★☆★ Xforum | Ultimate Story Contest 2019 ~ Reviews Thread ★☆★

[Damha]

AMAR-KALPANA (DEPTH
OF LOVE)
By The Immortal



plot - bhai great story parhte parhte story me kho sa gya ek ek lafz dil per laga iss ki kia tarif karu jitni bhi karu kam he lage gi

 

[humtum]

Review for Mitti ki Khushbu
Writer Chutiyadr

Dr saab kuchh likhen aur vo achhi na ho aisa ho nahi sakta, mujhe khusi es baat ka hai ki aapne sabse pehle story post ki. wonderful topic and perfect mix of emotions, desh bakti aur jajbe se bharpur hai aapki story
Great narration , kuchh ek spelling mistake ko na dekha jaye to aapne story ka flow bahut hi sahi maintain kiya hai ant tak aur dusre ko sikhne aur samjhne ka mauka milta hai, fauji kya sochta hai apni Apni mitti aur Apne desh ke baare mai ye bohat lazwab tarike se dikhaya hai Apne ,
Mai bas itna hi kahunga ki apki ye kahani mere Dil Mai utar Gayi .
this lovely story .
Best of luck for contest .

 

[humtum]

My view on Love with fixerr By - Damha

Good story , you have done well but something was missing in flow of the story you have potential to write, better than this as good command of language , concept was not new but the way you have presented it is quite dull. Narration and dialogue were just ok. That should be better specially dialogue. Best of luck for contest and for your effort.

 

[Damha]

Bhai 1st of all thanks for review aur jahan tak baat hai dailouge ki bhai wording kam thi after contest is ko repost karu ga with some new masala

My view on Love with fixerr By - Damha

Good story , you have done well but something was missing in flow of the story you have potential to write, better than this as good command of language , concept was not new but the way you have presented it is quite dull. Narration and dialogue were just ok. That should be better specially dialogue. Best of luck for contest and for your effort.

 

[humtum]

My view on Ehsaas By - mohit98075

Bahut late review de raha hu apne bhai ko, pahle socha tha review nahi dunga kisi ko lekin dusre ko diya to tumko kaise nahi dunga.

Simple aur sweet story hai ye, bahut se pehlu ko dikhaya hai tumne apne short me jo asaan kaam nahi hai . Achhe se un sare pehlu ko mila ke anjaam tak pahuchaya hai lekin word limit jyada tha to thoda aur likhna tha to eski baat kuchh aur hoti. Contest ke hisab se multidimensional approach sahi nahi hota hai, flow break ho jata hai. Tumhara language pe command achha hai aur vo dikha hai. Child abuse ko mention kiya hai story me aur forum pe hum usko jyada details me nahi likh sakte ye ek majboori ho sakti hai.
Narration achha tha aur limited dialogue achhe se likhe gaye the, padhne me kisi ko dikkat nahi aayegi. Mujhe padhte huye achha laga kyoki main link kar pa raha tha
Best of luck for contest

 

[KR$NA]

Ek chhoti si prem gatha by sanskari larka


Wakayi me chhoti si prem gatha thi ye jisme writer sahab ne bhar bhar ke kanjoosi ki hai
Story vastav me bahut pyari hai jo sikhati hai ki Prem sirf pane ka naam nahi hota hai balki tyag ka bhi roop hota hai .
Wife ko comfortable karne ke liye bande ne sab dikhte huye bhi khud ko andha ghoshit kar diya . Wakai uchch koti ka prem hai ye

Thanks for such a wonder ful story . Best of luck for contest bhai

 

[Chutiyadr]

Review for Mitti ki Khushbu
Writer Chutiyadr

Dr saab kuchh likhen aur vo achhi na ho aisa ho nahi sakta, mujhe khusi es baat ka hai ki aapne sabse pehle story post ki. wonderful topic and perfect mix of emotions, desh bakti aur jajbe se bharpur hai aapki story
Great narration , kuchh ek spelling mistake ko na dekha jaye to aapne story ka flow bahut hi sahi maintain kiya hai ant tak aur dusre ko sikhne aur samjhne ka mauka milta hai, fauji kya sochta hai apni Apni mitti aur Apne desh ke baare mai ye bohat lazwab tarike se dikhaya hai Apne ,
Mai bas itna hi kahunga ki apki ye kahani mere Dil Mai utar Gayi .
this lovely story .
Best of luck for contest .

bahut bahut dhanywad humtum bhai itane pyare review ke liye ...
aur maine bhi aapke hunted ke liye review diya hai shayd aapne dekha nahi hai ..check it ..

 

[KR$NA]

DOSTI , PYAR AUR JINDEGI by Rbcl.007


Ek kahani jo batati hai ki ek ladka aur ek ladki sirf dost bhi ho sakte hain par samaaj ki gandi soch ladke aur ladki ke beech ki dosti ko gandi najar se dekh kar badnam karti hai .

Kahani achchi ban padi hai , bhasha par pakad kamjor hai writer ki lekin ek technical mistake bhi mila .

Ladke ne school chhoda .
"10th class ke ,mid term maine hi wo school change karliya koi family problem ke chal te"

Abb likh raha hai ki ladki ne school chhoda

"Uske jaane k eek hafte tak toh doston ko maine jamke treat diya par dhire dhire mujhe uski kami satane lagi ."

Khair kahani ke ant me Vikas aur sonali ko rishte me baandh diya gaya jisase wo dono kafi samay baad ubhar sake .

Badhiya story jo badhiya sandesh deti hai . Thanks for writing wonderful story . All the best for contest bhai

 

[KR$NA]

THE LUNCH BOX STORY By Damha


Teacher-Student ki Khoobsurat kahani jo achhi seekh deti hai .

Ek student jo lunch time me lunch box ka khana nahi khata tha kyu ki baki ke student uske lunch ka majaq udate the aur uski teacher use class 2 se lekar class 12 tak lunch box deti thi wo bhi bina bataye . Ye teacher ke wakai ek achchha insan hone ko darshati hai . Wahi bacha bada hokar heart surgen banta hai aur apni teacher ke hospital ki fees bharta hai

Kahani ka plot , flow aur khas kar end bahut achchha jo halki fulki comedy ke sath hota hai bas writer ki bhasha par pakad kamjor hai .

Thanks for writing such a wonderful story . All the best for contest

 

[humtum]

Story = swipe left
Written by humtum

Ek sadharan si story jisme aage chalke ek bada massage hai, insaan zindagi me kahi bhi batak le lekin aana use uske pariwar ke paas hi vapas hota hai kyoki uski asli khushi uske apnobke saath hi judi rehti hai, koi samay pe ye baat samaj jaata hai kisiko kaafi kuch khone ke baad pata chalta hai, is baat ko itni saadagi se jis tarah humtum sir ne likha hai vo kaabile taarif hai bahut badiya kahani thi mujhe behad pasand aayi

thanks sedu for this encouraging review