Adultery छुटकी - होली दीदी की ससुराल में

[komaalrani]

अगर हकीकत है तो
जैसा आपका नाम है वैसा ही आपका हृदय कोमल है
आपकी कलम किसी AK 47 या AK 56 से कम नही
दिखन् मे छोटो परे
घाव करे गंभीर
सबसे बड़ी बात ये है आप अपने पाठकों का पूरा खयाल रखते इस मंच पर आपकी इतनी रचनाएँ रंग बिखेर रही है उसके बावजूद समय पर अपडेट देश अपने आप में मायने रखता है
इसी क्रम मे मैं आपकी रचना अल्फाबेट पर गया अब क्या बताऊँ
कोई शब्द नही मिल रहा हैं इस रचना मे तो आपने अपने कलाकार को अलग ही रूप में प्रस्तुत किया है
फोटो के साथ आपकी दोहे वाली भाषा. . ........ .
बच्चे की जान ही ले लेती है
आग्रह है बच्चे की जान ना ले
कहीं पर भी रहे मगर
हमेशा खुश रहे प्रसनचित् रहे स्वस्थ रहे सुरक्षित रहे

बस मेरे मित्रों की यही भावना मुझे यहाँ खींच लाती है , आपने निःशब्द कर दिया,

 

[komaalrani]

मैं अल्फाबेट पर पहली ही बार गया हूँ

बहुत बहुत धन्यवाद, मेरी एकमात्र बहुत छोटी सी अंग्रेजी की भी एक कहानी है , एक पन्ने की कभी उधर भी मौका लगेगा तो ,...एकदम अलग मिज़ाज है उसका

 

[komaalrani]

जोरू का गुलाम अपडेट पोस्टेड

प्लीज पढ़ें और कमेंट से नवाजें


https://exforum.live/threads/जोरू-का-गुलाम-उर्फ़-जे-के-जी.12614/page-313

 

[Luckyloda]

बहुत बहुत धन्यवाद, मेरी एकमात्र बहुत छोटी सी अंग्रेजी की भी एक कहानी है , एक पन्ने की कभी उधर भी मौका लगेगा तो ,...एकदम अलग मिज़ाज है उसका

Btaye jra... jee le use bhi

 

[erriction]

बहुत बहुत धन्यवाद, मेरी एकमात्र बहुत छोटी सी अंग्रेजी की भी एक कहानी है , एक पन्ने की कभी उधर भी मौका लगेगा तो ,...एकदम अलग मिज़ाज है उसका

 

[erriction]

बहुत बहुत धन्यवाद, मेरी एकमात्र बहुत छोटी सी अंग्रेजी की भी एक कहानी है , एक पन्ने की कभी उधर भी मौका लगेगा तो ,...एकदम अलग मिज़ाज है उसका

इसमे कोई शक नही आपकी हर एक रचना अपने आप मे एक अलग ही स्वाद प्रस्तुत करती है और हम ठहरे स्वाद के दिवाने
मगर आप कहानी मे दोहवाली और लोकोक्ति का मिश्रण करते है क्या कहूँ दिल बाग बाग या ये कहूँ Garden Garden हो जाता है

 

[komaalrani]

Non-Erotic - It’s a hard rain

It’s a hard rainWhen the evening is spread out against the sky Like a patient etherized upon a table…Dusk was dawning on glass panes of his window, smoke rubbing its muzzle, peeping from outside , streets following like tedious argument, …every evening, it reminded him of Prufrock’s love...

exforum.live

link for my English story, Its a Hard Rain,.


let me share a few lines from the beginning,....

When the evening is spread out against the sky
Like a patient etherized upon a table…

Dusk was dawning on glass panes of his window, smoke rubbing its muzzle, peeping from outside , streets following like tedious argument, …every evening, it reminded him of Prufrock’s love poem, more than 12 years has gone, him occupying this cabin, but today was to be last day ,last evening,

Clock on wall reminded him, 10 minutes more, 10 minutes to move out, move out for ever.

When day started, it was like any other.

Same pressure, targets to be achieved, calls to be answered, calls to be avoided, meetings galore, but first hints came when somebody from finance texted about irrational behavior of company’s stock. Before he could make head of tell, HR had called everybody to be out in hall,


And there was blood bath.


Pink slips were handed, 242 persons, almost half of strength gone.

 

[komaalrani]

Btaye jra... jee le use bhi

When the evening is spread out against the sky
Like a patient etherized upon a table…

Dusk was dawning on glass panes of his window, smoke rubbing its muzzle, peeping from outside , streets following like tedious argument, …every evening, it reminded him of Prufrock’s love poem, more than 12 years has gone, him occupying this cabin, but today was to be last day ,last evening,

Clock on wall reminded him, 10 minutes more, 10 minutes to move out, move out for ever.

When day started, it was like any other.

Same pressure, targets to be achieved, calls to be answered, calls to be avoided, meetings galore, but first hints came when somebody from finance texted about irrational behavior of company’s stock. Before he could make head of tell, HR had called everybody to be out in hall,


And there was blood bath.


Pink slips were handed, 242 persons, almost half of strength gone.

first few lines

and here is link

Non-Erotic - It’s a hard rain

It’s a hard rainWhen the evening is spread out against the sky Like a patient etherized upon a table…Dusk was dawning on glass panes of his window, smoke rubbing its muzzle, peeping from outside , streets following like tedious argument, …every evening, it reminded him of Prufrock’s love...

exforum.live

 

[Luckyloda]

When the evening is spread out against the sky
Like a patient etherized upon a table…

Dusk was dawning on glass panes of his window, smoke rubbing its muzzle, peeping from outside , streets following like tedious argument, …every evening, it reminded him of Prufrock’s love poem, more than 12 years has gone, him occupying this cabin, but today was to be last day ,last evening,

Clock on wall reminded him, 10 minutes more, 10 minutes to move out, move out for ever.

When day started, it was like any other.

Same pressure, targets to be achieved, calls to be answered, calls to be avoided, meetings galore, but first hints came when somebody from finance texted about irrational behavior of company’s stock. Before he could make head of tell, HR had called everybody to be out in hall,


And there was blood bath.


Pink slips were handed, 242 persons, almost half of strength gone.

first few lines

and here is link

Non-Erotic - It’s a hard rain

It’s a hard rainWhen the evening is spread out against the sky Like a patient etherized upon a table…Dusk was dawning on glass panes of his window, smoke rubbing its muzzle, peeping from outside , streets following like tedious argument, …every evening, it reminded him of Prufrock’s love...

exforum.live

Thanks

 

[komaalrani]

Thanks

please do share your views after reading the story