiful review
mother's love for their children is priceless

 

[Aakash.]

Mamta ki ek murat - MAA
I want to thank you again for writing the story. I am very happy to know that both of your stories are about mother's love.
After the death of her husband, Sudhiya faced a lot of problems and had to take care of two children. Eventually, Sudhiya was doing all this for her children. It is called mother's love. Despite the deteriorating economic situation, Sudhiya did not let the two sons fall short of anything.
After suffering for so many years, when moments of happiness came, left his mother. I feel ashamed of such boys. The mother, who worked hard for her two sons day and night, left him. Even after being so bad, there is only one mother who always has love in her mind.
After reading your story, tears returned to my eyes. Your story touched my heart. The ending of the story was sad.
zopion Ji, I liked your story very much. Your story is very beautiful. I sincerely hope you win this story competition.
Thank you...